Run: 2026-06-24-01KVX3EGVJND6HMM1HW0NH92DK

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Duration:
55.1s
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$0.010408
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The man's trainers slapped against wet cobblestone, each footfall a metronome counting down the seconds she had left to catch him. Quinn vaulted a wheelie bin, her shoulder screaming from the impact, and landed hard on the far side. Rain needled her face. The suspect, a lanky figure in a dark parka, cut left down an alley off Inverness Street. She'd been tailing him for three blocks from The Raven's Nest, that bar in Soho she'd had under surveillance for two weeks. Silas's place. The one where people went in looking healthy and came out with chemical burns and new scars. "Stop! Police!" He didn't stop. He never stopped. They never did. Her lungs burned. Eighteen years on the force and she still couldn't outrun a twenty-something on cheap trainers. Morris would have laughed. Morris would have been fifty feet ahead, long legs eating the pavement like it owed him money. Morris was dead, and the case file on his death sat in her desk drawer, untouched except for the nights she opened it with a glass of whiskey and read the same four pages that led absolutely nowhere. The alley opened onto Camden High Street. Saturday night crowds spilling from pubs, laughing, shouting, clutching pints in plastic cups. The suspect wove through them with a practised ease that told her he'd done this before. She shoved past a group of girls in neon hen-party sashes. "Move. Police." "Rude!" A kebab shop's greasy light smeared across the pavement. The smell of grilled meat and chilli sauce mixed with the rain. The suspect glanced back, and for a split second she caught his face under the streetlight, young, mid-twenties maybe, pale, eyes wide with something that looked less like fear and more like urgency. Like he was running toward something, not away. He dropped into a stairwell. Quinn skidded to the edge. An Underground entrance, one of the old ones, the kind that didn't appear on modern maps. Iron railing. Tile walls stained with decades of groundwater. A faded roundel that might have said Camden Town once, back when trains still stopped here. A gate hung open on rusted hinges. No sign of him below. Just darkness and the distant hum of something electrical. She pulled her phone. No signal. Of course not. Her torch cut a white cone through the stairwell. Water pooled on each step, black and iridescent. The tiles along the walls weren't the standard London Underground cream. These were older. Darker. Symbols she didn't recognise carved into the glaze, some worn smooth by time, others fresh enough to still catch the light. Her gut said wrong. Her training said follow. She descended. The air changed halfway down. Warmer. Drier. It carried a scent like burnt herbs layered over something metallic, copper maybe, or old blood. The stairwell curved, and the sound of the street above faded until all she could hear was her own breathing and a low, rhythmic thrum that vibrated through the soles of her shoes. The passage levelled out onto a platform. Disused Tube station, just like the records said. The tracks had been ripped out years ago, the tunnel sealed with brickwork that someone had since knocked through. Through the gap, light pulsed, warm and amber, and the thrum grew louder, resolving into voices, chatter, the clink of glass on glass. A market. Underground. Right beneath Camden, and she'd had no idea. Stalls lined the abandoned platform, draped in cloth that shimmered in colours she couldn't name. Vendors sold things from jars that moved. Things from bottles that glowed. A woman with too many fingers on each hand weighed something grey and pulsing on a brass scale. A man with teeth like needles arranged necklaces of what looked like finger bones on velvet. Quinn's hand moved to her hip. Holster. Standard issue. Sudden comfort in the familiar weight of it. The suspect stood forty feet ahead, hunched at a stall draped in deep purple. He was talking to the vendor, a tall figure in a hooded robe, face lost in shadow. As she watched, he produced something from his pocket, small and white, and pressed it into the vendor's palm. A token. Bone, carved with the same kind of symbols she'd seen on the tunnel walls. The vendor examined it, nodded, and handed over a small glass vial filled with liquid the colour of arterial blood. The suspect pocketed the vial and turned. Saw her. His expression shifted. Not surprise. Recognition. Like he'd been expecting her, like this was part of some plan she couldn't see. "Detective." He said it calmly. Too calmly for someone she'd chased six blocks through pouring rain. "You shouldn't be here without a token." "Consider me uninvited." She moved closer, positioning herself between him and the tunnel exit. "Hands where I can see them. Now." Around them, the market had gone quiet. Vendors watched. Customers drifted back. The needle-toothed man's hand disappeared beneath his counter. "You don't understand what this place is." "I understand you're carrying something you just bought from a man with no face. I understand you ran from a bar under police surveillance. I understand you're coming with me." The suspect's eyes flicked past her shoulder. She caught the movement in her peripheral vision, the shift in the crowd, the way two figures had moved to block the stairwell behind her. Large figures. One of them cracked its knuckles, a sound like snapping kindling. "Detective, listen to me carefully." The suspect's voice dropped. "The woman who runs this market, she already knows you're here. The tokens aren't just currency. They're wards. Without one, everything in this place can smell you. Can taste what you are." "And what am I?" "Fresh." Something cold touched the back of her neck. Not a hand. Not breath. Something else, something that pressed against her skin like ice wrapped in static. She spun. Nothing there. But the air behind her shimmered, like heat haze in winter, and the amber light from the nearest stall flickered. The vendor in the purple-draped stall had pulled back its hood. The face beneath wasn't human. Too many angles. Eyes like polished obsidian set too wide. It smiled, and the mouth opened wider than any mouth should, row after row of teeth spiralling inward like a nautilus shell. "Quinn," the suspect said. He knew her name. He knew her name and she hadn't given it. "You need to decide, right now, whether you trust me enough to walk out of here alive, or whether you'd prefer to arrest me and find out what happens to unwarded humans who cause trouble in the Veil Market." The worn leather watch on her wrist read 11:47. Morris had worn the same model. She'd taken it from his locker the day after the funeral because his wife didn't want it, said it reminded her of the hours he'd missed. The thing behind her pressed closer. She could feel it now, a presence that made her teeth ache and her vision swim at the edges. The two figures at the stairwell hadn't moved, but their silhouettes had grown, stretched, become something that defied the geometry of the tunnel around them. The suspect extended his hand. In his palm sat a bone token, identical to the one he'd given the vendor. "Last chance, Detective." She looked at the token. Looked at the spiralling mouth of the vendor. Looked at the shimmering air behind her that was getting closer, closer, and colder, and colder, and the cold had fingers now, long ones, threading through her hair. She took the token. The cold retreated. The shimmer collapsed. The obsidian-eyed vendor snapped its jaw shut and returned to its wares as though nothing had happened. The two figures at the stairwell shrank back to normal proportions and resumed browsing. The suspect exhaled. "Good choice. Now we need to talk about Silas, about your dead partner, and about why you're not going to remember any of this by tomorrow morning unless you come with me." A new voice cut through the market's resumed chatter. Female. Commanding. Coming from the far end of the platform where the tracks used to run. "Let her remember." Boots on tile, measured and deliberate. A figure emerged from the shadows, tall, sharp-jawed, flanked by two more of the obsidian-eyed vendors. "I've been waiting for Detective Quinn to find her way down here for three years." The woman smiled, and it held no warmth whatsoever. "Welcome to the Veil Market, Detective. Morris said you'd come eventually."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1425
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1425
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"footfall"
count1
1
word"absolutely"
count1
2
word"standard"
count2
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"vibrated"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"resolving"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count2
8
word"velvet"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"flicked"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"could feel"
count1
14
word"measured"
count1
15
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"footfall"
1"absolutely"
2"standard"
3"rhythmic"
4"vibrated"
5"pulsed"
6"resolving"
7"shimmered"
8"velvet"
9"familiar"
10"weight"
11"flicked"
12"flickered"
13"could feel"
14"measured"
15"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences128
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1425
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1219
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.33
worstName"Morris"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Morris"
discoveredNames
Inverness1
Street2
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Camden3
High1
Underground3
Town1
London1
Tube1
Quinn3
Morris4
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
places
0"Inverness"
1"Street"
2"Raven"
3"Soho"
4"Camden"
5"High"
6"Town"
7"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like finger bones on velvet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1425
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std22.95
cv0.773
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547
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95
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1114
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2017
2166
2220
239
2421
2523
2621
2720
287
2930
3045
3141
324
331
3450
3548
3656
3741
3850
3920
403
4141
424
4337
443
4532
4625
4760
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences128
matches
0"been ripped"
99.50% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs199
matches
0"was running"
1"was talking"
2"was getting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences142
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1227
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.022819885900570498
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0024449877750611247
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean10.04
std8.59
cv0.856
sampleLengths
021
118
24
317
422
52
617
72
83
93
103
113
1215
134
1417
1538
167
1713
1816
1911
202
211
229
2312
2433
258
265
275
2816
292
307
3116
327
335
349
354
362
373
389
398
4011
413
421
4321
444
454
462
475
481
491
69.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.49295774647887325
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners70
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences106
matches
0"Just darkness and the distant"
1"Of course not."
2"Too calmly for someone she'd"
3"Too many angles."
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences106
matches
0"She'd been tailing him for"
1"He didn't stop."
2"He never stopped."
3"They never did."
4"Her lungs burned."
5"She shoved past a group"
6"He dropped into a stairwell."
7"She pulled her phone."
8"Her torch cut a white"
9"Her gut said wrong."
10"Her training said follow."
11"It carried a scent like"
12"He was talking to the"
13"His expression shifted."
14"He said it calmly"
15"She moved closer, positioning herself"
16"She caught the movement in"
17"It smiled, and the mouth"
18"He knew her name."
19"He knew her name and"
ratio0.226
63.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences106
matches
0"The man's trainers slapped against"
1"Quinn vaulted a wheelie bin,"
2"Rain needled her face."
3"The suspect, a lanky figure"
4"She'd been tailing him for"
5"The one where people went"
6"He didn't stop."
7"He never stopped."
8"They never did."
9"Her lungs burned."
10"Morris would have laughed."
11"Morris would have been fifty"
12"Morris was dead, and the"
13"The alley opened onto Camden"
14"Saturday night crowds spilling from"
15"The suspect wove through them"
16"She shoved past a group"
17"A kebab shop's greasy light"
18"The smell of grilled meat"
19"The suspect glanced back, and"
ratio0.792
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
ratio0
34.16% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Morris was dead, and the case file on his death sat in her desk drawer, untouched except for the nights she opened it with a glass of whiskey and read the same …"
1"The suspect glanced back, and for a split second she caught his face under the streetlight, young, mid-twenties maybe, pale, eyes wide with something that looke…"
2"The stairwell curved, and the sound of the street above faded until all she could hear was her own breathing and a low, rhythmic thrum that vibrated through the…"
3"She could feel it now, a presence that made her teeth ache and her vision swim at the edges."
4"The two figures at the stairwell hadn't moved, but their silhouettes had grown, stretched, become something that defied the geometry of the tunnel around them."
5"Looked at the shimmering air behind her that was getting closer, closer, and colder, and colder, and the cold had fingers now, long ones, threading through her …"
6"The obsidian-eyed vendor snapped its jaw shut and returned to its wares as though nothing had happened."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.05
leniency0.1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.0083%