Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ3D5ZZSD801DX613E5ATHY

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1m 2s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
He ran. Detective Harlow Quinn knew that before her brain registered the flash of movement, before her hand went for the Glock holstered beneath her coat. The suspect's trainers squeaked against wet cobblestones, a sharp sound swallowed by the London rain that fell in relentless grey sheets. *Twenty-three years old. Violet eyes. Last seen wearing a red hoodie.* The description from the file matched the figure disappearing around the corner into Greek Street. She'd been sitting on this stakeout for six hours, drinking bad coffee from a thermos, waiting for a ghost. Now the ghost had flesh and blood and a desperate need to run. "Stop. Metropolitan Police." The words were useless but procedural. He ran faster. Quinn's boots hit the pavement hard, her joints protesting the sudden sprint after hours of stillness. Rain soaked through her collar, ran down her neck, plastered her cropped hair to her scalp. She'd chased worse across Helmand province. This was just Soho on a Tuesday night, which meant obstacles. A group of tourists spilled from a club, laughing, drunk on something stronger than cocktails. The suspect ploughed through them, sending a woman stumbling into a puddle. Quinn followed, sidestepping. "Sod off!" The woman's companion swung a fist. Quinn ducked, kept moving. Sharp left into a narrow alley. Bins lined the walls. A cat scattered. The suspect glanced back, and Quinn caught a flash of those violet eyes. *Not human.* Three years ago she wouldn't have noticed. Three years ago she buried DS Marcus Morris, and the autopsy showed his heart stopped for no reason the medical examiner could explain. The only witness, a charity shop owner, kept muttering about eyes that glowed. Quinn had him sectioned. Then she found the case files Morris had hidden. The ones his widow handed over in a cardboard box, weeping about how he'd become paranoid, obsessed with something he called "the market beneath the streets." *Keep running, you bastard.* The alley opened onto a quieter stretch. Shops shuttered. A single streetlight flickered, casting strobing shadows. The suspect stopped. Bent double. Gasping. Quinn slowed. Drew her weapon. Kept it low. "On your knees. Hands where I can see them." He straightened slowly. Turned. Violet eyes glowed like expensive gemstones in the sick yellow light. Young face. Terrified. "The Jasons put you up to this?" His voice cracked. "I didn't say nothing. I swear." "I don't know who the Jasons are." Rain dripped from Quinn's chin. "I just want to talk." "No you don't." He shook his head, backing away. "You don't. You people never want to talk. You want to take me there. Make me bleed." "Take you where?" *The market beneath the streets.* The words lodged in her throat. "I'm investigating a murder. Jeremy Cole. Found in the Thames three weeks ago. His eyes were missing." The suspect's face crumpled. "Cole. Shit. Cole." "Know something?" "Everyone knows something. That's the problem." He reached into his pocket. Quinn tensed. "Easy. Just showing you." His hand emerged holding a small bone rectangle, carved with symbols she didn't recognise. "You want answers? You come. But you ain't coming dressed like that and packing that." "Come where?" "Downstairs." He pointed to a door she hadn't noticed. Black-painted wood, no handle on the outside, set flush into the brickwork. "The Market's open tonight. Lucky you." "The Veil Market." The name felt strange on her tongue. She'd read about it in Morris's files. Dismissed it as folklore. "That's not real." "Then you got nothing to worry about." He pressed the bone token against the door. It swung inward on silent hinges, revealing a staircase that descended into darkness. "Goodbye, officer." He stepped through. Quinn stood in the rain, gun still drawn, heart hammering. The door began to close. *Morris's last entry, scrawled in shaky handwriting:* "I know where they're meeting. The Market moves every full moon. I'm going tonight." He didn't come back. The door was three-quarters shut. Quinn holstered her weapon. She moved forward, stopped at the threshold. No token. No backup. No idea what waited below. *Morris trusted me. I doubted him. He's dead.* She pushed the door open wider and descended into the dark. The staircase turned twice, concrete giving way to old Victorian tile work, then older brick. The air changed. Thickened. Smelled of incense, ozone, copper. Sounds drifted upward. Voices. Music. Something that might have been laughter or screaming. The bottom opened into a vast space. Old Tube station, abandoned decades ago. The ticket hall had been transformed. Stalls lined the walls, draped in fabrics that shimmered with colours that hurt to look at. Lanterns hung from the ceiling, burning with flames that weren't entirely yellow. The crowd was thick. Human mostly. Some not. A figure with scales instead of skin haggled over glass vials at a counter. Something that looked like a bundle of sticks wearing a hat negotiated with a woman whose shadow moved independently. The air hummed with wrong physics, pockets of cold that didn't belong, whispers that came from no direction. Quinn spotted the suspect disappearing between two stalls selling jars of preserved organs. She followed. *A man with no eyes turned to watch her pass. A child with too many teeth grinned from beneath a table. The ground beneath her feet pulsed once, like a heartbeat.* She kept moving. "This is very stupid, Detective." She murmured the words to herself, her mother's voice in her head, the one she always ignored. "Very stupid." The suspect wove deeper into the market. Past a stall offering memories in small glass bottles. Past a fortune teller whose cards bled when she touched them. Past a cage containing something that wept in a language Quinn almost understood. He stopped at a stall near the far wall. A woman stood behind it, ancient, wrapped in layers of silk that had no colour she could name. The suspect spoke. The woman nodded. She pointed directly at Quinn. *Shit.* The suspect turned. Violet eyes locked onto hers. He bolted. Quinn pushed through the crowd. Bodies pressed against her. Some were too warm. Some were too cold. Hands grabbed at her coat, offered her things she didn't want to name. She shoved past. "Excuse me. Out of the way. *Police.*" Laughter followed that last word. Not all of it human. The suspect reached a door at the far end of the hall. Old service entrance, rusted metal, no handle visible. He pressed his palm against it. It swung open. Quinn was ten metres away. Nine. Seven. He looked back once. Something crossed his face. Pity? Fear? She couldn't read it. Then he stepped through and the door began to swing shut. *Through that door could be anything. A tunnel back to the surface. A room full of people who want me dead. A way into a world I don't understand.* Morris's body in the morgue. Eyes closed. Peaceful. Autopsy inconclusive. *He went through a door like this one.* Quinn reached into her coat. Her fingers found the worn leather of her watch strap, the cold metal of her badge. She pulled out the badge, held it in her palm. Then she stepped through the door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.464
leniency0.929
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1194
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1194
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"shimmered"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"shimmered"
2"pulsed"
3"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences149
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences149
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences164
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
20.77% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords107
totalWords1194
ratio0.09
matches
0"Twenty-three years old. Violet eyes. Last seen wearing a red hoodie."
1"Not human."
2"Keep running, you bastard."
3"The market beneath the streets."
4"Morris's last entry, scrawled in shaky handwriting:"
5"Morris trusted me. I doubted him. He's dead."
6"A man with no eyes turned to watch her pass. A child with too many teeth grinned from beneath a table. The ground beneath her feet pulsed once, like a heartbeat."
7"Shit."
8"Police."
9"Through that door could be anything. A tunnel back to the surface. A room full of people who want me dead. A way into a world I don't understand."
10"He went through a door like this one."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1028
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.65
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn17
Glock1
London1
Greek1
Street1
Helmand1
Soho1
Tuesday1
Three2
Marcus1
Morris6
Rain2
Black-painted1
Victorian1
Tube1
Violet3
Past3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Glock"
3"Marcus"
4"Morris"
5"Rain"
6"Violet"
places
0"London"
1"Greek"
2"Street"
3"Helmand"
4"Soho"
globalScore0.673
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a bundle of sticks wearing a"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1194
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences164
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean20.24
std14.92
cv0.737
sampleLengths
02
145
211
347
43
59
649
730
812
928
1047
1135
124
1322
148
159
1618
1716
1817
1926
2031
217
222
2346
242
2527
2624
2730
283
2915
3021
314
325
3320
348
3511
3637
3755
3851
3915
4031
413
4224
4340
4438
451
4610
4733
487
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences149
matches
0"been transformed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs200
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences164
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1030
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.02621359223300971
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005825242718446602
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences164
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences164
mean7.28
std5.62
cv0.772
sampleLengths
02
124
221
33
42
56
615
719
813
93
106
113
1216
1316
146
1511
1615
1712
183
198
204
216
224
233
2413
252
267
2723
2813
294
309
3126
324
337
342
357
363
372
381
392
403
413
429
433
441
4511
462
471
4810
496
64.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.43902439024390244
totalSentences164
uniqueOpeners72
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences120
matches
0"Then she found the case"
1"Then he stepped through and"
2"Then she stepped through the"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences120
matches
0"She'd been sitting on this"
1"He ran faster."
2"She'd chased worse across Helmand"
3"He straightened slowly."
4"His voice cracked"
5"He shook his head, backing"
6"He reached into his pocket"
7"His hand emerged holding a"
8"He pointed to a door"
9"She'd read about it in"
10"He pressed the bone token"
11"It swung inward on silent"
12"He stepped through."
13"He didn't come back."
14"She moved forward, stopped at"
15"I doubted him."
16"She pushed the door open"
17"She kept moving."
18"She murmured the words to"
19"He stopped at a stall"
ratio0.242
55.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences120
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn knew that"
1"The suspect's trainers squeaked against"
2"*Twenty-three years old."
3"The description from the file"
4"She'd been sitting on this"
5"The words were useless but"
6"He ran faster."
7"Quinn's boots hit the pavement"
8"She'd chased worse across Helmand"
9"This was just Soho on"
10"A group of tourists spilled"
11"The suspect ploughed through them,"
12"Quinn followed, sidestepping."
13"The woman's companion swung a"
14"Quinn ducked, kept moving."
15"Bins lined the walls."
16"A cat scattered."
17"The suspect glanced back, and"
18"The only witness, a charity"
19"Quinn had him sectioned."
ratio0.808
41.67% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences120
matches
0"Now the ghost had flesh"
ratio0.008
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"It swung inward on silent hinges, revealing a staircase that descended into darkness."
1"Something that looked like a bundle of sticks wearing a hat negotiated with a woman whose shadow moved independently."
2"Past a cage containing something that wept in a language Quinn almost understood."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"He pressed (press)"
1"She murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.143
88.1832%