Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ3JMK8R7B74GAJNX2MS46A

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Duration:
1m 24s
Cost:
$0.006876
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Her boots hit wet cobblestones. Left. Right. Left. The figure ahead bolted across Shaftesbury Avenue, nearly clipped by a black cab. The driver's horn blared, swallowed by rain and traffic. Harlow closed the gap. Eighteen years on the force meant her body knew pursuits the way her mind knew case files. Forty-one years old and she could still run down a man half her age. The suspect stumbled on the kerb, caught himself. She watched his silhouette flicker through the neon haze of a late-night kebab shop window. Fast. Desperate. Stupid. He turned right into a narrow alley, the kind that cut between Soho's backstreets like veins through old muscle. Harlow followed, her leather gloves slick against the brick wall as she used the momentum to swing herself around the corner. Bin bags piled high. The smell of rotting fruit and damp cardboard. "Metropolitan Police. Stop running." He didn't stop. They never did. The alley opened into a small courtyard, the kind tourists never found, the kind she'd staked out a dozen times during her years on vice. Three exits. He took the leftmost, a stairwell leading underground. Harlow swore under her breath. The stairs were old, worn smooth by decades of footsteps. Iron railings slick with condensation. The green glow of an emergency light flickered overhead, casting everything in jaundice yellow. She descended, listening. His footsteps echoed ahead, a fast rhythmic slap against concrete. At the bottom, a corridor stretched forward. Tiles covered in graffiti, names and dates she didn't recognise, symbols she did. The Veil Market's calling cards. She'd seen them before in case files, in the margins of statements taken from informants who'd vanished before trial. The air changed. Thicker. Older. It carried the copper tang of old blood and something else. Incense. Sandalwood and myrrh. The suspect stopped at a heavy iron door. No handle. Just a small grate at eye level. Harlow slowed her pace, pulled her service weapon but kept it low, pointed at the ground. "Whatever you're carrying isn't worth a smuggling charge. Trust me." He turned. Young. Mid-twenties. Dark hair plastered to his forehead, a thin scar cutting across his left eyebrow. His eyes were wide, not with fear but with calculation. He reached into his pocket, and Harlow tensed, adjusted her grip. He pulled out a small white object. Bone. Carved into some shape she couldn't make out from this distance. "You don't want to follow me down here, detective." His voice was steady. "You have no idea what you're walking into." "I've seen your file." She took a step closer. "Petty theft. Breaking and entering. You start running from a B and E, you make me think you've upgraded your resume." "This isn't about a burglary." He pressed the bone token against the grate. Something clicked inside the door. "This is about people you don't understand. Things you can't stop." "I'll take my chances." He laughed. It was a hollow, broken sound. "Your partner thought the same thing." The words hit her square in the chest. Three years and it still felt like a fresh wound, like someone had carved Morris's name into her ribs and refused to let the scar tissue form. She kept her face neutral. Kept her gun low. Kept her voice flat. "What do you know about Morris?" The door swung open. Darkness pooled beyond the threshold, thick and absolute. The smell hit her stronger now. Incense. Sweat. Iron. A distant hum of voices, like a crowd gathered just out of sight. "I know he followed someone down here." The suspect stepped backward into the dark. "I know he never came back." The door began to close. Harlow had seconds. One choice cut cleanly in two. Follow the suspect into a place that had swallowed her partner whole, or let him disappear into the belly of London's supernatural underworld, taking whatever answers he carried with him. She holstered her weapon. The door clanged shut behind her, plunging everything into black. She heard his footsteps receding. Then the sharp scrape of a match. A flame bloomed in the distance, illuminating a tunnel lined with rusted pipes and exposed wiring. The suspect held a small candle in a brass holder, its light catching the edges of his face. "This way," he said. "And don't touch anything." The tunnel opened into a cavernous space. Old Tube station. Tiles the colour of dried blood. Vaulted ceilings lost in shadow. Stalls lined the platform, draped in fabric and hung with lanterns that burned green and blue and amber. The crowd moved slow, purposeful. Hooded figures examined wares laid out on tables: glass vials filled with liquids that swirled on their own, books bound in skin, weapons that seemed to hum with an energy she couldn't name. The Veil Market. She'd read the intelligence reports. Dismissed most of it as folklore, rumour, the product of informants' overactive imaginations. But standing here, the air thick with unfamiliar magic and the weight of unseen eyes, Harlow understood. Morris hadn't chased a ghost. He'd chased the truth. And it had killed him. The suspect wove through the crowd, and she followed, her hand brushing her holster. The crowd parted around her, a current she wasn't part of. Traders watched her pass with expressions she couldn't read. Curious. Wary. Hungry. He stopped at a stall near the end of the platform. A woman sat behind it, her face obscured by a veil of dark beads. She wore rings on every finger, silver and gold and something black that seemed to drink the light. "Detective Harlow Quinn," the woman said. Her voice was dry paper, old dust. "I wondered when you'd find your way down." "You know me." "I know everyone who comes here. Most of them leave." She tilted her head, the beads clicking softly. "Your partner. He asked the wrong questions. Made the wrong deal." "Morris didn't make deals." The woman laughed. It sounded like bones rattling in a cup. "Everyone makes deals, detective. He traded his life for a name. The name that killed him." "Give me the name." "I don't trade in names. I trade in futures." She reached under the table, pulled out a small leather pouch, held it out. "Open it." Harlow didn't move. "What is it?" "Your future. Or his." The woman's eyes glinted through the beads. "The name you want is inside. But once you know it, you can't unknow it. The market watches. The market remembers. And the people you're hunting? They'll know you're coming." Harlow stared at the pouch. The crowd noise faded to a distant hum. She thought of Morris. His laugh. The way he told her trust your gut, even when your head says no. The way he'd disappeared without a trace, leaving nothing but a cold case file and a partner who couldn't let go. She reached out, closed her fingers around the pouch. It was warm. Alive. Behind her, the market's lanterns flickered. And someone began to scream.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1165
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1165
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"flicker"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count3
2
word"flickered"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"eyebrow"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"footsteps"
2"flickered"
3"echoed"
4"rhythmic"
5"eyebrow"
6"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences124
matches
0"t with fear"
96.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences124
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1165
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount948
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Soho1
Veil2
Market2
Harlow9
Morris3
London1
Tube1
persons
0"Market"
1"Harlow"
2"Morris"
places
0"Shaftesbury"
1"Avenue"
2"Soho"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
29.03% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a fresh wound, like someone h"
1"weapons that seemed to hum with an energy she couldn't name"
2"sounded like bones rattling in a cup"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.858
wordCount1165
matches
0"not with fear but with calculation"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences143
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean26.48
std19.24
cv0.727
sampleLengths
030
161
252
34
46
540
642
764
817
926
1039
1119
1221
1330
1429
154
1614
1748
186
1934
2020
2144
224
2310
2446
258
2677
2747
285
2937
3043
3121
323
3329
344
3527
364
3725
386
3941
4054
4113
426
435
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs171
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences143
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount790
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.015189873417721518
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0037974683544303796
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean8.15
std6.68
cv0.82
sampleLengths
05
11
21
31
413
59
64
717
814
98
1015
111
121
131
1419
1521
164
178
184
193
203
2125
222
238
245
2510
265
2714
283
2910
307
3113
325
3319
343
351
361
3711
381
393
408
412
427
4316
4410
452
461
471
4814
4910
70.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners65
67.34% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences99
matches
0"Just a small grate at"
1"Then the sharp scrape of"
ratio0.02
94.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences99
matches
0"Her boots hit wet cobblestones."
1"She watched his silhouette flicker"
2"He turned right into a"
3"He didn't stop."
4"They never did."
5"He took the leftmost, a"
6"She descended, listening."
7"His footsteps echoed ahead, a"
8"She'd seen them before in"
9"It carried the copper tang"
10"His eyes were wide, not"
11"He reached into his pocket,"
12"He pulled out a small"
13"His voice was steady"
14"She took a step closer"
15"He pressed the bone token"
16"It was a hollow, broken"
17"She kept her face neutral."
18"She holstered her weapon."
19"She heard his footsteps receding."
ratio0.313
61.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences99
matches
0"Her boots hit wet cobblestones."
1"The figure ahead bolted across"
2"The driver's horn blared, swallowed"
3"Harlow closed the gap."
4"The suspect stumbled on the"
5"She watched his silhouette flicker"
6"He turned right into a"
7"Harlow followed, her leather gloves"
8"Bin bags piled high."
9"The smell of rotting fruit"
10"He didn't stop."
11"They never did."
12"The alley opened into a"
13"He took the leftmost, a"
14"Harlow swore under her breath."
15"The stairs were old, worn"
16"Iron railings slick with condensation."
17"The green glow of an"
18"She descended, listening."
19"His footsteps echoed ahead, a"
ratio0.798
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Follow the suspect into a place that had swallowed her partner whole, or let him disappear into the belly of London's supernatural underworld, taking whatever a…"
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She tilted, the beads clicking softly"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.107
leniency0.214
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.071
87.5376%