Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ47DRQQAM47H4C3G79PW5F

Run Details

Model:
Aion 3.0
Duration:
1m 27s
Cost:
$0.023391
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth. Rory had passed through Richmond Park hundreds of times, cut across the grass on her delivery runs, nodded at the deer herds near the Pen Ponds. But she had never seen this. The four ancient oaks, twisted into something resembling pillars, stood in a loose circle thirty feet ahead. Their bark had blackened in the moonlight. She couldn't remember the path that had brought her here. The Heartstone pendant hung cold against her sternum. That was wrong, too. It had been warm since she left her flat above Silas's bar, pulsing faintly against her collarbone like a second heartbeat. The warmth had driven her out into the October night, pulling her south and west through empty streets until she climbed the low wall into the park. Now, standing at the threshold of the grove, the crimson gemstone had gone dead. Rory touched it through her jacket. Nothing. Just the smooth stone, cold as river water. She should turn back. The thought arrived late, sluggish, as if her mind had to push through honey to reach it. She was alone in a park after midnight, standing in front of a place that shouldn't exist, and she had told no one where she was going. Eva would be furious. Silas would pour himself a whiskey and say nothing, which was worse. She stepped between the stones. The air changed. It thickened, carrying the sweetness of wildflowers, though she couldn't see any yet. The sounds of the city, the distant hum of traffic, the rumble of the last trains, the occasional shout from the river, fell away one by one until the silence was so complete it hummed in her ears. Moonlight spilled into the clearing ahead, and the wildflowers were there. A carpet of them, small white blooms she didn't recognize, stretching toward a center she couldn't quite see. They covered the ground in patterns that looked almost deliberate, the petals forming shapes that her eyes refused to hold. Rory crouched and touched one. The flower was warm. Not sun-warm, but body-warm, the heat of a living thing. She pulled her hand back and wiped it on her jeans. She had come here for a reason. The warmth in the pendant, the pull that had led her across London. But now, standing inside the circle, she couldn't remember what that reason was. The certainty that had driven her felt thin, a borrowed conviction, and she wondered if she was losing time again. If something had slipped the thought into her head while she walked. A sound. Rory straightened. Her breath caught. It came again. Soft, rhythmic. A whisper of movement through the wildflowers, like something dragging itself slowly across the ground. She turned, her eyes scanning the perimeter of the clearing, the edges where the moonlight thinned and the shadows of the standing stones stretched long and crooked. Nothing moved. But the sound continued. Behind her now. She spun. The wildflowers lay flat in a thin line, as if something had pressed them down. The line started at the far edge of the clearing and ran toward her, stopping ten feet away. Stopped, but the sound hadn't stopped. The whispering continued, closer, though the pressed flowers didn't extend any further. Rory's heart beat against her ribs. She was imagining it. She had to be imagining it. She took a step back. The wildflowers behind her crunched. She froze. She hadn't heard them crunch a moment ago. She looked down. The white blooms at her feet had withered, their petals curled and blackened, and the ones beyond them, in a widening circle, were browning, dying, the warmth draining out of them like blood from a wound. The whispering stopped. Rory held her breath. The silence was absolute. No wind, no insects, no distant city. Just the pound of her own pulse in her ears, and the cold weight of the pendant against her chest. Then the pendant pulsed. Not warmth. Heat. A sudden flare that made her gasp and press her hand against her jacket. Through the fabric, she felt the Heartstone burning, its crimson glow visible even through the layers, a faint red light bleeding through the weave. The wildflowers at the edge of the clearing began to sway. There was no wind. They swayed in unison, bending toward the center of the clearing, toward Rory, as if something had moved through them. Something she couldn't see. Something that had weight and presence but no form, or a form her eyes refused to process. Rory backed toward the standing stones. She kept her eyes on the clearing, on the flowers that bent and straightened and bent again, following a path that circled the perimeter, getting closer to her with each pass. Her heel caught on a root. She stumbled, caught herself, and her hand closed around the pendant. It burned. She cried out and nearly dropped it, but she held on, the heat searing her palm. The crimson light flared brighter, and for a moment, just a moment, she saw something in the clearing. A shape. Tall, thin, standing at the center where the wildflowers were darkest. It had no face, but she felt it looking at her. The weight of its attention pressed against her skin like a hand. Then the light faded, and the shape was gone, and the wildflowers were still, and the pendant was cold again. Rory's hand was shaking. She lifted it and looked at her palm. A red mark bloomed across the skin, the shape of the stone imprinted there, the size of her thumbnail. The skin wasn't blistered. It didn't even hurt anymore. But the mark was there, a brand, a sigil, something. She needed to leave. She turned toward the standing stones and froze. The gap between the two oaks was dark. Darker than it should be, darker than the absence of light, a darkness that had substance and depth. She couldn't see the park beyond. She couldn't see the path, the grass, the distant glow of streetlights. Just black. The whispering started again. Behind her. Close. So close she felt the displacement of air against the back of her neck. Rory didn't turn around. She walked toward the darkness between the stones. Her legs felt heavy, each step an effort, as if the air had thickened to syrup. The whispering followed, not getting closer, not falling behind, keeping pace exactly. The wildflowers crunched beneath her boots, dying as she stepped on them. She reached the threshold. The darkness waited. Rory closed her eyes and stepped through. Cold. Wet grass. The smell of exhaust and rain. The distant wail of a siren. She opened her eyes. Richmond Park stretched around her, ordinary and dark, the standing stones gone. The moon hung lower in the sky, and she couldn't tell how long she had been gone. Minutes. Hours. The pendant hung cold and still against her chest. Her palm still bore the mark. She looked at it in the moonlight, the small crimson shape, and then at her left wrist, where the crescent scar from a childhood accident caught the same pale light. Two marks now. Two things she couldn't explain. Rory shoved her hand in her pocket and walked toward the park gate. She didn't run. She didn't look back. She told herself it was because she was calm, because she was rational, because Aurora Carter didn't panic. But the truth was simpler. She was afraid that if she looked back, she would see the standing stones still there, and the darkness between them waiting, and the shape at the center of the clearing, watching her go with something that wasn't eyes. And she was afraid she would go back. She was afraid she wanted to. The pendant pulsed once against her chest, faint and warm, and then was still. <uncensored_response> The standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth. Rory had passed through Richmond Park hundreds of times, cut across the grass on her delivery runs, nodded at the deer herds near the Pen Ponds. But she had never seen this. The four ancient oaks, twisted into something resembling pillars, stood in a loose circle thirty feet ahead. Their bark had blackened in the moonlight. She couldn't remember the path that had brought her here. The Heartstone pendant hung cold against her sternum. That was wrong, too. It had been warm since she left her flat above Silas's bar, pulsing faintly against her collarbone like a second heartbeat. The warmth had driven her out into the October night, pulling her south and west through empty streets until she climbed the low wall into the park. Now, standing at the threshold of the grove, the crimson gemstone had gone dead. Rory touched it through her jacket. Nothing. Just the smooth stone, cold as river water. She should turn back. The thought arrived late, sluggish, as if her mind had to push through honey to reach it. She was alone in a park after midnight, standing in front of a place that shouldn't exist, and she had told no one where she was going. Eva would be furious. Silas would pour himself a whiskey and say nothing, which was worse. She stepped between the stones. The air changed. It thickened, carrying the sweetness of wildflowers, though she couldn't see any yet. The sounds of the city, the distant hum of traffic, the rumble of the last trains, the occasional shout from the river, fell away one by one until the silence was so complete it hummed in her ears. Moonlight spilled into the clearing ahead, and the wildflowers were there. A carpet of them, small white blooms she didn't recognize, stretching toward a center she couldn't quite see. They covered the ground in patterns that looked almost deliberate, the petals forming shapes that her eyes refused to hold. Rory crouched and touched one. The flower was warm. Not sun-warm, but body-warm, the heat of a living thing. She pulled her hand back and wiped it on her jeans. She had come here for a reason. The warmth in the pendant, the pull that had led her across London. But now, standing inside the circle, she couldn't remember what that reason was. The certainty that had driven her felt thin, a borrowed conviction, and she wondered if she was losing time again. If something had slipped the thought into her head while she walked. A sound. Rory straightened. Her breath caught. It came again. Soft, rhythmic. A whisper of movement through the wildflowers, like something dragging itself slowly across the ground. She turned, her eyes scanning the perimeter of the clearing, the edges where the moonlight thinned and the shadows of the standing stones stretched long and crooked. Nothing moved. But the sound continued. Behind her now. She spun. The wildflowers lay flat in a thin line, as if something had pressed them down. The line started at the far edge of the clearing and ran toward her, stopping ten feet away. Stopped, but the sound hadn't stopped. The whispering continued, closer, though the pressed flowers didn't extend any further. Rory's heart beat against her ribs. She was imagining it. She had to be imagining it. She took a step back. The wildflowers behind her crunched. She froze. She hadn't heard them crunch a moment ago. She looked down. The white blooms at her feet had withered, their petals curled and blackened, and the ones beyond them, in a widening circle, were browning, dying, the warmth draining out of them like blood from a wound. The whispering stopped. Rory held her breath. The silence was absolute. No wind, no insects, no distant city. Just the pound of her own pulse in her ears, and the cold weight of the pendant against her chest. Then the pendant pulsed. Not warmth. Heat. A sudden flare that made her gasp and press her hand against her jacket. Through the fabric, she felt the Heartstone burning, its crimson glow visible even through the layers, a faint red light bleeding through the weave. The wildflowers at the edge of the clearing began to sway. There was no wind. They swayed in unison, bending toward the center of the clearing, toward Rory, as if something had moved through them. Something she couldn't see. Something that had weight and presence but no form, or a form her eyes refused to process. Rory backed toward the standing stones. She kept her eyes on the clearing, on the flowers that bent and straightened and bent again, following a path that circled the perimeter, getting closer to her with each pass. Her heel caught on a root. She stumbled, caught herself, and her hand closed around the pendant. It burned. She cried out and nearly dropped it, but she held on, the heat searing her palm. The crimson light flared brighter, and for a moment, just a moment, she saw something in the clearing. A shape. Tall, thin, standing at the center where the wildflowers were darkest. It had no face, but she felt it looking at her. The weight of its attention pressed against her skin like a hand. Then the light faded, and the shape was gone, and the wildflowers were still, and the pendant was cold again. Rory's hand was shaking. She lifted it and looked at her palm. A red mark bloomed across the skin, the shape of the stone imprinted there, the size of her thumbnail. The skin wasn't blistered. It didn't even hurt anymore. But the mark was there, a brand, a sigil, something. She needed to leave. She turned toward the standing stones and froze. The gap between the two oaks was dark. Darker than it should be, darker than the absence of light, a darkness that had substance and depth. She couldn't see the park beyond. She couldn't see the path, the grass, the distant glow of streetlights. Just black. The whispering started again. Behind her. Close. So close she felt the displacement of air against the back of her neck. Rory didn't turn around. She walked toward the darkness between the stones. Her legs felt heavy, each step an effort, as if the air had thickened to syrup. The whispering followed, not getting closer, not falling behind, keeping pace exactly. The wildflowers crunched beneath her boots, dying as she stepped on them. She reached the threshold. The darkness waited. Rory closed her eyes and stepped through. Cold. Wet grass. The smell of exhaust and rain. The distant wail of a siren. She opened her eyes. Richmond Park stretched around her, ordinary and dark, the standing stones gone. The moon hung lower in the sky, and she couldn't tell how long she had been gone. Minutes. Hours. The pendant hung cold and still against her chest. Her palm still bore the mark. She looked at it in the moonlight, the small crimson shape, and then at her left wrist, where the crescent scar from a childhood accident caught the same pale light. Two marks now. Two things she couldn't explain. Rory shoved her hand in her pocket and walked toward the park gate. She didn't run. She didn't look back. She told herself it was because she was calm, because she was rational, because Aurora Carter didn't panic. But the truth was simpler. She was afraid that if she looked back, she would see the standing stones still there, and the darkness between them waiting, and the shape at the center of the clearing, watching her go with something that wasn't eyes. And she was afraid she would go back. She was afraid she wanted to. The pendant pulsed once against her chest, faint and warm, and then was still.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
96.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2633
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.23% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2633
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"warmth"
count8
1
word"silence"
count4
2
word"rhythmic"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"scanning"
count2
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"weight"
count6
7
word"pulsed"
count4
8
word"searing"
count2
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"rhythmic"
3"whisper"
4"scanning"
5"pulse"
6"weight"
7"pulsed"
8"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells6
narrationSentences269
matches
0"was afraid"
1"was afraid"
2"was afraid"
3"was afraid"
4"was afraid"
5"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences269
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences269
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0.004
matches
0"<uncensored_response>"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2633
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount2633
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond4
Park4
Pen2
Ponds2
Heartstone4
Silas4
October2
London2
Rory24
Aurora2
Carter2
Two4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
3"Aurora"
4"Carter"
5"Two"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Pen"
3"October"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences162
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite see"
1"quite see"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.76
wordCount2633
matches
0"Not sun-warm, but body-warm, the heat of a living thing"
1"Not sun-warm, but body-warm, the heat of a living thing"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences269
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs101
mean26.07
std21.16
cv0.812
sampleLengths
010
166
274
315
44
560
65
754
849
930
1065
112
125
1347
142
159
1651
1716
1810
1949
203
2135
224
2341
2411
254
2641
2754
2836
2936
3020
3150
324
338
3446
3521
364
3748
387
397
4015
4144
4236
438
4438
455
4639
478
486
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences269
matches
0"was gone"
1"been gone"
2"was gone"
3"been gone"
50.52% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount10
totalVerbs446
matches
0"was going"
1"was losing"
2"was imagining"
3"were browning"
4"was shaking"
5"was going"
6"was losing"
7"was imagining"
8"were browning"
9"was shaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences269
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2637
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.028062191884717484
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0030337504740235114
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences269
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences269
mean9.79
std8.08
cv0.826
sampleLengths
010
126
26
317
47
510
68
74
821
927
1014
116
121
138
144
1517
1627
174
1812
195
203
2113
2238
2311
2418
2520
265
274
2810
2911
307
3113
3213
3320
3412
352
362
373
383
392
4015
4127
422
434
443
452
4615
4718
486
4912
38.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.1449814126394052
totalSentences269
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount10
totalSentences232
matches
0"Just the smooth stone, cold"
1"Just the pound of her"
2"Then the pendant pulsed."
3"Then the light faded, and"
4"So close she felt the"
5"Just the smooth stone, cold"
6"Just the pound of her"
7"Then the pendant pulsed."
8"Then the light faded, and"
9"So close she felt the"
ratio0.043
78.62% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount82
totalSentences232
matches
0"Their bark had blackened in"
1"She couldn't remember the path"
2"It had been warm since"
3"She should turn back."
4"She was alone in a"
5"She stepped between the stones."
6"It thickened, carrying the sweetness"
7"They covered the ground in"
8"She pulled her hand back"
9"She had come here for"
10"Her breath caught."
11"It came again."
12"She turned, her eyes scanning"
13"She was imagining it."
14"She had to be imagining"
15"She took a step back."
16"She hadn't heard them crunch"
17"She looked down."
18"They swayed in unison, bending"
19"She kept her eyes on"
ratio0.353
54.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount188
totalSentences232
matches
0"The standing stones rose from"
1"Rory had passed through Richmond"
2"The four ancient oaks, twisted"
3"Their bark had blackened in"
4"She couldn't remember the path"
5"The Heartstone pendant hung cold"
6"That was wrong, too."
7"It had been warm since"
8"The warmth had driven her"
9"Rory touched it through her"
10"She should turn back."
11"The thought arrived late, sluggish,"
12"She was alone in a"
13"Eva would be furious."
14"Silas would pour himself a"
15"She stepped between the stones."
16"The air changed."
17"It thickened, carrying the sweetness"
18"The sounds of the city,"
19"Moonlight spilled into the clearing"
ratio0.81
86.21% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences232
matches
0"Now, standing at the threshold"
1"If something had slipped the"
2"Now, standing at the threshold"
3"If something had slipped the"
ratio0.017
66.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences112
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"She was alone in a park after midnight, standing in front of a place that shouldn't exist, and she had told no one where she was going."
1"The wildflowers lay flat in a thin line, as if something had pressed them down."
2"A sudden flare that made her gasp and press her hand against her jacket."
3"She kept her eyes on the clearing, on the flowers that bent and straightened and bent again, following a path that circled the perimeter, getting closer to her …"
4"Darker than it should be, darker than the absence of light, a darkness that had substance and depth."
5"She was afraid that if she looked back, she would see the standing stones still there, and the darkness between them waiting, and the shape at the center of the…"
6"She was alone in a park after midnight, standing in front of a place that shouldn't exist, and she had told no one where she was going."
7"The wildflowers lay flat in a thin line, as if something had pressed them down."
8"A sudden flare that made her gasp and press her hand against her jacket."
9"She kept her eyes on the clearing, on the flowers that bent and straightened and bent again, following a path that circled the perimeter, getting closer to her …"
10"Darker than it should be, darker than the absence of light, a darkness that had substance and depth."
11"She was afraid that if she looked back, she would see the standing stones still there, and the darkness between them waiting, and the shape at the center of the…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount0
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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90.3596%