Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ5ESQYVM6CWA544BS89ZJS

Run Details

Model:
Aion 3.0
Duration:
57.4s
Cost:
$0.019186
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Heartstone had been burning against her sternum for three days. Not the faint, rhythmic warmth Aurora had grown accustomed to since the pendant appeared in her post box six weeks ago — no name, no return address, just a small velvet box and a silver chain threaded through a clasp. That warmth she'd learned to live with, the way a person learns to live with a birthmark or an old ache. But this was different. This was a throb, insistent and sharp, pulsing against her skin like a second heartbeat she couldn't slow down or ignore. She'd told no one. Not Eva, who would have worried. Not Silas, who would have asked questions she couldn't answer. She'd simply waited until her evening shift at the Golden Empress ended, stuffed the last delivery receipt into her rucksack, and caught the last train southwest to Richmond. Now she stood at the edge of Richmond Park at half past eleven, the gates behind her locked and scaled with rust, the city reduced to a pale smear on the horizon. The sky above was moonless and starless, choked with cloud cover so thick it seemed to press down on the treetops. Her phone's torch cut a weak cone of light through the dark, catching only the first few meters of the path ahead before the blackness swallowed it. The pendant pulsed. Hotter now. Steady. Aurora pressed her palm flat against her chest, feeling the Heartstone's heat through her jumper, through her bra, through her skin. The crimson glow bled faintly through the fabric, painting her fingers in dull red light. She'd never been here at night. She'd come once before, weeks ago, in the pale light of a winter afternoon, following the same pull that dragged her here now. She'd found the grove then — a hidden clearing deep in the park's interior, ringed by ancient oaks so old their trunks had gone grey and their roots rose from the earth like the ribs of something buried. She'd stood at the threshold between two of those oaks and felt the air change, tasted something sweet and electric on her tongue like the memory of summer. Wildflowers had dotted the grass inside, impossible in November, their petals bright and open as if the sun were directly overhead rather than filtering grey through bare branches. She hadn't stepped inside. Something about the light had been wrong. Too warm. Too still. She stepped off the path now, her trainers sinking into damp earth, and pushed through a curtain of low-hanging branches that scraped her face and caught in her hair. The pendant's glow strengthened with every step, its heat bordering on pain, and she clenched her jaw against the urge to rip the chain from her neck and throw it into the undergrowth. The oaks emerged from the dark like standing stones. She could see them ahead, their massive trunks pale grey in the Heartstone's light, their canopies merging overhead into a ceiling that blocked even the faintest ambient glow of the distant city. The ground between them was soft, carpeted with dead leaves that made no sound when she walked over them. No sound. That was the first wrong thing. Aurora stopped at the threshold, her hand still pressed to her chest, and listened. The park had been quiet — the distant hum of traffic, the occasional rustle of wind through branches, the far-off bark of someone's dog. But here, at the edge of the grove, all of it stopped. The silence was total. Not the simple absence of noise, but something heavier, a pressure against her eardrums, as if the air itself had thickened and refused to carry sound. She swallowed. The click of her throat was audible, shockingly loud in the vacuum. The wildflowers were still there. She could see them in the Heartstone's glow — small clusters of white and yellow scattered across the clearing's floor, their petals open, their stems rigid. They didn't move. Not even a tremor. The air inside the grove was perfectly, impossibly still. She stepped across the threshold. The temperature changed. Not cold — the opposite. A wave of warmth rolled over her, humid and close, carrying a scent she couldn't name. Sweet, but underneath the sweetness, something else. Something organic and sour, like fruit left too long in the sun. The pendant flared. She gasped and yanked her hand away from her chest, the heat suddenly too intense, and the chain seared a line of pain along the back of her neck. The crimson glow spread, throwing light across the clearing, and for a moment she saw everything in sharp, hellish detail. The wildflowers weren't just scattered. They grew in patterns. Circles within circles, spiraling inward toward the center of the grove where the earth was bare and dark, the soil freshly turned. No — not freshly turned. Disturbed. Something had pushed up from beneath, and the ground had cracked open in a jagged line that ran the length of the clearing. Then the glow dimmed. The pendant's heat ebbed to a dull ache, and the light contracted back to its faint inner pulse, leaving her standing in a darkness that seemed deeper than before. Aurora's breath came fast and shallow. She could feel her pulse in her throat, in her wrists, in the crescent scar on her left wrist that always throbbed when her heart rate climbed. She forced herself to take a slow breath, to count to four on the inhale, hold, four on the exhale. Cool-headed. That's what Eva always called her. Cool-headed Rory, who never panicked, who always thought her way out. She turned on her phone's torch again. The beam caught the edge of one of the oaks, and she swept it across the clearing in a slow arc. The wildflowers stood in their patterns. The cracked earth lay still at the center. The oaks ringed her on all sides, their trunks massive and silent. Nothing moved. She took another step. Then another. The ground beneath her was soft but stable, the soil dark and rich, and the wildflowers brushed against her ankles without bending. They felt wrong against her skin — too firm, too warm, more like fingers than petals. She stopped and looked down. The torch beam caught the white flowers at her feet, and for a moment she could see them clearly. Five petals each. Thin stems. Ordinary. She exhaled and forced herself to keep walking. The crack in the earth was wider than it had looked in the pendant's glow. She knelt beside it, balancing on the balls of her feet, and directed the torch into the gap. The beam reached perhaps a meter down before the darkness absorbed it. The walls of the crack were smooth and lined with something that glistened — not water, not mud, something darker and more viscous that caught the light and held it. A sound reached her from somewhere behind. Aurora spun, the torch beam cutting a wild arc through the dark. The oaks stood where they had stood before, silent and grey. The wildflowers dotted their patterns. Nothing had moved. But the sound had been real. A soft, wet displacement, like a footstep in mud. Close. Within the grove. "Hello?" Her voice sounded thin and reedy in the heavy silence, swallowed almost before it left her mouth. No response. Of course not. Who would be here at midnight in a forgotten clearing in Richmond Park? She was alone. She was overworked and under-slept and following a magic rock into the woods like a woman losing her mind. She turned back to the crack in the earth. The glistening substance on the walls was moving. Slowly, almost imperceptibly, sliding downward in a thin sheet, as if the crack were breathing, inhaling, pulling something deeper into itself. The pendant pulsed. Hot. Cold. Hot again. Aurora stood up too fast, her foot sliding on the loose soil, and caught herself against the nearest oak. The bark was warm beneath her palm. Not the warmth of living wood — the warmth of skin, of a body holding heat close. She yanked her hand back and stared at the trunk. The bark was rough and grey and ordinary, patterned with the usual ridges and furrows of an ancient oak. Except for the mark. Low on the trunk, near the base, where the roots split away from the main stem, someone had carved something. Not cut — carved, the edges smooth and deliberate, the lines filled with the same dark substance that lined the crack. A symbol she didn't recognize: a circle bisected by a wavy line, with three smaller circles arranged in a triangle beneath it. She photographed it with her phone. The image came out dark and blurred, the symbol barely visible, as if the camera couldn't focus on it properly. Another sound. Closer this time. The wet, heavy footstep of something moving through soil. And beneath it, threading through the silence like a whisper she couldn't quite resolve into words, a low, rhythmic humming. Not from any direction. From everywhere. From the ground beneath her feet, from the air in her lungs, from the pendant burning against her chest. Aurora backed away from the oak. Her heel found the edge of the crack, and she stumbled sideways, catching herself before she fell. The torch beam swung wildly, catching the wildflowers, the oaks, the dark earth, and then — for the space of a single heartbeat — something else. A shape. Standing at the far edge of the clearing, between two oaks where the threshold should have been. Tall and narrow and wrong in a way she couldn't articulate, its proportions slightly off, its outline blurring into the darkness around it as if it were bleeding into the night itself. The torch beam passed over it and found only empty air. Aurora's hands were shaking. She could feel the tremor in her wrists, in her fingers, in the small hard ridge of scar tissue on her left wrist. The pendant throbbed against her chest, hot enough to make her flinch, and its glow had intensified, casting a circle of red light around her that pulsed in time with her heartbeat. The humming grew louder. The wildflowers at her feet began to bend — not in wind, because there was no wind, but bending anyway, all of them, all at once, turning toward the center of the clearing where the crack in the earth yawned wide and dark and patient. Something shifted in the crack. A sound like exhalation, like breath pushed through a throat too narrow to carry it. The soil at the edges crumbled inward, and the glistening substance on the walls caught the pendant's light and threw it back in fractured patterns that crawled across the oaks like living things. Aurora backed toward the threshold. One step. Two. The air grew colder as she neared the boundary between the grove and the world outside, and she could feel the silence loosening its grip, the distant hum of traffic creeping back in like water finding its level. She didn't run. She wanted to — every nerve in her body screamed at her to turn and sprint through the dark until she found the path, the gate, the main road, the station, the train, her flat, her bed, her ordinary life. But her legs moved with careful, deliberate steps, her eyes fixed on the clearing behind her, on the wildflowers bending toward the crack, on the shadows that pooled between the oaks like ink. The shape was there again. Not at the threshold — closer. Standing in the center of the clearing, where she had been kneeling moments before. The pendant's glow reached it and passed through it, illuminating nothing. But she could see it, or rather she could see the absence of it, the hole it tore in the fabric of the visible world. It was looking at her. She felt the weight of that regard like a hand closing around her throat. She crossed the threshold. The warmth vanished. The silence shattered. The sounds of the park flooded back — wind, distant traffic, the rustle of small creatures in the undergrowth. The pendant went cold and dark against her chest, a dead thing hanging from a silver chain. Aurora kept walking. Through the undergrowth, across the damp earth, past the low-hanging branches that scraped her face and caught in her hair. She didn't look back. She didn't turn on her torch. She walked through the dark with her hands outstretched, feeling for the path, the gate, the road, the world she knew. Behind her, deep in the grove, something exhaled. The sound carried through the trees, thin and distant and satisfied, like a sigh let out after a long wait. The wildflowers turned their faces toward it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2130
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"suddenly"
2"slowly"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
22.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2130
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count6
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count3
5
word"electric"
count1
6
word"silence"
count5
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"could feel"
count3
9
word"throbbed"
count2
10
word"glistening"
count2
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"resolve"
count1
13
word"fractured"
count1
14
word"weight"
count1
15
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"warmth"
2"velvet"
3"throb"
4"pulsed"
5"electric"
6"silence"
7"pulse"
8"could feel"
9"throbbed"
10"glistening"
11"whisper"
12"resolve"
13"fractured"
14"weight"
15"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences170
matches
0"A wave of warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences170
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences170
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount2145
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Aurora10
Eva2
Silas1
Golden1
Empress1
Richmond3
Park2
November1
Rory1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Aurora"
2"Eva"
3"Silas"
4"Empress"
5"Rory"
places
0"Golden"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"November"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed deeper than before"
1"quite resolve into words, a low, rhythmic humming"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.932
wordCount2146
matches
0"Not the simple absence of noise, but something heavier, a pressure against her eardrums, as if th"
1"not in wind, because there was no wind, but bending anyway, all of them, all at once, turning toward the"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences170
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean42.92
std25.93
cv0.604
sampleLengths
011
186
248
380
46
536
6123
715
862
960
108
1180
1214
1347
145
1543
1652
1760
1833
1971
2054
212
2244
2338
2475
257
2631
2719
2818
2940
3038
317
3272
3367
3426
3559
3649
3751
3811
3959
4049
4153
4246
4376
4461
4519
4646
4754
4828
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"was overworked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs305
matches
0"were breathing"
1"were bleeding"
2"were shaking"
3"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences170
ratio0.088
matches
0"Not the faint, rhythmic warmth Aurora had grown accustomed to since the pendant appeared in her post box six weeks ago — no name, no return address, just a small velvet box and a silver chain threaded through a clasp."
1"She'd found the grove then — a hidden clearing deep in the park's interior, ringed by ancient oaks so old their trunks had gone grey and their roots rose from the earth like the ribs of something buried."
2"The park had been quiet — the distant hum of traffic, the occasional rustle of wind through branches, the far-off bark of someone's dog."
3"She could see them in the Heartstone's glow — small clusters of white and yellow scattered across the clearing's floor, their petals open, their stems rigid."
4"Not cold — the opposite."
5"No — not freshly turned."
6"They felt wrong against her skin — too firm, too warm, more like fingers than petals."
7"The walls of the crack were smooth and lined with something that glistened — not water, not mud, something darker and more viscous that caught the light and held it."
8"Not the warmth of living wood — the warmth of skin, of a body holding heat close."
9"Not cut — carved, the edges smooth and deliberate, the lines filled with the same dark substance that lined the crack."
10"The torch beam swung wildly, catching the wildflowers, the oaks, the dark earth, and then — for the space of a single heartbeat — something else."
11"The wildflowers at her feet began to bend — not in wind, because there was no wind, but bending anyway, all of them, all at once, turning toward the center of the clearing where the crack in the earth yawned wide and dark and patient."
12"She wanted to — every nerve in her body screamed at her to turn and sprint through the dark until she found the path, the gate, the main road, the station, the train, her flat, her bed, her ordinary life."
13"Not at the threshold — closer."
14"The sounds of the park flooded back — wind, distant traffic, the rustle of small creatures in the undergrowth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2135
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount70
adverbRatio0.03278688524590164
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.008430913348946136
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences170
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences170
mean12.62
std10.35
cv0.82
sampleLengths
011
140
221
34
421
54
66
710
828
932
1021
1127
123
132
141
1521
1615
176
1823
1938
2028
2128
224
237
242
252
2629
2733
289
2932
3019
312
326
3314
3424
3512
364
3726
382
3912
405
4126
423
434
449
455
463
475
4816
497
34.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats27
diversityRatio0.27647058823529413
totalSentences170
uniqueOpeners47
67.57% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences148
matches
0"Then the glow dimmed."
1"Of course not."
2"Slowly, almost imperceptibly, sliding downward"
ratio0.02
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences148
matches
0"She'd told no one."
1"She'd simply waited until her"
2"Her phone's torch cut a"
3"She'd never been here at"
4"She'd come once before, weeks"
5"She'd found the grove then"
6"She'd stood at the threshold"
7"She hadn't stepped inside."
8"She stepped off the path"
9"She could see them ahead,"
10"She could see them in"
11"They didn't move."
12"She stepped across the threshold."
13"She gasped and yanked her"
14"They grew in patterns."
15"She could feel her pulse"
16"She forced herself to take"
17"She turned on her phone's"
18"She took another step."
19"They felt wrong against her"
ratio0.264
81.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences148
matches
0"The Heartstone had been burning"
1"That warmth she'd learned to"
2"This was a throb, insistent"
3"She'd told no one."
4"She'd simply waited until her"
5"The sky above was moonless"
6"Her phone's torch cut a"
7"The pendant pulsed."
8"Aurora pressed her palm flat"
9"The crimson glow bled faintly"
10"She'd never been here at"
11"She'd come once before, weeks"
12"She'd found the grove then"
13"She'd stood at the threshold"
14"Wildflowers had dotted the grass"
15"She hadn't stepped inside."
16"Something about the light had"
17"She stepped off the path"
18"The pendant's glow strengthened with"
19"The oaks emerged from the"
ratio0.757
33.78% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences148
matches
0"Now she stood at the"
ratio0.007
28.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences81
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She'd come once before, weeks ago, in the pale light of a winter afternoon, following the same pull that dragged her here now."
1"Wildflowers had dotted the grass inside, impossible in November, their petals bright and open as if the sun were directly overhead rather than filtering grey th…"
2"She stepped off the path now, her trainers sinking into damp earth, and pushed through a curtain of low-hanging branches that scraped her face and caught in her…"
3"She could see them ahead, their massive trunks pale grey in the Heartstone's light, their canopies merging overhead into a ceiling that blocked even the faintes…"
4"Not the simple absence of noise, but something heavier, a pressure against her eardrums, as if the air itself had thickened and refused to carry sound."
5"The pendant's heat ebbed to a dull ache, and the light contracted back to its faint inner pulse, leaving her standing in a darkness that seemed deeper than befo…"
6"The walls of the crack were smooth and lined with something that glistened — not water, not mud, something darker and more viscous that caught the light and hel…"
7"Slowly, almost imperceptibly, sliding downward in a thin sheet, as if the crack were breathing, inhaling, pulling something deeper into itself."
8"Not cut — carved, the edges smooth and deliberate, the lines filled with the same dark substance that lined the crack."
9"Tall and narrow and wrong in a way she couldn't articulate, its proportions slightly off, its outline blurring into the darkness around it as if it were bleedin…"
10"The soil at the edges crumbled inward, and the glistening substance on the walls caught the pendant's light and threw it back in fractured patterns that crawled…"
11"But her legs moved with careful, deliberate steps, her eyes fixed on the clearing behind her, on the wildflowers bending toward the crack, on the shadows that p…"
12"Through the undergrowth, across the damp earth, past the low-hanging branches that scraped her face and caught in her hair."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount0
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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85.2818%