Run: 2026-07-08-01KX1M0VJ2HK6NMCBDSGSF5KNP

Run Details

Duration:
1m 30s
Cost:
$0.026880
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest flickered once against the Soho dusk, throwing a sickly wash over the wet pavement before settling back into its steady, drunken hum. Aurora Carter paused beneath it longer than she needed to, fingers curling around the leather strap of her delivery bag until the crescent scar on her left wrist whitened. Five years. The last time she had stood here the bag had been heavier with textbooks, not takeaway cartons cooling against her hip, and her hair had still smelled of Cardiff rain instead of fryer grease and diesel. She pushed the door open. The place exhaled the same smoke-and-old-wood breath it always had. Maps yellowed on the walls, black-and-white faces of strangers staring out from cheaper decades. A single lamp over the bar threw long amber shadows that made the empty stools look like jagged teeth. And there, wiping a glass with the slow economy of a man who had once done far more delicate work with his hands, stood Silas Blackwood. He looked up. The glass stopped turning. Hazel eyes caught the light and held it, older now, the grey threading his auburn hair thicker at the temples, the neat beard silvered along the jaw. The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted when he set the glass down. For a moment neither of them spoke. The low jazz record crackled as if it too were searching for the right key. “Rory,” he said at last, voice lower than she remembered, roughened by smoke and years of speaking carefully. “You’re taller. Or I’m shrinking.” She let the door swing shut behind her. “You’re leaning more. Left side.” A ghost of a smile tugged at the corner of his mouth and died. He shifted his weight, the slight limp visible now that she was looking for it. “Knee still remembers Prague. Memory’s a bastard that way.” Silence settled between them like dust. She crossed the floor—scarred boards she used to know by heart—and slid onto the stool she had always claimed, third from the left, where the grain of the oak reached out like a handprint. The leather of the seat sighed under her. Silas poured two fingers of something amber without asking and set the tumbler in front of her. His own stayed empty. “You kept the place open,” she said after a swallow that burned cleaner than it should have. “Couldn’t think of a better name for the lie.” He rested both palms on the bar, fingers spread, the signet catching light again. “You’re thinner. Beyond air.” “Delivery work. Good calories if you don’t mind the oil.” She turned the glass, watching the liquid climb the sides. “Golden Empress. Yu-Fei’s place. She doesn’t ask why a girl with an almost-law degree is cycling pad thai in the rain.” Silas’s gaze stayed steady. “Law. That was the plan. Before Evan.” The name landed between them like a dropped tray. Rory’s shoulders took it without flinching; she had practiced that. “Before a lot of things.” She met his eyes then, bright blue against the dim. “You look tired, Si.” “I am fifty-eight. Tired comes free with the coffee.” He picked up another glass and began polishing it for something to do. “Eva wrote once. Said you were gone. Not dead. Just vacuumed out of London. I checked the usual places. Flat above was empty. Books still on the shelves. Your mother’s parsley plant dead on the sill.” She hadn’t known he had gone up there. The image of him standing in the rooms that smelled of her shampoo and last nights’ takeaways tightened something behind her ribs. “I left the key with the landlord. Told him rent through the end of the month.” “Landlord sold it to me two years back. Still empty. Waiting.” The cloth slowed. “I kept the parsley. Bought a new one. Stubborn little green bastard floats in the window now.” Rory’s laugh came out cracked. “You don’t strike me as the gardening type.” “I’m the keep-what’s-left type.” He set the glass down carefully. “What brought you through the door tonight, lass? Coincidence doesn’t live this long.” She rolled the tumbler between her palms. The scar on her wrist flashed and vanished. “Delivery. Order for table that never showed. Closed the bag, saw the neon, decided the whisky might cancel the rain. Didn’t know you still stood behind this wood.” “Where else would I stand?” The question was soft, almost gentle, and heavier than the bottles ranked behind him. “I retired from disappearing. Turned out watering plants and pouring pints for people who forget their own names is quieter penance.” Quieter. The word sat between them like a third person. Rory remembered nights when the bar had been a front for something sharper—men with wet coats and no names, maps spread on the table in the hidden room behind the bookshelf that no one else ever noticed. She had been twenty then, bright with the belief that intelligence work looked like cinema, that Silas Blackwood was invincible. He had taught her to read a room the way he read faces: corners first, exits second, lies always last. She had thought she would follow him into whatever shadowed order he claimed. Instead she had followed Evan into a two-room flat that smelled of his cologne and her failure, then fled with Eva’s borrowed money and a suitcase light enough to carry on the Tube. “You’ve changed the whisky,” she said. “I’ve changed worse partners.” He poured a measure for himself at last, three fingers, no ice. The limp brought him half a step closer when he lifted it. “And you? You talk like the girl who used to argue charity law at two in the morning, but the eyes are older. They flinch at the door swing. Like they expect someone else to come through it.” She tasted that observation, let it settle bitter under the whisky. “Evan’s still out there. Somewhere. Cardiff, last I heard. Has a new girl with a softer jaw. I don’t check. Checking is the first step back into the room.” She tapped the scar with one fingernail. “This is residual. Childhood. The rest I left on a train platform.” Silas set his glass down without drinking. The quiet stretched until the jazz record scratched to its end and the automatic arm lifted with a tired click. Outside, a car hissed through the rain. Somewhere a siren tried on a different key. “I looked for you after Prague,” he said, almost to the maps. “Before you left. After the leg stopped answering properly and the Service offered a desk and a pension and a rehearsed smile. Wanted to tell you the story straight, not the official version. Thought if I got the telling right you wouldn’t look at me the way the others did—like the limp was contagious.” He flexed the fingers of his right hand; the ring turned once. “By the time I was ready to talk, your stool was cold and Eva’s handwriting was the last I had of you.” Rory’s throat closed around something that wanted to be apology and refused. “You never called.” “Neither did you.” The honesty was clean and sharp as the first cut of winter air. She nodded once. Outside the green neon stuttered again, painting the window with a momentary bruise. Inside, the air smelled of lemon oil and old decisions. “I still have the books upstairs,” she said. “Justice theories. Tort. Things that used to feel like armor. Now they just gather dust. I bring the empties down sometimes when the lift’s broken. You’re not always down here. Sometimes I leave them by the sink and crane for the stink of yesterday’s chips.” She turned the glass again. “I didn’t want to make you carry my disappearing too.” Silas’s hand moved across the bar and stopped an inch short of hers. Age-spotted, the veins raised like rivers under thin skin, the silver ring still exact. “You were the only one who never treated the knee like a betrayal,” he said. “The rest of them measured how far I’d fallen by how much I limped. You just ruined the joke. Made it smaller. Made it survivable.” He withdrew the hand without touching. “I kept the stool clear. Superstition or pathway, take your pick.” The distance between their fingers was the exact width of five years and every sentence they had refused to spend. Rory felt the weight of it pressing against the scar, against the memory of herself at twenty arguing that some scars were just punctuation. She had not known then that punctuation could rewrite an entire legal brief of a life. “I hate the rain here,” she said. “It falls different than Cardiff. Meaner. Like it’s trying to erase the streets instead of wash them.” “Then stop standing under it.” His voice flattened into something that might once have been an order. “Pack the law books. Or burn them. There’s a room upstairs still holding your shape. There’s a secret door that still opens if you tip the right spine. You don’t have to be the girl who fled or the woman who delivers. Coincidence brought you through the door. Staying is a choice only idiots await permission for.” She laughed once, soft and startled by its own existence. “You still talk like a recruitment brochure for regret.” “I talk like a man who already spent his better years collecting the -ests—oldest operative, deepest cover, longest scar. The Nest is what is left over. A place where maps of other people’s wars can hang while I pour drink to people who still believe morning is a guaranteed sequel.” He finally raised his glass and drank. When he set it down the sound was absolute. “But the stool is empty now only if you leave it.” Rory closed her eyes. The jazz started again—someone returning the arm to the vinyl’s first scar. She tasted whisky and lengthening night. Behind her lids she saw the hidden bookshelf, the false panel she had once pressed with the exact pressure he had taught her, the low table where blueprints of cities she would never visit had unrolled like promises. She opened her eyes and found him still watching, the hazel catching light the way a sniper’s scope did—not aimed, simply precise. “Does the knee still hurt when it rains?” she asked. “Only when I remember I used to run.” He shrugged one shoulder, the gesture economical, tragic in its acceptance. “And you? The crescent still pull when you cycle?” She turned her wrist upward, let the dim light discover the thin white arc. “Only when the bag is full and the light is red and I think too long about how much further I still have to go to be someone the old us would recognize.” The conversation drifted after that into smaller things—the price of decent tonic, the new landlord three doors down who looked like a man always expecting a knock, the parsley plant’s second chance growth. Yet under every ordinary word the larger silence coiled, patient as a retired field agent. They spoke of the years as if they were weather that had simply arrived, not choices that had stacked like unpaid tabs. Near midnight a last customer stumbled out, the bell above the door marking his exit with a single exhausted note. Silas locked the front and killed the neon with a switch under the bar. In the softer dark the maps looked like days that had already been decided. Rory stood when he did. The stools between them and the door felt like years she could almost step across without falling. At the foot of the narrow stairs that led to the flat above—her flat, still, or his waiting—he stopped. The limp forced the pause into something ceremonial. “I never told you why Prague went sideways,” he said. “Not the sanitary version. The true one has a name, a midnight, and a decision I still taste when the rain comes.” She waited, one hand on the newel post, the scar a pale comma in the half light. “I chose the mission over the man. The asset was dirty. I knew it by the stare and the sweat and the way he kept calling me by the wrong cryptonym. Protocol was clean extraction. I pushed for the intel than the life. He did not survive the hour. The job went dead. My knee answered for the rest.” His fingers closed around the bannister for balance that was more than physical. “I told myself that was operational. Operatives learn early that some names get spent. What I never ate is that I became the kind of man who can spend them. When you left without word I thought the Nest would bankrupt me of people the same way. Instead it just bankrupted me of evenings.” Rory’s breath snagged. She saw him whole then—not the barman, not the limp, not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette that had once moved like certainty through layered cities. The regret on him was not loud; it was sedimented, dense as old maps. “I left because I was ashamed of bleeding the same way twice,” she said. “Evan was not a mission I failed. He was the proof I could still choose poorly with my eyes open. I thought if I disappeared hard enough the choosing would stop following.” She took one step up, then stopped, turned. “It didn’t. It just changed shoes. Delivery kicks. Quieter shame.” He nodded as if she had recited something he already mapped. “Stay tonight. Morning is coming whether we negotiate terms or not. There’s eggs. The parsley’s still trying. And if the rain keeps up I can tell you the rest of Prague—the part that still weakens the knee more than weather ever will.” The offer hung there, imperfect, unvarnished. Rory felt the weight of every unspoken year press against her spine and then, slowly, begin to lift like weather that finally chooses direction. She climbed the remaining stairs without answering, but at the landing she looked back. Silas Blackwood still stood at the bottom, limp and signet and all the quiet authority of a man who had stopped running yet remained on the board. The green neon outside still sometimes haunted the walls even powered down—muscle memory of light. She called down, voice soft enough that the empty bar almost refused to carry it. “The eggs. Sunset scramble way?” His answer rose with the faintest lift of wry age. “As if there was ever another.” The door to the flat still opened to the same key he had never changed. Inside, the air waited, faintly green from the sill, thick with the dust of pages that had outlived one version of her. Rory set her delivery bag down by the door and did not unpack the empty cartons. Somewhere below, bottles clinked as he finished the night’s confession to the wood. She turned on no light. The rain against the window was no longer interrogative. It was simply rain—the honest kind that falls on whoever is left standing when the maps are finally folded.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His fingers closed around [around]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.45
leniency0.9
rawRatio0.037
effectiveRatio0.033
94.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2545
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2545
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"measured"
4"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences151
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen72
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2533
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount1526
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.66
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Carter1
Cardiff1
Silas8
Blackwood3
Rory10
Quieter1
Evan1
Eva1
Tube1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Silas"
4"Blackwood"
5"Rory"
6"Evan"
7"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
45.83% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like cinema, that Silas Blackwood"
1"looked like a man always expecting a knoc"
2"looked like days that had already been de"
3"felt like years she could almost step a"
81.56% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.184
wordCount2533
matches
0"not the barman, not the limp, not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette"
1"not the limp, not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette"
2"not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences151
matches
0"tasted that observation"
1"arguing that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean47.79
std31.23
cv0.653
sampleLengths
097
15
269
37
464
523
613
738
869
917
1027
1141
1211
1338
1458
1546
1631
1713
1823
1943
2040
21133
226
2366
2459
2542
26100
2715
283
2939
3068
3184
3260
3324
3474
3519
3677
3782
3810
3928
4047
4170
4270
4359
4417
45126
4644
4764
4853
4986
99.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"been decided"
1"was sedimented"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs254
matches
0"were searching"
1"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences151
ratio0.079
matches
0"She crossed the floor—scarred boards she used to know by heart—and slid onto the stool she had always claimed, third from the left, where the grain of the oak reached out like a handprint."
1"Rory’s shoulders took it without flinching; she had practiced that."
2"Rory remembered nights when the bar had been a front for something sharper—men with wet coats and no names, maps spread on the table in the hidden room behind the bookshelf that no one else ever noticed."
3"“Before you left. After the leg stopped answering properly and the Service offered a desk and a pension and a rehearsed smile. Wanted to tell you the story straight, not the official version. Thought if I got the telling right you wouldn’t look at me the way the others did—like the limp was contagious.” He flexed the fingers of his right hand; the ring turned once."
4"The jazz started again—someone returning the arm to the vinyl’s first scar."
5"She opened her eyes and found him still watching, the hazel catching light the way a sniper’s scope did—not aimed, simply precise."
6"The conversation drifted after that into smaller things—the price of decent tonic, the new landlord three doors down who looked like a man always expecting a knock, the parsley plant’s second chance growth."
7"At the foot of the narrow stairs that led to the flat above—her flat, still, or his waiting—he stopped."
8"She saw him whole then—not the barman, not the limp, not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette that had once moved like certainty through layered cities."
9"The regret on him was not loud; it was sedimented, dense as old maps."
10"The green neon outside still sometimes haunted the walls even powered down—muscle memory of light."
11"It was simply rain—the honest kind that falls on whoever is left standing when the maps are finally folded."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1258
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"-ests—oldest operative, deepest cover,"
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.0397456279809221
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006359300476947536
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences151
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences151
mean16.77
std12.57
cv0.749
sampleLengths
030
129
22
336
45
510
614
719
826
93
104
1127
1215
137
1415
1518
165
178
185
1914
2015
219
226
2334
248
2517
264
2717
2823
294
3020
3121
324
337
349
3510
3615
374
3822
3936
408
4122
4216
4314
4417
455
468
4710
4813
497
57.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.3509933774834437
totalSentences151
uniqueOpeners53
91.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences109
matches
0"Instead she had followed Evan"
1"Somewhere a siren tried on"
2"Somewhere below, bottles clinked as"
ratio0.028
54.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences109
matches
0"She pushed the door open."
1"He looked up."
2"he said at last, voice"
3"She let the door swing"
4"He shifted his weight, the"
5"She crossed the floor—scarred boards"
6"His own stayed empty."
7"she said after a swallow"
8"He rested both palms on"
9"She turned the glass, watching"
10"She met his eyes then,"
11"He picked up another glass"
12"She hadn’t known he had"
13"He set the glass down"
14"She rolled the tumbler between"
15"She had been twenty then,"
16"He had taught her to"
17"She had thought she would"
18"He poured a measure for"
19"She tasted that observation, let"
ratio0.413
37.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences109
matches
0"The green neon sign of"
1"Aurora Carter paused beneath it"
2"The last time she had"
3"She pushed the door open."
4"The place exhaled the same"
5"Maps yellowed on the walls,"
6"A single lamp over the"
7"He looked up."
8"The glass stopped turning."
9"Hazel eyes caught the light"
10"The silver signet ring on"
11"The low jazz record crackled"
12"he said at last, voice"
13"She let the door swing"
14"A ghost of a smile"
15"He shifted his weight, the"
16"She crossed the floor—scarred boards"
17"The leather of the seat"
18"Silas poured two fingers of"
19"His own stayed empty."
ratio0.844
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"A single lamp over the bar threw long amber shadows that made the empty stools look like jagged teeth."
1"And there, wiping a glass with the slow economy of a man who had once done far more delicate work with his hands, stood Silas Blackwood."
2"The low jazz record crackled as if it too were searching for the right key."
3"She saw him whole then—not the barman, not the limp, not the grey-streaked beard, but the younger silhouette that had once moved like certainty through layered …"
4"Silas Blackwood still stood at the bottom, limp and signet and all the quiet authority of a man who had stopped running yet remained on the board."
5"Inside, the air waited, faintly green from the sill, thick with the dust of pages that had outlived one version of her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.7651%