Run: 2026-07-08-01KX1M0WQE6632C828YHFPEJ12

Run Details

Duration:
1m 16s
Cost:
$0.021318
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign hummed its familiar thrush against the Soho evening, a sickly emerald pulse that had once meant safety and now felt like an accusation. Aurora Carter paused beneath it longer than she meant to, weight shifting from one boot to the other, the crescent scar on her left wrist catching a thin light as she flexed her fingers. Five years. She had told herself the number so often it had lost shape, become simply a distance walked away and never measured back. She pushed the door. The Raven’s Nest exhaled its usual breath of old wood, citrus polish, and the faint metallic undercurrent of something older still—oil on leather, gun cleaner long washed from hands but never quite from memory. Dim lamps spilled hieroglyphs of gold across floors polished by decades of shoes. Maps yellowed under glass traced cities she had only dreamt of then. Black-and-white photographs hung like held breath: curved alleys in Prague, a tunnel mouth in Istanbul, faces half-turned from the camera. Nothing had moved. That was the first betrayal. Behind the bar, a man straightened with the careful economy of a knee that remembered winter too well. Grey streaked through the auburn of his hair and the neat beard that framed a mouth set for habit rather than surprise. Hazel eyes lifted, sharpened, narrowed. For a heartbeat the years compressed into the length of a gunshot’s echo. “Rory,” Silas said. Not a question. The name landed soft and final, the way a vault door shuts. She stopped three paces short of the mahogany counter. Her own reflection cherry-picked from the mirror behind the bottles: shoulder-length black hair pulled into a careless knot, the bright blue eyes she had learned to keep shuttered. Twenty-five now. She looked older. She looked like someone who had run farther than the distance between Cardiff and London. “Silas.” Her voice came out level. Cool-headed. The practiced thing. “Still pouring for the ghosts?” One corner of his mouth twitched—almost a smile, almost not. He wiped a glass that did not need wiping, the silver signet ring catching once on his right hand. Continuity. When he moved around the bar the limp announced itself: a slight hitch in the left leg, the old Prague injury turning each step into a measured negotiation. Time had written it deeper. He was fifty-eight and looked every night of it. “They tip well enough,” he said. “Sit. Or hover. I never could stop you from choosing the harder way.” She claimed a stool. The leather sighed under her. Familiar grooves had deepened; the bar itself seemed to have settled lower into its foundations. Two drinkers nursed pints at the far end, speaking low of football and dead grandparents. Ordinary night. Ordinary lies. Silas set a glass of whisky in front of her without asking. Glenmorangie. The first drink he’d ever poured her when she was twenty and still flinching at shadows. She wrapped both hands around it and did not drink. “I heard you left,” he said eventually. Quiet. No need to raise deathbed volume yet. “Heard you walked out after the thing with the girl from accounting. Eva, was it? Then nothing. Smoke.” “I left.” The words scratched. Eva had pulled her clear of Cardiff and Evan’s fists, set her down in a flat above this very bar, paid three months’ rent while Rory learned which tunnels of London did not still reek of the man who had called her darling while documenting the bruises. For a year she had run deliveries for Yu-Fei’s Golden Empress by day and nursed espresso chasers here by night. Silas had taught her how to spot a watcher in a crowd, how to leave a message that looked like laundry, how the world actually balanced its scales when the courts failed. Mentor and landlord, confessor and cage. Then she had packed one bag and disappeared into the grey of Europe, chasing a version of herself who did not keep waking up tasting copper. He waited. The silence grew teeth. She watched him catalogue the differences: the new hard line of her jaw, the way her shoulders held readiness instead of apology, the faded scar on her wrist that she no longer hid under a sleeve. Childhood accident, she’d told everyone. A half-truth layered over worse ones. She wondered what he saw in reverse—what four or five years of running a front for old poems written in blood had done to the man who used to talk about Prague as if the city still owed him an apology. “You look different,” he said at last. Hazels raked her face. “Harder around the edges. Still the same blue, though. Still that look that means you’re three chess moves ahead and none of them kind.” “You look old,” she answered, and instantly regretted the bluntness. “I mean—more grey. More limp.” “Catching up to the rest of me, the leg is.” He tapped two fingers against the wood, a private rhythm. “Prague never forgets a bill. I limp; you vanish. We’re even in our damage, I suppose.” A laugh escaped her, small and splintered. “Even. Christ.” She finally lifted the glass. The whisky burned down the centre of her chest like a long-held secret deciding to speak. “I came back because I needed money. Flat upstairs still mine?” “Key’s under the third step’s overhang. Same place. Dusty, but the mice moved out in protest when the rent stopped arriving. I kept the lease in your name. Sentiment. Or stupidity. Same vintage.” The admission sat between them heavier than the bottles. She had expected eviction papers, fury, the bar already converted into some artisan cocktail clinic that charged eleven pounds for a spritz. Instead he had left a room above the Nest like a prayer candle that never quite went out. Unspoken regret thickened the air—his for failing to keep her here safely, hers for walking away without a note. “Why keep it?” she asked, studying the maps. One still showed the Danube in careful pen. “You could have let the place. Or used it for your… friends.” The network that walked through the bookshelves into a back room thick with cigarette ghosts and half-truths. Silas poured himself two fingers of something darker. The limp folded him onto the stool opposite, elbows on the bar like a man settling into a foxhole. “Because you were always going to come back or die trying. I prefer the first outcome. And the network—” He turned the signet once around his finger. “Quieter now. I own a bar. I pour drinks. I listen to men pretend they never wet themselves halfway through a black-bag job. The heroic days are the ones people write about after the lights go out. What remains is residual heat.” She heard the loneliness edged under the swagger. Here was the change she had refused to imagine: the Spymaster sanded down into the barkeep, retired by a knee and by the knowledge that each new operation risked a younger face that reminded him of faces already buried. The weight of time made itself known in the way he cradled the glass—careful, as though bones had become porcelain. “I left because staying meant becoming someone else’s problem again,” Rory said. The confession dragged. “After Evan. After the delivery runs and the nights you taught me tradecraft like it was a language I already half-spoke. I kept waiting for the other shoe. For you to ask me to do a job I couldn’t refuse. For Eva to need bailing. For the man I used to be with to find the address. Running was cleaner. On paper.” “Cleaner for whom?” No accusation. Just the razor of curiosity that had once cut open dossiers. “You took the darker streets on purpose. Heard whispers. Someone matching your description floating through Amsterdam, Lisbon. Always one step ahead of something that smelled faintly of consulates and missing money. The girl who fled an abusive solicitor became… what, Rory? A courier? A fixer? Still cold-headed enough to keep the blood off your own hands?” She flinched. The innocent phrase—cold-headed—mapped too cleanly onto the times she had chosen silence over warning. “I became someone who doesn’t leave a paper trail back to the people who still have something left to lose. That includes you.” Her voice thinned. “Including this place. The maps stay on walls instead of evidence bags.” Silas held her gaze until the years peeled. He saw the child of the barrister and the teacher, Pre-Law abandoned mid-stream, the young woman who arrived burgundy-eyed and furious in the Nest and re-learned her own name under green neon. He saw the version who sat now, freer and more bound simultaneously: free of Evan, free of the expected path, free of the easy checklist of career and marriage; bound to every choice that had made her surface look polished and her interior full of unmarked graves. Regret lived in the gap between those two women. “I never asked you to run the dark,” he said. Soft now. Almost tender, almost furious. “I taught you how not to die if the dark found you first. Difference.” “Is it?” The bar hummed under her palms. “You walked out of Prague with a knee full of shrapnel and a network of ghosts. You opened this place like a war-wound dressed as a business. You never stopped. You just changed uniforms. And I—I took the lesson and ran farther than you ever intended.” She drained the glass. Heat bloomed behind her eyes but no liquid shame followed. “We both keep counting the people we failed to save. I just got better at leaving the tally sheets unsigned.” A long silence stretched. One of the distant drinkers laughed too loud at a private joke; the door sighed open, admitted two tower-of-London tourists, sighed shut again. Life continued its accounting outside the circle of their talk. Silas refilled her glass without ceremony. His hand brushed her wrist—light, deliberate—tracing the small crescent scar with a thumb that paused, remembered, withdrew. Skin on skin carried the entire weight of seconds that had stacked into years of absence. “Stay the night,” he said finally. “Longer if you like. The flat’s empty. The Nest still makes an honest enough living that I can float another mouth. Work the day shifts for Yu-Fei again if you need the cover, the tips. Or don’t. Just sit where I can see the blue of those eyes against the damned neon and remember that not every operative winds up in a drawer with a number.” She should have said no. Should have finished the drink, dropped cash that still felt unclean, walked into the Soho throng and become vapour again. The version of her that had grown hard and competent in foreign cities knew better events languish. But the weight of time pressed from the other direction now—the ache of what might have been solid if she had chosen roots over flight, if he had stopped letting his limp and his ring become excuses to remain half-retired and lonely. Unspoken regret filled the space between request and answer like fog: all the birthdays never marked, the quiet nights spent pouring for strangers while wondering whether the other still breathed, the simple ordinary conversations about football and weather that could have stacked into something resembling a life. Rory turned the empty glass once, twice. The maps on the wall watched with patient cartographic eyes. She thought of Eva, of Brendan Carter’s disappointed letters that had stopped arriving two years prior, of Jennifer Ellis Carter’s Christmas cards still addressed to a Cardiff postal box that no longer existed. She thought of Evan’s last voicemail, deleted unplayed. She thought of the secret room behind the bookshelf and the meetings that still, occasionally, made Silas’s limp less of a memory and more of a present tense alert. “One night,” she said, the syllables measured, already tasting the inevitable expansion of the bargain. “I need sleep that isn’t crammed into a train station. Tomorrow we talk about what’s left that still looks like wrong and how not to become it.” Silas nodded once. A soldier’s acceptance of temporary billeting. The signet flashed as he lifted his glass in a toast that needed no words. Across the scarred bar their reflections doubled: grey-streaked auburn against black hair, hazel against bright blue, the space between them confettied with everything unsaid and still loud. Outside the green neon continued its stubborn thrum against the London night. Inside, the Nest settled deeper into its foundations, carrying two people who had known each other when the world was younger and who now sat opposite the result of every compromise since. Time had changed the angle of her jaw and the slow cadence of his step; it had not erased the pulsing knowledge that some debts collect interest in silence, and that some silences, once broken, let every regret walk fully clothed into the room and take a seat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said eventually [eventually]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
97.70% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2176
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2176
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"weight"
count4
3
word"measured"
count3
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"silence"
count4
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count2
9
word"porcelain"
count1
10
word"tracing"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"pulse"
2"weight"
3"measured"
4"traced"
5"echo"
6"silence"
7"charged"
8"unspoken"
9"porcelain"
10"tracing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences120
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2164
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1554
uniqueNames28
maxNameDensity0.51
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Carter"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Carter3
Raven1
Nest4
Prague3
Istanbul1
Cardiff3
London3
Cool-headed1
Quiet1
Eva2
Evan3
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Europe1
Hazels1
One3
Danube1
Silas8
Spymaster1
Pre-Law1
Soft1
Heat1
Brendan1
Jennifer1
Ellis1
Christmas1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"Hazels"
7"Silas"
8"Spymaster"
9"Heat"
10"Brendan"
11"Jennifer"
12"Ellis"
13"Christmas"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"Istanbul"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Europe"
6"Danube"
globalScore1
windowScore1
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like an accusation"
1"looked like someone who had run farther t"
2"looked like laundry, how the world actual"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2164
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
97.93% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean61.83
std30.47
cv0.493
sampleLengths
085
191
258
318
457
515
672
719
843
939
1033
11136
1294
1335
1415
1536
1641
1733
1868
1945
2096
2167
2277
2372
2454
2596
2630
2788
2876
2972
30131
3187
3242
3351
3492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs257
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences136
ratio0.096
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest exhaled its usual breath of old wood, citrus polish, and the faint metallic undercurrent of something older still—oil on leather, gun cleaner long washed from hands but never quite from memory."
1"One corner of his mouth twitched—almost a smile, almost not."
2"Familiar grooves had deepened; the bar itself seemed to have settled lower into its foundations."
3"She wondered what he saw in reverse—what four or five years of running a front for old poems written in blood had done to the man who used to talk about Prague as if the city still owed him an apology."
4"“Prague never forgets a bill. I limp; you vanish. We’re even in our damage, I suppose.”"
5"Unspoken regret thickened the air—his for failing to keep her here safely, hers for walking away without a note."
6"The weight of time made itself known in the way he cradled the glass—careful, as though bones had become porcelain."
7"The innocent phrase—cold-headed—mapped too cleanly onto the times she had chosen silence over warning."
8"He saw the version who sat now, freer and more bound simultaneously: free of Evan, free of the expected path, free of the easy checklist of career and marriage; bound to every choice that had made her surface look polished and her interior full of unmarked graves."
9"One of the distant drinkers laughed too loud at a private joke; the door sighed open, admitted two tower-of-London tourists, sighed shut again."
10"His hand brushed her wrist—light, deliberate—tracing the small crescent scar with a thumb that paused, remembered, withdrew."
11"But the weight of time pressed from the other direction now—the ache of what might have been solid if she had chosen roots over flight, if he had stopped letting his limp and his ring become excuses to remain half-retired and lonely."
12"Time had changed the angle of her jaw and the slow cadence of his step; it had not erased the pulsing knowledge that some debts collect interest in silence, and that some silences, once broken, let every regret walk fully clothed into the room and take a seat."
94.99% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1006
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.04572564612326044
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005964214711729622
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean15.91
std13.73
cv0.863
sampleLengths
027
134
22
322
44
534
613
712
820
93
105
1118
1222
135
1413
153
163
1712
189
1928
202
213
2215
236
241
253
265
2710
2819
291
3028
315
329
336
3413
354
365
3715
3815
392
402
4112
421
4316
4410
457
461
477
4818
495
85.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5367647058823529
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners73
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then she had packed one"
1"Instead he had left a"
2"Just the razor of curiosity"
3"Almost tender, almost furious."
ratio0.038
93.08% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences104
matches
0"She had told herself the"
1"She pushed the door."
2"She stopped three paces short"
3"Her own reflection cherry-picked from"
4"She looked older."
5"She looked like someone who"
6"Her voice came out level"
7"He wiped a glass that"
8"He was fifty-eight and looked"
9"She claimed a stool."
10"She wrapped both hands around"
11"he said eventually"
12"She watched him catalogue the"
13"She wondered what he saw"
14"he said at last"
15"she answered, and instantly regretted"
16"He tapped two fingers against"
17"She finally lifted the glass"
18"She had expected eviction papers,"
19"she asked, studying the maps"
ratio0.317
80.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences104
matches
0"The green neon sign hummed"
1"Aurora Carter paused beneath it"
2"She had told herself the"
3"She pushed the door."
4"The Raven’s Nest exhaled its"
5"Maps yellowed under glass traced"
6"Nothing had moved."
7"That was the first betrayal."
8"Hazel eyes lifted, sharpened, narrowed."
9"The name landed soft and"
10"She stopped three paces short"
11"Her own reflection cherry-picked from"
12"She looked older."
13"She looked like someone who"
14"Her voice came out level"
15"The practiced thing."
16"He wiped a glass that"
17"Time had written it deeper."
18"He was fifty-eight and looked"
19"She claimed a stool."
ratio0.76
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
12.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The green neon sign hummed its familiar thrush against the Soho evening, a sickly emerald pulse that had once meant safety and now felt like an accusation."
1"He wiped a glass that did not need wiping, the silver signet ring catching once on his right hand."
2"Then she had packed one bag and disappeared into the grey of Europe, chasing a version of herself who did not keep waking up tasting copper."
3"Here was the change she had refused to imagine: the Spymaster sanded down into the barkeep, retired by a knee and by the knowledge that each new operation riske…"
4"He saw the child of the barrister and the teacher, Pre-Law abandoned mid-stream, the young woman who arrived burgundy-eyed and furious in the Nest and re-learne…"
5"He saw the version who sat now, freer and more bound simultaneously: free of Evan, free of the expected path, free of the easy checklist of career and marriage;…"
6"His hand brushed her wrist—light, deliberate—tracing the small crescent scar with a thumb that paused, remembered, withdrew."
7"The version of her that had grown hard and competent in foreign cities knew better events languish."
8"She thought of Eva, of Brendan Carter’s disappointed letters that had stopped arriving two years prior, of Jennifer Ellis Carter’s Christmas cards still address…"
9"Inside, the Nest settled deeper into its foundations, carrying two people who had known each other when the world was younger and who now sat opposite the resul…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.278
leniency0.556
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.1719%