Run: 2026-07-08-01KX1MMCGG9NZ6FXCDXB51ZZM5

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Duration:
1m 55s
Cost:
$0.039858
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The man's jacket snagged on the railing as he swung over it. Harlow Quinn cleared the barrier a heartbeat later, palm scraping cold wet metal. Her boots slammed the landing. She drove forward without check, knees loose, spine straight. Water sprayed from every puddle under her stride. Up ahead the figure cut sharp left, short curly hair plastered dark against his skull. The pale flash of a scar ran his left forearm where the sleeve rode high. A silver disc bounced at his throat. "Met Police! Stop!" He ignored the order and broke onto Frith Street. Harlow matched pace, controlled breaths pulling raw air. The worn leather strap of her watch chafed her left wrist with every pump of her arm. Military precision kept the rhythm even when the street pitched downhill. He took Wardour at a sprint. She followed, boots hammering tarmac that shone black under the lamps. Late pedestrians scattered. One dropped a carrier bag; oranges bounced and rolled. Harlow vaulted the lot without breaking form. The distinctive green neon of The Raven's Nest flared on her right as she tore past. Through rain-streaked glass she caught the interior in a smear of colour: walls crowded with yellowed maps and black-and-white photographs of faces long gone. Stale hops and something sharper ghosted on the air from the open door. A low murmur of voices spilled out then vanished behind her. The bar and its hidden back room held no interest tonight. The man ahead did. He threaded a gap between two parked taxis. Tyres screeched. A cabbie swore through an open window. Harlow slipped the same gap a second later, coat-tail whipping. Her salt-and-pepper crop dripped steadily into her eyes; she dashed the water away with a sleeve and kept the suspect in sight. Oxford Street hit them with a sudden wash of light and delayed shoppers under black umbrellas. He swerved through the flow like smoke. She followed, shoulder-checking a man with a briefcase who cursed her in three languages. The wet wool of coats slapped her arms. Exhaust fumes and frying onions mingled with the copper tang of rain-soaked pavement. He vaulted a low barrier into a service alley. Harlow cleared it in the same motion, landing over a scatter of broken crates. A ginger cat shot from under a skip, yowling as it fled. The alley walls closed in, brick slick and black with moss. Her torch came free of its belt loop in one fluid motion; the beam snapped on and bounced ahead off wet stone. The suspect risked a glance back. Warm brown eyes briefly met hers. Then he was gone, out the far end and across Gower Street against the lights. A van horn blared. Harlow timed the gap and crossed in the van's wake, spray from the tyres drenching her thighs. Tottenham Court Road bled into quieter side streets lined with shuttered greengrocers and boarded cafés. Condensation beaded the café windows; inside empty chairs waited like patient ghosts. The smell of yesterday's coffee still clung to doorways. Harlow's lungs burned but the pace never faltered. The medallion at his throat caught another streetlamp and winked silver. He cut through a red-brick mews. Dustbins rattled as he brushed them. She closed the distance half a stride, close enough to hear the hard pull of his breath. Close enough to spot the Saint Christopher spinning on its chain. Then he hit a chain-link fence, scrambled over using that scarred forearm for grip, and dropped into the next street with a grunt. Harlow took the fence cleaner, boots finding the top rail in one swing, body arcing over. She landed already running. Camden's edges rose around them: graffiti-scrawled walls, low railway arches dripping into gutters, the faint oily reek of the canal somewhere to the west. He slowed only once, bending at a grated entrance half-hidden between two boarded shopfronts. Iron bars stood ajar. Rotted posters of forgotten bands peeled from the concrete around the mouth of the abandoned station. Steps dropped into black. The man produced a small white disc from his pocket, bone-smooth and engraved, and pressed it to a shallow carving on the brick. The gate swung wider with a soft grind. He vanished downward. Harlow reached the threshold three seconds later. Water poured from her coat hem onto the first step. The air that rose carried damp, mould, and a metallic underbite like old blood. Distant lantern-glow flickered far below, accompanied by the clink of glassware and a low murmur of many voices. Unfamiliar territory. Deep, sealing, full of whatever trade the man served. She keyed the radio at her collar. Static answered, thick and broken. "Control, Quinn. Pursuit entered abandoned Camden Tube station. Going in." Nothing but white noise sizzled back. The worn leather of the watch pressed cool against her pulse as she checked the Glock's seating one-handed. Torch beam swept the descent. Slimy walls glistened. A single boot print of the suspect already darkened the next landing. She drew a final breath of street air, squared her shoulders, and took the steps two at a time. Halfway down the gate above slammed shut of its own accord. Dust rained from the ceiling. The boom sealed the surface world away behind stone and iron. The lower platform opened like a throat of light. Stalls spilt across the old tracks and platforms under tarps and hanging oil lamps. Flasks of amber liquid bubbled on one trestle, labels marked in scripts that wheeled when she looked too long. Cages of varying sizes rattled with unseen weight. A vendor with a scarf drawn high sold envelopes of powder that glowed faint green. Further on, a crone whispered prices to a client whose shadow moved a half-second out of step with his body. The whole place smelled of ozone, crushed herbs, and hot metal. Tomás Herrera stood three stalls in, olive skin sheened with rain and effort. The Saint Christopher rested against his collarbone. He straightened from a low conversation with a woman counting out black feathers. Their eyes locked. He turned full toward Harlow, right hand rising from a medical satchel at his hip. A steel needle caught the lamplight and threw a thin bright spear across the concrete. Around them the market's chatter died in a single wave. Every face rotated. Cages went still. The lamps dimmed as one. Behind Tomás the shadows along the far tunnel mouth lengthened, thickened, then rose on limbs that bent the wrong number of times.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1081
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.12% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1081
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences98
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1081
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1068
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Frith1
Street3
Wardour1
Raven1
Nest1
Gower1
Court1
Road1
Saint2
Christopher2
Glock1
Herrera1
Harlow10
Tomás2
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
5"Glock"
6"Herrera"
7"Harlow"
8"Tomás"
places
0"Frith"
1"Street"
2"Gower"
3"Court"
4"Road"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1081
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean41.58
std24.75
cv0.595
sampleLengths
039
145
23
345
436
579
649
758
868
948
1055
1163
1244
1361
1411
1560
167
175
1810
196
2057
2127
2296
2366
2421
2522
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs175
matches(empty)
28.57% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences100
ratio0.04
matches
0"One dropped a carrier bag; oranges bounced and rolled."
1"Her salt-and-pepper crop dripped steadily into her eyes; she dashed the water away with a sleeve and kept the suspect in sight."
2"Her torch came free of its belt loop in one fluid motion; the beam snapped on and bounced ahead off wet stone."
3"Condensation beaded the café windows; inside empty chairs waited like patient ghosts."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1084
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sharp left, short curly hair"
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.023985239852398525
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004612546125461255
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean10.81
std5.54
cv0.513
sampleLengths
012
113
25
39
48
515
615
77
83
99
108
1117
1211
136
1411
153
169
177
1816
1924
2013
2111
2211
234
248
252
267
2710
2822
2916
307
3114
328
3313
349
3514
3612
3711
3822
396
406
4115
424
4317
4415
4512
469
478
4811
496
73.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.46
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences96
matches
0"Then he was gone, out"
1"Then he hit a chain-link"
2"Further on, a crone whispered"
ratio0.031
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences96
matches
0"Her boots slammed the landing."
1"She drove forward without check,"
2"He ignored the order and"
3"He took Wardour at a"
4"She followed, boots hammering tarmac"
5"He threaded a gap between"
6"Her salt-and-pepper crop dripped steadily"
7"He swerved through the flow"
8"She followed, shoulder-checking a man"
9"He vaulted a low barrier"
10"Her torch came free of"
11"He cut through a red-brick"
12"She closed the distance half"
13"She landed already running."
14"He slowed only once, bending"
15"He vanished downward."
16"She keyed the radio at"
17"She drew a final breath"
18"He straightened from a low"
19"Their eyes locked."
ratio0.219
69.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences96
matches
0"The man's jacket snagged on"
1"Harlow Quinn cleared the barrier"
2"Her boots slammed the landing."
3"She drove forward without check,"
4"Water sprayed from every puddle"
5"The pale flash of a"
6"A silver disc bounced at"
7"He ignored the order and"
8"Harlow matched pace, controlled breaths"
9"The worn leather strap of"
10"Military precision kept the rhythm"
11"He took Wardour at a"
12"She followed, boots hammering tarmac"
13"Harlow vaulted the lot without"
14"The distinctive green neon of"
15"A low murmur of voices"
16"The bar and its hidden"
17"The man ahead did."
18"He threaded a gap between"
19"A cabbie swore through an"
ratio0.781
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She followed, boots hammering tarmac that shone black under the lamps."
1"She followed, shoulder-checking a man with a briefcase who cursed her in three languages."
2"Then he hit a chain-link fence, scrambled over using that scarred forearm for grip, and dropped into the next street with a grunt."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
91.7246%