Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40GMX9VNPN9P8565C2FHFC

Run Details

Duration:
58.2s
Cost:
$0.091040
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last delivery had taken Rory to a house on the edge of Richmond Park, though calling it a house was generous. It was a slab of smoked glass behind iron gates, every room lit and empty-looking, as if somebody had built a showroom and then forgotten to put people in it. The woman who answered had not ordered anything. She stood barefoot on the pale stone threshold, holding the Golden Empress receipt beneath the porch light. Her eyes moved from the name to Rory’s face and stayed there too long. “No,” she said. “There’s no Isolde here.” Rory had checked the address twice before leaving the restaurant. She checked it again while the woman watched. “This is the postcode.” “It’s the right postcode.” The woman handed back the receipt without touching Rory’s fingers. “But that name belongs farther in.” “Farther into what?” The woman looked past her, toward the park. Then she closed the door. That should have been the end of it. Rory had dealt with wrong addresses, prank orders, and customers too drunk to remember ordering six portions of dumplings. She should have carried the food back to her scooter, rung Yu-Fei, and called it a night. Instead, beneath her coat, the pendant had grown warm. It lay against her breastbone, a thumbnail of deep crimson stone on a silver chain. Its faint inner glow showed through the weave of her jumper when she cupped a hand over it. Until then, the Heartstone had been little more than an unanswered question given physical weight. An unknown benefactor, an artifact from somewhere called Dymas, and vague warnings about portals to Hel were not facts Rory enjoyed arranging into a coherent worldview. The warmth had made the decision for her. Now, twenty minutes later, she stood alone between black trees with a cooling delivery bag in one hand and her phone in the other, wondering whether stubbornness was simply stupidity with better posture. The path had vanished behind her. Not gradually. One moment she had been following a pale ribbon of dirt through winter grass; the next she looked back and found only bracken, thorn, and the close-packed trunks of ancient oaks. Her phone showed no signal. The map app placed her blue location dot in the Thames. “Brilliant,” she murmured. Her own voice seemed to travel too far. It slipped between the trees and came back thinly from several directions. Brilliant. Brill— —iant. Rory stopped breathing. The echoes faded. Nothing followed them. She lowered the phone and listened. Richmond Park at night should not have been silent. There should have been traffic beyond the walls, aircraft grinding toward Heathrow, foxes barking, deer moving through the undergrowth. Instead, the dark pressed close and soundless, dense as felt. The pendant gave one soft pulse of heat. Ahead, between two trunks, a white flower nodded. There was no wind. Rory approached it cautiously. The bloom resembled an anemone, though its petals were broader, waxy and luminous in the phone’s torch. Around it, pushing through dead leaves silvered with frost, grew bluebells, red campion, foxgloves and tiny yellow stars she could not name. Flowers from different seasons crowded together in profusion, all fresh, all open to the cold. The flower nearest her turned. Not bent. Turned. Its pale face angled toward her hand. Rory drew back. The other blossoms moved a moment later, hundreds of stems inclining with a soft, dry whisper. Toward her. She switched off the torch. Darkness swallowed them. For several seconds she saw nothing. Then the pendant’s crimson glow emerged beneath her coat, weak as an ember under ash. It painted her fingers red when she pulled it free. The warmth was stronger now. She remembered the receipt in her pocket. ISOLDE, it said in Yu-Fei’s blocky handwriting. NO MUSHROOMS. EAST GATE. CASH. The order itself was ordinary: chow mein, dumplings, steamed sea bass, two portions of rice. Too much food for one person, not enough for a party. The telephone number had rung out when Rory tried it at the locked park gate. Then the gate had opened on its own. A branch cracked behind her. Rory turned. Nothing stood among the trees. The delivery bag dragged at her shoulder, suddenly absurd. She unzipped it and took out the long kitchen knife Yu-Fei used for slicing roast duck. She had slipped it under the foil containers before leaving the restaurant, an impulse she had not bothered examining. The handle was greasy despite the cloth wrapped around it. “Isolde?” she called. Her voice did not echo this time. Something answered from far ahead. A woman, perhaps. One word, too blurred by distance to understand. Rory waited. The voice came again, closer. “Rory.” Cold tightened across her scalp. No one connected with the order knew that name. The receipt said A. Carter beneath the restaurant details. Yu-Fei called her Aurora when she was annoyed and Miss Carter when she was furious. Strangers saw the name on her delivery badge and chose Aurora, Carter, or nothing at all. “Who’s there?” The trees gave no answer. Then, behind her left shoulder, someone whispered, “Rory.” She spun, knife raised. A black shape slipped behind an oak. Human height. Human speed. Gone before her eyes found its edges. Rory backed away, keeping the knife forward. Her pulse hammered against the pendant. The stone answered with slow, measured warmth, a beat that did not match her own. One. Two. Pause. One. Two. Pause. Like a second heart listening from beneath her skin. She forced herself to think. Panic narrowed choices; Evan had taught her that much, though not on purpose. He had liked corners, doorframes, the cramped spaces beside furniture where there was no clean route past him. Rory had learned to look at knees, hands, exits. Not faces. Faces lied. There. To the right, the trees thinned. Beyond them lay a paler darkness, perhaps open ground. She moved toward it without turning her back on the oak. Something paced her on the other side of the trunks. She did not see it directly. A shoulder appeared at the edge of her vision, then vanished when she looked. A hand hung between two branches, fingers long and white, but proved to be strips of birch bark. Once she caught the shine of eyes at waist height. They blinked sideways and disappeared. The delivery bag knocked against her hip. From inside came a faint tap. Rory froze. Another tap. Then three quick knocks from beneath the zipped lid. She stared at the bag. Steam no longer rose through its seams. The fabric had gone damp and cold, the red nylon darkened as though soaked from within. Tap. Tap. The sound came from the bottom now. She set the bag down carefully and stepped away. The lid bulged upward. Not much. An inch, perhaps. Then it settled. Something slid along the inside with the deliberate pressure of a fingertip tracing the zip. Rory tightened her grip on the knife. The zipper pull began to move. Its metal teeth separated one by one. She kicked the bag. It struck a root, overturned, and burst open. Foil cartons tumbled across the leaves. Rice scattered in white clumps. A container split, releasing dark noodles that uncoiled in the red light. Nothing else emerged. Rory watched the food steam in the cold. No. Not steam. The grey wisps sank instead of rising. They poured over the cartons and curled along the ground, seeking hollows between roots. A dumpling rolled toward her boot. It stopped. From the trees came a wet intake of breath. All around her, something began to eat. The sounds were quiet at first: a lipless smacking, a scrape of teeth on foil, the soft suction of mouths closing over food. Yet nothing touched the cartons. Rice vanished grain by grain. Noodles lifted at one end and slid into the leaves. The whole fish shuddered inside its broken container as neat bites appeared along its flank. Rory did not wait to understand. She ran. Branches clawed at her coat. The phone torch bounced wildly, flashing trunks, flowers, patches of open dark. Behind her, the feeding stopped. For one dreadful second there was silence. Then the forest ran with her. Footsteps thudded on both sides, too many to count. Leaves churned beneath invisible weight. Something crashed through bracken close enough to shower her with icy droplets. A voice laughed breathlessly behind her, using Eva’s laugh. Another called her name in her father’s courtroom baritone. “Aurora.” “Rory, wait.” “Laila.” That name struck like a hand between her shoulders. She stumbled, caught herself against an oak, and felt the small crescent scar on her left wrist burn where bark scraped it. Nobody here should know that one. Nobody in London knew all of them. The pendant flared hot enough to sting. Crimson light leaked between her fingers and washed across the trunk. It was not a tree. For an instant she saw grey skin pulled taut over a tall, jointed shape. The ridged surface beneath her palm shifted like muscle. Far above, branches curled inward, hooked at their ends. A vertical seam opened in the trunk at eye level. Behind it gleamed rows of small, wet lights. Rory tore her hand away. The oak was an oak again, bark solid beneath the red glow. But every tree around her had turned slightly. Their branches angled toward the path ahead. Showing her the way, she thought. Or herding her. The footsteps had stopped. The thing using familiar voices spoke from directly behind her. “Don’t run.” It sounded like Rory. She ran. The trees fell away so abruptly she pitched onto her knees. The knife flew from her hand and landed among flowers. She had reached a clearing. Wildflowers covered it in thick, impossible colour: poppies, primroses, lavender, heather, white roses without thorns. Frost glittered between them. At the clearing’s boundary stood a ring of ancient oak stones—no, standing stones shaped like splintered trunks, their surfaces grooved and knotted as if wood had petrified in agony. The air inside the ring smelled of rain and something sweetly rotten. At its centre stood a woman in a white dress. Her back was to Rory. Long hair hung to her waist, pale enough to shine under the moon. She was barefoot among the flowers. Beside her sat a low table laid for two. Plates. Silverware. Two empty cups. “Isolde?” Rory said. The woman tilted her head. “You’re late.” Her voice held no accent Rory could place. It seemed to come from the standing stones as well as the figure, each word arriving in a faint chorus. Rory pushed herself upright. Blood beaded on one palm. “You ordered from the Golden Empress?” “I invited you.” The pendant throbbed with heat. Beyond the woman, the air wavered. Rory had mistaken it for a bank of shadow at first, but now she saw a vertical darkness between two stones, narrow as a door ajar. No moonlight touched it. No stars appeared through it. Something moved on the other side. Not closer. Vastly far away, and yet aware. The Heartstone’s glow strengthened until the flowers around Rory cast tiny red shadows. The woman turned. Her face was beautiful in the way a wax saint was beautiful: symmetrical, serene, and untouched by life. Her eyes were closed. Fine roots threaded beneath the translucent skin of her cheeks. “You brought the Heartstone,” she said. Rory bent slowly and retrieved the knife. The woman smiled. Her eyelids opened. There were no eyes beneath them. Only dark hollows crowded with the same small, wet lights Rory had glimpsed inside the tree. Behind Rory, footsteps entered the clearing. One set. Then another. Then dozens, placing themselves carefully among the flowers. She did not look back. “How long have I been here?” Rory asked. It was the only question that mattered enough to keep her voice steady. Isolde’s smile widened a fraction. “That depends where you mean.” In Rory’s pocket, her phone vibrated. The sound startled the whole clearing. Every flower snapped toward her. The footsteps halted. Isolde’s empty gaze dropped to Rory’s coat. The phone vibrated again. Signal, then. Perhaps a call. Perhaps an alarm. Perhaps days of missed messages arriving at once. Rory reached into her pocket without taking her eyes off Isolde. The screen showed 3:17 a.m. The date was six days later. A message appeared from Eva. POLICE FOUND YOUR SCOOTER. WHERE ARE YOU? Then another, sent five days ago. RORY PLEASE. The screen flickered. The date changed again. Three weeks. Four months. The battery indicator drained from eighty percent to one, then filled, then vanished. Photographs bloomed across the screen without her touching it: her flat above Silas’ bar covered in dust; Yu-Fei locking the Golden Empress; her mother older, weeping at a kitchen table in Cardiff; a headstone bearing AURORA JENNIFER CARTER. The final image showed the clearing. Rory stood in it with her back to the camera. Something tall leaned over her shoulder. The phone went black. Warm breath touched the nape of her neck. Rory kept her eyes on Isolde. She curled her bleeding palm around the Heartstone and felt its hard edge bite into the crescent scar at her wrist. The dark doorway between the stones widened. From within came a distant sound like iron dragged across frozen earth. Isolde extended one hand toward the table. “Sit,” she said. “Your food is getting cold.” Behind Rory, in her own voice, the thing whispered, “And we have been waiting so long.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The woman handed back [back]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.44
leniency0.88
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.08
84.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2255
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"cautiously"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"sweetly"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"cautiously"
1"suddenly"
2"carefully"
3"slightly"
4"sweetly"
5"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2255
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"echoes"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count4
10
word"churned"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"throbbed"
count1
13
word"wavered"
count1
14
word"vibrated"
count2
15
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"warmth"
2"echoes"
3"pulse"
4"whisper"
5"echo"
6"measured"
7"tracing"
8"silence"
9"footsteps"
10"churned"
11"familiar"
12"throbbed"
13"wavered"
14"vibrated"
15"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences279
matches
0"was furious"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences279
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences294
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2254
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount2154
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory36
Richmond2
Park2
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei4
Heartstone3
Dymas1
Hel1
Thames1
Heathrow1
Aurora2
Miss1
Carter3
Evan1
Eva2
London1
Isolde5
One5
Two3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Heartstone"
3"Miss"
4"Carter"
5"Evan"
6"Eva"
7"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Hel"
3"Thames"
4"Heathrow"
5"London"
6"One"
globalScore0.664
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences161
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2254
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences294
matches
0"knew that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs190
mean11.86
std13.76
cv1.16
sampleLengths
052
18
231
37
418
54
620
73
88
95
1044
119
1274
138
1433
156
1649
173
188
1912
201
211
221
233
246
256
2638
278
288
294
3058
315
323
337
3419
352
365
373
3831
395
407
4112
4241
438
445
452
465
4744
4810
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences279
matches
0"was annoyed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs364
matches(empty)
84.55% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences294
ratio0.02
matches
0"One moment she had been following a pale ribbon of dirt through winter grass; the next she looked back and found only bracken, thorn, and the close-packed trunks of ancient oaks."
1"Brill—"
2"—iant."
3"Panic narrowed choices; Evan had taught her that much, though not on purpose."
4"At the clearing’s boundary stood a ring of ancient oak stones—no, standing stones shaped like splintered trunks, their surfaces grooved and knotted as if wood had petrified in agony."
5"Photographs bloomed across the screen without her touching it: her flat above Silas’ bar covered in dust; Yu-Fei locking the Golden Empress; her mother older, weeping at a kitchen table in Cardiff; a headstone bearing AURORA JENNIFER CARTER."
93.09% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2071
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same small, wet lights"
adverbCount85
adverbRatio0.04104297440849831
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.009174311926605505
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences294
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences294
mean7.67
std6.01
cv0.784
sampleLengths
022
130
28
317
414
53
64
710
88
94
1014
116
123
138
145
158
1619
1717
189
1915
2018
2115
2226
238
2433
256
262
2731
285
2911
303
318
3212
331
341
351
363
373
383
396
409
4119
4210
438
448
454
464
4717
4822
4915
52.72% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3469387755102041
totalSentences294
uniqueOpeners102
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount18
totalSentences230
matches
0"Then she closed the door."
1"Instead, beneath her coat, the"
2"Instead, the dark pressed close"
3"Then the pendant’s crimson glow"
4"Too much food for one"
5"Then the gate had opened"
6"Then, behind her left shoulder,"
7"Once she caught the shine"
8"Then three quick knocks from"
9"Then it settled."
10"Then the forest ran with"
11"Vastly far away, and yet"
12"Only dark hollows crowded with"
13"Then dozens, placing themselves carefully"
14"Perhaps a call."
15"Perhaps an alarm."
16"Perhaps days of missed messages"
17"Then another, sent five days"
ratio0.078
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences230
matches
0"It was a slab of"
1"She stood barefoot on the"
2"Her eyes moved from the"
3"She checked it again while"
4"She should have carried the"
5"It lay against her breastbone,"
6"Its faint inner glow showed"
7"Her phone showed no signal."
8"Her own voice seemed to"
9"It slipped between the trees"
10"She lowered the phone and"
11"Its pale face angled toward"
12"She switched off the torch."
13"It painted her fingers red"
14"She remembered the receipt in"
15"She unzipped it and took"
16"She had slipped it under"
17"Her voice did not echo"
18"She spun, knife raised."
19"Her pulse hammered against the"
ratio0.2
90.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount170
totalSentences230
matches
0"The last delivery had taken"
1"It was a slab of"
2"The woman who answered had"
3"She stood barefoot on the"
4"Her eyes moved from the"
5"Rory had checked the address"
6"She checked it again while"
7"The woman handed back the"
8"The woman looked past her,"
9"That should have been the"
10"Rory had dealt with wrong"
11"She should have carried the"
12"It lay against her breastbone,"
13"Its faint inner glow showed"
14"An unknown benefactor, an artifact"
15"The warmth had made the"
16"The path had vanished behind"
17"Her phone showed no signal."
18"The map app placed her"
19"Her own voice seemed to"
ratio0.739
43.48% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences230
matches
0"Now, twenty minutes later, she"
1"To the right, the trees"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"It was a slab of smoked glass behind iron gates, every room lit and empty-looking, as if somebody had built a showroom and then forgotten to put people in it."
1"The fabric had gone damp and cold, the red nylon darkened as though soaked from within."
2"A container split, releasing dark noodles that uncoiled in the red light."
3"At the clearing’s boundary stood a ring of ancient oak stones—no, standing stones shaped like splintered trunks, their surfaces grooved and knotted as if wood h…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
70.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"the thing whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.32
leniency0.64
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.16
89.9622%