Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40KDBNBM0H085NVGECGJYZ

Run Details

Duration:
1m 5s
Cost:
$0.079915
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain had polished Soho black and shining by the time Rory came off the pavement with the last delivery bag cutting a red groove into her shoulder. The green neon raven above the door flickered in the wet, its hooked beak glowing and dying, glowing and dying. She stood beneath it for half a second longer than necessary, letting the rain tick cold against the crown of her head. Then she shouldered through the door into heat, amber light, and the familiar low murmur of the Nest. The place smelled of spilled stout, lemon rind, wet wool, and the faint old-paper scent of the maps that covered the walls. A football match played silently above the bar. Silas had turned the sound down to nothing, leaving only the flicker of men in bright shirts running through green space, their mouths open in perpetual, pointless shouting. Silas stood behind the bar, polishing a glass that had been clean when he picked it up. His grey-streaked auburn hair was tied neatly back at the nape. His beard caught the low light. He looked up as she came in, hazel eyes going first to her soaked jacket, then to the delivery bag, then to the puddle spreading around her boots. “Your mother would call that a chest infection waiting to happen,” he said. “My mother calls everything a chest infection waiting to happen.” “She taught school. Occupational hazard.” Rory lifted the bag from her shoulder and dropped it beside the bar with a sigh. “Last order to a bloke in a serviced apartment who said he’d forgotten his wallet after I’d climbed six flights of stairs.” “And?” “And he found it when I suggested I might eat his crispy beef in front of him.” Silas’s mouth moved at one corner. He reached beneath the counter and put a clean tea towel in front of her. “A diplomatic solution.” “I’m learning from the best.” “God help you.” She rubbed her hair dry as best she could, black strands sticking to her cheeks and neck. Her left wrist showed briefly beneath her sleeve, the small pale crescent there stark against rain-reddened skin. She had known this room for nearly two years: the cracked leather stools, the brass rail beneath the counter, the photograph of a woman in a feathered hat taped crookedly near the till. It had become familiar in the way a place did when it held no claim over her. A refuge, perhaps. Not home. She had learned to distrust that word. There were only four customers in. Two tourists hunched over pints near the window. An older man in a navy suit nursed whisky beneath a map of the Baltic. And at the far end of the bar, half turned away from her, someone sat alone with a drink untouched in front of him. At first Rory registered only a dark coat, too expensive for the Nest, and a hand around a tumbler. A man’s hand. Long fingers. A narrow silver band at the thumb. Then he glanced toward the entrance. The tea towel slipped from her fingers. He had been handsome once in a boyish, careless way. He had had curls that refused to lie flat and a face always on the edge of laughter, even when he was explaining something serious. He used to wear trainers scuffed white at the toes, and jumpers with holes at the cuffs, and he had never been able to keep a secret for more than a day. The man at the end of the bar had close-cut hair, dark blond gone nearly brown in the dimness. His jaw was sharper. There was a thin white scar through one eyebrow. He wore a charcoal shirt under his coat, no tie, though the collar sat with the rigid precision of someone accustomed to ties. His mouth had settled into a line that did not know laughter. Still, his eyes were the same. Grey, with a pale rim around the iris. Rory felt the old name rise in her throat before she could stop it. “Jamie?” The man went absolutely still. Silas, who missed very little, set down the glass he was polishing. Jamie Vale turned fully on his stool. For a moment his face did not change. Then something passed through it—surprise first, then disbelief, then a guardedness so quick and practiced it might have been invisible to anyone who had not known him when he was seventeen and incapable of concealing a lie. “Rory,” he said. Nobody had called her that in a voice like that for years. Not as a nickname offered in the present, but as if it had been lifted whole from another life. She looked at him. “What are you doing here?” It was a stupid question. London was full of people doing things in places. Yet it was all she had. Jamie looked around at the maps, the dark wood, the rain-striped windows. “Having a drink.” “You don’t drink whisky.” “I do now.” Silas gave Rory one brief look. Not a question. An assessment. Then he moved down the bar, his slight limp more pronounced after a long day on his feet. “What are you having?” he asked Jamie. “I’m all right.” “That wasn’t the question.” Jamie’s eyes went to Silas’s right hand, to the silver signet ring catching the bar light. “Another of whatever this is.” “Bad choice,” Silas said. “It gets worse the more you have.” “That’s reassuring.” Silas poured without replying. He did not ask Rory what she wanted. Instead he set a glass of water in front of her, then a small measure of something honey-coloured beside it. “Not gin,” she said. “No.” “Why?” “Because you’re shivering.” “I’m wet.” “Both can be true.” She wrapped her hands around the smaller glass but did not drink. Jamie watched her, and that was worse than if he had looked away. His gaze snagged on details she could feel him taking inventory of: the black delivery jacket with Golden Empress embroidered in gold over the breast, the tiredness under her eyes, the practical boots, the cheap silver hoop in one ear. Perhaps he was searching for the girl he had known. Perhaps he was relieved not to find her. “You work deliveries now,” he said. Rory looked down at the logo. “Part-time.” “I thought you were doing law.” “I was.” The answer landed between them with a small, hard sound. Outside, a taxi hissed past through standing water. The tourists near the window laughed too loudly at something one of them had said, their voices breaking the room’s quiet for an instant and then leaving it deeper. Jamie picked up his whisky. “Cardiff University.” “Yes.” “You were going to be a barrister.” “My father’s dream, rather than mine.” “He told everyone you were going to be a barrister.” “My father tells everyone many things.” Jamie’s mouth tightened. “I know.” She looked at him properly then. “Do you?” He met her eyes. “I saw him last year.” For a moment the bar tipped slightly. Rory set down her drink before she spilled it. “My father?” “At a conference. In Bristol.” Jamie stared into his glass. “I was there for work.” “What work is that?” He gave a dry little smile. “Nothing as glamorous as it sounds.” “That wasn’t an answer.” “No.” He took a sip. “It wasn’t.” Rory had known Jamie before he learned to do that: to place a sentence carefully in the path of a question and let it stand there like a locked gate. Once, he had told her everything. His teachers’ private grievances. His mother’s migraines. The fact that his older brother had been caught smoking behind the rugby sheds. The fear he carried, at fifteen, that he would never leave Cardiff because everybody in Cardiff knew exactly who he was supposed to be. They had spent one entire summer plotting escape on the seawall at Penarth, eating chips from the paper and watching gulls tear at scraps. They would go to London, they had said. They would find miserable jobs and bad flats and be glorious in their poverty. Jamie wanted to write plays. Rory wanted—at that age—to want anything badly enough to leave. Then life had become more solid than their plans. Universities. Parents. The slow narrowing of what could be said aloud. “You saw Dad,” she repeated. “And he didn’t mention it?” “He didn’t know I knew you were in London.” “Everyone knew I was in London.” “Not everyone.” There it was. The old pressure. A hand on a bruise. Rory reached for the water instead of the whisky. “What did he say?” Jamie looked up. His expression shifted, almost softening. “He said you were doing well.” A laugh escaped her, sharp enough that the man in the navy suit glanced over. “Did he?” “He was proud of you.” “That’s not the same thing as knowing anything about me.” “No,” Jamie said quietly. “It isn’t.” Silas came back down the bar, carrying a crate of clean glasses. He paused, reading the air as readily as other men read newspapers. “Need anything?” he asked Rory. “No.” Jamie looked at Silas. “She lives here?” “Upstairs,” Silas said. “That’s not what I asked.” “No,” Silas agreed. “It isn’t.” Rory’s eyes flicked to him. He was not smiling, but there was a warning in the set of his shoulders. She appreciated it and resented it in equal measure. She was not made of glass. She had spent too long convincing herself of that to enjoy anyone else behaving as if she might shatter. “I rent the flat above,” she said. “Silas owns the bar.” “I gathered that much.” “Congratulations.” Jamie rubbed his thumb against the rim of his tumbler. The silver band caught against the glass. “You look different.” There were a dozen ways to answer. She could have said, So do you. She could have asked whether he meant the hair, the jacket, the fact that she no longer wore her future like a school uniform. Instead she said, “That happens.” “Yes.” “People get older.” “Yes.” His agreement was so immediate it irritated her. She studied him again. The scar. The clothing. The posture. A new stiffness at his neck, as though he had learned to expect a blow from one direction and never quite stopped bracing for it. “What happened to your eyebrow?” Jamie’s hand rose there instinctively, fingers brushing the thin line. “Nothing.” “That’s an answer from someone who works in intelligence.” He gave her a look. Rory felt a brief flare of triumph, absurd and childish. “You do.” “Do what?” “Work in intelligence.” “You’ve met people who do?” “I live above a bar in Soho. I’ve met all sorts.” Silas made a soft sound that might have been a cough. Jamie’s gaze moved from Rory to Silas and back again. “Of course you do.” “What does that mean?” “Nothing.” “That’s becoming a habit.” He held her stare for a few seconds. “I work for a department that prefers vague answers.” “Government, then.” “Possibly.” “You always did like a cryptic crossword.” “I liked the sense that there was a correct answer somewhere.” That took the edge from her. Jamie had hated uncertainty. He had hated the shape of their town’s expectations, the unspoken rules, the way every adult seemed to have a plan for him that did not include asking what he wanted. And then, after she left, after she had stopped answering often enough because every message from home felt like a summons—after Evan had made her phone a thing she feared rather than a lifeline—Jamie had become uncertain in a way she could not bear to touch. She had seen his messages. That was the truth of it. Not all at once. Not when they came. Evan had screened them sometimes, deleted others, told her Jamie had asked after her in a tone that made it sound like an accusation. Later, after she finally got out, after Eva found her a room and an Oyster card and enough quiet for her thoughts to become her own again, Rory had recovered pieces of that lost time. You all right? Your mum said you moved. I don’t know what happened, Rory. Just tell me you’re alive. The last message had been six years old by the time she read it. She had stared at it until the screen went dark. “You stopped writing,” Jamie said. It was not cruelly said. That made it worse. Rory felt her fingers close around the water glass. “So did you.” “I wrote.” “For a while.” “I wrote until you made it clear you didn’t want to hear from me.” Her first instinct was anger. It came hot, efficient, familiar. “I didn’t make anything clear.” “No?” Jamie’s voice remained low. “You vanished. You changed your number. Your parents wouldn’t say where you were. I got one email from you that said you needed space, and then nothing for nearly a year.” Rory remembered that email. Or rather, she remembered Evan sitting beside her on the sofa, his knee pressed against hers, saying, Tell him you need space. He’s too involved. Tell him he’s making things harder. The words had appeared in her inbox under her name. She had been sitting right there. “I didn’t write that,” she said. Jamie’s expression changed, though only slightly. “What?” “The email.” Her throat tightened. She hated this. Hated the way the past could enter a room without knocking and rearrange all the furniture. “I didn’t write it.” He looked at her for a long moment. “Then who did?” Rory’s laugh had no humour in it. “Take a guess.” His face went still. Jamie had met Evan twice. Once at a pub near the university, where Evan had been charming and funny and attentive enough to make Rory feel ridiculous for the unease crawling under her skin. The second time had been outside Cardiff Central, after a Christmas visit home. Evan had held her elbow too tightly. Jamie had noticed. She had noticed Jamie noticing. Afterward, Jamie had said, “I don’t like him.” Rory had snapped at him for it. She still remembered the look on his face. Hurt, then shut down. “I thought…” Jamie began. “I know.” “I thought you chose him.” “I did choose him.” She swallowed. “At first.” The words were hard but clean. She had learned that much. Not to sand every truth down until it could pass for somebody else’s fault. Jamie’s hand tightened around his whisky. “Why didn’t you tell me?” The question came softly, and the softness held more accusation than anger could have. Rory looked toward the far wall. A map of London, yellowed at the folds, hung behind glass. Someone had marked old Underground lines in red ink. The city looked manageable that way: a network of neat paths, every destination waiting at the end of a coloured thread. “Because I was embarrassed,” she said. “Because I thought I could sort it out. Because every time someone got close to the truth, I made excuses for him. For me. Because by the time I understood what was happening, I didn’t know how to explain why I’d stayed.” Jamie said nothing. She continued because stopping now would mean she had said too much for no reason. “And because you were right about him, and I couldn’t stand it.” His eyes lowered. “That’s pathetic,” she said. “No.” “It is.” “No, Rory.” His voice was different now. Less guarded. Not the boy she remembered, exactly, but something of him had surfaced beneath the careful man. “It isn’t.” She looked at him then. His face had aged. Of course it had. So had hers. But there was grief in it that did not belong only to this conversation. It sat behind his eyes, old and settled. She wondered what he had lost while she had been absent. What doors had closed. What versions of himself he had buried to become the man who drank whisky in quiet bars and offered no answers. “I’m sorry,” he said. She shook her head. “Don’t.” “I should have come looking.” “You did.” “Not enough.” “You had no idea where I was.” “I could have tried harder.” “You were twenty-one.” “That didn’t stop me from thinking I knew everything.” At that, against her will, Rory smiled. It was small. He saw it anyway. For a heartbeat, the room changed. The bar was not the Nest but a bus shelter in Cardiff, rain making rivers down the plastic panes. Jamie was beside her in a ridiculous yellow raincoat, declaring that the council had designed the city specifically to kill optimism. She was seventeen and laughing so hard she could not breathe. Then the memory passed, leaving the quiet behind it. Silas set a plate of chips between them without a word. Rory looked up. “We didn’t order these.” “You both look like you need feeding,” he said. Jamie glanced at him. “Is that your professional judgement?” “It is my commercial judgement. Hungry people become maudlin. Maudlin people do not tip.” “That’s not true,” Rory said. “You don’t tip.” “I live upstairs.” “Exactly.” Silas moved away again, but slower this time. Rory watched him disappear behind the end of the bar, aware that he was giving them privacy while staying close enough to intervene if privacy proved a bad idea. It was one of his particular talents: making protection look like indifference. Jamie took a chip, though he did not eat it. “Are you happy here?” The question was so plain that she nearly refused it. Happy was a dangerous word. People used it like a final destination, as if you arrived with a case in hand and stayed. She had days that were good. She had people who were kind. She had a room upstairs with a crooked window and a landlord who left tea outside her door when she was ill. She had Eva, though they were both too busy and too tired to see each other as often as they swore they would. She had learned how to walk down a street without checking every reflection behind her. “I’m better,” she said at last. Jamie nodded once. “That’s something.” “What about you?” He looked at the whisky. “I’m employed.” “That’s a very bleak answer.” “It’s an honest one.” “You used to want to write.” A shadow crossed his face. “I remember.” “What happened?” “The usual things.” He set down the chip. “Rent. My mother got ill. I took a job I was good at, then another. Then one day I realized I’d become the kind of person who refers to his work as ‘the usual things.’” Rory waited. “My mother died three years ago,” he added. The words were almost casual. That was how the worst news often arrived: without ceremony, because ceremony would make it too real. “Oh, Jamie.” He gave a small shrug, but his shoulders did not move naturally. “Cancer. Fast at the end.” “I didn’t know.” “No.” “I’m sorry.” “Thank you.” She wanted to say she would have come. She wanted to say if he had told her, she would have answered. But those were promises that belonged to a past she had not lived. They would comfort him only if he chose to believe them, and she had no right to ask that. Instead she took one of the chips and ate it. Too hot, too salty. Real. “I missed you,” she said. Jamie’s eyes lifted to hers. The sentence seemed to fill more space than it deserved. She had missed other people in the years since she left Cardiff. Her mother’s way of singing while she marked papers. Her father’s Sunday roasts, even when he spent half the meal correcting her grammar. The sea. The particular blue-grey of Welsh mornings. But Jamie had been different. He had been a witness to the person she was before she began disappearing in pieces. “I missed you too,” he said. Neither of them reached across the bar. Perhaps that was the thing time taught: not that old wounds healed, but that they acquired edges. You learned where they were. You learned not to lean your full weight against them. The door opened, letting in a gust of rain and cold air. A group of office workers stumbled inside, loud with relief at having escaped the weather. The room’s volume rose around them. Glasses clinked. Someone fed coins into the old jukebox in the corner, and a low guitar line began to hum beneath the talk. Jamie looked toward the window. “I’m in London for two days.” “For work?” “Yes.” “And vague departments.” “Yes.” “Will you be back?” He considered the question with the same care he had given every other one. Rory expected an evasive answer. A professional answer. Something polished and useless. “I don’t know,” he said. It was not enough, but it was true. Rory nodded. “All right.” He reached into his coat and withdrew a card. Plain white. His name printed in black, a mobile number beneath it. No title. No organization. He placed it on the bar between the plate of chips and her untouched whisky. “This one’s actually mine,” he said. She looked at it. “I don’t expect anything,” he added quickly. “I mean—I know that sounds like I do. I just thought…” “You thought you’d leave a door open.” Jamie exhaled through his nose. “Something like that.” Rory picked up the card. The paper was thick, expensive. On the back, in blue ink, he had written an address in Notting Hill. “My flat,” he said. “Not an invitation. Just—” “A door,” she said again. He nodded. She slipped the card into the inside pocket of her jacket. It lay against her chest, small and hard. “Do you still hate olives?” she asked. Jamie blinked. “What?” “Olives. You used to say they tasted like drowned pennies.” A laugh escaped him then. It was quieter than she remembered, rougher at the edges, but undeniably his. “They do.” “You ate half a jar at my twenty-first.” “I was trying to impress someone.” “You threw up behind the pub.” “She was very impressed.” Rory smiled. “She was not.” “No,” he admitted. “She wasn’t.” For a little while they talked about nothing that could wound them. About Cardiff, which Jamie had visited less and less. About one of their old teachers, who had apparently retired to Spain and begun posting photographs of himself in cycling shorts online. About Rory’s delivery routes and the people who believed a late dumpling order entitled them to a personal grievance hearing. Jamie told her, with deliberate vagueness, about airports and bad hotel coffee and the misery of being sent somewhere cold with the instruction not to mention where he had been. The conversation did not become easy. Not exactly. It had too much history under it, too much sediment. But it moved. At closing, Silas began stacking stools on the empty tables around them. He did not rush them, but the signal was clear enough. Jamie stood. He was taller than Rory remembered, or perhaps simply straighter. He put on his coat and reached for his wallet. Silas named a number. Jamie looked offended. “For two whiskies?” “One whisky,” Silas said. “The second was an act of mercy.” “And the chips?” “Price of admission.” Jamie handed over cash. Silas accepted it with a grave nod, then gave Rory a look that said, in the private shorthand they had developed, You all right? She answered with the smallest tilt of her head. Not entirely. Not badly. Jamie stood beside the door, rain-slick streetlight washing pale over his face. “Goodnight, Rory.” “Goodnight, Jamie.” He hesitated. She could see the impulse in him: the old instinct to hug her, perhaps, or to say something larger than the night could hold. He did neither. Then he opened the door and stepped beneath the green neon raven. Rory watched him go along the wet pavement until a passing taxi cut him from view. Behind her, Silas collected the empty glasses. “You knew him,” he said. “I used to.” Silas set one tumbler in the sink. “That’s not always the same as knowing someone.” “No.” The jukebox had stopped. Rain tapped the windows. Upstairs, her flat waited with its unwashed mug and the book she had been pretending to read for three nights. She touched the pocket where Jamie’s card rested. Silas glanced at her hand. “You going to call him?” Rory looked through the glass at the wet street, at the green reflection trembling in the gutter. “I don’t know,” she said. Silas nodded as if that, too, were an answer worth respecting. For once, she let it be.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags42
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Jamie said quietly [quietly]"
1"he added quickly [quickly]"
2"she said again [again]"
dialogueSentences201
tagDensity0.209
leniency0.418
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.03
89.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount4127
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"tightly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"tightly"
4"softly"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount4127
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count3
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"stark"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count2
5
word"absolutely"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"efficient"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"familiar"
2"flicker"
3"stark"
4"eyebrow"
5"absolutely"
6"could feel"
7"flicked"
8"unspoken"
9"efficient"
10"weight"
11"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences351
matches
0"was relieved"
1"d with relief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences351
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences509
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords4121
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions56
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions148
wordCount3230
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Jamie"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Jamie"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Rory37
Nest3
Baltic1
Vale1
Jamie45
Silas24
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff6
Penarth1
London3
Evan6
Eva2
Oyster1
Tell2
Central1
Christmas1
Underground1
Less1
Sunday1
Welsh1
Notting1
Hill1
Spain1
You4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Vale"
2"Jamie"
3"Silas"
4"Empress"
5"Evan"
6"Eva"
7"Underground"
8"Less"
9"You"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Notting"
4"Hill"
5"Spain"
globalScore0.803
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences202
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a summons—after Evan had made"
1"chers, who had apparently retired to Spain an"
54.40% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords1.456
wordCount4121
matches
0"Not as a nickname offered in the present, but as if it had been lifted whole from another life"
1"not smiling, but there was a warning in the set of his shoulders"
2"Not the boy she remembered, exactly, but something of him had surfaced beneath the careful man"
3"not the Nest but a bus shelter in Cardiff, rain making rivers down the plasti"
4"not that old wounds healed, but"
5"not enough, but it was true"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences509
matches
0"distrust that word"
1"remembered that email"
2"learned that much"
3"declaring that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs288
mean14.31
std18.25
cv1.275
sampleLengths
027
160
258
362
413
510
65
738
81
917
1024
115
123
1396
1453
1531
166
177
1867
1967
206
218
2214
231
245
2512
2652
273
2831
299
3020
3115
324
333
3429
357
363
374
3821
3911
402
4132
424
431
441
453
462
474
4812
4971
99.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences351
matches
0"was tied"
1"been lifted"
2"was relieved"
3"been caught"
4"was supposed"
5"being sent"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs576
matches
0"was explaining"
1"was polishing"
2"was searching"
3"was giving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences509
ratio0.006
matches
0"Then something passed through it—surprise first, then disbelief, then a guardedness so quick and practiced it might have been invisible to anyone who had not known him when he was seventeen and incapable of concealing a lie."
1"Rory wanted—at that age—to want anything badly enough to leave."
2"And then, after she left, after she had stopped answering often enough because every message from home felt like a summons—after Evan had made her phone a thing she feared rather than a lifeline—Jamie had become uncertain in a way she could not bear to touch."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2184
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"stark against rain-reddened skin."
adverbCount84
adverbRatio0.038461538461538464
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.011446886446886446
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences509
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences509
mean8.1
std7.23
cv0.893
sampleLengths
027
120
222
318
422
58
628
717
811
96
1028
1113
1210
135
1416
1522
161
1717
186
1915
203
215
223
2317
2417
2533
2617
273
282
297
306
318
3215
3324
3419
353
362
377
386
397
4010
4125
4232
4319
444
459
4623
4712
486
498
42.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats37
diversityRatio0.19842829076620824
totalSentences509
uniqueOpeners101
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount18
totalSentences296
matches
0"Then she shouldered through the"
1"Then he glanced toward the"
2"Then something passed through it—surprise"
3"Then he moved down the"
4"Instead he set a glass"
5"Perhaps he was searching for"
6"Perhaps he was relieved not"
7"Once, he had told her"
8"Then life had become more"
9"Instead she said,"
10"Just tell me you’re alive."
11"Once at a pub near"
12"Of course it had."
13"Then the memory passed, leaving"
14"Instead she took one of"
15"Too hot, too salty."
16"Perhaps that was the thing"
17"Then he opened the door"
ratio0.061
71.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount110
totalSentences296
matches
0"She stood beneath it for"
1"His grey-streaked auburn hair was"
2"His beard caught the low"
3"He looked up as she"
4"He reached beneath the counter"
5"She rubbed her hair dry"
6"Her left wrist showed briefly"
7"She had known this room"
8"It had become familiar in"
9"She had learned to distrust"
10"He had been handsome once"
11"He had had curls that"
12"He used to wear trainers"
13"His jaw was sharper."
14"He wore a charcoal shirt"
15"His mouth had settled into"
16"She looked at him."
17"It was a stupid question."
18"he asked Jamie"
19"He did not ask Rory"
ratio0.372
64.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount234
totalSentences296
matches
0"Rain had polished Soho black"
1"The green neon raven above"
2"She stood beneath it for"
3"The place smelled of spilled"
4"A football match played silently"
5"Silas had turned the sound"
6"Silas stood behind the bar,"
7"His grey-streaked auburn hair was"
8"His beard caught the low"
9"He looked up as she"
10"Rory lifted the bag from"
11"Silas’s mouth moved at one"
12"He reached beneath the counter"
13"She rubbed her hair dry"
14"Her left wrist showed briefly"
15"She had known this room"
16"It had become familiar in"
17"A refuge, perhaps."
18"She had learned to distrust"
19"An older man in a"
ratio0.791
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences296
matches(empty)
ratio0
92.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences127
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The place smelled of spilled stout, lemon rind, wet wool, and the faint old-paper scent of the maps that covered the walls."
1"Silas stood behind the bar, polishing a glass that had been clean when he picked it up."
2"He had had curls that refused to lie flat and a face always on the edge of laughter, even when he was explaining something serious."
3"Then something passed through it—surprise first, then disbelief, then a guardedness so quick and practiced it might have been invisible to anyone who had not kn…"
4"The tourists near the window laughed too loudly at something one of them had said, their voices breaking the room’s quiet for an instant and then leaving it dee…"
5"A new stiffness at his neck, as though he had learned to expect a blow from one direction and never quite stopped bracing for it."
6"About one of their old teachers, who had apparently retired to Spain and begun posting photographs of himself in cycling shorts online."
7"About Rory’s delivery routes and the people who believed a late dumpling order entitled them to a personal grievance hearing."
8"Silas accepted it with a grave nod, then gave Rory a look that said, in the private shorthand they had developed, You all right?"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags42
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags34
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
1"Silas agreed (agree)"
2"he added (add)"
3"he added quickly (add)"
4"he admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences201
tagDensity0.169
leniency0.338
rawRatio0.147
effectiveRatio0.05
87.9881%