Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40VRGFK7DXNT371VK1BP7K

Run Details

Duration:
44.4s
Cost:
$0.053710
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain had rinsed Soho into a black shine by closing time, turning the pavements outside the Raven’s Nest into strips of broken mirror. From behind the bar, Silas polished the same glass for so long that Rory suspected he had forgotten the rag in his hand. “Go upstairs,” he said without looking at her. “I am upstairs.” “You know what I mean.” Rory leaned her elbows on the scarred wood. Her delivery jacket was still damp at the shoulders, smelling faintly of rainwater and sesame oil from the Golden Empress. “I’m not tired.” “That is generally when people ought to sleep most.” The bar had emptied in layers. First the office workers with loosened ties and wet umbrellas. Then the tourists who had mistaken the green neon raven above the entrance for something quaint and Instagrammable. Last came the two men who sat in the corner beneath a photograph of a bomb-scarred London street and spoke in murmurs until Silas appeared beside their table. He had not raised his voice. He never needed to. They had left three minutes later. Now the Nest belonged to its proper ghosts: old maps on the walls, the low amber lamps, the dark glint of bottles, the rain needling the windows. Silas set the glass beneath the counter. His silver signet ring clicked softly against the wood. “You’ve been staring at that door for forty minutes.” “I’ve been enjoying the atmosphere.” “You have the expression of a woman waiting for a firing squad.” Rory looked toward the entrance despite herself. She had not expected Eva’s message. Not after five years of silence—five years in which birthdays became a thing she remembered too late, five years in which old names acquired the fixed, dusty quality of places on maps she would never revisit. In London? it had said. Rory had read it standing in the alley behind the Golden Empress, one hand numb around her phone while the kitchen extractor fans breathed hot, greasy air over her face. At the Raven’s Nest. Nine. She had replied before she could think better of it. Silas watched her with his hazel eyes narrowed. “Someone trouble you?” “No.” “Someone from before?” That was more dangerous, somehow. Rory tucked a loose strand of black hair behind her ear. “Possibly.” Silas gave a small grunt that held neither approval nor disapproval. He moved with his familiar slight hitch around the end of the bar, checking the front lock though the bar was still open. His limp became more pronounced in bad weather. Rory had noticed that during her first winter in the flat above, when she was new enough to the building to think she had to pretend not to see it. The door opened. A gust of rain-cooled air swept in, carrying traffic fumes and wet wool. The green neon sign outside flickered over the woman standing in the doorway. For one stupid second, Rory thought she had the wrong person. Then the woman pushed back her hood. Eva Morgan had once worn her hair in a wild copper cloud down to her waist. She had laughed too loudly in pubs and stolen chips from Rory’s plate with the serene entitlement of a sister. At nineteen, she had owned three pairs of boots, all scuffed, and a leather jacket decorated with safety pins and patches from bands she had never actually seen. This woman had cropped her hair close to her head. Her coat was dark blue, beautifully cut, and rain beaded on its shoulders without soaking through. Her face seemed sharper than Rory remembered—not thinner exactly, but refined into angles. She wore no lipstick, no jewelry except a slim gold watch. Even from across the room, Rory could see the faint white line that ran from beneath her left ear into the collar of her blouse. Eva’s gaze found hers. Everything inside Rory went still. “Rory,” Eva said. The old nickname sounded strange in her mouth. Not wrong. Just old. “Eva.” Silas glanced between them. Whatever calculation he made, he kept to himself. “Drink?” Eva removed her coat, folding it precisely over one arm. “Whisky. Neat.” Rory nearly laughed. Eva had once claimed whisky tasted like “an ashtray someone had threatened with a bonfire.” Silas did not ask which kind. He chose one of the better bottles, poured a measure, and set it down. Eva took the stool beside Rory’s, then seemed to reconsider and moved one farther away. The distance was only a foot. Rory felt every inch of it. “You look well,” Eva said. It was the kind of lie people offered when truth had become impolite. “So do you.” Eva’s mouth bent, almost a smile. “No, I don’t.” Rory looked at her properly. There were shadows under Eva’s eyes, carefully concealed but not erased. A small tremor moved through her fingers when she reached for the glass, then vanished. The scar at her neck was pale and smooth. Not an accident, Rory thought. Not one anyone had explained away with a cheerful story. “You disappeared,” Rory said. Eva raised the whisky but did not drink. “That’s a warm welcome.” “You asked me to come.” “I did.” “And then you made me wait in a bar owned by a man who looks like he could arrange a body to vanish before midnight.” Silas, still within earshot, looked mildly offended. “Before eleven, if the traffic permits.” Eva gave a short, surprised laugh. It was the first thing about her that sounded familiar. Then it faded from her face. “I wasn’t sure you would come.” “I wasn’t sure I would either.” “That makes two of us.” Rory picked at a nick in the bar’s varnish. Her left wrist rested on the wood, crescent scar exposed where her jacket cuff had ridden back. Eva’s eyes dropped to it, and memory passed between them with the speed of a match strike: two girls in Cardiff, nine years old, crouched beside a broken garden gate; Rory’s blood bright on her skin; Eva white-faced and furious because she had dared Rory to climb it. “You still have that,” Eva said. “Scars are persistent.” “Not always.” Rory looked at the line along Eva’s throat. Eva followed her gaze. Her hand rose, then stopped short of touching it. “No. I suppose not.” The rain ticked against the windows. Somewhere upstairs, a pipe groaned in the walls. Rory had rehearsed questions all afternoon. Where have you been? Why didn’t you call? Are you all right? She had imagined saying them coolly, with enough distance to show that she had survived perfectly well without an answer. What came out was, “Are you?” Eva took a drink. “No.” The honesty landed harder than any evasion could have. Silas set a clean tumbler in front of Rory and poured her water. He did not offer alcohol. He knew too much about the particular shape of her bad nights. Then he retreated to the far end of the bar, where he began counting the till with theatrical concentration. Eva turned the whisky glass slowly between both palms. “I got into trouble.” “That narrows it down.” “I know.” “Was it Evan?” Eva’s eyes lifted. Rory wished immediately that she had not said his name. It had been years since she’d used it aloud. Evan. A name like a door slamming. He had taken up too much space in her life for too long: his apologies, his hands, the careful way she had learned to read the tilt of his shoulders before he raised his voice. Eva had been the one who got her out. Eva had called from London, said there was a room in her flat, said pack a bag and get on the next train. Eva had met her at Paddington with a carton of chips and a coat too big for her. Then, six months later, Eva had gone to Manchester for a journalism job and promised she would visit. The promised visit never came. “No,” Eva said at last. “Not directly.” “Then what?” Eva looked toward the maps behind the bar. Their yellowed edges curled inside old frames, continents and borders made unreliable by time. “I took a job. The kind you don’t tell people much about.” Rory glanced at Silas. He did not glance back, but something in his stillness changed. “What kind of job?” “The kind where they call you an analyst because it sounds harmless.” Eva gave a brittle little smile. “I was good at languages. Good at noticing patterns. Good at being forgettable in rooms full of people who assumed I was there to take notes.” “That sounds harmless,” Rory said. “It was, at first.” “And then?” “And then it wasn’t.” Rory waited. Eva’s expression closed for a moment, not with secrecy but effort. “There was a man who trusted me. Not exactly trusted—people like him don’t trust anyone—but he believed I was useful. I believed he was just a source. A difficult one. I passed on what he told me. Names, routes, dates. Someone decided the information needed to be confirmed.” Her thumb rubbed the rim of her glass. “They sent someone in.” The implication gathered in the quiet. “He died,” Rory said. Eva nodded once. “Because of you?” “Because of all of us.” Her voice had gone flat, trained flatness laid over something raw. “But I was the one sitting across from him every Thursday, pretending his terrible coffee didn’t make me ill. I was the one who told him to keep talking. I was the one who said he would be protected.” Rory had no answer for that. She thought of Eva at seventeen, lying across Rory’s bed and declaring that she would save the world by becoming a reporter, one corrupt minister at a time. Eva had believed in clean lines then. Good people, bad people. Truth as a blade that only cut in the right direction. “You could have told me,” Rory said quietly. Eva’s laugh was no laugh at all. “What would I have said? Sorry I didn’t answer your messages, I was busy helping destroy a man’s life?” “You could have said you were alive.” “I didn’t feel very alive.” The anger Rory had carried for years shifted under her ribs. It did not disappear. It merely lost its simple shape. “You left me,” she said. Eva shut her eyes. Rory heard the accusation as soon as it left her: childish, helpless, true. “You left,” she repeated. “You were the person who told me not to let Evan isolate me. You said that was how men like him won. Then you vanished, and I kept thinking—” Her voice caught. She hated that. She made it level again. “I kept thinking I had done something. That I’d become too much work.” Eva’s eyes opened, bright now. “Rory.” “No, let me finish.” “Please.” “I didn’t need you to rescue me forever. I didn’t need you to be some bloody guardian angel. But you were my friend.” “I know.” “And you didn’t even give me the dignity of being angry at you.” Eva’s face crumpled so quickly Rory almost looked away. She had never seen Eva cry quietly before. At university she had cried with hiccups and curses, smeared mascara, dramatic threats to join a convent. These tears merely filled her eyes and stayed there. “I wrote to you,” Eva said. “A dozen times.” “You didn’t send them.” “No.” “Why?” “Because every version made me sound like a coward.” Rory considered that. “Maybe you were.” Eva nodded. “I was.” Silas came over then, not intruding exactly. He set a small bowl of salted peanuts between them. His ring flashed beneath the bar lamp. “Kitchen’s shut,” he said. “This is all the diplomacy I have left.” Neither woman thanked him, but he left the bowl there. Eva drew a breath. “I found out Evan had been asking about you.” The room seemed to contract. Rory’s fingers tightened around her water glass. “When?” “About two years after you moved here. Maybe three.” Eva’s gaze held hers. “I was still… involved with people who could find things out. He’d told someone you’d ruined his life. That you’d run away to London. He was asking whether you had friends here, where you worked.” Rory felt cold despite the warmth of the bar. “What happened?” “I made sure he stopped asking.” The words were gentle. That made them worse. Rory looked past Eva at Silas. He was washing glasses again, his back to them. Outside, headlights slid over the rain-dark street. In the reflection, the green neon raven glowed like a warning. “What does that mean?” Rory asked. Eva’s mouth tightened. “It means he was persuaded that London was not a place he wanted to visit.” “Persuaded by whom?” “Does it matter?” “Yes.” Eva looked down at the whisky. “Probably.” Rory thought of the years she had spent rebuilding herself in unremarkable pieces. A delivery route learned by heart. The flat above the bar. Yu-Fei shouting at her for skipping meals. Silas teaching her, without ever calling it teaching, how to watch a room and trust a silence. She had believed she had made a clean escape. That distance had done the work. Now she saw the old world had not stayed behind her. It had sent someone ahead to clear the road. “You should have told me,” she said. “I know.” “Why didn’t you?” Eva’s eyes found hers again. “Because I wanted, just once, for you to have something uncomplicated. I wanted you to think you got away because you got away.” The answer hurt because part of Rory understood it. Another part wanted to throw the water in Eva’s face. Instead, she said, “I did get away.” Eva nodded slowly. “You did.” “And whatever you did, whatever happened to you, you don’t get to turn that into the reason I’m safe.” “I’m not trying to.” “You are a little.” “I know.” Eva’s voice broke on the words. “I’m sorry.” There it was. Small, insufficient, devastating. Rory looked at the woman in front of her: the cropped hair, the scar, the expensive coat, the hands that would not quite stop shaking. Beneath all that, she could still see the girl who had once climbed through Rory’s bedroom window at midnight because Rory had failed an exam and was convinced her life was over. Eva had brought supermarket cider and a cassette of music she insisted would “cure academic despair.” They had fallen asleep on the floor before the first song ended. Time did not erase people, Rory thought. It buried them under the versions they became. “You’re staying in London?” she asked. Eva’s shoulders loosened by a fraction. “For a few days.” “Is that safe?” “No.” Eva smiled faintly. “But it is necessary.” “That sounds ominous.” “It probably is.” Silas limped over, keys in hand. “If there’s an ominous element requiring private conversation, there is a back room. If there isn’t, I would like to lock my doors before dawn.” Eva glanced at Rory. “There is a reason I asked you here.” “Of course there is.” “I need help.” Rory should have refused. Every sensible instinct told her to stand, walk upstairs, close her flat door, and leave Eva to the consequences of a life she had chosen without her. But Eva’s face was open now, stripped of the careful professional mask. Afraid. Not for herself alone, Rory thought. That was the part that mattered. “What kind of help?” she asked. Silas’s hand paused on the keys. Eva looked toward the bookshelf at the back of the Nest, crowded with old novels, ledgers, and travel guides nobody had opened in years. “The kind,” she said, “that might make it dangerous to know me again.” Rory took a breath. The old anger remained. So did the old love. Neither cancelled the other. They sat together between her ribs, inconvenient and alive. “Then you’d better start talking,” she said. Silas reached for the bookshelf.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva had once [once]"
1"Rory said quietly [quietly]"
2"Eva smiled faintly [faintly]"
dialogueSentences118
tagDensity0.246
leniency0.492
rawRatio0.103
effectiveRatio0.051
83.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2665
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"coolly"
count1
4
adverb"perfectly"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count2
6
adverb"very"
count1
7
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"precisely"
2"carefully"
3"coolly"
4"perfectly"
5"slowly"
6"very"
7"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2665
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"glint"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"implication"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"glint"
1"silence"
2"familiar"
3"flickered"
4"implication"
5"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences211
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences211
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences299
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2661
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions37
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions138
wordCount1912
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.82
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven2
Nest4
Silas16
Rory49
Golden2
Empress2
Instagrammable1
London3
Eva54
Morgan1
Cardiff1
Paddington1
Manchester1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
4"Eva"
5"Morgan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Golden"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Paddington"
5"Manchester"
globalScore0.088
windowScore0
75.93% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences135
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"appeared beside their table"
1"seemed sharper than Rory remembered—not thinner exactly, but refined into angles"
2"tasted like"
3"not quite stop shaking"
49.68% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.503
wordCount2661
matches
0"neither approval nor"
1"not thinner exactly, but refined into angles"
2"not glance back, but something in his stillness changed"
3"not with secrecy but effort"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences299
matches
0"show that she"
1"declaring that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs171
mean15.56
std18.58
cv1.194
sampleLengths
047
18
23
35
431
59
678
727
825
95
1012
117
1242
135
1430
155
1610
1711
181
193
2017
2172
223
2326
2411
257
2664
2775
284
295
303
3112
321
3313
3412
3518
3620
3715
386
396
405
4113
423
439
4455
454
4612
475
482
4925
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences211
matches
0"was convinced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs337
matches
0"was washing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences299
ratio0.01
matches
0"Not after five years of silence—five years in which birthdays became a thing she remembered too late, five years in which old names acquired the fixed, dusty quality of places on maps she would never revisit."
1"Her face seemed sharper than Rory remembered—not thinner exactly, but refined into angles."
2"Eva’s eyes dropped to it, and memory passed between them with the speed of a match strike: two girls in Cardiff, nine years old, crouched beside a broken garden gate; Rory’s blood bright on her skin; Eva white-faced and furious because she had dared Rory to climb it."
97.15% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1919
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount83
adverbRatio0.04325169359041167
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.013027618551328817
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences299
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences299
mean8.9
std8.17
cv0.918
sampleLengths
024
123
28
33
45
58
620
73
89
96
1010
1118
1228
136
144
156
1627
177
189
199
205
2112
227
236
2436
252
263
2730
284
291
3010
318
323
331
343
355
3611
371
3811
3923
408
4130
423
4313
4413
4511
467
4716
4820
4928
45.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2508361204013378
totalSentences299
uniqueOpeners75
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences187
matches
0"Then the tourists who had"
1"Then the woman pushed back"
2"Then it faded from her"
3"Somewhere upstairs, a pipe groaned"
4"Then he retreated to the"
5"Then, six months later, Eva"
6"Instead, she said,"
ratio0.037
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences187
matches
0"he said without looking at"
1"Her delivery jacket was still"
2"He had not raised his"
3"He never needed to."
4"They had left three minutes"
5"His silver signet ring clicked"
6"She had not expected Eva’s"
7"it had said."
8"She had replied before she"
9"He moved with his familiar"
10"His limp became more pronounced"
11"She had laughed too loudly"
12"Her coat was dark blue,"
13"Her face seemed sharper than"
14"She wore no lipstick, no"
15"He chose one of the"
16"It was the kind of"
17"It was the first thing"
18"Her left wrist rested on"
19"Her hand rose, then stopped"
ratio0.23
50.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount153
totalSentences187
matches
0"The rain had rinsed Soho"
1"he said without looking at"
2"Rory leaned her elbows on"
3"Her delivery jacket was still"
4"The bar had emptied in"
5"He had not raised his"
6"He never needed to."
7"They had left three minutes"
8"Silas set the glass beneath"
9"His silver signet ring clicked"
10"Rory looked toward the entrance"
11"She had not expected Eva’s"
12"it had said."
13"Rory had read it standing"
14"She had replied before she"
15"Silas watched her with his"
16"That was more dangerous, somehow."
17"Rory tucked a loose strand"
18"Silas gave a small grunt"
19"He moved with his familiar"
ratio0.818
80.21% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences187
matches
0"Now the Nest belonged to"
1"Even from across the room,"
2"Now she saw the old"
ratio0.016
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Then the tourists who had mistaken the green neon raven above the entrance for something quaint and Instagrammable."
1"Last came the two men who sat in the corner beneath a photograph of a bomb-scarred London street and spoke in murmurs until Silas appeared beside their table."
2"Rory looked at the woman in front of her: the cropped hair, the scar, the expensive coat, the hands that would not quite stop shaking."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences118
tagDensity0.169
leniency0.339
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.017
88.9102%