Run: 2026-07-09-01KX410S3P4HZ5ZN7XW3JJANB5

Run Details

Duration:
1m 4s
Cost:
$0.103310
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones were not stone. Rory stopped beneath the trees and swept her torch across them again. Ancient oaks rose from the bracken in a ragged crescent, their trunks broad, pale, and almost entirely bare of bark. In the blunt white beam, they resembled weathered pillars, their roots sunk deep into Richmond Park’s black earth. She had seen photographs. She had read three separate descriptions, all irritatingly vague, and had marked the location from the only account that gave usable directions: west from the pond until the path forked around a lightning-struck beech, then north by northwest for four hundred paces. Nothing had mentioned that the oaks looked like bones. “Brilliant,” she murmured. Her voice vanished into the wood. No echo. No rustle of startled wings. Not even the small, private stir of leaves disturbed by breath. Rory lowered the torch and listened. Silence could be noisy in London. Boilers knocked behind walls. Traffic sighed several streets away. Someone somewhere always dragged a chair or shouted into a phone. Even here, far enough into the park to lose sight of the road, she should have heard something: wind combing the canopy, foxes barking, deer shifting through fern. There was nothing. She checked her phone. 11:43 p.m. The lock screen still displayed Eva’s last message. This is an appalling idea. Share your location. Rory had shared it before slipping through a gap in the fence and ignoring the sign about park closure. The blue location icon now spun uselessly above a blank map. NO SERVICE occupied the corner of the screen. “Of course.” Her voice seemed smaller this time. She put the phone away and touched the pendant beneath her jumper. The Heartstone lay warm against her sternum, a thumbnail-sized weight on its silver chain. It had been cold when she left the flat above Silas’ bar. Cool in the cab. Cool as she crossed the grass under a swollen half-moon. It had begun to warm when she found the first oak. That was why she had come. Not for curiosity, despite what she would tell Eva if she got back before dawn. Not to prove a theory. For the third night in a row she had woken with the Heartstone glowing crimson against her skin and a voice whispering from the corner of her bedroom. Richmond. Last night, the voice had added her name. Not Rory. Aurora. She had spent the day looking for connections between Richmond Park, ancient sites, and portals. Most of what she found was nonsense stitched together from folklore blogs and occult forums. One post had described a hidden grove between worlds, bounded by oak standing stones. Another, deleted minutes after she opened it, had contained a single line: If the Heartstone wakes, go where the flowers never die. Rory stepped between the first two oaks. Warmth spread beneath her jumper. Not heat exactly. A pulse. She froze. The Heartstone pulsed again, faint but definite, like a second heartbeat set slightly out of rhythm with her own. She considered turning back. It was not cowardice to reassess when circumstances changed. It was intelligence. The pendant responded near a Hel portal—if the information she had been given was accurate, and if “Hel” meant what it sounded like. Coming alone had already been a concession to stupidity. Continuing would turn stupidity into policy. Behind her, a twig snapped. Rory spun. The torch beam cut between the trees. Fern. Bramble. The bleached flank of an oak. Beyond them, darkness layered upon darkness. Nothing moved. She held still long enough for the muscles between her shoulders to begin aching. “Deer,” she said. The silence accepted this without comment. She backed through the boundary. Or tried to. Her heel struck something hard. She glanced down, expecting a root, and saw the pale curve of an oak trunk inches behind her. That was wrong. She had walked three full steps into the crescent. The boundary trees should have been several feet away. Rory turned the torch left, then right. The oaks stood closer together now. No. That was panic imposing a pattern. Trees did not rearrange themselves because a woman had crossed between them. She had misjudged the distance in poor light. The Heartstone gave another slow pulse. Somewhere ahead, water dripped. Rory lifted the torch toward the sound. Beyond the boundary lay a narrow path she had not noticed before. White flowers crowded its edges, their open faces luminous in the dark. Wild roses, bluebells, poppies, snowdrops—flowers that belonged to different months and different soils, blooming together in profusion. Flowers that never died. She stared along the path. One of the white blossoms turned toward her. Only a little. A delicate tilt on its stem, as though stirred by a passing draught. Then the next turned. Then the next. A ripple travelled away from her into the darkness. Hundreds of pale faces pivoted in sequence, marking the course of something moving down the path. Toward the clearing. Away from Rory. Her scalp prickled. She could leave. Climb the fence, call Eva from the road, and find somebody who knew what the pendant was before she went blundering into a portal. Sensible. Clean. Long overdue. She turned back toward the trees. There was no gap. The oaks formed an unbroken wall, trunk pressed to trunk. Their branches knitted overhead. Rory ran the torch across them, searching for the place where she had entered, but every tree had the same stripped, pallid bark. The same deep vertical grooves. One groove gleamed wetly. Rory stepped closer before she could stop herself. The mark was narrow and dark, beginning roughly at shoulder height and running toward the roots. Not sap. Water, perhaps. The beam climbed. A shape had been cut into the trunk above the wet streak: a crescent, small and precise. Her left wrist began to ache. Rory clamped her hand around it. Beneath her fingers lay the childhood scar, the little crescent she had carried for almost twenty years. The carved mark was the same size. A breath feathered the back of her neck. She whirled so fast the pendant swung free of her jumper. The crimson stone glowed dimly. Nothing stood behind her. Only the path and its impossible flowers. But the flowers nearest her had closed. Not all of them. A patch shaped like two footprints pressed darkly into the white border. Farther along, another pair of blossoms folded inward. Then another. Step by step, something invisible moved away from her. No. Not away. The prints pointed toward her. The next flowers closed nearer. Rory’s pulse accelerated. She forced one breath in, one out. Panic narrowed options. Fear lied about time. She needed facts. The flowers reacted to pressure or proximity. The pendant warmed near a portal. The boundary behind her had closed. The path led somewhere. Something occupied it with her. She slid her phone from her pocket and opened the camera. Screens sometimes caught what eyes did not; that principle appeared in enough folklore to warrant testing. Through the display, the path showed in grainy blue-black, the torch bleaching the flowers to featureless white. The moving gap continued toward her. She raised the phone. At first she saw only the clearing beyond: tall grass, a ring of darker trees, a low mass in the centre that might have been a stone. Then autofocus sharpened. A figure stood halfway down the path. Rory looked over the phone. Empty air. On the screen, the figure remained. It was too tall to be human. Its head nearly touched the interlaced branches. It wore—or seemed to wear—something long and dark that blended into the shadows beneath it. Where its face should have been, the screen displayed a soft blur, as though the camera refused to hold it in focus. One arm hung at its side. The other was extended toward her. Rory lowered the phone by an inch. Nothing. Raised it. The figure was closer. She stumbled back and struck the oak wall. The phone camera juddered. For a fraction of a second, the blur resolved. Her own face stared out from the figure’s head. Not quite her face. The skin appeared grey and slack, the bright blue eyes filmed white. Straight black hair hung damply to its shoulders. Its mouth moved soundlessly. Rory’s finger slipped against the screen, switching to the front camera. Her own living face filled the display, pale and wide-eyed. Behind her stood the wall of oaks. Between the trunks, something looked through a narrow crack. A single bright blue eye. Rory jerked away. The phone fell, landed in the flowers, and continued filming upward. Its light cast warped shadows across the trees. A voice spoke from behind the oak wall. “Rory?” Eva’s voice. Every muscle in Rory’s body locked. “Rory, let me in.” The plea came from directly behind the trunk bearing the crescent mark. Soft, breathless, terrified. “Please. There’s something out here.” Rory pressed her lips together. Eva had not come. Eva had no car, hated Richmond Park after dark, and had threatened to chain Rory to the radiator if she tried this. Even if she had followed, she could not have reached the grove so quickly. The voice knocked on the wood. Three polite taps. “Rory?” A pause. Then, in her father’s voice: “Aurora, open the door.” Her stomach turned. The Heartstone flared hot enough to sting. The trees shuddered. A low groan passed through the boundary, wood straining against wood. The sound continued downward, deep under the earth, until Rory felt it through the soles of her boots. Soil bulged around the roots. White flowers nodded violently though the air remained dead. From the path came the sound of bare feet. Slow. Wet. One step, then another. Rory snatched up her phone. The screen had cracked across one corner, but the camera still worked. She held it toward the path. The figure had reached the edge of the torchlight. Its borrowed face no longer resembled her. Features shifted beneath a translucent surface, sliding through expressions and identities: Eva’s dark, furious eyes; her father’s stern mouth; her mother’s worried brow. Then Evan’s face emerged. Rory’s breath stopped. He looked as he had the morning she left Cardiff: handsome in the polished, deliberate way people trusted, hair neat, jaw bruised where she had finally struck back. His mouth curved into the smile he used before apologising. “There you are,” he said. This time the voice came from the path, not the screen. Rory lowered the phone. The path was still empty. On the display, Evan took another step. Her body remembered before her mind did. Shoulders drawing in. Wrist throbbing where his fingers had once closed. That old calculation—tone, distance, exits—returned with nauseating ease. “There you are,” it repeated. “You always make everything difficult.” The flowers folded beneath its unseen feet. Rory tightened her grip on the phone until the cracked edge bit her palm. Fear wanted her small. Evan had always wanted the same thing. Perhaps that was why the creature had chosen his face. “Poor choice,” she said, though her voice shook. The thing stopped. “You should’ve used someone I’d open a door for.” Its smile vanished. The pendant pulsed violently. Once. Twice. Each beat cast crimson light across Rory’s hands. The silver chain lifted from her skin as if tugged toward the clearing. Not toward the creature. Past it. The portal lay ahead. Rory looked down at the flowers. The thing disturbed them despite being invisible. That gave her its position. The path was narrow, but not impossibly so. To her right, wild roses formed a dense bank beneath the trees. To her left, bluebells spread through tall grass. The flowers along the right edge leaned away from the creature before its steps landed. Proximity, not pressure. A map. On the screen, Evan’s face softened. “You can’t run from me forever.” “I don’t need forever.” Rory hurled the torch to the left. It struck the grass and rolled, the beam spinning wildly. Shadows wheeled. The bluebells recoiled in a broad wave as the creature turned toward the movement. Rory ran right. Thorns seized her jeans and raked her hands. She drove through the roses shoulder-first, shielding her face. Behind her, the phone screen filled with static. Something rushed through the path with a noise like a crowd inhaling. She broke into the clearing. Moonlight poured down where no opening should have existed in the canopy. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in concentric rings. At the centre stood a slab of black earth, upright and narrow, its surface swallowing light. Not stone. A doorway. The Heartstone burned against her chest. Rory sprinted toward it. The clearing stretched with every stride. The upright darkness remained twenty feet away, then twenty feet, then twenty feet. Flowers whipped against her boots. Her breath tore at her throat. Behind her, Eva screamed. Not called. Screamed. Rory faltered. The sound ended in a wet choke. She took one backward step before sense reasserted itself. Not Eva. Not real. She turned toward the doorway and saw, in its lightless surface, her bedroom reflected. Her bed. The chair by the window. The familiar patch of damp on the ceiling. A figure stood in the corner. The one that had whispered Richmond. It was small, no more than a child, draped in a white shift. Long hair concealed its face. One thin arm rose and pointed—not at Rory, but below her. She looked down. The flowers around her boots were closing. All of them. A perfect circle tightened inward. Rory lunged. The distance to the doorway collapsed at once. She hit the black surface with both hands. It was warm and soft. It yielded like skin. Something caught the silver chain at the back of her neck. Rory choked. The pendant snapped tight against her throat as she was pulled backward. She clawed at the chain, found the clasp, missed it. Behind her, Evan whispered into her hair. “You never know when to stop.” The crescent scar on her wrist touched the black doorway. The darkness split. Cold seized her arm. Not air—hands, dozens of small hands gripping from the other side. They pulled. The chain broke. Rory fell forward into freezing dark as the Heartstone tore free. For one sick instant she saw it suspended behind her, crimson and blazing, caught between long colourless fingers. Then the grove vanished. She struck damp ground hard enough to empty her lungs. Noise crashed over her: wind, traffic in the distance, leaves rattling, the bark of a fox. Ordinary night sounds, deafening in their abundance. Rory rolled onto her back. Trees swayed overhead. The moon hung above Richmond Park, lower than before. Her phone lay beside her. The screen read 3:17 p.m. She stared at it. Sunlight should have filled the sky, but night pressed close on every side. The clock flickered. 11:44 p.m. One minute had passed. Rory touched her throat. The chain was gone. A thin welt crossed her skin. Something warm rested in her clenched left hand. She opened her fingers. The Heartstone glowed against her palm. Relief struck so sharply she almost laughed. Then she saw the hand holding it. The nails were packed with black earth. The fingers were too long. The wrist bore a small crescent-shaped scar. Rory’s own left hand remained braced on the ground beside her. The other hand tightened around the pendant. From somewhere beneath her, in her own voice, something whispered: “Let me in.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2587
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2587
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count3
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"imposing"
count1
7
word"resolved"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"warmth"
4"pulse"
5"pulsed"
6"imposing"
7"resolved"
8"stomach"
9"familiar"
10"perfect"
11"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences343
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences343
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
3"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences354
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2579
ratio0
matches(empty)
62.50% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Behind her, Eva screamed."
1"Behind her, Evan whispered into her hair."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount2516
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.51
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond6
Park4
London1
Eva9
Heartstone9
Cool2
Rory38
Hel1
Evan5
Cardiff1
One7
persons
0"Eva"
1"Heartstone"
2"Rory"
3"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Hel"
4"Cardiff"
5"One"
globalScore0.745
windowScore0.667
97.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences191
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like bones"
1"seemed smaller this time"
2"sounded like"
3"appeared grey and slack, the bright blue eyes filmed white"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.388
wordCount2579
matches
0"not at Rory, but below her"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences354
matches
0"mentioned that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs208
mean12.4
std13.74
cv1.108
sampleLengths
06
112
284
39
43
56
624
754
83
914
108
1138
122
136
1452
1511
1654
171
188
192
201
2156
2210
237
245
255
262
2719
2854
295
302
3121
322
3314
343
356
365
373
3844
397
406
4127
426
434
4448
454
465
478
4816
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences343
matches
0"been given"
1"was pulled"
2"was gone"
3"were packed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs431
matches(empty)
78.29% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences354
ratio0.023
matches
0"The pendant responded near a Hel portal—if the information she had been given was accurate, and if “Hel” meant what it sounded like."
1"Wild roses, bluebells, poppies, snowdrops—flowers that belonged to different months and different soils, blooming together in profusion."
2"Screens sometimes caught what eyes did not; that principle appeared in enough folklore to warrant testing."
3"It wore—or seemed to wear—something long and dark that blended into the shadows beneath it."
4"Features shifted beneath a translucent surface, sliding through expressions and identities: Eva’s dark, furious eyes; her father’s stern mouth; her mother’s worried brow."
5"That old calculation—tone, distance, exits—returned with nauseating ease."
6"One thin arm rose and pointed—not at Rory, but below her."
7"Not air—hands, dozens of small hands gripping from the other side."
81.84% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount334
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay warm against her"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.05389221556886228
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.011976047904191617
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences354
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences354
mean7.29
std5.4
cv0.741
sampleLengths
06
112
220
318
44
542
69
73
86
92
105
1111
126
136
144
155
1611
1728
183
194
202
218
225
233
2419
2511
268
272
286
2912
3014
3112
324
3310
3411
356
3615
375
3828
391
408
412
421
4315
4415
4514
4612
4710
487
495
47.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.3163841807909605
totalSentences354
uniqueOpeners112
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount13
totalSentences295
matches
0"Somewhere ahead, water dripped."
1"Only a little."
2"Then the next turned."
3"Then the next."
4"Away from Rory."
5"Only the path and its"
6"Then autofocus sharpened."
7"Soft, breathless, terrified."
8"Then, in her father’s voice:"
9"Then Evan’s face emerged."
10"Perhaps that was why the"
11"Then the grove vanished."
12"Then she saw the hand"
ratio0.044
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount61
totalSentences295
matches
0"She had seen photographs."
1"She had read three separate"
2"Her voice vanished into the"
3"She checked her phone."
4"Her voice seemed smaller this"
5"She put the phone away"
6"It had been cold when"
7"It had begun to warm"
8"She had spent the day"
9"She considered turning back."
10"It was not cowardice to"
11"It was intelligence."
12"She held still long enough"
13"She backed through the boundary."
14"Her heel struck something hard."
15"She glanced down, expecting a"
16"She had walked three full"
17"She had misjudged the distance"
18"She stared along the path."
19"Her scalp prickled."
ratio0.207
98.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount213
totalSentences295
matches
0"The standing stones were not"
1"Rory stopped beneath the trees"
2"She had seen photographs."
3"She had read three separate"
4"Nothing had mentioned that the"
5"Her voice vanished into the"
6"Rory lowered the torch and"
7"Silence could be noisy in"
8"Boilers knocked behind walls."
9"Traffic sighed several streets away."
10"Someone somewhere always dragged a"
11"She checked her phone."
12"The lock screen still displayed"
13"This is an appalling idea."
14"Rory had shared it before"
15"The blue location icon now"
16"Her voice seemed smaller this"
17"She put the phone away"
18"The Heartstone lay warm against"
19"It had been cold when"
ratio0.722
84.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences295
matches
0"Even here, far enough into"
1"If the Heartstone wakes, go"
2"Even if she had followed,"
3"To her right, wild roses"
4"To her left, bluebells spread"
ratio0.017
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She had read three separate descriptions, all irritatingly vague, and had marked the location from the only account that gave usable directions: west from the p…"
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, though her voice shook"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"The pendant responded (respond)"
2"it repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.333
87.8201%