Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRJY8R6FSFMV6X9TDJ9A31

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The man ahead of her ran like someone who had done it before. No panic, no wasted motion, just a long steady stride that ate the pavement and a canvas holdall clutched to his chest like a child. Quinn had eleven feet on him at the top of Inverness Street. She had nine by the bottom. "Police! Stop where you are!" He didn't. They never did, but most of them at least made a show of considering it. This one glanced over his shoulder, saw her, and went faster. Rain sheeted off the market awnings and turned the cobbles into black glass. Her heel skated, she caught herself on a shuttered stall, and a sheet of tarpaulin dumped a gallon of cold water down her collar. Eighteen years. Eighteen years and she still ran in the wrong shoes. "Herrera!" That landed. His head snapped round at the sound of his own name, and for half a second his rhythm broke. Olive skin, dark curls flattened to his skull, something silver bouncing at his throat. Twenty-nine years old and struck off the register. Former paramedic, address in Kentish Town, and blood on his sleeve that was not his own. He hurdled a stack of crates and vanished left into the arches. Quinn hit her radio. "Control, Quinn. Foot pursuit, male IC3, dark jacket, canvas bag, heading west through Camden Lock towards Chalk Farm Road. Requesting units." The radio coughed static back at her. Not a dead spot, not here, she had stood on this corner a hundred times and heard control clear as a bell. The static had a texture to it. Almost a rhythm. She stopped listening and ran. The arches under the railway stank of frying onions and old beer. Fairy lights hung dead in loops between the pillars. Herrera was forty feet ahead, one hand out, touching the brickwork as he went like a man counting doors in the dark. He knew where he was going. That was the part she hated. A frightened man ran anywhere. A man with a destination ran somewhere specific, and specific meant other people, and other people meant a doorway shutting in her face. "You're bleeding on my crime scene," she shouted. "Somebody's blood, anyway." He answered without turning. His voice came back flat and breathless, the accent Spanish under a decade of London. "He would have died. You understand? He would have died on the floor." "Then stop and tell me his name." "You cannot help him." "Try me." He went right at the bridge and dropped out of sight. Quinn skidded to the corner. A steel gate stood open where no gate should be open at half eleven on a Tuesday, padlock hanging from its hasp, chain pooled on the ground like a shed skin. Beyond it, a flight of concrete steps went down into the earth. White tile, cracked and yellowed. A ghost of old lettering on the wall, half a word in that particular red the Underground had used before the war. She knew every disused station on this line. This staircase was not on any plan she had ever signed for. Something small and pale lay on the third step down. She crouched and picked it up with two fingers. A disc of bone, the size of a two pound coin, polished smooth on one face and cut with a groove on the other. Warm. Not hand-warm. Warmer than that, warm like something that had been sitting in the sun on a day when there had been no sun for a fortnight. Three years ago she had stood in a stairwell in Deptford with a torch in her hand and Morris's voice in her earpiece telling her he was fine, absolutely fine, just having a look, back in two ticks. She had found his torch. She had found one shoe. The coroner had written a word she did not believe, and the file had gone up and never come back down, and every senior officer she asked had developed the same sudden interest in their paperwork. She had promised herself, at the funeral, that the next time she found a staircase like that she would go down it. Quinn stood up. Water ran off her sleeve and pattered on the tile. "Sod it." The steps went further than they had any right to. Twenty of them, then a turn, then twenty more, the air changing as she went from wet October to something dry and mineral, like the inside of a kiln. The sound of the rain died in one clean cut, as though someone upstairs had closed a lid. At the bottom, a corridor. And at the end of the corridor, light. Not electric light. It came in colours electric light did not do, greens too green, a violet that made her back teeth ache, and it moved. She flattened herself against the tile and listened, and heard what she should have heard as an empty tunnel and instead heard as a market. Hundreds of voices. The scrape of crates. A woman laughing. Somewhere a bell, or something with the shape of a bell, ringing three times and stopping. Under Camden. Under a city she had policed for eighteen years. Quinn drew a breath through her nose. She checked her watch, out of instinct, the old worn leather strap she had bought herself the day she made detective. The second hand crawled. Not stopped. Crawled, like it was moving through syrup, and she watched it long enough to be sure and then made herself stop watching. She put the bone disc in her palm and walked to the mouth of the corridor. The platform opened out below her in a long shallow bowl. Where the tracks should have been, stalls. Hundreds of them, jammed rib to rib along both sides of the trench, canvas and iron and painted wood, hung with lanterns that burned without smoke. She saw a table of eyes in jars, all of them tracking her. She saw a man selling folded shadows out of a suitcase, each one pinned like a butterfly. She saw a queue of ordinary Londoners in ordinary anoraks waiting patiently at a stall that sold nothing she could name, and every one of them had the sunken, calm look of the properly desperate. And halfway down, moving fast through the crowd with his holdall over one shoulder, Tomás Herrera. She started down the steps. A hand closed on her wrist. Not roughly. The way a nurse takes a pulse. The woman beside her had not been beside her a moment ago. Tall, wrapped in a coat sewn from something that might have been fur and might have been feathers, with a scarf across the lower half of her face. Her eyes went to Quinn's fist. To the shape of it. "Token," she said. "Show it, or go back up." Quinn opened her hand. The woman looked at the bone disc for a long moment, then looked at Quinn's warrant card pocket, then at her wet shoes, then at her face. Something behind the scarf moved. A smile, possibly. "That token belongs to the healer." "He dropped it." "Nobody drops one." The grip tightened, just slightly. "You know what happens to police here, Detective?" "No." "Neither do we." The woman released her and stepped back with a small bow, gesturing at the stairs, at the lanterns, at the whole impossible bright mouth of the place. "Nobody's ever been stupid enough to come down." Behind her, the market noise dropped away in a spreading circle, stall by stall by stall, and eight hundred faces turned to look at Harlow Quinn standing on the steps.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The grip tightened just [just]"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.211
leniency0.421
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.105
96.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1284
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1284
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"absolutely"
count1
1
word"electric"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"absolutely"
1"electric"
2"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1284
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1181
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.76
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Street1
Kentish1
Town1
Spanish1
London1
Tuesday1
Underground1
Deptford1
Morris1
October1
Camden1
Londoners1
Tomás1
Herrera2
Quinn9
Harlow1
persons
0"Underground"
1"Morris"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Quinn"
5"Harlow"
places
0"Inverness"
1"Street"
2"Kentish"
3"Town"
4"London"
5"Deptford"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1284
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean27.32
std26.59
cv0.973
sampleLengths
038
118
25
365
412
51
659
712
825
939
105
1183
1211
1319
1413
157
164
172
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2020
2119
2252
2384
2422
2513
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2813
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3011
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3216
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3416
355
3615
3751
389
394
4035
416
423
4316
441
4538
4630
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs172
matches
0"was going"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1183
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"whole impossible bright mouth"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.030431107354184278
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005917159763313609
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean11.46
std9.01
cv0.786
sampleLengths
013
125
212
36
45
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615
711
813
924
102
1110
121
132
1419
1514
168
1716
1812
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217
2222
237
243
255
2612
279
2822
296
306
315
3223
338
343
354
3615
3713
387
394
402
4111
425
4331
4412
455
4622
478
4812
4910
66.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4375
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners49
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Almost a rhythm."
1"Somewhere a bell, or something"
ratio0.023
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences87
matches
0"She had nine by the"
1"They never did, but most"
2"Her heel skated, she caught"
3"His head snapped round at"
4"He hurdled a stack of"
5"She stopped listening and ran."
6"He knew where he was"
7"He answered without turning."
8"His voice came back flat"
9"He went right at the"
10"She knew every disused station"
11"She crouched and picked it"
12"She had found his torch."
13"She had found one shoe."
14"She had promised herself, at"
15"It came in colours electric"
16"She flattened herself against the"
17"She checked her watch, out"
18"She put the bone disc"
19"She saw a table of"
ratio0.276
86.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences87
matches
0"The man ahead of her"
1"Quinn had eleven feet on"
2"She had nine by the"
3"They never did, but most"
4"This one glanced over his"
5"Rain sheeted off the market"
6"Her heel skated, she caught"
7"His head snapped round at"
8"Olive skin, dark curls flattened"
9"He hurdled a stack of"
10"Quinn hit her radio."
11"The radio coughed static back"
12"The static had a texture"
13"She stopped listening and ran."
14"The arches under the railway"
15"Fairy lights hung dead in"
16"Herrera was forty feet ahead,"
17"He knew where he was"
18"That was the part she"
19"A frightened man ran anywhere."
ratio0.747
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"To the shape of it."
ratio0.011
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Former paramedic, address in Kentish Town, and blood on his sleeve that was not his own."
1"Warmer than that, warm like something that had been sitting in the sun on a day when there had been no sun for a fortnight."
2"Three years ago she had stood in a stairwell in Deptford with a torch in her hand and Morris's voice in her earpiece telling her he was fine, absolutely fine, j…"
3"She saw a queue of ordinary Londoners in ordinary anoraks waiting patiently at a stall that sold nothing she could name, and every one of them had the sunken, c…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
97.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.105
leniency0.211
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.105
94.5724%