Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRKF0Q0T6SK27838JZXN0N

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn's torch caught the medallion first. A flash of silver bouncing on a chest, Saint Christopher swinging free of a jacket collar, and then the man wearing it was gone round the corner of Inverness Street. "Police! Stop where you are!" He didn't. They never did. Her boots slammed through a puddle deep enough to swallow her ankle. Cold water climbed her trouser leg. She'd chased men across eighteen years of this city, over scaffolding, through kebab shop kitchens, once along the roof of a Peckham bus depot, and she'd learned that the ones who ran in a straight line were amateurs. This one wasn't running straight. He was running a route. Herrera. Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, struck off the register for reasons the NHS file described as "unauthorised administration of non-formulary substances", which was a lovely long way of saying nobody wanted to write down what he'd actually done. He clipped a bin. It went over, spilling market rubbish across the wet pavement, cabbage leaves and cardboard and something that stank of fish. Quinn hurdled it without breaking stride. "You're making this longer than it needs to be!" Camden after midnight had its own weather. Rain came sideways off the canal, orange under the streetlamps, and the shuttered stalls of the market threw back her footsteps twice over. Somewhere behind her a night bus hissed. Ahead, Herrera vaulted a low wall like a man who'd been taught to move with a stretcher in his hands, all economy, no showing off. She was forty-one and she felt every year of it in her knees. She'd still be there at the end. That was her whole method. Not speed. Attendance. He went left where the road narrowed, past a shuttered tattoo parlour with a hand-painted dragon peeling off the board. Then right, into a service alley she'd walked a hundred times and never once looked at properly. "Herrera!" He glanced back. That was the moment she saw his face, olive skin slick, curls flattened to his forehead, and his expression wasn't the guilty scramble she'd expected. It was worry. Not for himself. For her. "Go home, Detective." Spanish under the London. He barely raised his voice. "Please. Go home." Then he did something she couldn't explain. He put both hands flat on a brick wall at the alley's end, the dead end, the wall she'd have sworn to a jury was solid, and he pressed. A seam opened. Not a door. There was no frame, no hinge, no handle. The brickwork simply parted along a line that hadn't existed a second earlier, and behind it went down. Stairs. Tiled walls the colour of old teeth. And on the tiles, in a font she recognised from her grandmother's photographs, the words CAMDEN ROAD (DISUSED). Herrera stepped through and the seam began to close behind him. Quinn's body decided before her brain caught up. She threw herself sideways and got her shoulder into the gap, and the wall pressed against her like a held breath, and then it gave, and she was falling down the first four steps on her hip. She landed hard. Her torch cracked and died. Above her, the brick sighed shut. No street noise. No rain. The silence came down like a hand over her mouth. "Get up." Her own voice, flat, in the dark. "Get up, Quinn." She got up. Her palm found tile, then a handrail furred with dust. She went down. Eighty steps by her count, curving, the air warming as she descended and thickening with a smell she'd never met before, cardamom and hot metal and wet fur, layered over the deep old stink of coal and rat. Light bled up from below. Green, then gold. She came out onto a platform and stopped. The tunnel had been dressed for business. Stalls filled the length of it, trestles and packing crates and one made from the gutted shell of a 1960s tube carriage, lit by lanterns that burned with no flame she could name. Cables strung the roof like nerves. A hundred people, or things shaped roughly like people, moved between the tables. A woman with no shadow weighed grey powder on brass scales. A man sold teeth from a velvet tray, arranged by size, and the teeth were not all human. Somebody was singing in a language that made her back molars ache. Painted along the curved wall, above the old advertisements for cigarettes and seaside towns, hung a hand-lettered banner: NO STEEL. NO NAMES. NO DEBTS UNPAID. Eighteen years. Eighteen years of witness statements that didn't add up, of CCTV that greyed out for ninety seconds at a time, of coroners writing "misadventure" with their jaws tight. Eighteen years, and it had all been down here, humming away, forty feet under a road she drove twice a week. And three years ago, DS Alan Morris had walked out of a car and into nothing at all, and she had told his wife she'd find out why. Quinn's hand went to her inside pocket. Not for her warrant card. For the token. She'd taken it out of Morris's jacket at the mortuary and never logged it. Bone, yellow-white, the size of a poker chip, drilled through and worn smooth on one face. Eleven marks scratched into it. She'd carried it every day since, the way other people carried a photograph, and she had never known what it was. Down the platform, a shape peeled off the wall. He was seven feet tall and built like scaffolding, and he wore a bus conductor's coat with the buttons done up wrong. His eyes were set too far apart. He held out one grey hand, palm up, and said nothing at all, and the whole nearest section of the market went quiet in a way that told her this was the part where people either paid or stopped existing. She put the token in his palm. The conductor looked at it. Turned it over with a thumbnail like a chisel. Something happened to his face that she chose to read as surprise. He stepped aside. Quinn walked onto the platform of the Veil Market with her heart going like a fist on a door, and she made herself slow down, because running is how you tell a crowd you're prey. Herrera stood forty feet away, at a stall hung with dried herbs and surgical clamps, arguing with a woman in a butcher's apron. He was pressing gauze against his own forearm, over the old knife scar, and his fingers shook. He turned. Saw her. Every bit of colour left him. "You cannot be here." He came at her fast, low, urgent, hands out like he was talking a jumper down off a ledge. "Do you understand what you just did? Whose token did you use?" "You tell me." "Detective, listen to me very carefully. Walk back up those stairs. Don't look at anyone. Don't accept anything. Don't let them hear your name." "Alan Morris." She said it loud. She said it clear, and she watched it land, and she watched the herb-seller's head come up sharp, and the tooth merchant's, and the woman with no shadow set down her scales. "Detective Sergeant Alan Morris. My partner. He came down here and he came back up dead, and one of you knows why." The singing stopped. Every lantern along that platform, all sixty or seventy of them, guttered at once, and in the half dark a hundred faces turned towards her, and behind her the conductor's coat rustled as he closed off the stairs. Herrera's hand closed hard round her wrist. "Oh, you stupid, brave woman," he said. "Run."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1280
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1280
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"silence"
2"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1280
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1175
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.51
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Saint1
Christopher1
Inverness1
Street1
Peckham1
Herrera6
London1
Alan1
Morris2
Veil1
Market1
Quinn5
Eighteen3
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Herrera"
3"Alan"
4"Morris"
5"Market"
6"Quinn"
places
0"Inverness"
1"Street"
2"London"
3"Eighteen"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1280
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"learned that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean27.23
std22.49
cv0.826
sampleLengths
036
15
25
366
437
530
69
762
828
937
101
1136
1215
137
1461
1526
1611
1745
188
1921
2012
2154
228
238
24100
2525
2651
2728
2812
293
3056
319
3269
337
3426
353
3635
3740
3810
3935
403
4124
4260
433
4438
457
468
94.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences101
matches
0"was gone"
1"been taught"
2"been dressed"
29.06% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs195
matches
0"wasn't running"
1"was running"
2"was falling"
3"was singing"
4"was talking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences111
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1181
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"fast, low, urgent, hands"
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.02540220152413209
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005080440304826418
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean11.53
std10.45
cv0.906
sampleLengths
06
130
25
32
43
512
66
738
85
95
101
1136
124
1320
146
159
167
1723
187
1925
2013
217
225
232
241
2520
2617
271
283
2925
303
313
322
337
345
353
367
3729
383
393
408
4118
421
437
4418
4511
468
4737
483
495
70.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4774774774774775
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences89
matches
0"Somewhere behind her a night"
1"Then right, into a service"
2"Then he did something she"
ratio0.034
76.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences89
matches
0"They never did."
1"Her boots slammed through a"
2"She'd chased men across eighteen"
3"He was running a route."
4"He clipped a bin."
5"It went over, spilling market"
6"She was forty-one and she"
7"She'd still be there at"
8"He went left where the"
9"He glanced back."
10"It was worry."
11"He barely raised his voice."
12"He put both hands flat"
13"She threw herself sideways and"
14"She landed hard."
15"Her torch cracked and died."
16"Her own voice, flat, in"
17"She got up."
18"Her palm found tile, then"
19"She went down."
ratio0.36
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences89
matches
0"Quinn's torch caught the medallion"
1"A flash of silver bouncing"
2"They never did."
3"Her boots slammed through a"
4"She'd chased men across eighteen"
5"This one wasn't running straight."
6"He was running a route."
7"Tomás Herrera, twenty-nine, struck off"
8"He clipped a bin."
9"It went over, spilling market"
10"Quinn hurdled it without breaking"
11"Camden after midnight had its"
12"Rain came sideways off the"
13"She was forty-one and she"
14"She'd still be there at"
15"That was her whole method."
16"He went left where the"
17"He glanced back."
18"That was the moment she"
19"It was worry."
ratio0.708
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.94% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Ahead, Herrera vaulted a low wall like a man who'd been taught to move with a stretcher in his hands, all economy, no showing off."
1"Eighty steps by her count, curving, the air warming as she descended and thickening with a smell she'd never met before, cardamom and hot metal and wet fur, lay…"
2"He held out one grey hand, palm up, and said nothing at all, and the whole nearest section of the market went quiet in a way that told her this was the part whe…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
32.35% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"the NHS file described (describe)"
1"Eighteen years of witness statements that didn't add up (did add up)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.235
leniency0.471
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.235
88.7472%