Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCX2G9DVJDEYSQ239CHSTHT

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Duration:
1m 24s
Cost:
$0.028121
Provider:
Together

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The emerald glare of The Raven’s Nest bled downward through the Soho rain, pooling on the pavement like spilled ink. Rory stood beneath it, her straight black hair darkened by the damp, her bright blue eyes fixed on the frosted glass of the door she had avoided for six years. At five-foot-six she seemed smaller against the weight of the street, her delivery jacket soaked through at the shoulders, the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist pale and visible where she gripped her collar against the chill. She had meant only to pass by, to take the long route back to the flat above—her flat, technically—after the last drop for Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress. But the rain had turned relentless, and her feet had carried her here as if by an old, buried compass. Inside, the bar breathed with the hush of a held secret. Dim amber light caught on old maps pinned to the walls—Europe fractured into borders that no longer existed, coastlines inked in fading black lines. Black-and-white photographs watched from between them: strangers in trench coats, soldiers with hollow stares, rooms that looked like interrogation chambers. The air smelled of polished oak, whiskey that had soaked into the grain, and something older—pipe smoke and silence. He was behind the bar. Silas Blackwood looked up from the glass he was polishing with a cloth that had seen better decades. His hazel eyes, ringed now with lines that had not been there when she was nineteen, held hers without surprise, as if he had been expecting her since the day she had fled Cardiff. His hair, once auburn, had surrendered more ground to grey, streaking through the neat trim of his beard like frost. At six-foot-one he still carried the quiet authority of a man who had once moved through borders with false papers in his pocket, though the slight limp in his left leg—legacy of the botched Prague operation—anchored him now behind this wooden fortress. The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted as he set the glass down with deliberate care. “Aurora,” he said. Not Carter. Not Rory, the name her friends used, but the full weight of her birth, spoken softly, without accusation. She pushed the door shut behind her. The rain stayed outside. “It’s Rory now.” “I know.” His voice was lower than she remembered, roughened by years of cigarettes he no longer smoked. “You’ve been living upstairs since you were nineteen. I heard you come in every night through the back stairwell. I heard you leave before dawn.” She moved closer, her boots quiet on the floorboards. She did not sit, not yet, though the stool before him waited like an open invitation. “Then you know I’m not here to catch up.” “You’re soaked.” “It’s London.” She unbuttoned her jacket, revealing the simple dark sweater beneath, and for a moment the crescent scar on her wrist caught the light as she pushed her damp hair back from her face. “I work deliveries now. For Yu-Fei. You probably know that too.” “I do. I also know you left Cardiff University. Pre-law. Your father Brendan must have been disappointed.” The mention of her father—Brendan Carter, the barrister with the precise voice and the unshakable belief that justice was a matter of proper filing—landed like a stone in still water. “My mother understood,” Rory said. “Jennifer always understood more than she said. But I didn’t leave to disappoint anyone. I left because Eva told me to. Because Evan—” She stopped. The name tasted like rust. Silas did not fill the silence with sympathy. He was an intelligence operative turned bar owner, accustomed to letting people speak into emptiness until the truth surfaced. He only nodded, the movement slight, and reached for a bottle without asking what she wanted. “I don’t remember asking,” she said. “You don’t have to. You’re here.” She watched him pour—something amber and sharp—into a glass and slide it across the bar. Her fingers closed around it, and she noticed, with an ache she didn’t expect, that her hands had changed. They were thinner, harder, the nails clipped short for carrying boxes up staircases, for gripping handlebars in rain, for surviving without a net. Once they had turned the pages of law texts, had held pens with ambitions of courtrooms and closing arguments. Now they held whiskey in a bar she had spent years pretending did not exist beneath her feet. She drank. It burned cleanly. “You changed,” Silas said, not unkindly, watching her with that same disarming stillness that had made people confess things in Prague they should have kept hidden. “So did you,” she lied, though her eyes betrayed her, scanning him, noting the deeper grey in his hair, the way the limp had become more pronounced, the ring that never left his hand. “I retired,” he corrected. “That’s not change. That’s surrender with a pension. I opened The Raven’s Nest. The green sign outside—” He gestured vaguely toward the street. “—it’s a beacon for people who need a place that isn’t on any map. The back room—” He turned slightly, indicating the bookshelf along the eastern wall, the one that never seemed quite flush with the masonry. “—is still there. Still used. For people who need to talk without being heard.” Rory looked at the bookshelf. She had noticed it a dozen times from the stairwell landing, had wondered about the hinge that didn’t match the others. She had never asked. “Why did you let me stay?” “In the flat? Because someone needed to be there who wasn’t going to sell your secrets to the highest bidder.” “I don’t have secrets,” she said. “You left an abusive ex without filing a report. You abandoned a degree your parents paid for with Welsh savings and Irish stubbornness. You work under a false name—Laila, is it?—for a restaurant owner who asks no questions. You live above a bar owned by a retired spymaster, and you never once came down the front stairs to ask me why I have old photographs of dead men on my walls.” He leaned closer, his voice dropping. “You have secrets, Aurora Carter. You’ve just been kind enough to keep them from me.” The use of her aliases—Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora—did not shock her; she had carried them like armor. What unsettled her was the precision with which he catalogued her disappearances. He had watched. From below, from behind the bar, through the network of contacts the back room still served, he had watched her shrink her life to the dimensions of a delivery route and a flat with a separate entrance. And he had let her. She touched the scar on her wrist, the crescent shape a pale reminder of a childhood accident long before Evan, long before London—an old wound that had taught her early how quickly the body could betray itself. “I was quick,” she said. “That was always the thing about me. Quick out-of-the-box thinking. That’s what everyone said. At Cardiff, my tutors said I’d be a barrister like my father, but sharper. Then I wasn’t. Then I was running. And now I’m—what? A delivery girl with a false name and a scar that won’t fade?” “You’re alive,” Silas said. “That’s not nothing.” “It’s not enough.” The weight of the years settled between them then—not as anger, but as regret, thick and unspoken. He regretted the Prague operation that had left him with this limp, the retirement that had turned him into a keeper of other people’s secrets rather than a participant in the world. He regretted that when she had arrived, soaked and terrified, he had given her the flat and the silence instead of the hand she had clearly needed. And she regretted every morning she had climbed the back stairs without turning the brass handle of the front door, every delivery made in rain, every law text left unopened, every version of herself she had abandoned on the way to becoming someone who could survive Evan and still not know who she was meant to be. “I should have knocked,” Rory said quietly. “You shouldn’t have had to need to,” he replied. The bar seemed to hold its breath around them. Outside, the rain had softened, though the green neon still glowed, painting the wet street in shades of emerald. Inside, the old maps kept their silence, the black-and-white faces watched without judgment, and the bookshelf stood slightly ajar, waiting. Rory set her glass down. Her bright blue eyes met his hazel ones, and for the first time in six years she did not look away. “Show me the room,” she said. Silas pushed away from the bar, the limp in his left leg noticeable but unhurried, the signet ring catching the light one final time before he turned toward the shelf. “It’s been waiting,” he said. “Like everything else.” She followed. Not as a fugitive, not as a ghost in the flat above, but as the woman she was—twenty-five, sharp-edged, bearing the crescent scar and the weight of time, finally stepping through a door she had kept closed for too long.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
42.11% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"He turned slightly [slightly]"
2"Rory said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.559
leniency1
rawRatio0.158
effectiveRatio0.158
87.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1539
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.27% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1539
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"weight"
count4
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"fractured"
count1
3
word"silence"
count4
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"beacon"
count1
6
word"unsettled"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"chill"
2"fractured"
3"silence"
4"scanning"
5"beacon"
6"unsettled"
7"reminder"
8"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences73
matches
0"e with sympathy"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences73
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1522
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount1160
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Carter"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Europe1
Blackwood1
Cardiff1
Prague3
Carter3
Rory7
Brendan1
Laila1
Aurora1
Malphora1
Evan2
London1
Silas5
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Cheung"
4"Blackwood"
5"Carter"
6"Rory"
7"Brendan"
8"Laila"
9"Malphora"
10"Evan"
11"Silas"
places
0"Soho"
1"Europe"
2"Cardiff"
3"Prague"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
47.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed smaller against the weight of the street, her delivery jacket soaked through at the shoulders, the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist pale and visible where she gripped her collar against the chill"
1"looked like interrogation chambers"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.628
wordCount1522
matches
0"Not Rory, the name her friends used, but the full weight of her birth, spoken softly, without accusat"
1"not as anger, but as regret, thick"
2"Not as a fugitive, not as a ghost in the flat above, but as the woman she was"
3"not as a ghost in the flat above, but as the woman she was"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"expect, that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean43.49
std38.78
cv0.892
sampleLengths
0134
174
25
3132
423
514
643
734
82
946
1017
1165
1243
136
146
1594
165
1726
1834
1978
2036
2120
226
2392
2475
2593
267
273
28133
297
309
3148
3232
3338
3442
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"was meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs191
matches
0"was polishing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences88
ratio0.114
matches
0"She had meant only to pass by, to take the long route back to the flat above—her flat, technically—after the last drop for Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress."
1"Dim amber light caught on old maps pinned to the walls—Europe fractured into borders that no longer existed, coastlines inked in fading black lines."
2"The air smelled of polished oak, whiskey that had soaked into the grain, and something older—pipe smoke and silence."
3"At six-foot-one he still carried the quiet authority of a man who had once moved through borders with false papers in his pocket, though the slight limp in his left leg—legacy of the botched Prague operation—anchored him now behind this wooden fortress."
4"The mention of her father—Brendan Carter, the barrister with the precise voice and the unshakable belief that justice was a matter of proper filing—landed like a stone in still water."
5"She watched him pour—something amber and sharp—into a glass and slide it across the bar."
6"The use of her aliases—Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora—did not shock her; she had carried them like armor."
7"She touched the scar on her wrist, the crescent shape a pale reminder of a childhood accident long before Evan, long before London—an old wound that had taught her early how quickly the body could betray itself."
8"The weight of the years settled between them then—not as anger, but as regret, thick and unspoken."
9"Not as a fugitive, not as a ghost in the flat above, but as the woman she was—twenty-five, sharp-edged, bearing the crescent scar and the weight of time, finally stepping through a door she had kept closed for too long."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1187
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03369839932603201
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.011794439764111205
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean17.3
std13.79
cv0.797
sampleLengths
020
130
237
327
420
511
624
720
819
95
1018
1134
1220
1342
1418
153
162
1718
187
194
203
2118
2225
239
2416
259
262
2735
2811
2917
3030
315
3225
335
348
3519
3616
376
386
3915
4019
4123
4219
4318
442
453
4626
4734
484
4923
55.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.38636363636363635
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners34
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Once they had turned the"
ratio0.017
43.73% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences59
matches
0"She had meant only to"
1"He was behind the bar."
2"His hazel eyes, ringed now"
3"His hair, once auburn, had"
4"She pushed the door shut"
5"His voice was lower than"
6"She moved closer, her boots"
7"She did not sit, not"
8"She unbuttoned her jacket, revealing"
9"He was an intelligence operative"
10"He only nodded, the movement"
11"She watched him pour—something amber"
12"Her fingers closed around it,"
13"They were thinner, harder, the"
14"It burned cleanly."
15"she lied, though her eyes"
16"He gestured vaguely toward the"
17"He turned slightly, indicating the"
18"She had noticed it a"
19"She had never asked."
ratio0.441
95.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences59
matches
0"The emerald glare of The"
1"Rory stood beneath it, her"
2"She had meant only to"
3"The air smelled of polished"
4"He was behind the bar."
5"Silas Blackwood looked up from"
6"His hazel eyes, ringed now"
7"His hair, once auburn, had"
8"The silver signet ring on"
9"She pushed the door shut"
10"The rain stayed outside."
11"His voice was lower than"
12"She moved closer, her boots"
13"She did not sit, not"
14"She unbuttoned her jacket, revealing"
15"The mention of her father—Brendan"
16"The name tasted like rust."
17"Silas did not fill the"
18"He was an intelligence operative"
19"He only nodded, the movement"
ratio0.729
84.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Now they held whiskey in"
ratio0.017
30.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Black-and-white photographs watched from between them: strangers in trench coats, soldiers with hollow stares, rooms that looked like interrogation chambers."
1"Silas Blackwood looked up from the glass he was polishing with a cloth that had seen better decades."
2"At six-foot-one he still carried the quiet authority of a man who had once moved through borders with false papers in his pocket, though the slight limp in his …"
3"She touched the scar on her wrist, the crescent shape a pale reminder of a childhood accident long before Evan, long before London—an old wound that had taught …"
4"He regretted the Prague operation that had left him with this limp, the retirement that had turned him into a keeper of other people’s secrets rather than a par…"
5"And she regretted every morning she had climbed the back stairs without turning the brass handle of the front door, every delivery made in rain, every law text …"
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she lied, though her eyes betrayed her, scanning him, noting the deeper grey in his hair, the way the limp had become more pronounced, the ring that never left his hand"
1"He leaned, his voice dropping"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she lied (lie)"
1"he corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.382
leniency0.765
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.118
78.5941%