Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD4QTAMT1AZ0THPXCN6DW76

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12.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain drummed against Quinn’s trench coat as she sprinted down the alley, boots slapping against wet cobblestones slick with last night’s downpour. The suspect’s footsteps echoed ahead, rapid and purposeful, cutting through the drumming of the storm. She could smell the ozone tang of the recent rain mixed with something else—coppery, faint but unmistakable. Blood. Her leather watch, scarred and worn, caught the occasional lightning flash as she glanced at the time. Fifteen minutes since the body was found in Camden. Fifteen minutes since she’d pulled the surveillance footage and seen him disappear into the tunnels. The suspect—Tomás Herrera—moved like a man who knew every shadow, every shortcut. Quinn had spent eighteen years on the force learning to track predators, and she’d never lost a trail before Morris. Never. “Herrera,” she muttered under her breath, adjusting the grip on her service pistol. “Always hiding in the dark where the pretty girls don’t look.” A figure emerged from a doorway marked only by a faded green neon sign—The Raven’s Nest. The bouncer barely glanced up from his booth as she passed, the gesture a silent acknowledgment of territory she’d only recently begun to respect. Inside, the air hung thick with the ghosts of a thousand conversations: low laughter, clinking glasses, the low thrum of bass from the jukebox in the corner. Quinn’s hand hovered near her holster. She’d been here before, but never with purpose. Never when the stakes were measured in missing persons and bodies that showed up in the Thames. The suspect was already gone. She moved through the bar’s periphery, past maps of forgotten cities and black-and-white photographs of faces she couldn’t name. The bookshelf at the back caught her eye—too perfectly aligned, too deliberate. She pressed her palm against it. The wall yielded with a soft scrape. The hidden room beyond reeked of aged paper and something sweeter, like vanilla and decay. Tables lined with mismatched chairs bore the marks of countless clandestine meetings. Quinn’s boots clicked against the concrete floor as she stepped inside, pistol drawn. A figure stood by the window, back to her. “Tommy?” Her voice was a whisper against the storm outside. He turned slowly. Rainwater dripped from his curly dark hair onto his olive skin, soaking through the collar of his shirt. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck gleamed faintly in the dim light. “Detective Quinn.” His voice carried the lilt of Andalusian Spanish, softened by years in London. “Shouldn’t you be at the station? Debriefing with Davies?” The question hung between them like a blade. “I’ve got a report to file.” She kept her pistol steady. “One that says you’ve been providing medical care to my missing persons.” His expression didn’t flicker. “Medical care? I’m a paramedic, not a miracle worker. If someone needs help, I help them.” “People don’t just go missing, Tomás. Not without reasons.” She took a step closer. “Especially not when they’re found floating in the Thames with signs of struggle.” A low laugh escaped him. “You really think I’d leave such a mess? Detective, I’m a professional. I clean up after people.” Her finger twitched toward her holster. “Who’s ‘people’?” “The right kind of people.” He gestured toward the window. “The ones who make sure we all stay out of trouble.” The sound of approaching footsteps in the alley made her heart skip. Too late to retreat. “You could’ve called,” she said. “I could’ve lied.” He stepped back toward the door. “But I didn’t think you’d actually follow me.” The door swung open. Quinn didn’t hesitate. The stairwell descended into darkness, carved from stone and lined with rusted pipes that dripped condensation onto the steps. Her pistol’s flashlight cut a narrow beam through the gloom as she followed, each step echoing against the concrete walls. Three flights down, then four, until the air grew thick with the scent of damp earth and something older—moss, decay, and the faint metallic bite of iron. At the bottom, a heavy door stood ajar, its brass handle cold to the touch. She paused, hand raised to knock, then lowered it again. Inside, the Veil Market sprawled before her like a fever dream. Stalls made of salvaged materials and salvaged dreams lined the tunnel, their wares displayed on overturned crates and makeshift tables. A woman in a moth-eaten coat haggled over a vial of glowing liquid. A boy with eyes too old for his face sold charms that hummed with barely contained power. And at the far end, standing beside a stall piled with bones and strange symbols, was Tomás. He wore a black duster over his scrubs, his medallion now visible beneath the collar. The scar on his forearm caught the light as he gestured toward a display of syringes filled with substances that shimmered like liquid starlight. “You came.” His voice was quieter now, almost gentle. “I was hoping you would.” “What is this place?” The question tore from her lips as she stepped forward, pistol unwavering. “A market, Detective. For things that shouldn’t exist.” He plucked a small vial from the counter, the liquid inside swirling with hues of midnight blue. “Like you said. Medical care for the right kind of people.” A figure emerged from the shadows behind him—a man whose age was impossible to determine, his skin stretched tight over cheekbones that could cut glass. His eyes were the colour of storm clouds, and they fixed on Quinn with unnerving calm. “Detective Harlow Quinn,” he said, as if reading her thoughts. “I’m surprised you made it down here. Most cops who stumble into the Veil never find their way back up.” Her finger tightened on the trigger. “Who are you?” The man smiled, revealing teeth stained yellow with who-knows-what. “Someone who’s been watching you, Detective. Someone who knows you’re not just chasing a missing person.” Quinn’s pistol wavered slightly as the truth hit her like a punch to the gut. This wasn’t about Herrera anymore. It was about Morris. It was about the three years since her partner’s body had turned up in pieces, the case file marked closed, the supernatural forces she’d glimpsed in his final report now standing right in front of her. “The Nest,” Tomás said softly. “You should go back. This isn’t your fight.” But Quinn’s hand was already moving, the pistol rising to her shoulder. “Let me ask you something, Herrera. When Morris died, what did you see?” The question hung in the air, heavy with accusation. Tomás’s face flickered—just for a moment—with something that might have been guilt, or regret, or recognition. “A ghost,” he said finally. “One of the pretty ones. With a badge.” The man in the shadows stepped forward, and Quinn’s pistol spoke twice, its report echoing off the stone walls. But the bullets didn’t hit their target. They passed through him like smoke, leaving nothing but a scorch mark on the wall where he’d stood. Quinn stumbled back, her heart hammering against her ribs. The figure had been there one moment, gone the next. Tomás stared at the scorch marks, his expression grim. “You really shouldn’t have come down here, Detective.” The stall vendor—a woman whose face was a mosaic of scars and silver hair—spoke up from across the market. “That’ll be three hundred pounds for the bullets, Detective. And you’re buying drinks for the whole tunnel.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she took in the full scope of the market. This wasn’t just a black market. It was a crossroads. A place where the living and the undying traded secrets like currency. “Where’s my partner?” she asked, her voice low and dangerous. Tomás reached into his jacket pocket and pulled out a bone token, its surface carved with symbols she didn’t recognise. “Morris isn’t here, Detective. But someone is.” He held it out toward her. The token pulsed with a faint, ethereal light, and Quinn felt it then—that familiar prickling sensation at the base of her skull, the one that had haunted her dreams since the day she’d identified Morris’s remains. She took the token. And the market went silent. All except for the sound of her own heartbeat, loud enough to drown out everything else.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
28.57% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"He stepped back [back]"
1"Tomás said softly [softly]"
2"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.371
leniency0.743
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.171
78.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1373
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
2"really"
3"slightly"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
30.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1373
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"footsteps"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"aligned"
count1
4
word"clandestine"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"lilt"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"echoing"
count2
10
word"shimmered"
count1
11
word"unwavering"
count1
12
word"wavered"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"mosaic"
count1
15
word"pulsed"
count1
16
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"echoed"
2"measured"
3"aligned"
4"clandestine"
5"whisper"
6"lilt"
7"flicker"
8"gloom"
9"echoing"
10"shimmered"
11"unwavering"
12"wavered"
13"flickered"
14"mosaic"
15"pulsed"
16"familiar"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences91
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1361
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount1092
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.1
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn12
Camden1
Tomás6
Herrera2
Morris3
Raven1
Nest1
Thames1
Saint1
Christopher1
Andalusian1
Spanish1
London1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Morris"
4"Raven"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Spanish"
8"Market"
places
0"Camden"
1"Thames"
2"London"
3"Veil"
globalScore0.951
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if reading her thoughts"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1361
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean23.88
std17.49
cv0.733
sampleLengths
055
141
233
324
467
531
65
737
87
940
109
1110
1234
1324
148
1523
1620
1727
1822
198
2021
2116
225
2317
244
253
2666
2786
2817
2939
3014
3116
3236
3341
3430
359
3625
3760
3813
3925
409
4116
4213
4319
447
4518
4619
4717
4836
4935
93.70% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences91
matches
0"was found"
1"were measured"
2"been guilt"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs182
matches
0"was already moving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences111
ratio0.081
matches
0"She could smell the ozone tang of the recent rain mixed with something else—coppery, faint but unmistakable."
1"The suspect—Tomás Herrera—moved like a man who knew every shadow, every shortcut."
2"A figure emerged from a doorway marked only by a faded green neon sign—The Raven’s Nest."
3"The bookshelf at the back caught her eye—too perfectly aligned, too deliberate."
4"Three flights down, then four, until the air grew thick with the scent of damp earth and something older—moss, decay, and the faint metallic bite of iron."
5"A figure emerged from the shadows behind him—a man whose age was impossible to determine, his skin stretched tight over cheekbones that could cut glass."
6"Tomás’s face flickered—just for a moment—with something that might have been guilt, or regret, or recognition."
7"The stall vendor—a woman whose face was a mosaic of scars and silver hair—spoke up from across the market."
8"The token pulsed with a faint, ethereal light, and Quinn felt it then—that familiar prickling sensation at the base of her skull, the one that had haunted her dreams since the day she’d identified Morris’s remains."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1109
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.028854824165915238
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.010820559062218215
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean12.26
std6.8
cv0.554
sampleLengths
022
115
217
31
417
59
615
712
820
91
1013
1111
1216
1324
1427
156
168
1717
185
1919
2012
216
227
2315
2412
2513
269
2710
283
2918
3013
3115
329
338
3411
3512
364
3716
3814
3913
405
4117
426
432
4410
4511
4612
474
485
499
60.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3963963963963964
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners44
37.88% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Too late to retreat."
ratio0.011
79.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences88
matches
0"She could smell the ozone"
1"Her leather watch, scarred and"
2"she muttered under her breath,"
3"She’d been here before, but"
4"She moved through the bar’s"
5"She pressed her palm against"
6"Her voice was a whisper"
7"He turned slowly."
8"His voice carried the lilt"
9"She kept her pistol steady"
10"His expression didn’t flicker."
11"She took a step closer"
12"Her finger twitched toward her"
13"He gestured toward the window"
14"He stepped back toward the"
15"Her pistol’s flashlight cut a"
16"She paused, hand raised to"
17"He wore a black duster"
18"His voice was quieter now,"
19"He plucked a small vial"
ratio0.352
33.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences88
matches
0"Rain drummed against Quinn’s trench"
1"The suspect’s footsteps echoed ahead,"
2"She could smell the ozone"
3"Her leather watch, scarred and"
4"The suspect—Tomás Herrera—moved like a"
5"Quinn had spent eighteen years"
6"she muttered under her breath,"
7"A figure emerged from a"
8"The bouncer barely glanced up"
9"Quinn’s hand hovered near her"
10"She’d been here before, but"
11"The suspect was already gone."
12"She moved through the bar’s"
13"The bookshelf at the back"
14"She pressed her palm against"
15"The wall yielded with a"
16"The hidden room beyond reeked"
17"Tables lined with mismatched chairs"
18"Quinn’s boots clicked against the"
19"A figure stood by the"
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The scar on his forearm caught the light as he gestured toward a display of syringes filled with substances that shimmered like liquid starlight."
1"A figure emerged from the shadows behind him—a man whose age was impossible to determine, his skin stretched tight over cheekbones that could cut glass."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The question tore, pistol unwavering"
1"he said, as if reading her thoughts"
2"she asked, her voice low and dangerous"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.171
leniency0.343
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.057
76.7445%