Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD6S3B0YSNXHHMZ52F92QWM

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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He vaulted the railing and dropped fifteen feet onto the fire escape below. Quinn didn't break stride. Her boots hit the wet metal and her knees screamed. The impact rattled up through her molars. Thirty years old, that ladder had been, rusted half through, and it held just long enough for the kid in the black hoodie to swing off it and land in the alley. Quinn followed. Same drop. Same swing. The leather of her watch strap bit into her wrist. "You stop running, we talk properly!" No answer. Only the slap of trainers on slick cobbles. She'd clocked him outside The Raven's Nest. Nineteen, maybe twenty, gaunt in the way that came from more than hunger. He'd stood under that distinctive green neon sign for exactly eleven seconds, not looking at the entrance, looking at who left it. He'd held something in his left hand. Small. White. Caught the light like polished ivory. Bone token. That was enough. The alley spat them out onto Charing Cross Road. Rain hammered the pavement and turned the city into a smeared watercolour. Buses hissed past and threw sheets of filthy water over the kerb. The smell of fried onions and diesel clung low to the ground. The boy cut left, toward Tottenham Court Road. Fast. Too fast for someone who looked that thin. Quinn pumped her arms and closed two feet. Her breath burned. "Met Police! Stop!" Pedestrians peeled away. Someone shouted. The boy glanced back and Quinn saw his face properly for the first time. Sweat despite the cold. Eyes blown wide. Not fear of her. Fear of what happened if she caught him, or fear of what happened if she didn't. He cut down a service alley between a shuttered bookshop and a kebab house. Bins overflowed. Quinn's shoulder clipped a stack of crates and sent polystyrene skittering. He was heading for Camden. She knew that route. She'd walked it with Morris three years ago on the Delaney case, right before everything went sideways. Notes that didn't make sense. A witness who bled black. The boy hit the main drag and kept running north. Traffic snarled and honked. Quinn's radio crackled on her hip but she ignored it. If she called it in they'd tell her to stand down. Understaffed, overtime ban, don't pursue on foot in this weather without backup. She knew the script. Her chest heaved. Laughter burst out of a pub doorway and then died as she blew past. He turned again, down Pratt Street, then through the arches under the railway line. Graffiti glowed wet under the sodium lights. The rain got louder here, drumming on the corrugated iron roof of the arches. Quinn's watch ticked. Loud, even in the rain. The worn leather had moulded to her wrist over eight years. Morris had given it to her as a joke. Said she needed something that actually worked. The boy stumbled. Just a half-step, his foot catching on a raised paving stone, but Quinn ate up the distance. Ten feet. Five. Then he stopped. Dead stop in the middle of a dead-end service yard behind the old Camden Tube works. Brick walls on three sides, chainlink on the fourth, razor wire sagging with age. A single bulkhead door in the brick, rusted shut since the 90s. Everyone knew it. Even the squatters left it alone. The boy pressed his back against that door and stared at her. Quinn had her baton out without thinking. She held it low. "Hands where I can see them. Now." He lifted his hands. Empty now. No token. He breathed hard, his hoodie plastered to his skull. Water ran off his chin. He looked sixteen in that moment. "Detective Quinn." Her grip tightened. "How do you know my name?" "You shouldn't be here." His voice cracked. Accent, Manchester maybe. "You don't know what that place is." "Tell me. Since you came all this way to show me." She took a step forward. The yard stank of piss and damp concrete. Mould grew thick in the mortar lines. He glanced down at the bulkhead door behind him. Then back at her. Panic made his hands shake. "They said you'd follow. They said you're like him. Like your partner." Quinn went cold despite the run. "What did you say about my partner?" "DS Morris. He came here. He used a token. He went down and he didn't—" The boy swallowed. "Look, you have to go. They move it tonight. Full moon. If you're here when it—" The bulkhead door groaned. It wasn't supposed to open. Quinn had checked the council records herself last year after the body behind the building site. Sealed. Welded on the inside for safety. The door creaked inward an inch. No hands on it. A seam of amber light spilled out from below, and with it came sound, music and barter and a hundred voices speaking low, and a smell like incense and copper and old books left in a cellar. The boy flinched away from the light as if it burned. Quinn stared down the concrete steps. They went far deeper than any Tube maintenance stair should go. Down into a platform that wasn't on any map. The Veil Market. She'd heard the name twice in eighteen years. Once from a junkie informant who swore he'd bought a memory that wasn't his. Once from the file on Morris. Redacted to hell, but one line remained: *Inquiry into disappearance of DS A. Morris – last seen near abandoned station, Camden – bone token recovered from pocket.* The token this kid had been holding. "What's your name?" Quinn said. "Doesn't matter." "It matters if I have to write it on a report." He laughed, a short desperate thing. "You won't be writing reports where that goes." The light from below pulsed. A bell rang, somewhere deep. Not a Tube bell. Something older, with a cracked tone. Footsteps came up the stairs. Slow. Unhurried. The boy's eyes went wide. "Shit. Shit, no, I'm not— I didn't bring her—" "Get behind me." Quinn shoved him hard with her free hand. He scrambled back against the chainlink. A figure emerged into the rain. Not tall. Wrapped in a patched wax coat that dripped. Face hidden under a wide hat. In its gloved hand it held a shallow bowl made of something dark. It lifted the bowl toward Quinn. Inside, wet from the rain, lay a single small white object. A token. Carved with a tiny, intricate eye. The figure spoke and its voice sounded like gravel rolling in a tin. "Entry." Quinn looked at the token. Looked at the stairs. Looked at the kid shaking against the fence. This was the line. Every detective knew it existed. The place where procedure stopped and something else started. Cross it and you didn't get to pretend you were just doing your job anymore. You were in. Her radio crackled again. Dispatch, tinny and far away, calling her call sign. She switched it off. She reached out and closed her fist around the bone token. It felt warm. Warmer than any piece of bone had any right to feel. "Harlow, don't—" the boy said. Quinn stepped past the figure and onto the first step down. The air changed instantly. The rain stopped hitting her shoulders. The light swallowed her shadow. The door behind her began to close and as it did she heard the boy scream her name and she heard the market bell ring again, louder this time, like it had been waiting for her. The platform was enormous. A vaulted tunnel of soot-black brick that stretched away farther than Camden had any right to contain. Everywhere, stalls lit by gas lanterns and strings of bare bulbs. Tables covered in jars that moved on their own. Cages that held nothing and yet rattled. The smell of blood and vanilla. And every single face in that market turned to look at her at once. A man at the nearest stall grinned. His teeth were filed to points. He lifted a bottle filled with a silver liquid that churned. "Detective," he said. "We wondered when you'd come to collect your partner's debt."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.67% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"blown wide"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"intricate"
count1
4
word"churned"
count1
highlights
0"blown wide"
1"pulsed"
2"footsteps"
3"intricate"
4"churned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences162
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords20
totalWords1366
ratio0.015
matches
0"Inquiry into disappearance of DS A. Morris – last seen near abandoned station, Camden – bone token recovered from pocket."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
80.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1220
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Charing1
Cross2
Road2
Tottenham1
Court1
Quinn17
Camden4
Morris4
Delaney1
Pratt1
Street1
Tube3
Accent1
Manchester1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Camden"
2"Morris"
3"Tube"
4"Market"
places
0"Raven"
1"Charing"
2"Cross"
3"Road"
4"Tottenham"
5"Court"
6"Pratt"
7"Street"
8"Manchester"
globalScore0.803
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like gravel rolling in a tin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1366
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences178
matches
0"knew that route"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean19.24
std15.9
cv0.826
sampleLengths
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249
316
46
510
657
72
83
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1028
113
1246
1327
1436
1551
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1735
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203
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2528
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273
286
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346
357
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374
3828
3947
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455
462
4711
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences162
matches
0"been, rusted"
1"were filed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs225
matches
0"was heading"
1"were just doing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences178
ratio0.006
matches
0"Morris – last seen near abandoned station, Camden – bone token recovered from pocket.*"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1221
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"single small white object."
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.031122031122031123
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004095004095004095
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean7.67
std5.6
cv0.729
sampleLengths
013
14
210
37
432
52
62
72
810
96
102
118
127
1313
1422
157
161
171
186
192
203
219
2212
2312
2412
258
261
278
288
293
303
313
322
3314
344
353
364
3716
3814
392
4011
415
424
4317
445
455
4610
474
4810
4911
79.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.5112359550561798
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners91
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences141
matches
0"Only the slap of trainers"
1"Too fast for someone who"
2"Just a half-step, his foot"
3"Then he stopped."
4"Even the squatters left it"
5"Then back at her."
6"Once from a junkie informant"
7"Once from the file on"
8"Everywhere, stalls lit by gas"
ratio0.064
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences141
matches
0"He vaulted the railing and"
1"Her boots hit the wet"
2"She'd clocked him outside The"
3"He'd stood under that distinctive"
4"He'd held something in his"
5"Her breath burned."
6"He cut down a service"
7"He was heading for Camden."
8"She knew that route."
9"She'd walked it with Morris"
10"She knew the script."
11"Her chest heaved."
12"He turned again, down Pratt"
13"She held it low."
14"He lifted his hands."
15"He breathed hard, his hoodie"
16"He looked sixteen in that"
17"Her grip tightened."
18"His voice cracked"
19"She took a step forward."
ratio0.241
91.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences141
matches
0"He vaulted the railing and"
1"Quinn didn't break stride."
2"Her boots hit the wet"
3"The impact rattled up through"
4"The leather of her watch"
5"She'd clocked him outside The"
6"He'd stood under that distinctive"
7"He'd held something in his"
8"That was enough."
9"The alley spat them out"
10"Buses hissed past and threw"
11"The smell of fried onions"
12"The boy cut left, toward"
13"Quinn pumped her arms and"
14"Her breath burned."
15"Pedestrians peeled away."
16"The boy glanced back and"
17"Eyes blown wide."
18"Fear of what happened if"
19"He cut down a service"
ratio0.738
35.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences141
matches
0"If she called it in"
ratio0.007
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Just a half-step, his foot catching on a raised paving stone, but Quinn ate up the distance."
1"A vaulted tunnel of soot-black brick that stretched away farther than Camden had any right to contain."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.136
leniency0.273
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.3897%