Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD8627DACW84NWFH1NZCG9B

Run Details

Duration:
1m 13s
Cost:
$0.000389
Provider:
Poolside

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect's footsteps echoed off the wet cobblestones as Detective Harlow Quinn pressed harder into the shadows of the narrow alley. Rain drummed against her collar, soaking through the fabric of her trench coat, but she barely noticed. Three blocks she'd been trailing him, watching as he ducked and weaved through the Saturday night crowds of Soho, never quite close enough to read his face in the dim streetlight glow. "Stop right there!" she called out, her voice carrying too loudly in the confined space. The man ahead didn't break stride, but his pace quickened. Quinn broke into a jog, her service weapon still holstered. Protocol demanded identification first, but something about the way he moved—the predatory stillness beneath the panic—told her this wasn't just another shoplifter. She rounded the corner at speed, boots splashing through puddles, and caught sight of him disappearing down a side street. The neon sign of The Raven's Nest flickered green in the distance, its distinctive glow cutting through the fog that rolled in off the Thames. "London's finest," he muttered under his breath, glancing back once. "Should've stayed in the bloody rain." Quinn skidded to a halt at the mouth of the alley, watching his silhouette vanish through the bar's front door. The bell above the entrance jingled, then silence. She waited thirty seconds, counting the seconds, then pushed inside. The bar was exactly as she remembered from her briefing—dim lighting, walls lined with maps and black-and-white photographs that seemed to watch her with knowing eyes. A few patrons looked up from their drinks, curiosity flickering across their faces before they returned to whatever conversations had drawn them here tonight. "Evening, love. You looking for someone?" The barman, a grizzled man with ink-stained fingers, wiped down a glass with mechanical precision. "Have you seen this man?" Quinn slid a photograph across the bar. It showed a young man with olive skin and a scar running along his forearm, a silver medallion visible against his chest. The barman's eyes widened slightly, but he said nothing. Instead, he nodded toward the back room. "If you're looking for answers, you'll find them there. But some doors, once opened, can't be closed again." Quinn followed his gaze to a bookshelf that dominated one wall, its shelves sagging under the weight of leather-bound volumes and weathered tomes. She approached it slowly, noting how the wood grain seemed to shift and writhe in the candlelight, as if the very building itself were alive and breathing. "Silas?" she called out softly. A moment passed, then the bookshelf swung inward with a groan of hinges, revealing a hidden chamber beyond. Quinn drew her weapon instinctively, stepping into the darkness. The back room was smaller than she'd expected, its walls lined with shelves that held everything from crystal vials to ancient artifacts. In the center of the room, a figure stood hunched over a table, his hands busy with something that gleamed in the lamplight. "Tomás," Quinn said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins. "Put your hands where I can see them." The man looked up, and Quinn felt her stomach drop. This wasn't just any criminal—he was a healer, one of the best in the city. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck caught the light, and she recognized the scar on his forearm from the photograph. "I wasn't running from you, Detective," he said, his Andalusian accent softening the edges of his words. "I was running from what they did to her." Quinn's grip tightened on her weapon. "Who?" "Before you ask, yes, I know why you're really here. The Market moves every full moon, and tonight happens to be—" He glanced at his watch, then at the clock on the wall. "Well past midnight. You're cutting it close." "The Veil Market," Quinn breathed. "You expect me to believe that exists?" "It's real, and it's dangerous, and it's the only place left who might have answers about what happened to DS Morris." Tomás' hands trembled slightly. "Three years, Harlow. Three years of watching them bury pieces of him in files marked 'unsolved.' You think I wanted to run? You think I wanted to disappear into the underworld of magic and monsters?" Quinn felt the blood drain from her face. "Morris... you knew him?" "I treated him after the incident. Supernatural wounds don't respond to conventional medicine, love. Neither do the things that hunt in the spaces between heartbeats." Tomás gestured to the door behind him. "The Market's waiting. Bone token required for entry. You still got yours from the last case?" Quinn fumbled in her pocket, producing a small carved token that had been issued to her following an unusual string of deaths in Whitechapel. It was cold to the touch, etched with symbols she'd never bothered to translate. "You're bluffing," she said, but even as the words left her mouth, she knew they weren't true. Everything about this case—the victim who shouldn't have died, the witnesses who swore they saw shadows move, the way Morris had looked at her just before he'd been gunned down in that warehouse—hadn't been normal. "Then prove it," Tomás said, stepping aside. "Walk through that door, and you're no longer Detective Harlow Quinn of the Metropolitan Police. You're something else. Something that sees the world as it truly is." Quinn hesitated, her hand hovering over the doorknob. Behind her, the sounds of the bar continued uninterrupted—laughter, clinking glasses, the low hum of conversation. But here, in this hidden room, time seemed to stretch and warp, as though the boundaries between realities had grown thin. "What happens if I refuse?" she asked. "You go back to your desk, your paperwork, your carefully constructed world of facts and evidence. And someday soon, something worse than what killed Morris will come for you too." Tomás' voice dropped to a whisper. "Because the Market knows. And once it knows your name, it never forgets." The rain outside intensified, drumming against the windows like fingernails scratching against glass. Quinn closed her eyes for a moment, weighing her choices. On one side: safety, familiarity, the life she'd built around logic and procedure. On the other: the unknown, the impossible, the truth about her partner's death. She opened her eyes, staring at the door. "Bone token," she said finally. "How do I use it?" Tomás smiled sadly. "You don't use it. It uses you." Quinn reached into her pocket again, this time withdrawing the token. It pulsed with a faint warmth, as though recognizing its handler. She pressed it against the doorframe, and the wood seemed to drink it in, splintering slightly before reforming with new grain patterns. The door swung open. Beyond lay a corridor lined with stalls selling everything from enchanted weapons to bottled emotions. The air smelled of ozone and old incense, and somewhere in the distance, she could hear the sound of voices whispering secrets in languages she didn't understand. "This way," Tomás said, leading the way. "But Detective? Once we're in there, there's no turning back. The Market doesn't like visitors who change their minds halfway through." Quinn nodded, following him into the darkness. Behind them, the door sealed shut with a final click, and the sounds of the ordinary world faded away entirely. Somewhere ahead, she could hear footsteps—her quarry, still running, still hiding. But now, for the first time in three years, she had a chance to catch him. And maybe, just maybe, find out what really happened to DS Morris.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.469
leniency0.938
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.063
56.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1258
totalAiIsmAdverbs11
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count2
5
adverb"truly"
count1
6
adverb"carefully"
count1
7
adverb"sadly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"very"
3"softly"
4"really"
5"truly"
6"carefully"
7"sadly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1258
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"footsteps"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"quickened"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"mechanical"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"crystal"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"constructed"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"echoed"
2"quickened"
3"flickered"
4"silence"
5"mechanical"
6"weight"
7"crystal"
8"stomach"
9"trembled"
10"etched"
11"constructed"
12"whisper"
13"pulsed"
14"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences65
matches(empty)
10.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences65
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1250
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount918
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn16
Saturday1
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Thames1
Saint1
Christopher1
Andalusian1
Whitechapel1
Morris2
Tomás4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Tomás"
places
0"Saturday"
1"Soho"
2"Thames"
3"Whitechapel"
globalScore0.629
windowScore0.5
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"photographs that seemed to watch her with knowing eyes"
1"as though recognizing its handler"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1250
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std17.11
cv0.547
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070
115
242
345
416
538
650
721
834
934
1050
115
1227
1345
1421
1546
1626
177
1840
1912
2060
2112
2248
2338
2452
2534
2645
277
2849
2949
308
3110
3210
3344
344
3542
3628
3727
3827
3912
94.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences65
matches
0"been issued"
1"been gunned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences82
ratio0.073
matches
0"Protocol demanded identification first, but something about the way he moved—the predatory stillness beneath the panic—told her this wasn't just another shoplifter."
1"The bar was exactly as she remembered from her briefing—dim lighting, walls lined with maps and black-and-white photographs that seemed to watch her with knowing eyes."
2"This wasn't just any criminal—he was a healer, one of the best in the city."
3"Everything about this case—the victim who shouldn't have died, the witnesses who swore they saw shadows move, the way Morris had looked at her just before he'd been gunned down in that warehouse—hadn't been normal."
4"Behind her, the sounds of the bar continued uninterrupted—laughter, clinking glasses, the low hum of conversation."
5"Somewhere ahead, she could hear footsteps—her quarry, still running, still hiding."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount757
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.034346103038309116
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.009247027741083224
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean15.24
std8.49
cv0.557
sampleLengths
021
117
232
315
410
510
622
720
825
910
106
1120
128
1310
1426
1524
1621
1712
1822
199
207
2118
2223
2327
245
2518
269
2722
2823
2913
308
3110
3215
3321
3417
359
366
371
3833
397
405
417
4225
4335
448
454
4632
4716
4824
4914
76.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.47560975609756095
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences63
matches
0"Instead, he nodded toward the"
1"Somewhere ahead, she could hear"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences63
matches
0"she called out, her voice"
1"She rounded the corner at"
2"he muttered under his breath,"
3"She waited thirty seconds, counting"
4"It showed a young man"
5"She approached it slowly, noting"
6"she called out softly"
7"he said, his Andalusian accent"
8"He glanced at his watch,"
9"It was cold to the"
10"she said, but even as"
11"She opened her eyes, staring"
12"she said finally"
13"It pulsed with a faint"
14"She pressed it against the"
ratio0.238
63.17% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences63
matches
0"The suspect's footsteps echoed off"
1"Rain drummed against her collar,"
2"she called out, her voice"
3"The man ahead didn't break"
4"Quinn broke into a jog,"
5"Protocol demanded identification first, but"
6"She rounded the corner at"
7"The neon sign of The"
8"he muttered under his breath,"
9"Quinn skidded to a halt"
10"The bell above the entrance"
11"She waited thirty seconds, counting"
12"The bar was exactly as"
13"The barman, a grizzled man"
14"Quinn slid a photograph across"
15"It showed a young man"
16"The barman's eyes widened slightly,"
17"Quinn followed his gaze to"
18"She approached it slowly, noting"
19"she called out softly"
ratio0.794
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
ratio0
14.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The bar was exactly as she remembered from her briefing—dim lighting, walls lined with maps and black-and-white photographs that seemed to watch her with knowin…"
1"Quinn followed his gaze to a bookshelf that dominated one wall, its shelves sagging under the weight of leather-bound volumes and weathered tomes."
2"She approached it slowly, noting how the wood grain seemed to shift and writhe in the candlelight, as if the very building itself were alive and breathing."
3"The back room was smaller than she'd expected, its walls lined with shelves that held everything from crystal vials to ancient artifacts."
4"In the center of the room, a figure stood hunched over a table, his hands busy with something that gleamed in the lamplight."
5"Quinn fumbled in her pocket, producing a small carved token that had been issued to her following an unusual string of deaths in Whitechapel."
6"Everything about this case—the victim who shouldn't have died, the witnesses who swore they saw shadows move, the way Morris had looked at her just before he'd …"
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she called out, her voice carrying too loudly in the confined space"
1"Quinn said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins"
2"he said, his Andalusian accent softening the edges of his words"
56.25% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she called out (call out)"
1"he muttered (mutter)"
2"Quinn breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.625
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.188
74.8776%