Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GS42D1E93KVT1S9N6T5QF2

Run Details

Duration:
7m 43s
Cost:
$0.003294
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down Frith Street in ropes, and the green sign above the door of The Raven's Nest hummed against it like a held note. Rory shouldered through the weather with the insulated bag over her arm, smelling of chilli oil and star anise, and set the last delivery of the night on the bar. "You ordered ribs again." "I ordered nothing. Someone with excellent taste has been impersonating me." Silas didn't look up from the glass he was polishing, though the glass had been dry for some time. His beard was trimmed as neatly as ever, grey coming through the auburn like frost through bracken, and when he reached for the cloth his left leg dragged its old half-second behind him. The silver signet caught the lamplight as he tapped the bar twice — sit, stay — and went back to pretending he hadn't noticed her wet hair or the five flights of Tower Bridge Road in her calves. The Nest was nearly empty on a Tuesday. Maps of cities that had changed names covered the walls, and above the optics hung photographs of men in overcoats squinting into sunlight that had gone out before she was born. She liked the room for the same reason she'd liked it the first week: nothing in it required her to explain herself. She was unzipping the bag when the door blew open on a gust of wet wool and perfume she almost knew. "Sorry — could I just, out of the—" The woman stopped, dripping, phone in hand. "Rory?" Her body knew before she did. The tilt of the head. The way the laugh arrived in the eyebrows first. Four years, and it walked in ahead of the name. "Eva." She said it the way you set down something you'd been carrying a long way. "Oh my God. Rory Carter." Eva stood there with rain flattening her dark curls, in a coat too good for the weather, and neither of them moved for a second, as if the hug had to be negotiated through channels. Then it was a hug, brief and fierce and over before either of them could ruin it. "I was meant to be at a tasting on Dean Street," Eva said, pulling back. "Venue double-booked. It's biblical out there. Your sign looked friendly." "It's the friendliest thing about the place." Silas set down a glass of red without being asked, touched two fingers to the bar in Eva's direction, and found a reason to be at the far end that had something to do with a stocktake. Rory took the stool facing the door and put Eva in the other, and only when she was sitting did she understand she'd done it again — back covered, exit in view, the way she chose every seat now. At twenty-one she'd have sat anywhere. "Right," Eva said, and then the machinery of small talk coughed into life. Cardiff. The bay all glass towers now. Mrs. Price finally retired after forty years of terrorising the sixth form. The chip shop on City Road was flats. Eva was in her second year of a training contract — family law, "which means I sit with people on the worst month of their lives and bill them for the tea" — and marrying a man called Daniel in June, in a barn near Brecon. "He's an engineer. He's kind in a spreadsheet way. He's good." Rory heard herself say the right things. Congratulations. June was a good month. She learned that Eva's mum's hip was playing up and that Eva still put vinegar on everything, and gave back that she lived upstairs, that she delivered for Yu-Fei Cheung at the Golden Empress, that it was honest work, and the whole time there was a corridor of things neither of them walked down, wide as the bar. "Your dad still asks after you," Eva said. "Whenever I'm round theirs. He's stopped asking about the law, I think." "Has he." The period landed like a door. Eva reached for her wine. "You weren't at Siân's engagement," she said, gentler. "Everyone asked." "I wasn't anywhere." Eva nodded slowly, as if that were an answer, which it was. "You'd have had an invite," she said. "If I'd had an address." "You'd have had a reply." Outside, three men came in laughing too loudly, shaking off rain, and Rory's glass paused halfway to her mouth while her eyes did the arithmetic — three, drunk, happy, no interest in anyone but the pool table — and released it. They settled. She breathed. Eva was watching her with an expression she remembered from school, from the hundred times Rory had said something true and tried to take it back. "You flinched." "I didn't." "Rory." "It's nothing. Old habit." The phrase hung there, doing more work than she'd intended. Eva let it go, or seemed to. Then, as Rory pushed her sleeve up to steady the candle in its jar, the lamplight found the crescent on her left wrist, pale and old, and Eva put down her glass. "Is that the beans?" "Tenby. The caravan. The opener slipped." Rory smiled despite herself. "It was lashing rain all week, same as this." "You were eleven. You didn't cry. You just held your wrist over the sink and told me to get on with the tea." Eva's voice had changed. She turned her ring glass a quarter turn. "Rory, I've been wanting to say something for about four years, and I'm going to say it badly, and you can throw the wine at me after." She stopped. Started again. "The Odeon. February, years ago. That film with the war in it that neither of us watched. He had his hand on your arm when you reached over me for the popcorn, and there was a mark. Above your elbow. Thumb-shaped. And I bought Maltesers and told myself I'd imagined it, and I told myself you'd say if — I told myself a great many things, it turns out. That's my actual talent. Telling myself things." Her eyes were bright and she wasn't blinking enough. "Then you were gone, and I thought: that's the price of not asking." The rain filled the pause. At the pool table somebody potted something and swore cheerfully about it. "I'd have told you I walked into a door," Rory said. "I'd have known you were lying." "Then you'd have had to do something about it, and I'd have lied harder, and hated you a bit for seeing, and gone quieter. It wasn't your job to get me out." She turned her wrist over, considering the scar. "But thank you for saying it. Four years is a long time to carry a box of Maltesers." Eva laughed, wet and short, and pressed the heel of her hand to one eye. "You absolute muppet." "You sent me a voice note," Rory said. "After I left. You singing the whole of — something, drunk on your revision notes, a woman in the background telling you to shut up. I played it about two hundred times and never answered it. I kept thinking, when I'm someone you'd recognise, I'll ring her. And then a year went by, and a year's a kind of contract. After that the silence does your talking for you." "I thought you blamed me. For the train. I put you on it. Come to London, I said, you'll be fine, and then I went home to my mum's roast and my nice life and let you be fine on your own." "You were right, though. That was the problem. There's no good way to ring someone and say you were right and I'm still lost." She looked at the map above the optics, Vienna when it was called something else. "The rota at work has me down as Laila. Has done for a year. I never corrected it." "Who's Laila?" "No one. That was rather the point." "It was never a job interview," Eva said. "I didn't need you to be anyone. I just used to like being in a room with you. You used to narrate the whole world, Rory. You'd have had this bar's entire history by now." "It's not much of a history," Rory said, which was a lie of professional quality, and both of them looked at the men in the overcoats and let it stand. Silas came down the bar then, collected the empties without a word, and paused. "I've stock to do," he said. "The good whisky's behind the bookshelf if she's staying." And he limped into the back, and a moment later came the soft click of a shelf that was not only a shelf. Eva stared. "Did he just—" "He does that." "Through the bookshelf?" "He's old-fashioned about his entrances and exits." Eva's phone buzzed on the bar. DANIEL, said the screen, and a heart. Numbers were typed with cold thumbs, a taxi summoned, a promise assembled out of the materials at hand: the fourteenth of June, a barn near Brecon, a rubbish sofa that was hers. "Come before. Come after. Come any time. But come." Rory said she was slow. Eva said, "Slow's fine. Vanishing isn't," and this time the hug was held a full second longer, and then Eva was a shape crossing wet cobbles under the green light, and she did look back once through the glass, and raised her hand, and was gone. Rory gathered the glasses. Two damp rings on the wood where the wine had sat. She stood a moment without wiping them. "Friend of yours?" Silas called from the doorway of the back room, shirt sleeves rolled, an inventory clipboard under his arm and no inventory on it. "Yes," she said. Then, because he of all people would know the difference: "Yes, she is." Upstairs there was a kettle and a window and four years of not ringing anyone. She turned her wrist in the low light, the crescent pale as a moon with weather in it. In the morning she'd catch Yu-Fei between deliveries and ask for the rota back — Aurora, or Rory, anything but no one. Small thing. But you started back the way you'd left, one small thing at a time, and the rain on the window kept on like applause from a long way off.
created_at"2026-09-02T10:02:35.818Z" 9/2/2026, 10:02:35 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.448
leniency0.897
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1717
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
97.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1717
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1728
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1094
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.92
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Frith1
Street1
Raven1
Nest2
Tower1
Bridge1
Road2
Tuesday1
Silas4
Eva21
Cardiff1
City1
Daniel1
June3
Brecon2
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory13
Started1
Vienna1
Upstairs1
Aurora1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Eva"
4"Daniel"
5"June"
6"Yu-Fei"
7"Cheung"
8"Rory"
places
0"Frith"
1"Street"
2"Tower"
3"Bridge"
4"Road"
5"Cardiff"
6"City"
7"Brecon"
8"Golden"
9"Vienna"
globalScore0.54
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.579
wordCount1728
matches
0"no interest in anyone but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences111
matches
0"learned that Eva'sback that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean32
std33.63
cv1.051
sampleLengths
056
14
2101
361
421
516
630
71
815
957
1025
117
1282
1397
1471
1520
162
1711
1810
193
2024
215
2271
232
242
251
2614
2739
284
2919
30164
3117
3211
336
3458
3518
3677
3742
3857
392
407
4143
4230
4352
445
453
463
477
48105
4922
83.33% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences80
matches
0"was trimmed"
1"being asked"
2"was called"
3"were typed"
4"was held"
5"was gone"
22.70% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs188
matches
0"was polishing"
1"was unzipping"
2"was playing"
3"was watching"
4"wasn't blinking"
14.16% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences111
ratio0.045
matches
0"The silver signet caught the lamplight as he tapped the bar twice — sit, stay — and went back to pretending he hadn't noticed her wet hair or the five flights of Tower Bridge Road in her calves."
1"Rory took the stool facing the door and put Eva in the other, and only when she was sitting did she understand she'd done it again — back covered, exit in view, the way she chose every seat now."
2"Eva was in her second year of a training contract — family law, \"which means I sit with people on the worst month of their lives and bill them for the tea\" — and marrying a man called Daniel in June, in a barn near Brecon."
3"Outside, three men came in laughing too loudly, shaking off rain, and Rory's glass paused halfway to her mouth while her eyes did the arithmetic — three, drunk, happy, no interest in anyone but the pool table — and released it."
4"In the morning she'd catch Yu-Fei between deliveries and ask for the rota back — Aurora, or Rory, anything but no one."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1091
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.027497708524289642
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008249312557286892
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean15.57
std15.4
cv0.989
sampleLengths
026
130
24
330
433
538
68
731
822
921
1015
111
126
135
149
1510
161
1715
1840
1917
2015
2110
227
2337
2439
256
2613
271
286
291
3011
318
3246
3311
347
351
365
3758
388
3912
402
416
425
438
442
453
4612
477
485
495
69.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.44144144144144143
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners49
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences64
matches
0"Then it was a hug,"
1"Then, as Rory pushed her"
2"Then, because he of all"
ratio0.047
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences64
matches
0"His beard was trimmed as"
1"She liked the room for"
2"She was unzipping the bag"
3"Her body knew before she"
4"She said it the way"
5"She learned that Eva's mum's"
6"she said, gentler"
7"She turned her ring glass"
8"Her eyes were bright and"
9"She turned her wrist over,"
10"She looked at the map"
11"She stood a moment without"
12"She turned her wrist in"
ratio0.203
61.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences64
matches
0"The rain came down Frith"
1"Rory shouldered through the weather"
2"Silas didn't look up from"
3"His beard was trimmed as"
4"The silver signet caught the"
5"The Nest was nearly empty"
6"Maps of cities that had"
7"She liked the room for"
8"She was unzipping the bag"
9"The woman stopped, dripping, phone"
10"Her body knew before she"
11"The tilt of the head."
12"The way the laugh arrived"
13"She said it the way"
14"Eva stood there with rain"
15"Eva said, pulling back"
16"Silas set down a glass"
17"Rory took the stool facing"
18"Eva said, and then the"
19"The bay all glass towers"
ratio0.797
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Maps of cities that had changed names covered the walls, and above the optics hung photographs of men in overcoats squinting into sunlight that had gone out bef…"
1"Silas set down a glass of red without being asked, touched two fingers to the bar in Eva's direction, and found a reason to be at the far end that had something…"
2"Numbers were typed with cold thumbs, a taxi summoned, a promise assembled out of the materials at hand: the fourteenth of June, a barn near Brecon, a rubbish so…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, gentler"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.259
leniency0.517
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.7273%