Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GVW5E4ST340YK9GYMFQSK2

Run Details

Duration:
6m 27s
Cost:
$0.056009
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The order came through at 11:31, nine minutes before the Golden Empress stopped taking them, and Yu-Fei Cheung read the address twice before he handed it over the counter. "Petersham Gate," he said. "Richmond Park. Prepaid. Tip's a hundred pounds, Rory. I checked it twice." She checked it a third time. Two of everything — roast duck, jasmine rice, spring rolls, enough food for a family of six — and under the delivery notes, where customers usually wrote things like *ring the bell twice* or *no chili*, someone had typed: *Past the ponds. The stones. Leave the bag in the middle. Do not knock. Do not wait.* The customer name had printed as a smudge of toner, as if the printer had flinched. "People," Yu-Fei said, already killing the fryer, "will pay anything for privacy." She rode out along the river with the thermal bag strapped in the basket, the smell of duck and star anise riding with her, her breath unraveling behind her in the November cold. The lamps of Hammersmith thinned out and gave up. By the time she reached Petersham, the frost was so hard it squeaked under her tyres. The gate stood open. It shouldn't have. Richmond Park chained its gates at dusk, every one of them, every night. But the chain lay coiled neatly at the foot of the post like a sleeping snake, and the padlock hung locked through itself, through nothing at all. She stood there a moment, one hand on the cold iron, waiting for the obvious explanation to arrive. It didn't. She leaned her bike against the post, wired the lock through the frame, and lifted out the bag. That was when she noticed the quiet. Richmond sat under the Heathrow approach. You could set your watch by the planes; after a month in the city you stopped hearing them the way you stopped hearing your own pulse. Tonight there was nothing. No engines, no traffic wash from the roads, no wind. The silence had a texture to it, dense and attentive, like held breath. And the pendant was warm. It had never once been warm. It had arrived six months ago in a plain envelope on the mat outside her flat above Silas's bar — her name printed in careful block capitals, no note, no return address — a stone the size of her thumbnail, deep crimson on a fine silver chain, cool as river glass every day since. She'd almost thrown it away. Something had made her keep it. Tonight it lay against her sternum like a coin left out in the sun, and as she passed through the gate and started down the gravel path, it got warmer. The ponds lay ahead, flat and black. Somewhere off to the east, a low thunder began — hooves, dozens of them, the whole herd moving in the dark — and every sound in the park moved with it, away, all of it, the way water leaves a beach before a wave. Then nothing. Rory walked. Frost crunched under her boots. Then it crunched again, half a beat behind her. She stopped. The second crunch came one step later, and stopped too. She stood very still and counted her own heartbeats up to thirty, and the park held its breath with her. She walked four steps and halted hard on the fifth; the echo arrived on the fourth and a half, as if something had been caught mid-stride and stood frozen on one foot behind her, patient as frost settling. She tested it a third time, because she was not a person who accepted one trial as evidence. Third time, same result. There was nothing to echo off out here — no walls, no cutting, just open ground drinking her footsteps and returning one of them, altered, delayed, like a word repeated back by someone learning the language. "Delivery," she said aloud, out of old habit, announcing herself to a customer who wasn't there. The word dropped into the dark and she almost heard it land, far away and much too deep. At the bend before the ponds a stag stood in the edge of her phone's torchlight, tawny and enormous, breath steaming. Its eyes didn't catch the light. There was nothing in them to catch. It wasn't looking at her — it was looking past her, down the path, at something ahead of them both — and then it began to back away, one slow deliberate step at a time, never once turning around, until the dark closed over it like water. She checked her phone. She'd left the gate at 11:41 by its clock, and she'd walked perhaps fifteen minutes. The screen said 2:06. The battery, sixty-one percent when she'd left the shop, said nineteen. No signal — not one bar, in the middle of London. She thought of Eva asleep across the city, of Silas stacking chairs and locking up, of the bar's good noise — glass and fridge-hum and lock-clicks — and the thought felt like a different country, one she had visited once as a child. The ground began to bloom. Primroses first, cand white in the torch beam, then violets, then pale spikes of things she couldn't name, all of them flowering out of iron-hard ground, every petal rimed with frost and trembling, though there was no wind to tremble them. The ring of flowers widened as she walked, thickened, closed behind her. The pendant grew hot enough to feel through two layers of cotton, and she could see it now, pulsing its deep red light into the fabric of her shirt, slow and regular. It wasn't her heartbeat. It was half a beat ahead of her heartbeat, always, as if it already knew when her heart would beat next. Then she saw the stones. They stood in the hollow past the ponds like a bad thought, pale against the black — oaks turned to stone, trunks taller than she was with the grain of the wood still legible under centuries of weather, silvered, lichened, nine of them in a rough circle with gaps between them like missing teeth. Frost furred every blade of grass outside the ring. Inside there was none. Inside there were only flowers, and soil dark and soft, recently turned. She stepped between two of the stones and the sound changed — the way it changes in a small closed room. Her torch beam tired; it lay down on the ground a few feet ahead of her as if the light itself were heavy. She carried the bag to the centre of the circle, set it down carefully on the turned earth, and straightened. *Leave the bag in the middle. Do not knock. Do not wait.* She took the drop photo for the app — the shutter click cracked out enormous — and looked at the screen. Flowers. The bag. The stones. And at the circle's edge, at ten o'clock, a pale vertical smear of a figure that was not there when she raised her eyes. She did not take a second picture. She should have gone then. She knew that afterward the way you know things afterward. But a hundred-pound tip buys a face; she wanted, absurdly, to see who paid that kind of money to eat roast duck in a stone circle at midnight — and behind her, outside the ring, the gravel-crunch had started up again, unhurried, pacing when she paced, and the path back suddenly seemed like the worse option. So she stood in the circle of flowers with the food at her feet, and waited, which was precisely what the note had told her not to do. To steady herself, she counted the stones. Nine. She turned where she stood and counted again. Ten. The tenth was paler than the rest, unweathered, smooth as a peeled branch, and it stood inside the line the others made. She fixed her eyes on it, counted to three, and deliberately looked away — the way she'd tested the footsteps, the way she tested everything. When she looked back it had not moved. Nothing moved while she watched. But it was inside the circle now, properly, halfway between the ring and the bag, and it had covered that distance in the one interval she'd given it, and the whole grove held itself still for her eyes like a game of statues played by something that had never learned the game was supposed to be fun. Between two stones on the far side, at chest height, a mote of deep red light hung in the darkness. Exactly the color of her pendant. Looked at straight, it was nothing — an afterimage, a trick. Looked away from, it hung nearer, at the edge of her vision, and her pendant answered it pulse for pulse, out of phase. Call and answer. Call and answer. She got the ticket out of her pocket mostly to give her hands something honest to do. In the pendant's red glow the customer name, which had been a smudge of toner at the shop, printed clean as a confession: *A. CARTER.* "Hello?" she said. The grove gave the word back to her from behind — her own voice, exact in pitch, except the vowels were a half-second too long, as if the sound had been kept somewhere and needed airing. She turned. Flowers. Nothing. Then, close at her other ear, close enough to move a strand of her hair: "Rory." It was Evan's voice. Gentle. The gentleness had always been the worst part of him, the part that came just before — and the pendant flared against her chest, hot as a coal straight from the fire, and she ran. She ran between the two nearest stones and out onto the path, except there was no path. No gravel, no bracken, no frost. Flowers in every direction under a sky that had no city glow in it, no orange smear of London anywhere, just low black cloud going away forever — and then she was stumbling out between stones again, from the wrong side, facing the bag. She ran again. The circle was smaller. The stones stood closer together, the gaps between them narrowed, the bag still sitting tidy in the middle, and each time she broke out and ran the ring came back to her tighter, closing like a hand. Like teeth. She stopped, chest heaving, and chose the widest gap, and backed toward it with her eyes locked on the pale tenth stone. *Don't blink. Don't look away. It only moves when you look away.* Her phone torch died without ceremony. The only light left in the world was the crimson pulse at her throat, lighting her chin, her breath, the nearest stones like the inside of a mouth. Her eyes watered in the cold until the pale stone sat in her vision like a scratch on glass. She blinked. The gap was gone. The stones were all around her, close now, close enough to touch, and the bag was at her feet, and the dark between the stones was full, and patient, and in no hurry at all. Cold fingers closed around her left wrist — gently, so gently — and a thumb found the small crescent scar there and traced it, slow, familiar, the way he used to be, just before. "You waited," Evan's voice said at her ear, softly, as if no time had passed at all. And all across the grove, unhurried, the wildflowers began to close.
created_at"2026-09-02T10:50:42.511Z" 9/2/2026, 10:50:42 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
78.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1901
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"precisely"
count1
4
adverb"deliberately"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count2
6
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"carefully"
2"suddenly"
3"precisely"
4"deliberately"
5"gently"
6"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1901
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"unraveling"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"echo"
count2
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"unraveling"
1"pulse"
2"silence"
3"echo"
4"footsteps"
5"traced"
6"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
76.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
2"look"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences132
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords49
totalWords1925
ratio0.025
matches
0"ring the bell twice"
1"no chili"
2"Past the ponds. The stones. Leave the bag in the middle. Do not knock. Do not wait."
3"Leave the bag in the middle. Do not knock. Do not wait."
4"A. CARTER."
5"Don't blink. Don't look away. It only moves when you look away."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount1900
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.21
worstName"Do"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Yu-Fei"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
November1
Hammersmith1
Petersham1
Park1
Heathrow1
Silas2
London2
Eva1
Evan2
Do4
Flowers3
persons
0"Empress"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Cheung"
3"Hammersmith"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
7"Flowers"
places
0"November"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Do"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a different country, one she"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1925
matches(empty)
90.91% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences132
matches
0"knew that afterward"
1"paid that kind"
2"covered that distance"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean42.78
std37.12
cv0.868
sampleLengths
029
116
262
316
412
558
64
763
825
959
105
11101
1253
137
149
15128
1616
1718
1881
1988
205
21110
225
2379
2464
2512
2650
277
2899
2916
301
31117
3266
3342
343
3555
361
3740
38113
3987
402
4139
4234
4317
4411
94.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences130
matches
0"been caught"
1"was supposed"
2"been kept"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs294
matches
0"was looking"
1"wasn't looking"
2"was stumbling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences132
ratio0.152
matches
0"Two of everything — roast duck, jasmine rice, spring rolls, enough food for a family of six — and under the delivery notes, where customers usually wrote things like *ring the bell twice* or *no chili*, someone had typed: *Past the ponds."
1"You could set your watch by the planes; after a month in the city you stopped hearing them the way you stopped hearing your own pulse."
2"It had arrived six months ago in a plain envelope on the mat outside her flat above Silas's bar — her name printed in careful block capitals, no note, no return address — a stone the size of her thumbnail, deep crimson on a fine silver chain, cool as river glass every day since."
3"Somewhere off to the east, a low thunder began — hooves, dozens of them, the whole herd moving in the dark — and every sound in the park moved with it, away, all of it, the way water leaves a beach before a wave."
4"She walked four steps and halted hard on the fifth; the echo arrived on the fourth and a half, as if something had been caught mid-stride and stood frozen on one foot behind her, patient as frost settling."
5"There was nothing to echo off out here — no walls, no cutting, just open ground drinking her footsteps and returning one of them, altered, delayed, like a word repeated back by someone learning the language."
6"It wasn't looking at her — it was looking past her, down the path, at something ahead of them both — and then it began to back away, one slow deliberate step at a time, never once turning around, until the dark closed over it like water."
7"No signal — not one bar, in the middle of London."
8"She thought of Eva asleep across the city, of Silas stacking chairs and locking up, of the bar's good noise — glass and fridge-hum and lock-clicks — and the thought felt like a different country, one she had visited once as a child."
9"They stood in the hollow past the ponds like a bad thought, pale against the black — oaks turned to stone, trunks taller than she was with the grain of the wood still legible under centuries of weather, silvered, lichened, nine of them in a rough circle with gaps between them like missing teeth."
10"She stepped between two of the stones and the sound changed — the way it changes in a small closed room."
11"Her torch beam tired; it lay down on the ground a few feet ahead of her as if the light itself were heavy."
12"She took the drop photo for the app — the shutter click cracked out enormous — and looked at the screen."
13"But a hundred-pound tip buys a face; she wanted, absurdly, to see who paid that kind of money to eat roast duck in a stone circle at midnight — and behind her, outside the ring, the gravel-crunch had started up again, unhurried, pacing when she paced, and the path back suddenly seemed like the worse option."
14"She fixed her eyes on it, counted to three, and deliberately looked away — the way she'd tested the footsteps, the way she tested everything."
15"Looked at straight, it was nothing — an afterimage, a trick."
16"The grove gave the word back to her from behind — her own voice, exact in pitch, except the vowels were a half-second too long, as if the sound had been kept somewhere and needed airing."
17"The gentleness had always been the worst part of him, the part that came just before — and the pendant flared against her chest, hot as a coal straight from the fire, and she ran."
18"Flowers in every direction under a sky that had no city glow in it, no orange smear of London anywhere, just low black cloud going away forever — and then she was stumbling out between stones again, from the wrong side, facing the bag."
19"Cold fingers closed around her left wrist — gently, so gently — and a thumb found the small crescent scar there and traced it, slow, familiar, the way he used to be, just before."
98.81% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1886
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount78
adverbRatio0.041357370095440084
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.009544008483563097
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences132
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences132
mean14.58
std13.81
cv0.947
sampleLengths
029
14
212
36
442
52
66
73
83
916
1012
1133
129
1316
144
153
1613
1727
1818
192
2018
217
226
2326
244
2510
2613
275
286
2954
305
316
3230
337
3444
352
362
375
389
392
4010
4120
4238
4318
444
4536
4616
4718
4821
496
46.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.36363636363636365
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences110
matches
0"Somewhere off to the east,"
1"Then it crunched again, half"
2"Then she saw the stones."
3"Exactly the color of her"
4"Then, close at her other"
ratio0.045
85.45% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences110
matches
0"She checked it a third"
1"She rode out along the"
2"It shouldn't have."
3"She stood there a moment,"
4"She leaned her bike against"
5"You could set your watch"
6"It had never once been"
7"It had arrived six months"
8"She'd almost thrown it away."
9"She stood very still and"
10"She walked four steps and"
11"She tested it a third"
12"she said aloud, out of"
13"Its eyes didn't catch the"
14"It wasn't looking at her"
15"She checked her phone."
16"She'd left the gate at"
17"She thought of Eva asleep"
18"It wasn't her heartbeat."
19"It was half a beat"
ratio0.336
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences110
matches
0"The order came through at"
1"She checked it a third"
2"The customer name had printed"
3"Yu-Fei said, already killing the"
4"She rode out along the"
5"The lamps of Hammersmith thinned"
6"The gate stood open."
7"It shouldn't have."
8"Richmond Park chained its gates"
9"She stood there a moment,"
10"She leaned her bike against"
11"That was when she noticed"
12"Richmond sat under the Heathrow"
13"You could set your watch"
14"Tonight there was nothing."
15"The silence had a texture"
16"It had never once been"
17"It had arrived six months"
18"She'd almost thrown it away."
19"Something had made her keep"
ratio0.655
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"By the time she reached"
1"To steady herself, she counted"
ratio0.018
73.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She walked four steps and halted hard on the fifth; the echo arrived on the fourth and a half, as if something had been caught mid-stride and stood frozen on on…"
1"But it was inside the circle now, properly, halfway between the ring and the bag, and it had covered that distance in the one interval she'd given it, and the w…"
2"In the pendant's red glow the customer name, which had been a smudge of toner at the shop, printed clean as a confession: *A."
3"The grove gave the word back to her from behind — her own voice, exact in pitch, except the vowels were a half-second too long, as if the sound had been kept so…"
4"The gentleness had always been the worst part of him, the part that came just before — and the pendant flared against her chest, hot as a coal straight from the…"
5"Flowers in every direction under a sky that had no city glow in it, no orange smear of London anywhere, just low black cloud going away forever — and then she w…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.8525%