Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H9NFVR4S270241XTA7W92G

Run Details

Duration:
54.2s
Cost:
$0.001008
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The wind died the moment Rory stepped past the northernmost oak. One second, the London damp nipped at her exposed neck; the next, the air inside the circle was still, heavy with the scent of crushed violets and old copper. She checked her wrist. The crescent-shaped scar pulled tight against the skin as she clenched her fist. Habit. Grounding. Her smartwatch glowed 2:14 AM. Below, over in Richmond, the buses would be grinding their gears toward Canning Town. Here, the silence pressed against her eardrums like deep water. "Just the threshold," she muttered. Her voice didn't echo. It fell flat, absorbed instantly by the moss that carpeted the ground in unnatural emerald hues. Even at night, the grove wore summer. Wildflowers bloomed in clusters along the root-tangled path, their petals unfurled in colors that hurt her bright blue eyes to track—shades of violet so deep they bordered on black, streaks of silver that seemed to shift position when she blinked. The Heartstone rested warm against her sternum. She couldn't see it through the thick wool of her jumper, but she felt it. A rhythmic thrumming, like a second heartbeat trapped in silver and crimson. *Pulse. Pause. Pulse.* It guided her. Or rather, it indicated proximity. Somewhere ahead, the boundary between worlds grew thin. Somewhere, a Hel portal waited. Or what remained of one. She moved forward. Delivery shoes, scuffed from miles of pavement, made no sound on the loam. Rory kept her shoulders square, her black hair tucked under the collar of her jacket. Eva had warned her about the rumors, about the hikers who wandered into the woods and returned days later claiming hours had passed, their eyes hollow, their clothes smelling of wet soil and rot. Rory wasn't the kind to believe campfire stories. She was Pre-Law. She understood evidence, precedent, causality. If a mechanism existed, it followed rules. And rules could be navigated. A branch snapped to her left. Rory froze. Her head turned, eyes cutting through the gloom. Nothing but a tangle of bramble and the suggestion of another standing stone looming behind it. She exhaled, watching her breath plume white. The vapor lingered, swirling in a pattern that didn't match the lack of wind. It coiled upward in a slow, deliberate helix before dissolving. "Wind shear," she whispered, though the hypothesis felt fragile. "Heat differential." She took another step. The warmth in her chest intensified, searing through the fabric. The stone was reacting. This was it. Close enough to bridge the gap. Then came the sound. Not a snap this time. A rustle. Dry leaves skittering across stone, coming from directly behind her. Rory spun around. Empty air. The path stretched back the way she'd come, lined by those watchful oaks. But as she stared, the shadows between the trunks seemed to deepen, stretching toward her ankles like oil seeking a spill. When she shifted her gaze to the right, a shape detached itself from the darkness of a bush—a tall, slender silhouette that mirrored her stance perfectly. She jerked her head back to center. Gone. Her heart hammered a frantic rhythm against her ribs, clashing with the steady, alien pulse of the Heartstone. *Thump-thump-thump. Thrum... thrum... thrum.* Keep moving. Logic. Observation. There were three figures visible in her periphery during the last ten seconds. All vanished when fixated. The geometry of the clearing was wrong. The distance between the two central stones hadn't changed despite her covering fifty paces. Parallax error? No. She knew her distance judgment from years of dodging traffic. This was spatial distortion. Time. That was the variable. An hour here could be minutes or days outside. If time was fluid, distance could be too. She reached up, fingers brushing the silver chain beneath her shirt. The metal was burning hot now. Warning? Or invitation? A whisper threaded through the silence. It wasn't words. It was the cadence of speech, the rhythm of a language spoken too close to the ear. It sounded like her mother's Welsh lullabies, but inverted, the vowels dragging, the consonants clicking like insect jaws. Rory squeezed her eyes shut. *Auditory pareidolia. The brain fills gaps. Pattern recognition gone rogue.* When she opened them, the wildflowers were closer. They hadn't moved visually, but their arrangement had shifted. The silver-streaked blossoms now formed a loose arc, pointing inward. Toward her. And the Heartstone flared. A wave of heat washed over her, making her gasp. The crimson light bled through her sweater, illuminating the underside of her chin with a bloody glow. She looked down. The pendant was vibrating so violently it blurred. The warmth wasn't just thermal anymore; it was a vibration, a hum that rattled her teeth. Something was wrong with the portal. Or something was on the other side pushing back. *Think, Rory.* Evan's face flashed in her mind, unbidden, the memory of his grip on her arm. She pushed it down, using the anger as fuel. She survived him by anticipating his moves, by finding the exits he never noticed. Survival was a contract written in reflex. This was no different. She forced her feet to move. Left foot. Right foot. The moss felt spongy, yielding, but with every step, the resistance increased. It was as if the ground wanted to hold her. Roots shifted under the loam, tiny tendril-things probing the soles of her shoes, retracting only when she applied pressure. The whispers returned, louder now. Voices. Dozens of them. Overlapping, overlapping. She heard a shout that sounded like her father's Irish brogue, distorted into a sneer. *Brendan!* He called sometimes. Now he laughed. The laughter warped, slowing down until it was a low, guttural groan that vibrated in her marrow. Rory clamped her mouth shut. Don't acknowledge. Acknowledgment grants purchase. That was the first rule of dealing with the irrational. Ignore the ritual, break the cycle. A shadow fell over her. Not from the trees. It rose from the ground itself, a pool of absolute blackness detaching from the moss and standing upright. It had no features, no edges. It was a hole in the world where light went to die. It stood ten feet away. Rory's breath hitched. Her body screamed to run, muscles coiling, but the spatial warping pinned her in place. Every instinct told her that moving triggered a response. The creature—if it could be called that—tilted its head. The motion was jerky, stop-motion, like a puppet pulled by invisible strings. It reached out a limb that lengthened as she watched, the tip branching into jagged fractals of darkness. The Heartstone shrieked. The vibration became agony, a needle driving into her chest. The crimson glow pulsed faster, frantic, erratic. *It reacts to Hel energy,* she thought, the scientific part of her mind scrambling for traction while terror clawed at her throat. *Hel portals draw things that feed on life force. This isn't just a passage. It's a lure.* The darkness breached the five-foot mark. The temperature dropped sharply, stealing the moisture from her lips. Frost crystallized on her eyelashes. The scent of copper spiked, mingling with the floral rot. Rory's hand went to her left wrist, thumb rubbing the crescent scar. The pain was dull, distant. The scar was a reminder of a fixed point in time, a wound that had healed. Reality. Proof of continuity. She looked directly at the entity. It held form. Two points of dim violet light ignited where eyes should be. They weren't observing her; they were reading her. Scanning the architecture of her fear. A sound erupted from the entity—not a voice, but the exact frequency of her own heartbeat, amplified a thousand times. *Boom-boom. Boom-boom.* It synchronized with her chest, forcing her breathing to match. In. Out. Sync. Bind. She felt her will slipping, dragged into the rhythm. The desire to step forward, to let the cool void take her, washed over her mind. Easy. No more running. No more debts. Rory bit her tongue. Hard. Blood filled her mouth, metallic and sharp. The taste broke the syncopation. Her heart stuttered, broke free of the mimicry, and surged wildly. The violet lights flickered. The entity recoiled, its form rippling like smoke disturbed by a draft. She used the opening. Not to run—distance was a lie here—but to act. She slammed her palm against the Heartstone, ignoring the burn. She concentrated on the one thing the Fae couldn't parse, the one rule that anchored this pocket: *Consent.* She didn't know who gave her the pendant. She didn't know the terms. But she knew the law of unintended consequences. You cannot claim what you do not understand. "I don't accept," she rasped, blood staining her teeth. Her voice cracked, raw and small against the vast dark. "I don't accept your gift. I don't recognize the merchant. Void the contract." Silence. The violet eyes widened. The humming stopped. The frost on her lashes halted its growth. For a heartbeat, nothing happened. The grove held its breath. The wildflowers stood rigid. The ancient oaks ceased their creaking. Then, the Heartstone went cold. Instantly. Ice shot through the silver chain, numbing her chest. The crimson gem cracked with a sound like a gunshot. A spiderweb fracture appeared down the center of the stone, leaking a wisp of grey smoke that smelled of ozone and ash. Rory staggered back, gasping, clutching her chest. The warmth was gone. The guidance was gone. From the darkness, a voice spoke. It was hers. Perfectly mimicked, tone for tone, pitch for pitch, but stripped of all humanity. *"Then why did you come?"* Rory looked up. The entity hadn't retreated. It had split. Where one had been, now stood three. Five. Ten. Their violet eyes blazed in unison, forming a constellation of malice in the clearing. They weren't attacking. They were gathering. Waiting. And beyond them, deep in the heart of the grove, the air began to tear open, weeping a light that was too bright, too wrong, promising salvation only for those willing to pay the price of their name. Rory took a step back. Her heel hit the oak standing stone. The boundary. She could feel the pull of the exit. But the crack in the Heartstone pulsed a final, dying throb, and a new sensation bloomed in her mind. A tether. Sharp. Iron-clad. She hadn't rejected the bargain. She had only invoked the clause. And now, the merchant knew exactly who she was, and where she lived. The voice whispered again, echoing from every direction, from inside her own skull. *"Run, little lawyer. See how far your loopholes take you before the debt collects."* Rory bolted. She crashed through the foliage, branches whipping her face, drawing red lines across her cheeks. Behind her, the grass did not bend. The flowers did not sway. But the shadows moved faster than she ran, slithering over the roots, closing the distance not by walking, but by stepping sideways through the world. She reached the line of oaks. The northernmost stone loomed like a cliff wall. She threw herself against it, expecting impact, expecting to burst back into the cold London air. Her hands grasped bark. Cold, rough, real. She pushed. The stone yielded like water. She stumbled through, falling onto asphalt. Headlights blinded her. A bus rumbled past, doors hissing. The noise of the city rushed in, chaotic and beautiful. Rory lay on the curb, chest heaving, staring up at the fractured sky. Sirens wailed in the distance. Life. Normalcy. She scrambled to sit up, checking her limbs, her face. Real. Safe. She touched her chest. The chain hung limp. She pulled it out. The silver link was bent, tarnished black. The crimson gem was dust, crumbling through her fingers like dried blood. Relief washed over her, shaky and weak. It worked. The boundary held. She was out. Then her phone buzzed in her pocket. A notification. She fished it out with trembling hands. A message. No sender ID. Just a timestamp from one minute ago. *We saw you enter. We've been waiting for a client with your profile for a long time, Aurora. Do check your mirrors when you get home.* Rory lowered the phone. The street seemed quieter than before. The streetlamps flickered, dimming for a fraction of a second longer than usual. In the reflection of a shop window across the road, she caught a glimpse of her own face. Pale, wild-eyed. And over her left shoulder, faint as a trick of the light, a smear of violet shadow clung to the glass. It raised a jagged finger and pointed. Not at her. Past her. At the door of the building she called home. Rory stood up. Her legs shook. She started walking, fast, determined to put walls and locks between herself and the dark. As she turned the corner toward Silas' bar, the crescent scar on her wrist burned with a fresh, stinging heat. And the smell of crushed violets, impossibly, lingered in her nose.
created_at"2026-09-02T14:51:43.88Z" 9/2/2026, 2:51:43 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2162
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2162
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"echo"
count1
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count3
4
word"navigated"
count1
5
word"gloom"
count1
6
word"looming"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count3
8
word"searing"
count1
9
word"variable"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"anticipating"
count1
12
word"vibrated"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count2
14
word"crystallized"
count1
15
word"reminder"
count1
16
word"scanning"
count1
17
word"synchronized"
count1
18
word"desire"
count1
19
word"flickered"
count2
20
word"could feel"
count1
21
word"throb"
count1
22
word"echoing"
count1
23
word"loomed"
count1
24
word"chaotic"
count1
25
word"fractured"
count1
26
word"normalcy"
count1
27
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"echo"
2"rhythmic"
3"pulse"
4"navigated"
5"gloom"
6"looming"
7"warmth"
8"searing"
9"variable"
10"whisper"
11"anticipating"
12"vibrated"
13"pulsed"
14"crystallized"
15"reminder"
16"scanning"
17"synchronized"
18"desire"
19"flickered"
20"could feel"
21"throb"
22"echoing"
23"loomed"
24"chaotic"
25"fractured"
26"normalcy"
27"determined"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"clenched her fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences285
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences285
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences289
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans12
markdownWords90
totalWords2155
ratio0.042
matches
0"Pulse. Pause. Pulse."
1"Thump-thump-thump. Thrum... thrum... thrum."
2"Auditory pareidolia. The brain fills gaps. Pattern recognition gone rogue."
3"Think, Rory."
4"Brendan!"
5"It reacts to Hel energy,"
6"Hel portals draw things that feed on life force. This isn't just a passage. It's a lure."
7"Boom-boom. Boom-boom."
8"Consent."
9"\"Then why did you come?\""
10"\"Run, little lawyer. See how far your loopholes take you before the debt collects.\""
11"We saw you enter. We've been waiting for a client with your profile for a long time, Aurora. Do check your mirrors when you get home."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount2099
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.86
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
London2
Richmond1
Canning1
Town1
Heartstone7
Hel3
Pre-Law1
Keep1
Welsh1
Evan1
Irish1
Fae1
Aurora1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Keep"
3"Evan"
4"Fae"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Canning"
3"Town"
4"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences145
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"silver that seemed to shift position when she blinked"
1"sounded like her mother's Welsh lullabies"
2"It was as if the ground wanted to hold her"
3"sounded like her father's Irish brogue, di"
4"seemed quieter than before"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.928
wordCount2155
matches
0"not a voice, but the exact frequency of her own heartbeat, amplified a thousa"
1"not by walking, but by stepping sideways through the world"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences289
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs73
mean29.52
std18.65
cv0.632
sampleLengths
040
148
272
363
493
56
657
711
827
921
103
1170
1222
1359
1422
1520
1644
1715
1829
194
2054
2115
2251
2351
2450
2526
2645
275
2848
2938
3039
3131
3237
3334
3436
3532
365
3739
3841
3929
4032
411
4215
4320
4447
4515
4622
475
4840
4938
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences285
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
84.77% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs405
matches
0"was reacting"
1"was burning"
2"was vibrating"
3"were reading"
4"weren't observing"
5"weren't attacking"
6"were gathering"
63.77% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences289
ratio0.028
matches
0"One second, the London damp nipped at her exposed neck; the next, the air inside the circle was still, heavy with the scent of crushed violets and old copper."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in clusters along the root-tangled path, their petals unfurled in colors that hurt her bright blue eyes to track—shades of violet so deep they bordered on black, streaks of silver that seemed to shift position when she blinked."
2"When she shifted her gaze to the right, a shape detached itself from the darkness of a bush—a tall, slender silhouette that mirrored her stance perfectly."
3"The warmth wasn't just thermal anymore; it was a vibration, a hum that rattled her teeth."
4"The creature—if it could be called that—tilted its head."
5"They weren't observing her; they were reading her."
6"A sound erupted from the entity—not a voice, but the exact frequency of her own heartbeat, amplified a thousand times."
7"Not to run—distance was a lie here—but to act."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2105
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.02470308788598575
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.00665083135391924
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences289
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences289
mean7.46
std6.22
cv0.834
sampleLengths
011
129
24
313
41
51
65
714
810
95
104
1116
127
1340
147
1515
1612
171
181
194
205
218
225
235
243
2513
2615
2734
288
293
305
317
325
336
342
358
3616
377
3814
3910
409
412
424
4310
444
453
466
474
485
492
52.25% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.38408304498269896
totalSentences289
uniqueOpeners111
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences229
matches
0"Somewhere ahead, the boundary between"
1"Somewhere, a Hel portal waited."
2"Then came the sound."
3"All vanished when fixated."
4"Then, the Heartstone went cold."
5"Perfectly mimicked, tone for tone,"
6"Then her phone buzzed in"
7"Just a timestamp from one"
ratio0.035
94.24% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount72
totalSentences229
matches
0"She checked her wrist."
1"Her smartwatch glowed 2:14 AM."
2"Her voice didn't echo."
3"It fell flat, absorbed instantly"
4"She couldn't see it through"
5"She moved forward."
6"She was Pre-Law."
7"She understood evidence, precedent, causality."
8"Her head turned, eyes cutting"
9"She exhaled, watching her breath"
10"It coiled upward in a"
11"she whispered, though the hypothesis"
12"She took another step."
13"She jerked her head back"
14"Her heart hammered a frantic"
15"She knew her distance judgment"
16"She reached up, fingers brushing"
17"It wasn't words."
18"It was the cadence of"
19"It sounded like her mother's"
ratio0.314
77.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount175
totalSentences229
matches
0"The wind died the moment"
1"One second, the London damp"
2"She checked her wrist."
3"The crescent-shaped scar pulled tight"
4"Her smartwatch glowed 2:14 AM."
5"Here, the silence pressed against"
6"Her voice didn't echo."
7"It fell flat, absorbed instantly"
8"Wildflowers bloomed in clusters along"
9"The Heartstone rested warm against"
10"She couldn't see it through"
11"A rhythmic thrumming, like a"
12"She moved forward."
13"Delivery shoes, scuffed from miles"
14"Rory kept her shoulders square,"
15"Eva had warned her about"
16"Rory wasn't the kind to"
17"She was Pre-Law."
18"She understood evidence, precedent, causality."
19"A branch snapped to her"
ratio0.764
87.34% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences229
matches
0"Even at night, the grove"
1"If a mechanism existed, it"
2"If time was fluid, distance"
3"Now he laughed."
ratio0.017
81.88% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"It fell flat, absorbed instantly by the moss that carpeted the ground in unnatural emerald hues."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in clusters along the root-tangled path, their petals unfurled in colors that hurt her bright blue eyes to track—shades of violet so deep th…"
2"When she shifted her gaze to the right, a shape detached itself from the darkness of a bush—a tall, slender silhouette that mirrored her stance perfectly."
3"Roots shifted under the loam, tiny tendril-things probing the soles of her shoes, retracting only when she applied pressure."
4"It reached out a limb that lengthened as she watched, the tip branching into jagged fractals of darkness."
5"And beyond them, deep in the heart of the grove, the air began to tear open, weeping a light that was too bright, too wrong, promising salvation only for those …"
6"She crashed through the foliage, branches whipping her face, drawing red lines across her cheeks."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she whispered, though the hypothesis felt fragile"
1"she rasped, blood staining her teeth"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.571
83.8582%