Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HGS013SRCQQY3VW92J15N3

Run Details

Duration:
2m 23s
Cost:
$0.005499
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in needles off the Soho side streets, beading on the green neon sign that hummed above the door: The Raven's Nest. Aurora Carter stood under it as if it were the edge of a cliff she had once promised herself she would not jump from twice. Inside, she knew, would be old maps with curling corners, black-and-white photographs of people who looked less alive now than they had in the photographs, and the smell of malt and lemon polish that had once meant comfort. She did not want comfort. She wanted to leave the package on the bar and go. But the package was warm against her chest, and the name on the slip inside was not any name she could hand to a stranger. Silas Blackwood. She had not heard that name spoken aloud in years. Seeing it printed on yellowed receipt paper made it feel older, heavier, like something dug up from a garden and expected to bloom. She pushed the door open. The bar was dim in the way it had always been dim, as though someone had lowered the lights on purpose so that secrets could feel more comfortable sitting beside them. The maps on the walls still made continents look like wounds. The photographs still watched with the patience of people who had died and had not been told yet. Behind the bar, a bottle of amaro caught the light and sent a thin red stripe across the floorboards. Silas was at the far table near the bookshelf. He sat with his right hand around a glass he had not touched, the silver signet ring catching amber light. His grey-streaked auburn beard was neatly trimmed as ever, but his hair looked thinner, and the left knee, the one she remembered from a story about Prague that had been repeated until it stopped sounding like a place and started sounding like a sentence, was tucked stiffly beneath him. He was watching her with the careful calm of a man who had learned to measure exits without appearing to. "Rory," he said. She hated how easily the name fit. "Carter," she said, though it was not a name he had ever called her much. No hug, no surprise too loud. Just two people who had known each other before the present arrived, and not enough time after to decide what the present should do with them. Silas gestured to the chair across from him. "If you're selling something, you've picked the wrong night. If you're here for a drink, sit. If you're here for business, then I'm afraid you'll have to start with the package." Aurora looked down at the box. She hadn't realized her fingers had tightened around it until the cardboard had dented. "Golden Empress. To Silas Blackwood, or whoever." "My favorite delivery girl," he said. The word girl was a kindness. "I quit delivering." "You quit a lot of things." She sat. The wood was warm beneath her. On her left wrist, the crescent scar was visible where her sleeve had ridden up, pale as a sliver of moon under wet skin. She tugged it down. Silas noticed. He always noticed, but he had learned, or she hoped he had, to pretend otherwise. "Are you well?" he asked. "The weather is English, the restaurant is busy, and I have a flat above the place where a man used to keep secrets for the government." She paused. "That's the short version." "Your mother's version." Something in his tone made her throat tighten. They had not discussed Jennifer or Brendan in years. Perhaps because there had not been years left to discuss them. "You've changed," she said. "So have you." She almost smiled at the neatness of it. "I was twenty-five when you said that to me in Cardiff. I had a whole decade of changing to get through." "You have now." "And you? Retired operative. Bar owner. Keeper of hidden rooms." Silas glanced toward the bookshelf behind him. "Some of the rooms are hidden because people like you used to bang on the door asking questions." "People like me?" "Children who thought adults were only tired." Aurora placed the package on the table between them. It sat there like a small wooden heart. "I'm not here for a lecture." "No," Silas said. "You never are anymore." That was the trouble with old friends. They knew the shape of your old weather. They could see the rain coming even when you were pretending it was only a cloud passing over a hill. She reached for the package to take it back, but he touched the corner, not stopping her exactly, just reminding her it was there. "Open it," he said. "It's for you." "You brought it." "Yu-Fei Cheung asked me to." "Yu-Fei Cheung asks you to do many things. You do them because you like the rhythm of being useful." Silas lifted the lid a little. Inside, beneath a cloth, was a small book, its spine cracked, its cover stained with what might have been wine or tea or the ghost of some other liquid that had spilled a long time ago. He did not take it out. He looked at it as if it might bite. "Pre-Law," Aurora said. "I left it at your house when I was nineteen. You said I could collect it when I had decided whether I was going to be a barrister or a nuisance." "I remember." "You had the other shoe out." "You had a better memory for insults than precedent." She let out a breath that was almost a laugh. "That's because precedent was boring." "And now?" "Now I know what boring is. It's a word for safety." Silas closed the box. His eyes, hazel in the low light, stayed on her face a moment too long. "You still have your father's voice when you say things that aren't true." Aurora looked at the photographs on the wall. A woman in a 1950s coat. A man with cigarettes in both hands. A group of children by a river who all looked damp and furious and alive. "You knew him." "He was a barrister. He thought everything could be solved by putting it into a sentence." "And you?" "I used to think everything could be solved by not putting it into one." She nodded. "Then we were both wrong." He did not argue. That was another change. Silas had once argued like a man paid by the sentence. Now he listened like a man who had been paid too much by silence. A man came in from the street, rain-dark, carrying an umbrella dripping into a black bag. He nodded to Silas and passed through the bookshelf without breaking stride. The books shifted on their shelf as if they were merely bored of standing still. Aurora watched the seam of the wall close again. "You kept the room," she said. "It's not my room. It's just a room that doesn't like company." "You used to say it was a front for a network." "I was a liar with a pension." She studied him. The line of his jaw had softened, but his shoulders had grown narrower in the way of men who learned to carry their lives inside smaller rooms. The limp was the same, though perhaps he no longer disguised it with a cane as often. His signet ring was still on his right hand, worn smooth. He looked, she thought, like a man who had survived more than one war and had forgotten to declare peace at either end. "You look older," she said. "You look more careful," he said. The words landed exactly where she had been avoiding being touched. "I am careful." "That's what I mean." Aurora tucked a strand of straight black hair behind her ear. It was longer than when he had known her, and darker, or perhaps the light in the bar made it look that way. Her eyes, bright blue and always too quick with judgment, met his for a moment and looked away. "You left London," she said. "I left Prague." "Same difference. Both cities have a way of ruining you quietly." "You're being cruel." "You're being vague." "And you are being honest," Silas said. "That's new." "Being honest is easier when nobody wants anything from you." He reached across and moved the package back toward her. "Take it." She did not. "Rory." "That's not my name." "Then Aurora?" She flinched so slightly that she might not have if she had not been watching herself. "Don't." "Laila?" "No." "Malphora?" Something broke open in her face and closed again before it could leak out. "You heard that name?" "You were at your mother's house when it was said. You were fifteen. You told me it meant something like a storm that doesn't apologize." Aurora pressed her fingers together until the knuckles went white. "I was fifteen." "People decide who they are when they're fifteen. After that they're just rehearsing." "Is that what you were doing?" "No," he said. "I was deciding whether to call your father." The sentence sat between them with the weight of all the years that had been waiting to land. Aurora looked at the package, at the ring, at his left leg, at the place where his thumb had gone white. She could hear the restaurant upstairs in her mind, the hiss of the wok, Yu-Fei Cheung's quiet orders, the way the delivery phone rang like a wasp trapped in glass. She could hear Cardiff in the distance too, rain on slate, her mother saying, "Be reasonable, Jennifer," and her father saying, "No, be brave." "When you left Evan," Silas said, "I knew." She turned her head slowly. "You knew." "I suspected. I saw him at a party in London before you arrived. He was polite. That's usually a good sign. It means he's trying." "And when he wasn't trying?" "Then you learn what he's trying to keep." Aurora's mouth went dry. "You didn't do anything." "No." "You were here. You know how things work." "I know how people work. That isn't the same as knowing how to help them." "Help them," she repeated, tasting the phrase. Silas drew the box closer, then pushed it away again, an old man fighting a war with furniture. "I could have asked questions. You would have lied. I could have pressed. You would have vanished. I know how to let vanishing look like leaving." "I didn't vanish." "You left a forwarding address with no name." "Eva gave you my name." "Eva gave me a name and a warning and a cup of coffee. She said, 'Look after her, but don't make it obvious.' I have never been good at obvious. Or looking after." Aurora closed her eyes. Behind her lids, she saw the flat she had rented through a woman who had died before ever meeting her, the narrow stairs that smelled of turpentine and old bread, the window that looked out over a fire escape like a cage someone had made decorative. She saw the first morning after the flight, waking with both hands curled around her phone, waiting for a text that would either call her back or punish her for being gone. She had not understood then that the punishment had already arrived in the shape of being herself in a room alone. "When was the last time you slept without checking the locks?" Silas asked. "Who told you that?" "No one. I asked because I wanted you to have a reason to say no." She said no. He waited. Then she said, "I don't remember." "That's not an answer." "It's the most honest answer I have." Silas nodded once. The barkeeper came around and looked at him expectantly. He waved him away without looking. "Tea," he said. "For the girl." "It's tea," Aurora said. "Not a girl." "Tea," he amended, and the ghost of something like affection moved across his face. When the cups came, Aurora wrapped her hands around hers. Steam rose between them and blurred the old photographs, softened the maps. For a moment she was nineteen again, arguing with him in a kitchen in Cardiff while rain hammered the windows and her mother pretended to read a novel. She could smell the lemon peel in her father's hand when he offered it as a peace offering. She could hear Silas saying, "The law is not a sword, child. It's a lockpick." And she had replied, very earnest, "Then I'll be the locksmith." "Why did you stop?" Silas asked. "Why did you?" "I was retired. You were supposed to be beginning." Aurora looked into the tea. "I was beginning. Then I was beginning again. Then I was beginning again and calling it survival." "That is not the same thing." "It's the same thing if you're alone enough." He did not answer at once. Outside, a taxi hissed through a puddle. A woman laughed somewhere down the street, sharp and careless, a sound like someone breaking a promise to be more careful. Silas reached into his jacket and withdrew a small brass key. He set it beside the package. "For the room behind the bookshelf," he said. Aurora stared at it. "I'm not going to run a network from your basement, Silas." "You're not running anywhere. That's the point." "Then why?" "Because if you're going to come here again, you should know that some doors don't have to lead back to the street." She wanted to accuse him of arrogance. She wanted to say he had no right to offer sanctuary after so many years of silence. She wanted to say thank you in a voice that did not crack. Instead she looked at the key, at his hand, at the silver ring, and understood suddenly that this was not generosity. This was regret wearing the face of kindness. "You kept my book," she said. "I keep everything I mean to return," he said. "Did you mean to return it?" Silas looked at her with an expression she had never seen on his face before. It was not shame, exactly. Shame would have been easier to hate. It was the look of a man who had spent a lifetime being called wise and had only recently realized that wisdom could be a place where mistakes learned to hide. "No," he said. Aurora pushed the key back across the table. "Then why give it to me?" "Because I have learned the difference between keeping something and protecting it." She stood. The chair scraped softly. She felt taller in that moment, not by inches, but by the strange lifting of a weight she had carried so long that she had forgotten it was not her own skeleton. She placed the package between them again. "Open it when you're ready," she said. "You brought it for me." "I brought it because you're the only person who might remember the person who wrote in it." Silas's fingers stilled on the box. Aurora buttoned her coat. Her wrist was hidden again. The scar was still there, but she did not tug the sleeve down this time. She had decided, perhaps wrongly, perhaps for the first time, that it belonged to the person who survived, not the person who had been afraid. Outside, the rain had eased. The green neon sign buzzed above the door, casting a wet glow on the pavement. Aurora walked to the curb and waited for a cab. Her phone buzzed in her pocket with a message from Yu-Fei Cheung: "Where are you? Dinner rush will eat us alive." She typed back: "Raven's Nest." The reply came at once: "Silas?" Aurora looked back at the bar. Through the rain-streaked window, she could see him still sitting at the far table, the package in his hands, the bookshelf behind him like a mouth about to speak. She thought of saying no. She thought of saying that she was done with old debts, old rooms, old names. But the truth was smaller and more stubborn than that. She had walked into the bar because something in her had wanted to be seen by someone who had seen her before. Not as a victim, not as a lawyer, not as a courier or a runaway or a girl who had been too careful with her own life. Just Rory, who used to argue with everyone, who had once drawn a house on a map of London and said, "This one. I want this one." She typed, one word at a time, with a fingertip that trembled only because she was standing in the cold. "Yes." The message left her phone before she could call it back. Across the street, the neon sign flickered once, steadied, and glowed green in the wet dark.
created_at"2026-09-02T16:56:04.866Z" 9/2/2026, 4:56:04 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags34
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She typed back: [back]"
dialogueSentences125
tagDensity0.272
leniency0.544
rawRatio0.029
effectiveRatio0.016
91.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2806
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"very"
3"suddenly"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
82.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2806
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"could feel"
count1
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"affection"
count1
5
word"sanctuary"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"could feel"
1"comfortable"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"affection"
5"sanctuary"
6"trembled"
7"flickered"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
1
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"knuckles went white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences168
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences168
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences258
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2806
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions41
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1923
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.04
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Carter1
Blackwood1
Prague1
Jennifer1
Brendan1
Silas20
Yu-Fei2
Cheung2
Cardiff2
Aurora19
Rory1
London1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Blackwood"
3"Jennifer"
4"Brendan"
5"Silas"
6"Yu-Fei"
7"Cheung"
8"Aurora"
9"Rory"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore0.98
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences113
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like affection moved across his fa"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.356
wordCount2806
matches
0"not by inches, but by the strange lifting of a weight she had carried so long"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences258
matches
0"heard that name"
1"look that way"
2"realized that wisdom"
3"saying that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs148
mean18.96
std23.05
cv1.216
sampleLengths
0104
125
22
333
45
579
698
73
87
915
1032
1139
1227
1312
143
156
1653
175
1832
193
2028
214
223
2329
243
2510
2625
273
287
2923
307
3135
3224
334
343
353
365
3776
3834
392
406
419
4215
432
4411
4532
4639
4716
482
4914
92.73% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences168
matches
0"been told"
1"been repeated"
2"was tucked"
3"been paid"
4"being gone"
5"being called"
6"was hidden"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs349
matches
0"was watching"
1"were pretending"
2"was standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences258
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.65% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1930
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount89
adverbRatio0.0461139896373057
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.00932642487046632
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences258
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences258
mean10.88
std8.86
cv0.815
sampleLengths
025
125
238
35
411
525
62
710
823
95
1031
1111
1218
1319
149
1520
1649
1720
183
197
2015
216
2226
238
2431
256
2614
277
286
296
303
316
322
336
3424
354
362
3715
385
3928
404
413
428
439
4411
454
463
478
4821
493
40.70% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats24
diversityRatio0.24806201550387597
totalSentences258
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences138
matches
0"Just two people who had"
1"Perhaps because there had not"
2"Then she said,"
3"Instead she looked at the"
4"Just Rory, who used to"
ratio0.036
46.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount60
totalSentences138
matches
0"She did not want comfort."
1"She wanted to leave the"
2"She had not heard that"
3"She pushed the door open."
4"He sat with his right"
5"His grey-streaked auburn beard was"
6"He was watching her with"
7"She hated how easily the"
8"she said, though it was"
9"She hadn't realized her fingers"
10"She tugged it down."
11"He always noticed, but he"
12"They had not discussed Jennifer"
13"She almost smiled at the"
14"It sat there like a"
15"They knew the shape of"
16"They could see the rain"
17"She reached for the package"
18"He did not take it"
19"He looked at it as"
ratio0.435
39.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount116
totalSentences138
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Aurora Carter stood under it"
2"She did not want comfort."
3"She wanted to leave the"
4"She had not heard that"
5"She pushed the door open."
6"The bar was dim in"
7"The maps on the walls"
8"The photographs still watched with"
9"Silas was at the far"
10"He sat with his right"
11"His grey-streaked auburn beard was"
12"He was watching her with"
13"She hated how easily the"
14"she said, though it was"
15"Silas gestured to the chair"
16"Aurora looked down at the"
17"She hadn't realized her fingers"
18"The word girl was a"
19"The wood was warm beneath"
ratio0.841
36.23% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"Now he listened like a"
ratio0.007
54.79% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Inside, she knew, would be old maps with curling corners, black-and-white photographs of people who looked less alive now than they had in the photographs, and …"
1"The bar was dim in the way it had always been dim, as though someone had lowered the lights on purpose so that secrets could feel more comfortable sitting besid…"
2"His grey-streaked auburn beard was neatly trimmed as ever, but his hair looked thinner, and the left knee, the one she remembered from a story about Prague that…"
3"He was watching her with the careful calm of a man who had learned to measure exits without appearing to."
4"Just two people who had known each other before the present arrived, and not enough time after to decide what the present should do with them."
5"Inside, beneath a cloth, was a small book, its spine cracked, its cover stained with what might have been wine or tea or the ghost of some other liquid that had…"
6"The line of his jaw had softened, but his shoulders had grown narrower in the way of men who learned to carry their lives inside smaller rooms."
7"Behind her lids, she saw the flat she had rented through a woman who had died before ever meeting her, the narrow stairs that smelled of turpentine and old brea…"
8"She saw the first morning after the flight, waking with both hands curled around her phone, waiting for a text that would either call her back or punish her for…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags34
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences125
tagDensity0.208
leniency0.416
rawRatio0.038
effectiveRatio0.016
87.6058%