Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HHPF1S4TR2B2BG196EFS6M

Run Details

Duration:
3m 13s
Cost:
$0.007167
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The man's boot struck the wet kerb and he slid past the front of The Raven's Nest. Harlow Quinn took his collar. His medallion snapped against her knuckles, silver and cold. Saint Christopher. Patron of travellers. Useless tonight. A minute earlier, the bookshelf in the hidden back room at The Raven's Nest had swung wide. Tomás Herrera had come through with a medical bag across his chest, and Quinn had been too slow to see why. "Let me go." His accent had gone thick. "I have a patient." "Former paramedic, unlicensed medical procedures." She twisted his arm. "That's what you call a patient?" The green neon sign pulsed above them. Raven. Raven. "He will die." "Your problem?" "Your evidence." He broke loose. His scarred forearm flashed as he shoved the fire escape. Steel rang. Quinn did not pause at the rungs. She climbed with equal pressure, one hand high, one low, the pattern drilled into her at a time she no longer counted. On the roof, the alley mouth yawned below them, black and narrow. Tomás reached the far parapet, jumped onto the scaffold of a converted flat, and vanished through a hole in the blue tarp. She followed. Boards creaked. Her boot slipped, and she caught herself on a metal rail before the fall could finish. The roof sloped. Water ran from one edge and sprayed onto a window below. A woman inside screamed and threw up her blinds. "Police!" Quinn called. "Stay inside." Tomás crossed the next roof gap. He dropped into a yard, rolled over a bin bag, and came up running. Quinn hit the ground with a thud that moved pain from her ankle to her jaw. "Control, this is Quinn." The radio on her belt spat static. No reply. She pressed the transmit. "I am pursuing one male, dark coat, medical bag. Eastbound from Soho. Need no support." Static again. The alley opened onto a street lined with shuttered restaurants. Tomás cut left, through a gap between a barber and a florist. The florist had a bucket of dead sunflowers outside. Their petals hung like torn paper. She took the same gap and heard him ahead, his shoes slapping the pavement. A bus pulled away from the curb. He dove under its side mirror, rolled past the front wheel, and came up on the other lane. Traffic swerved. Horns barked. A taxi driver shouted a word that contained half the Spanish alphabet and several inventions of his own. Quinn ran straight across the road, through the gap the taxi had made. Metal struck her shoulder and spun her. She expected a car, then saw a scaffold pole. The pain was clean. It kept her sharp. Tomás took the next turning. His shoulder hit the wall. He rebounded, lost a shoe, and kept running on one sock. Quinn grabbed the fallen shoe. It was warm. She threw it after him. It missed by a metre and skidded into a puddle. "Steady." He spoke without turning. "You are making me look weak." "Good." She drew nearer. "Let's do it properly." He reached a canal lock and ran along the towpath. The water moved in black folds under the bridge arches. A moored barge had a light on in its cabin, and a cat watched them from the stern. Tomás did not run like a guilty man. He ran like a man with a destination and too little fuel. That worried her. At the next bridge, he climbed a steel ladder bolted into the wall. A sign at the top read Camden Town. Closed. The ladder ended at a gate painted black. Beyond the gate, a staircase descended into brick. The steps were narrow, older than the station map, and wet with a condensation that smelled of rust and salt. Quinn caught the gate before it swung. The latch was warm. Not from her hand. From something inside. "Police. Hands where I can see them." Tomás stood on the first landing and looked up. His warm brown eyes caught the green spill of a streetlight above. The medallion hung crooked over his collarbone. The Saint Christopher had a dent across the chest. "You should not be here." "I should be where the crime goes." "It is not a crime." "A man with no licence, moving through walls with stolen bones. Tell me that is not a crime." "It is medicine." "Then show me." He pulled from his jacket a small object carved from pale bone. It looked like a hand, fingers closed around nothing. The shape had a human thumb. The nails had ridges. "The market will not open for you." "Open it anyway." "No." Quinn moved down two steps. Tomás moved back. The landing narrowed, then widened into a tunnel with no platform, no trains, only a corridor of cracked tile and iron doors. The sound of London faded. The drip from her coat became loud. The drip became a drip. Then silence became a room. Tomás pressed the bone hand against the wall. Mortar shifted beneath it. Tiles cracked apart. The wall exhaled cold air. A stairwell appeared where brick had been, descending into lantern light. Quinn stopped. "You have no jurisdiction below this," Tomás said. "You have no maps, no backup, no reason to trust what you see." "Reason enough." "Morris had reason." "Morris is dead." "Morris came through a door exactly like this one." Her hand went to her belt. The cuffs felt heavy. Her watch, the worn leather one she had never replaced, ticked against her wrist. The tick came too fast for a good watch. It ticked like a child's toy. The bone token slid from Tomás's fingers. It fell toward the doorway and hung in the air, an inch above the wet tile. "Take it," Tomás said. "Follow me and lose yourself. Leave it and go back to your report. No one will blame you." "Step away from the door." "I cannot. The patient is inside." "Then let me call an ambulance." "An ambulance cannot cross that floor." Quinn looked down. The stairwell swallowed light. Below the first step, the platform appeared, old and empty and wrong. A train stood there, long after its line had closed. The windows were dark, yet something sat behind each pane. No shapes. No faces. Only the weight of attention. A bell rang somewhere beneath her feet. The tone did not fade. It hung in the wall and grew teeth. Tomás stepped through. Quinn reached for the token. Cold bit her palm. The bone hand wrapped around her fingers, as if it had chosen that grip long before she arrived. She followed. The ramp widened into a station, then a square, then a market with no right to exist. Lanterns burned with green flame along the old platform. Stalls stretched where tracks should have run. A woman in a red coat sold bottles of smoke. A boy with no shadow swept a path between crates of teeth. Glass jars held eyes, fingers, small birds stitched with silver thread. A man with a briefcase whispered prices into a phone. The signs hung from iron hooks: Veil Market. Camden Undercroft. Full Moon. No one looked at her badge. No one looked at her uniform. Their eyes slid from her, as if she belonged to a language they refused to read. She kept her torch low and moved through the crowd with the straight posture of women trained to march. Every step measured. Every breath counted. Her ankle throbbed. The pain anchored her. Tomás stood at the end of a stall, speaking to an old woman whose hands looked dried roots. The woman placed a vial into his medical bag. The glass inside moved like a worm. He looked up. "Put the token on the table, Detective." Quinn kept it in her fist. "You are under arrest." "For what?" "Unlicensed practice. Obstruction. Possession of stolen property." "That vial is not stolen. The bone is borrowed." "You came through a wall." "You followed." She stepped toward him. The crowd parted, not because she commanded it, but because a shape moved behind her, tall and wrapped in wet coats. It smelled of Thames mud at low tide. It had no head, only a collar and the black space between. "Walk away, Quinn." The voice belonged to no mouth. Tomás grabbed her arm. The scar on his forearm had gone white and raised. "Do not let it remember you." "Remember me for what?" "For the thing you became." A stall lid crashed. The lanterns swung. Bone tokens clattered on the ground like fallen teeth. The headless figure turned its collar toward the far arch. People fled. A child's shoe stayed on the tile, empty and pointing at the door. Quinn looked where it faced. A door stood open at the end of the platform, beyond the old train tracks. Behind it, green neon flickered. Raven. Raven. She knew the door. Not the room. Not the station. The file on her desk, three years old, had a photograph just like it. A door that should not have been in a London basement. A door from the case that took Morris. Something breathed from the doorway. It carried disinfectant, blood, and Saint Christopher silver. Tomás crushed the vial between his thumb and finger. "Run," he said. "Now." The door opened wider.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1558
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1558
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"measured"
4"throbbed"
5"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences173
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences213
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen22
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1558
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1305
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Raven6
Nest2
Quinn14
Christopher3
Herrera1
Tomás16
Spanish1
Camden2
Town1
Saint3
London2
Veil1
Market1
Undercroft1
Moon1
Thames1
Morris1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Quinn"
3"Christopher"
4"Herrera"
5"Tomás"
6"Saint"
7"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
2"London"
3"Thames"
globalScore0.887
windowScore0.833
96.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences94
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a hand, fingers closed around"
1"appeared, old and empty and wrong"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1558
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences213
matches
0"chosen that grip"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean18.77
std19.09
cv1.017
sampleLengths
038
138
212
315
49
53
62
717
863
943
105
1136
1232
132
1451
1547
1637
1744
1811
198
2058
213
2258
2318
247
2537
265
277
285
2918
303
313
3231
337
343
351
3647
375
3831
392
4021
412
423
433
449
4539
4623
4722
485
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs223
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences213
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1305
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.022222222222222223
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0030651340996168583
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences213
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences213
mean7.31
std4.98
cv0.68
sampleLengths
017
15
29
32
43
52
617
721
88
94
109
116
127
131
141
153
162
175
1810
192
207
2122
2212
2322
242
252
2616
273
2811
299
303
312
326
3314
3416
3511
362
374
3815
392
4010
4112
429
436
4414
457
4618
472
482
4918
46.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.3380281690140845
totalSentences213
uniqueOpeners72
45.35% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"Then silence became a room."
1"Only the weight of attention."
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences147
matches
0"His medallion snapped against her"
1"His accent had gone thick"
2"She twisted his arm"
3"He broke loose"
4"His scarred forearm flashed as"
5"She climbed with equal pressure,"
6"Her boot slipped, and she"
7"He dropped into a yard,"
8"She pressed the transmit."
9"Their petals hung like torn"
10"She took the same gap"
11"He dove under its side"
12"She expected a car, then"
13"It kept her sharp."
14"His shoulder hit the wall."
15"He rebounded, lost a shoe,"
16"It was warm."
17"She threw it after him."
18"It missed by a metre"
19"He spoke without turning"
ratio0.272
11.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount132
totalSentences147
matches
0"The man's boot struck the"
1"Harlow Quinn took his collar."
2"His medallion snapped against her"
3"Patron of travellers."
4"A minute earlier, the bookshelf"
5"Tomás Herrera had come through"
6"His accent had gone thick"
7"She twisted his arm"
8"The green neon sign pulsed"
9"He broke loose"
10"His scarred forearm flashed as"
11"Quinn did not pause at"
12"She climbed with equal pressure,"
13"Tomás reached the far parapet,"
14"Her boot slipped, and she"
15"The roof sloped."
16"Water ran from one edge"
17"A woman inside screamed and"
18"Tomás crossed the next roof"
19"He dropped into a yard,"
ratio0.898
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Quinn hit the ground with a thud that moved pain from her ankle to her jaw."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"her belt spat (spit)"
1"He spoke (speak)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.12
leniency0.24
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.08
88.7912%