Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HJD8W9B24XMJY9P6SRJXY0

Run Details

Duration:
22.5s
Cost:
$0.015643
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon of the sign outside bled across the wet pavement of Dean Street, staining the puddles the color of bruised absinthe. Inside The Raven’s Nest, the air was warm and smelled of damp wool, spilled stout, and lemon beeswax. Silas Blackwood moved behind the long mahogany bar with the measured, rolling hitch in his stride that Rory had learned to measure time by—three sharp clicks of leather sole, then the softer, dull thud of his left heel favoring the bad knee. The silver signet ring on his right hand clinked against the rim of a tumbler as he set it before her. Drink your tea, Aurora, Silas said without looking up, his auburn beard bristling with grey as he bent to wipe down the beer taps with a clean linen cloth. You look like you rode that bicycle straight into the Thames. It was only Greek Street, Rory said, cupping the warm ceramic mug. Her shoulder-length black hair was still damp at the ends, sticking to the collar of her jumper. Delivery shift was quiet anyway. Yu-Fei let me off twenty minutes early. Quiet is good. Quiet doesn't bring the police, Silas murmured. His hazel eyes flicked once toward the entrance, instinct older than his tenancy here, cataloging the swing of the heavy oak door before the brass bell above it had even finished its chime. A man stepped in out of the Soho drizzle, shaking a collapsible black umbrella until the ribs rattled. He was tall, his broad shoulders bundled into a charcoal wool overcoat with clean, sharp lapels that did not belong in a basement tavern paneled with yellowed Admiralty charts and silver-gelatin prints of dead dockworkers. He stood in the entryway, blinking against the amber gloom, smoothing back dark hair that was beginning to thin neatly at the temples. Rory went very still. The reflex was automatic—a tightening beneath her ribs, the subtle shifting of her weight so the ball of her right foot was flat against the floorboards, ready to push back from the bar stool. It was the Cardiff habit, the old, feral caution Evan had beaten into her reflexes and that three years in London had failed to scour clean. Then the man took off his leather gloves, looked toward the end of the bar, and stopped. Aurora? The name hit her like cold well-water. Nobody in London used it. In London she was Rory, or Carter to the kitchen hands at the Golden Empress when the takeaway tickets piled up on the wheel. Aurora was the girl who had owned three tailored skirt suits, who had sat in the front row of the law lecture hall at Cathays Park, who had let her father Brendan introduce her at judicial dinners with that booming, proprietary laugh of his. Rhys, she said. Her voice was flat, purely defensive. Rhys Pritchard stood there, the umbrella dripping a dark circle onto Silas’s parquet floor. He took two tentative steps forward, as if half-convinced she might dissolve into the smoke and the shadows behind the draft pumps. His mouth quirked into a smile that carried all the old, easy confidence of South Wales money, but his eyes were wide, uncertain. My God, he breathed, coming up to the stool beside hers. It really is you. I thought—I swear I thought I was hallucinating. What are you doing here? I live here, Rory said. Here? He glanced around, taking in the scuffed rail, the antique compass mounted crookedly behind the spirits shelf, the solitary drunk asleep over an evening paper three booths back. Upstairs, she clarified, nodding toward the ceiling. The floorboards above groaned occasionally when the wind caught the chimney stack. Silas did not introduce himself. He simply shifted along the bar, his 6'1" frame seeming to expand slightly, placing himself directly between them across the wood, towering quietly with an unreadable expression. He set a heavy cardboard coaster in front of Rhys. Pint? Silas asked, the voice dry as crushed gravel. A—a bitter, please. Whatever’s on tap, Rhys said, thrown off balance by the older man’s stillness. He took off his coat and folded it over the back of the empty stool, revealing a crisp spread collar and a silk tie patterned in microscopic burgundy crests. When he turned back to Rory, his eyes swept over her with an attorney’s rapid, inventorying gaze. You cut your hair, he said softly. Three years ago, Rhys. Right. Of course. He rubbed his hands together. They were pale, smooth, the nails buffed to a dull sheen. The hands of an articled clerk who spent his afternoons turning the vellum leaves of leasehold disputes. He looked at her fingers where they curled around the mug—short nails clipped blunt, the skin chapped from the October wind on the bicycle handlebars, and the pale, thin crescent-shaped scar tucked into the crease of her left wrist, an old relic from a broken milk bottle when she was seven. I ran into your father, Rhys said, his voice dropping an octave, trying to manufacture an intimacy they hadn't shared since the third year of their degree. At the Crown Court in Swansea. Last spring. He looks older, Rory. He didn't know where you were. He knows I’m in London, she said. She didn't look at Silas, though she felt the weight of the bar owner's hazel gaze settle upon her. Her parents had Eva’s address in Clapham, and Eva had an agreement never to pass letters unless they were written in her mother's tidy, apologetic cursive. Brendan Carter did not write letters; he issued summonses. He was furious with you, you know, Rhys continued, leaning his forearm against the mahogany. He didn't touch the pint Silas set down with a sharp clink. Dropping out two months before the final exams. You were on track for a first. Mason-Davies had a pupillage lined up for you at his chambers. We were supposed to go into the city together. Rory took a slow sip of her tea. It had gone lukewarm, tasting faintly of bergamot and the iron of the tavern's pipes. I had other things to take care of. Evan, Rhys said, the name dropping between them like lead shot. Rory’s fingers tightened on the ceramic until the knuckles showed white. Silas paused in his glass-drying, the linen cloth gathered in his fist. You don't need to say his name, Rory said, her voice dropping into that cool, low register that used to terrify the other students in the university moot court. I only meant—we were worried, Rory. He said you just vanished one Tuesday. Packed a rucksack and cleared out your flat. Left all your textbooks behind. We thought—well, Evan told everyone you’d had a breakdown. That the pressure got to you. Did he? Rhys looked down at his beer, suddenly uncomfortable. The amber reflection flickered across his cheekbones. He reached out, his thumb worrying the rim of the glass. I know he wasn't easy. He had a temper when he’d been drinking at the union. But you two were… I don't know. You seemed like a unit. You had everything mapped out. Everything, she repeated. She looked at Rhys’s tie, at the expensive silver fountain pen clipped into his breast pocket. She remembered sitting with him in the law library until two in the morning, sharing pasties and arguing over the subtleties of promissory estoppel. He had been decent then, a boy who laughed easily and lent her his notes when she missed lectures because she was covering a split lip with foundation. He hadn't asked then, either. It was easier not to look at the shadows under her collarbones as long as she was still drafting the best skeleton arguments in the seminar. I’m working for Yu-Fei Cheung, she said, her voice deliberately mild. Chinese restaurant around the corner. I ride a six-speed Raleigh with a plastic crate strapped to the back. Rhys blinked, clearly searching for the irony, the wry, self-deprecating joke she used to tell to break the tension in a crowded room. Finding none, his face settled into a look that was worse than anger: pity, thick and patronizing. Aurora, you’re brilliant. You’re the smartest person I ever studied with. You can’t be—you can’t just throw it all away because things went sideways with a boy. It’s been three years. If you need money to finish your qualification, my father knows people at the Inns of Court. We could talk to someone. You could come home. Home, she said, letting the word hang in the dim space between them. The maps on the wall behind Silas rustled in the draft from the cellar stairs. Silas set a heavy glass bowl of green olives on the counter between them. He didn't say a word, but the thud of the bowl was a period at the end of a sentence. I like London, Rhys, she said quietly. You're delivering noodles in the rain. I sleep eight hours a night, she said, looking straight into his eyes. Her bright blue gaze was steady, free of the feverish panic that used to hollow out her cheeks during those final months in Cathays. And nobody touches my things. And nobody waits for me behind the door with the lights off to see what time I get back from the library. Rhys’s mouth opened slightly. The color receded from his ears, leaving them pale against his dark hair. The smooth, practiced advocacy he had been trained in seemed to desert him, leaving only the awkward boy who had never had to sprint through Cardiff Central station with twenty pounds in his shoe and his heart hammering against his teeth. I didn't… he began, then stopped. He picked up his pint and took a long, clumsy swallow, wiping foam from his upper lip with the back of his thumb. He looked around the bar again, but this time his eyes lingered on the heavy bolted door behind the register, the dark corners, the profound, defensive isolation of the place. He didn't hit you, did he? Rhys asked, his voice barely a whisper against the low jazz hum of the radio on Silas's back shelf. Rory looked at the crescent scar on her wrist, then pulled the sleeve of her jumper down to cover it. She picked up her tea mug and drained the bitter dregs at the bottom. It doesn't matter what he did, Rhys. It matters what I did. I left. He sat in silence for a long time, the ice-melt of the London rain outside running down the windowpanes in steady, distorted lines. He reached into his coat, pulled out a twenty-pound note, and laid it flat on the wood. He didn't finish the beer. I have a dinner, he said, not looking at her. With the partners at a firm in Chancery Lane. I only ducked in because of the downpour. Good luck with the interview, Rory said, and she meant it without malice. She remembered the fire of that ambition, how clean and uncomplicated it had seemed before it was tangled up in fear and pride and the suffocating weight of everyone's expectations. It belonged to another lifetime, to a girl who had died in a damp terrace house in Roath. Rhys stood, buttoning his coat, the wool settling over his frame with tailored precision. He looked at her one last time—at her rough hands, her dark, vigilant eyes, the oversized second-hand sweater—and she saw in his face the realization that the girl he remembered was entirely gone, replaced by someone harder, leaner, and utterly out of his reach. Take care of yourself, Aurora, he said. Rory, she corrected gently. He hesitated, nodded once, and pulled the brass latch of the door. The Soho cold rushed in for a second, sharp with the smell of exhaust fumes and wet asphalt, before the heavy oak slammed shut behind him, cutting the city off once more. Silas picked up the twenty-pound note, smoothed it flat against his palm, and tucked it into the till with a dry ring of the bell. He picked up a fresh glass and poured three fingers of amber whisky, sliding it down the polished wood until it tapped gently against her empty tea mug. Cardiff? Silas asked quietly, his hands resting on the counter, the signet ring catching the dull green reflection of the street outside. Cardiff, she replied, picking up the whisky. They sat together in the warm, dim quiet of the Nest, surrounded by maps of places neither of them would ever return to.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
76.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2107
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
5
adverb"deliberately"
count1
6
adverb"utterly"
count1
7
adverb"gently"
count2
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
2"slightly"
3"softly"
4"suddenly"
5"deliberately"
6"utterly"
7"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2107
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"solitary"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"profound"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"flicked"
2"gloom"
3"weight"
4"solitary"
5"unreadable"
6"silk"
7"flickered"
8"tension"
9"profound"
10"whisper"
11"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences82
matches
0"was furious"
1"p in fear"
73.17% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences82
filterMatches
0"look"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2098
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions17
matches
0"Drink your tea, Aurora, Silas said without looking up, his auburn beard bristling with grey as he bent to wipe down the …"
1"It was only Greek Street, Rory said, cupping the warm ceramic mug."
2"Rhys, she said."
3"My God, he breathed, coming up to the stool beside hers."
4"I live here, Rory said."
5"Upstairs, she clarified, nodding toward the ceiling."
6"Pint? Silas asked, the voice dry as crushed gravel."
7"You cut your hair, he said softly."
8"Evan, Rhys said, the name dropping between them like lead shot."
9"Home, she said, letting the word hang in the dim space between them."
10"I like London, Rhys, she said quietly."
11"I sleep eight hours a night, she said, looking straight into his eyes. Her bright blue gaze was steady, free of the feve…"
12"I have a dinner, he said, not looking at her. With the partners at a firm in Chancery Lane. I only ducked in because of …"
13"Take care of yourself, Aurora, he said."
14"Rory, she corrected gently."
15"Cardiff? Silas asked quietly, his hands resting on the counter, the signet ring catching the dull green reflection of th…"
16"Cardiff, she replied, picking up the whisky."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions115
wordCount2068
uniqueNames43
maxNameDensity0.73
worstName"Rhys"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Dean1
Street2
Raven1
Nest2
Blackwood1
Rory14
Aurora5
Silas14
Thames1
Greek1
Soho2
Admiralty1
Cardiff4
Evan3
London6
Carter2
Golden1
Empress1
Cathays2
Park1
Brendan2
Pritchard1
South1
Wales1
God1
Pint1
Rhys15
October1
Crown1
Court2
Swansea1
Eva2
Clapham1
Tuesday1
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
Raleigh1
Inns1
Central1
Chancery1
Lane1
Roath1
You10
persons
0"Nest"
1"Blackwood"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Admiralty"
5"Evan"
6"Carter"
7"Brendan"
8"Pritchard"
9"Rhys"
10"Eva"
11"Yu-Fei"
12"Cheung"
13"You"
places
0"Dean"
1"Street"
2"Raven"
3"Thames"
4"Greek"
5"Soho"
6"Cardiff"
7"London"
8"Golden"
9"Cathays"
10"Park"
11"South"
12"Wales"
13"October"
14"Crown"
15"Swansea"
16"Clapham"
17"Raleigh"
18"Inns"
19"Chancery"
20"Lane"
21"Roath"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2098
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"rode that bicycle"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean36.81
std25.96
cv0.705
sampleLengths
0104
140
241
343
476
564
617
71
880
99
1059
1128
125
1329
1419
1542
169
1762
187
194
2087
2145
2261
2362
2423
258
2611
2723
2829
2941
302
3159
32102
3329
3440
3557
3613
3749
387
396
4064
4158
4259
4325
4434
4514
4645
4727
4861
4958
88.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences82
matches
0"were written"
1"were supposed"
2"been trained"
3"was tangled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs352
matches
0"was beginning"
1"was hallucinating"
2"was covering"
3"was still drafting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences82
ratio0.11
matches
0"Silas Blackwood moved behind the long mahogany bar with the measured, rolling hitch in his stride that Rory had learned to measure time by—three sharp clicks of leather sole, then the softer, dull thud of his left heel favoring the bad knee."
1"The reflex was automatic—a tightening beneath her ribs, the subtle shifting of her weight so the ball of her right foot was flat against the floorboards, ready to push back from the bar stool."
2"I thought—I swear I thought I was hallucinating."
3"A—a bitter, please. Whatever’s on tap, Rhys said, thrown off balance by the older man’s stillness. He took off his coat and folded it over the back of the empty stool, revealing a crisp spread collar and a silk tie patterned in microscopic burgundy crests. When he turned back to Rory, his eyes swept over her with an attorney’s rapid, inventorying gaze."
4"Right. Of course. He rubbed his hands together. They were pale, smooth, the nails buffed to a dull sheen. The hands of an articled clerk who spent his afternoons turning the vellum leaves of leasehold disputes. He looked at her fingers where they curled around the mug—short nails clipped blunt, the skin chapped from the October wind on the bicycle handlebars, and the pale, thin crescent-shaped scar tucked into the crease of her left wrist, an old relic from a broken milk bottle when she was seven."
5"He knows I’m in London, she said. She didn't look at Silas, though she felt the weight of the bar owner's hazel gaze settle upon her. Her parents had Eva’s address in Clapham, and Eva had an agreement never to pass letters unless they were written in her mother's tidy, apologetic cursive. Brendan Carter did not write letters; he issued summonses."
6"I only meant—we were worried, Rory. He said you just vanished one Tuesday. Packed a rucksack and cleared out your flat. Left all your textbooks behind. We thought—well, Evan told everyone you’d had a breakdown. That the pressure got to you."
7"Aurora, you’re brilliant. You’re the smartest person I ever studied with. You can’t be—you can’t just throw it all away because things went sideways with a boy. It’s been three years. If you need money to finish your qualification, my father knows people at the Inns of Court. We could talk to someone. You could come home."
8"Rhys stood, buttoning his coat, the wool settling over his frame with tailored precision. He looked at her one last time—at her rough hands, her dark, vigilant eyes, the oversized second-hand sweater—and she saw in his face the realization that the girl he remembered was entirely gone, replaced by someone harder, leaner, and utterly out of his reach."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount635
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.03464566929133858
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.012598425196850394
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean25.59
std21.65
cv0.846
sampleLengths
023
118
242
321
429
511
612
717
85
97
103
117
1233
1318
1435
1523
164
1734
1826
1917
201
217
225
2324
2444
253
266
2714
2822
2923
3011
314
328
335
345
351
3628
377
3812
395
4037
419
4262
437
444
4587
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4761
4862
4923
66.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4268292682926829
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners35
42.19% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences79
matches
0"Then the man took off"
ratio0.013
47.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences79
matches
0"You look like you rode"
1"It was only Greek Street,"
2"Her shoulder-length black hair was"
3"His hazel eyes flicked once"
4"He was tall, his broad"
5"He stood in the entryway,"
6"It was the Cardiff habit,"
7"Her voice was flat, purely"
8"He took two tentative steps"
9"His mouth quirked into a"
10"My God, he breathed, coming"
11"It really is you."
12"I thought—I swear I thought"
13"I live here, Rory said."
14"He glanced around, taking in"
15"He simply shifted along the"
16"You cut your hair, he"
17"I ran into your father,"
18"He knows I’m in London,"
19"He was furious with you,"
ratio0.43
35.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences79
matches
0"The green neon of the"
1"Silas Blackwood moved behind the"
2"The silver signet ring on"
3"You look like you rode"
4"It was only Greek Street,"
5"Her shoulder-length black hair was"
6"Delivery shift was quiet anyway."
7"Yu-Fei let me off twenty"
8"His hazel eyes flicked once"
9"A man stepped in out"
10"He was tall, his broad"
11"He stood in the entryway,"
12"Rory went very still."
13"The reflex was automatic—a tightening"
14"It was the Cardiff habit,"
15"The name hit her like"
16"Nobody in London used it."
17"Aurora was the girl who"
18"Rhys, she said."
19"Her voice was flat, purely"
ratio0.848
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"He was tall, his broad shoulders bundled into a charcoal wool overcoat with clean, sharp lapels that did not belong in a basement tavern paneled with yellowed A…"
1"He stood in the entryway, blinking against the amber gloom, smoothing back dark hair that was beginning to thin neatly at the temples."
2"Aurora was the girl who had owned three tailored skirt suits, who had sat in the front row of the law lecture hall at Cathays Park, who had let her father Brend…"
3"He took two tentative steps forward, as if half-convinced she might dissolve into the smoke and the shadows behind the draft pumps."
4"His mouth quirked into a smile that carried all the old, easy confidence of South Wales money, but his eyes were wide, uncertain."
5"Right. Of course. He rubbed his hands together. They were pale, smooth, the nails buffed to a dull sheen. The hands of an articled clerk who spent his afternoon…"
6"I ran into your father, Rhys said, his voice dropping an octave, trying to manufacture an intimacy they hadn't shared since the third year of their degree. At t…"
7"You don't need to say his name, Rory said, her voice dropping into that cool, low register that used to terrify the other students in the university moot court."
8"Rhys looked down at his beer, suddenly uncomfortable. The amber reflection flickered across his cheekbones. He reached out, his thumb worrying the rim of the gl…"
9"Everything, she repeated. She looked at Rhys’s tie, at the expensive silver fountain pen clipped into his breast pocket. She remembered sitting with him in the …"
10"Rhys blinked, clearly searching for the irony, the wry, self-deprecating joke she used to tell to break the tension in a crowded room. Finding none, his face se…"
11"I sleep eight hours a night, she said, looking straight into his eyes. Her bright blue gaze was steady, free of the feverish panic that used to hollow out her c…"
12"Rhys’s mouth opened slightly. The color receded from his ears, leaving them pale against his dark hair. The smooth, practiced advocacy he had been trained in se…"
13"Good luck with the interview, Rory said, and she meant it without malice. She remembered the fire of that ambition, how clean and uncomplicated it had seemed be…"
14"Cardiff? Silas asked quietly, his hands resting on the counter, the signet ring catching the dull green reflection of the street outside."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
76.5539%