Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HK29VMDHB972N6V38701VK

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Duration:
14.7s
Cost:
$0.013483
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Tomás Herrera cleared the iron railing with the frantic grace of a man who knew precisely what lay in the dark below. Quinn’s boot struck the wet tarmac two paces behind him. Water sprayed across her shins, cold and bitter with road salt and diesel. Her lungs burned, but eighteen years of chasing thieves across London kept her stride long and mechanical. Herrera threw a blue plastic crate behind him. It clattered against Quinn’s knee, but she drove through it, the plastic splintering under her weight. He took the sharp corner into Stucley Place, the soles of his trainers squealing against slick cobblestones. A silver Saint Christopher medallion bounced wildly against his throat, flashing under the sodium streetlamps. "Met Police! Stand fast, Herrera!" He did not look back. He hugged a heavy canvas field kit against his ribs, his left arm crooked tight to protect it. A white jagged scar ran from his wrist to his elbow, stark against his olive skin where his rolled sleeve exposed it. He darted left, then right, zig-zagging through the narrow service alley behind the shuttered stalls of Camden Lock. The smell of rotting cabbage and damp brick gave way to something sharper. Ozone. Copper. The sour, chemical tang that Quinn still tasted in the back of her throat whenever she woke up thinking about Morris. Three years since Morris died in an alley just like this one, leaving behind an empty service weapon and three dry ribs on a sewer grate. Herrera slammed his shoulder into a pair of padlocked wooden doors beneath a disused railway arch. The chains snapped. The wood screamed, giving way to an open maw of black subterranean space. Quinn halted at the threshold, her hand dropping instinctively to the baton on her utility belt. "No exit down there, Tomás." Herrera turned at the base of the first flight of stone stairs, his chest heaving. His dark curly hair stuck to his forehead in wet coils. "Turn around, Detective." "You skipped bail on four counts of unlawful medical supply." "Those people were bleeding to death." "People do not bleed luminous bile, Herrera." "Then let me tend to them." "Drop the kit. Hands where I can see them." Herrera shook his head, his brown eyes wide under the spill of the streetlamp above. "You don't have jurisdiction past the threshold." "Try me." Herrera turned and plunged down the flight of steps into the black. Quinn clicked her heavy torch to life. The beam punched through a thick curtain of subterranean fog, illuminating cracked white tiles and rusted iron handrails. An old enamel sign hung crookedly from a beam: *Camden Crescent - Northern Line - Disused 1934*. The Metropolitan Police had no record of an active tunnel here. London Underground maps marked the spur as backfilled with gravel after the Blitz. Yet the stairs remained clear, worn down at the center by thousands of hurried boots. Water ran in steady ribbons down the tiled walls, drip-drop, drip-drop against the rusted track bed far below. Quinn checked her left wrist. The worn leather watch read twelve minutes past midnight. The air grew warmer as she descended, thick with the stench of animal tallow, scorched sage, and crushed dried beetles. It felt like walking into the mouth of a furnace that had burned out centuries ago. She stepped off the final riser onto a broad platform that should not have existed. Lanterns of cheap green glass hung from iron brackets drilled into the Victorian masonry. Below them stretched a cavernous, subterranean concourse, alive with movement. Wooden trestle tables lined the defunct tracks. Hooded figures milled between the stalls, their voices blending into a low, buzzing hum that vibrated inside Quinn’s jawbone. A handwritten parchment sign hung over an alchemist’s stall, offering *Grade-Four Wolfsbane and Purified Drake Gall*. Next to it, a tall, slender vendor with fingers far too long for a human being measured iridescent grey powder onto a brass balance. The Veil Market. She had seen whispers of it in Morris's private notebooks, scrawled in margins beside names of morgue attendants and disgraced surgeons. Quinn kept her chin down, narrowing her eyes. Her fingers rested firmly on the butt of her baton. Herrera stood thirty paces down the platform, blocked by two burly men in heavy woollen overcoats. "Token," the larger man muttered, his voice like grinding river stones. "Herrera. I'm with the clinic in Soho." "Token, butcher. Or your fingers feed the dogs." Herrera reached into his shirt collar, snapped a small carved bone token from a cord around his neck, and pressed it into the man's leather palm. The guard grunted and stepped aside, allowing Herrera through the iron turnstile. Quinn closed the distance, her boots silent on the damp flagstones. The second guard shifted his bulk to block her path. A heavy iron smell rolled off his coat, mingled with wet fur. His eyes were small, amber, and unblinking beneath a flat cap. "Lost, flatfoot?" "Police business. Move aside." The guard grinned, revealing two rows of pointed, yellowed teeth. "King's warrant ends at the street curb. You want through, you pay the bone." Quinn did not negotiate. She drove the heel of her palm straight into the hinge of his jaw. Bone popped. The creature grunted, stumbling back against the iron bars of the turnstile. Before he recovered his footing, Quinn drew her steel baton with an iron snap, cracked it across his kneecap, and vaulted the rusted turnstile. Herrera heard the crack. He whipped around, his jaw slackening as Quinn bore down on him. "Are you insane?" Herrera yelled. "They will peel you!" "Hands on your head!" "You just assaulted an iron-warden! Run, you stubborn fool!" A shrill brass whistle pierced the smoky air behind them. The hum of the market died in an instant. Heads turned across the entire subterranean concourse. Hoods drew back. The vendor with the long fingers froze, dropping a pinch of powder that hissed violently against the stone floor. Dozens of eyes, varying from pale silver to pitch black, locked directly onto Quinn’s blue police jacket. Herrera grabbed Quinn’s jacket sleeve, yanking her violently toward the shadow of a derailed carriage. "They don't let uniforms leave," he hissed. The shadows along the high arched ceiling detached themselves from the brickwork, dropping silently toward the platform on leather wings.
created_at"2026-09-02T17:36:00.895Z" 9/2/2026, 5:36:00 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.25% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"mechanical"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"stark"
count1
3
word"maw"
count1
4
word"vibrated"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"firmly"
count1
highlights
0"mechanical"
1"weight"
2"stark"
3"maw"
4"vibrated"
5"measured"
6"firmly"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences73
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords14
totalWords1055
ratio0.013
matches
0"Camden Crescent - Northern Line - Disused 1934"
1"Grade-Four Wolfsbane and Purified Drake Gall"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount934
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.5
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Herrera12
London2
Quinn14
Stucley1
Place1
Saint1
Christopher1
Camden2
Lock1
Morris3
Crescent1
Northern1
Line1
Disused1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Underground1
Blitz1
Victorian1
Wolfsbane1
Purified1
Drake1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Herrera"
1"Quinn"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Morris"
5"Line"
6"Police"
7"Underground"
8"Purified"
9"Drake"
10"Market"
places
0"London"
1"Stucley"
2"Place"
3"Victorian"
globalScore0.751
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like walking into the mouth of a f"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1055
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean20.69
std16.99
cv0.821
sampleLengths
022
140
256
35
463
562
632
716
85
926
103
1110
126
137
146
159
1615
177
182
1912
2042
2139
2218
2350
2415
2550
2640
273
2839
2916
3011
317
328
3338
3411
3533
362
374
3810
3914
4018
4138
4216
439
444
459
4619
4746
4815
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs139
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences91
ratio0.011
matches
0"An old enamel sign hung crookedly from a beam: *Camden Crescent - Northern Line - Disused 1934*."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount935
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"illuminating cracked white tiles"
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.020320855614973262
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.011764705882352941
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean11.59
std6.16
cv0.532
sampleLengths
022
110
213
317
48
516
617
715
85
95
1018
1122
1218
1313
141
151
1621
1726
1816
193
2013
2116
225
2315
2411
253
2610
276
287
296
309
3115
327
332
3412
357
3618
3717
3811
3913
4015
4118
425
439
4420
4516
4615
4714
4810
497
75.46% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.4725274725274725
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences68
matches
0"Her lungs burned, but eighteen"
1"It clattered against Quinn’s knee,"
2"He took the sharp corner"
3"He did not look back."
4"He hugged a heavy canvas"
5"He darted left, then right,"
6"His dark curly hair stuck"
7"It felt like walking into"
8"She stepped off the final"
9"She had seen whispers of"
10"Her fingers rested firmly on"
11"His eyes were small, amber,"
12"She drove the heel of"
13"He whipped around, his jaw"
ratio0.206
11.47% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences68
matches
0"Tomás Herrera cleared the iron"
1"Quinn’s boot struck the wet"
2"Water sprayed across her shins,"
3"Her lungs burned, but eighteen"
4"Herrera threw a blue plastic"
5"It clattered against Quinn’s knee,"
6"He took the sharp corner"
7"A silver Saint Christopher medallion"
8"He did not look back."
9"He hugged a heavy canvas"
10"A white jagged scar ran"
11"He darted left, then right,"
12"The smell of rotting cabbage"
13"The sour, chemical tang that"
14"Herrera slammed his shoulder into"
15"The chains snapped."
16"The wood screamed, giving way"
17"Quinn halted at the threshold,"
18"Herrera turned at the base"
19"His dark curly hair stuck"
ratio0.897
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Before he recovered his footing,"
ratio0.015
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Tomás Herrera cleared the iron railing with the frantic grace of a man who knew precisely what lay in the dark below."
1"Hooded figures milled between the stalls, their voices blending into a low, buzzing hum that vibrated inside Quinn’s jawbone."
2"The vendor with the long fingers froze, dropping a pinch of powder that hissed violently against the stone floor."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"the larger man muttered (mutter)"
1"Herrera yelled (yell)"
2"he hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.286
86.3427%