Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KASF91S13TKPWPWCYR3N72

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The man broke left at the lock gates and vanished down the alley's wet throat. Quinn's heels skidded on the canal cobbles. She caught a pipe and shoved off, running hard, the rain needling her eyes. "Stop!" It cost her breath. Reid didn't even twitch. Callum Reid knew these streets the way rats knew a rotting hull. Forty-six, a gentleman's coat over a fence's trade, he had slipped the task force forty minutes ago in a lock-up off Camden High Street. No relics in the lock-up. No money. Just a corkboard covered with photographs of abandoned Tube stations and lines that had been quietly erased from the map. He had gone out a basement window and never slowed. Quinn had chased him for three years. Three years since she opened Danny Morris's cold-case file and found a photograph of Reid and one sheet of paper. In tidy black ink Danny had written: *If I don't come back, he is the gate. He knows where the Veil opens.* The alley sloped into a flooded service ramp. Brick arched above; the temperature dropped; the air smelled of mineral dust and rat piss. Reid reached the bottom, where a rusted blue gate sealed a dark undercroft. He didn't slow. He pulled a pale sliver from his waistcoat, a notch of polished bone, and slid it into a brass keyhole set directly into the brick. No municipal gate had ever worn a lock that elegant. The bolt sighed. He stepped through, looked back over his shoulder. "I've got something that belonged to your Morris," he called. "Come and collect it, Detective." The gate slammed; the lock clicked shut. His footsteps descended into amber light. Quinn slid to the gate and took a fistful of chain-link. The rust stung her palm. Through the diamond mesh, Reid went around a curve of tiled wall and vanished, and a gust of warm air rolled up the stairwell, carrying beeswax, burnt sugar, and an undertone that had no business under a pavement. She tore at the gate. A cheap padlock shackle, salt-crusted and corroded, held the collar. It wasn't built for real assault. It was built for show, for turning away the timid. A tall shadow stood midway down the stairs. It had not been there a moment earlier. It had arranged itself in the dark with the patience of stone. "The bone opens for the client, not the copper." Quinn pressed her warrant card to the mesh. "Metropolitan Police. Open this gate." "Three years ago a copper stood on this step." The shadow did not move. Its voice travelled, low and unhurried. "Moustache. Signet ring that caught the light in a way that made my predecessor uncomfortable. He carried a paper that named this gate, and he told his backup to wait above ground where no one could watch the door." A pause, wet and patient. "We opened the gate for him." Something behind Quinn's sternum went cold. "What happened to him?" "He found what he came looking for. It was not what he expected." The shadow began to descend. "If you insist on following Mr Reid, there is a brass bowl at the foot of the stairs. A candle burns beside it. Take a piece if you intend to pay your own way, and understand the fee." It dissolved into the amber wash. Quinn hung on the gate for a moment. Rainwater dripped from her chin. She could call backup. Seal the gate, put a man on it, build a proper case. Danny had done everything by the book. Danny had prepared, informed, logged every detail of his investigation. Danny had died in a service drain with his ribs cracked inward and his service pistol still holstered. The coroner called it subsurface trauma. The file closed within a year. Quinn released the mesh, hauled herself over the top, and dropped hard onto the wet concrete. She took the stairs slowly, her torch beam painting a nervous circle on the walls. The steps were worn smooth at the centre, and the handrail glowed green with verdigris. The brass bowl sat on a brick beside a gutted candle. It held five slivers of old bone, each carved and notched. She took the longest piece. It was warm, as if the candle's ghost still lived in it. No one stopped her. The tunnel opened into a space that snatched her breath. The vaulted undercroft was vast. Victorian brick curved high overhead in a net of rusted iron and bare bulbs strung on greasy wire. Stalls crowded the floor, an entire drowned market humming with low chatter. Bunches of dried herbs hung like severed hands; glass jars swam with dark fluid and slow shapes; a pyramid of bird skulls rose beside a set of brass scales. The smell of joss and wax sat heavy on her tongue as she cut through the crowd. Faces turned as she passed, smooth and secretive. No one looked directly. A pale-eyed woman sold teeth from a velvet tray. A butcher in a waxed apron served steaming cuts of meat from a glistening hook. At the far end, near a stairway curtained in theatre velvet, Reid had stopped. He stood with his back to her, unhurried. He lifted his right hand, and something dangled from his fingers on a chain, turning in the lamplight. A heavy gold signet ring. Danny's ring. The pathologist had noted its absence in the report. Quinn was already running. The crowd parted around her like water around a stone. Reid did not hurry. He stepped sideways into a gap between stalls, and the gap closed the moment after he passed, shelves of bottles and jars shifting as if the market itself conspired with him. Quinn shouldered past a rack of iron grilles, ducked under a banner of stitched leather, and came out into a small clearing of bare brick wall. Reid stood alone there, the velvet curtain at his back. "You're persistent," he said, swinging the ring once, twice, letting the gold catch the light. "Morris had that too. He came down here looking for a door. He paid for the privilege with his blood. The Veil always collects its debts, Detective." "Where is his body?" Her voice came out rougher than she wanted. Reid tilted his head. "Funny thing. The tunnels keep what they're given. Eventually they wear it down and pass it back to the river. Your people fished him out of a drain in the Thames. That's how you got his file." Something inside Quinn snapped. She stepped forward and closed her hand around the ring. Reid let it go without resistance, his thin mouth curving into something between amusement and pity. "You'll want to find the door he was looking for," he said. "It's still here. It never left." "When did you last see him?" "Three years ago tonight. Same moon." Reid nodded toward the curtain. "On the other side of that door. He went down expecting to meet something that had been stealing children from the surface. He met the market's landlord instead." He adjusted his cuff. "I only sold him the key that got him in." "You robbed his corpse." "I collected what I was owed." Reid smiled. "His ring was settlement for bringing him to the door. I'm a businessman, Detective. I deal in access." "Then you can deal with me." Quinn shoved the ring into her coat pocket. "You're under arrest." Reid laughed, a dry, papery sound. "You're in the Veil now. Your warrant died at the top of the stairs. The only law down here is the landlord's, and he doesn't like the smell of your badge." He flicked his gaze past her shoulder. "He's standing behind you now." Quinn did not look. She had learned that trick in interview rooms. But Reid was not lying. A change passed through the air, a slow deepening of the dimness, and the chatter from the stalls died between one heartbeat and the next. The smell of turned earth and old candlewax intensified. The candle flames guttered to green. Something enormous shifted in the dark behind her. Quinn turned, her hand already inside her coat. The velvet curtain had opened wide, and a tall figure stood in the frame, no face, only a darkness that drank the lamplight. It took a step onto the worn flagstones, and the floor seemed to dip beneath its mass. In one grey hand it held the brass bowl. Empty. "Three years ago, the law came down uninvited," the figure said. Its voice was root and stone and the scrape of a shovel on gravel. "The Veil does not forget its fees." It reached into the empty air beside the bowl and produced a sliver of bone. Her bone. The piece she had taken from the dish at the foot of the stairs. "The detective wishes to pay her way," it said. "Very well." The velvet curtain swung aside of its own accord, revealing not stairs but a corridor of black water stretching down out of sight. A breath rose from its depths, cold and graveyard-sweet. Quinn pulled her firearm. The sound of the round chambering was the only noise in the vault. The landlord did not retreat. It inclined forward, and from its unseen mouth came a sound that might have been laughter or the first crack of a settling foundation. "You may pass the door, law-woman," it said. "What you find on the far side, you may not put back." Behind her, somewhere far up the stairwell, the rusted gate slammed shut. No backup. No way out but through. Quinn looked at the corridor of black water, at the empty bowl in the landlord's hand, at the green flames of the market watching her from every stall. She thought of Danny's signet ring, heavy in her pocket, still warm from Reid's fingers. Then she stepped forward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.94% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1649
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1649
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count5
2
word"glistening"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"velvet"
2"glistening"
3"flicked"
4"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences126
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords15
totalWords1649
ratio0.009
matches
0"If I don't come back, he is the gate. He knows where the Veil opens."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1261
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Reid"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Reid"
discoveredNames
Reid15
Camden1
High1
Street1
Tube1
Danny7
Morris1
Veil1
Quinn15
persons
0"Reid"
1"Danny"
2"Morris"
3"Veil"
4"Quinn"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
globalScore0.905
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something between amusement and pity"
78.71% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.213
wordCount1649
matches
0"not stairs but a corridor of black water stretching down out of sight"
1"No way out but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"learned that trick"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean28.93
std20.55
cv0.71
sampleLengths
036
19
273
349
474
511
615
713
854
931
1028
119
1213
1370
1410
1556
166
1746
1830
1946
2039
214
2210
2381
2436
2545
2611
274
2871
2910
3042
3112
3241
3330
3418
356
3653
374
3826
3917
4037
4112
4212
4345
448
4548
4610
4732
4831
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"was built"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs199
matches
0"was already running"
1"was not lying"
83.74% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences145
ratio0.021
matches
0"Brick arched above; the temperature dropped; the air smelled of mineral dust and rat piss."
1"The gate slammed; the lock clicked shut."
2"Bunches of dried herbs hung like severed hands; glass jars swam with dark fluid and slow shapes; a pyramid of bird skulls rose beside a set of brass scales."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1269
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.018912529550827423
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.004728132387706856
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean11.37
std8.19
cv0.72
sampleLengths
015
17
214
35
44
512
624
75
82
920
1010
117
1220
1316
146
158
1615
1713
183
1925
2010
213
228
2310
245
257
266
2711
285
2938
305
3110
326
3310
348
358
3612
379
388
395
4014
416
4244
436
446
454
4618
4738
486
498
41.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.31724137931034485
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners46
57.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences116
matches
0"Just a corkboard covered with"
1"Then she stepped forward."
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences116
matches
0"She caught a pipe and"
1"It cost her breath"
2"He had gone out a"
3"He knows where the Veil"
4"He didn't slow."
5"He pulled a pale sliver"
6"He stepped through, looked back"
7"His footsteps descended into amber"
8"She tore at the gate."
9"It wasn't built for real"
10"It was built for show,"
11"It had not been there"
12"It had arranged itself in"
13"Its voice travelled, low and"
14"It dissolved into the amber"
15"She could call backup."
16"She took the stairs slowly,"
17"It held five slivers of"
18"She took the longest piece."
19"It was warm, as if"
ratio0.293
28.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences116
matches
0"The man broke left at"
1"Quinn's heels skidded on the"
2"She caught a pipe and"
3"It cost her breath"
4"Reid didn't even twitch."
5"Callum Reid knew these streets"
6"He had gone out a"
7"Quinn had chased him for"
8"He knows where the Veil"
9"The alley sloped into a"
10"Brick arched above; the temperature"
11"Reid reached the bottom, where"
12"He didn't slow."
13"He pulled a pale sliver"
14"The bolt sighed."
15"He stepped through, looked back"
16"The gate slammed; the lock"
17"His footsteps descended into amber"
18"Quinn slid to the gate"
19"The rust stung her palm."
ratio0.862
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Through the diamond mesh, Reid went around a curve of tiled wall and vanished, and a gust of warm air rolled up the stairwell, carrying beeswax, burnt sugar, an…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.3571%