Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KCSF0FPX233W6FHCTHG4RY

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The sole of my boot skidded on slick pavement and I nearly lost him at the corner of Old Compton Street. "Police! Stop!" My voice cracked against the rain. The figure ahead didn't falter, just vanished left into a service alley behind a row of shuttered barber shops. My breath came hard. My lungs burned with cold, wet air. Three streets back, I'd spotted him loitering outside The Raven's Nest, standing in the green glow of the neon sign like he wanted to be seen. The moment our eyes met, he bolted. Now we were weaving through Soho's back alleys, and every turn felt deliberate. Like he was choosing the route. *Wrong*, I thought. *This is wrong.* But my legs kept moving anyway. The alley opened onto a dead-end courtyard behind an old electrical substation. Rain hammered the rusted transformers in a steady hiss. The suspect stood beside a set of doors marked PRIVATE, breathing hard, watching me. His face was ordinary. White. Early thirties. A small gold stud in one ear. He could have been any one of a thousand men from the office blocks around Bank station, except for his eyes. Too calm. Too focused. A man who had just run half a mile through a downpour should look more rattled than this. "Nowhere left to go." I kept my voice level, even as my hand tightened on the grip of my baton. "Put your hands on the wall." He smiled. Not a snarl. A proper, friendly smile that didn't reach his eyes. Then he pushed the door open and disappeared into the substation. Bloody hell. I should have called it in. Should have waited for the backup I'd requested ten minutes ago. Should have done a lot of things. Instead, I followed him through that door. The substation had been gutted and turned into something else. There was a narrow corridor of exposed brick and flaking paint, lit by a single emergency bulb that flickered. It smelled of damp stone and old electrics, and under that, something sweet. Rotting fruit, maybe. The rain vanished behind me; in its place, my own footsteps echoed too loud. "Police!" I called. "You're making this worse for yourself." Nothing but the hum of a generator somewhere below. I descended a metal staircase into darkness, one hand sliding along the cold rail, the other gripping my baton. At the bottom, the corridor turned sharply and then opened out. I stopped. A cavern. It could not exist under Soho, but there it was. Massive. Vaulted ceilings supported by Victorian brick arches, the kind you only found in the old underground. Lanterns hung from iron hooks, their flames burning a soft green. Stalls stretched into the gloom. A market. At this hour. In this place. The suspect waited at the entrance to the market, standing just beyond a line scratched in the concrete. His smile had gone. He looked at me with something approaching respect. "You've come far enough, Detective." "You don't get to decide that." "No." A beat. "But they will." He turned and walked into the crowd. I watched his back disappear between two stalls selling what looked like jars of preserved... something. I couldn't make out the labels. Didn't want to. My radio crackled at my shoulder. I reached up and turned it off. The air down here felt different. Thicker. And the sound of the city above had completely vanished. Even the rain was gone. In its place, a low murmur of voices, a clink of coins. No traffic. No sirens. Just the sound of a hidden world breathing around me. I stepped over the line. The first stall I passed sold nothing I recognized. Jars of pale, floating things. Bundles of dried herbs that whispered when I moved past them. A cage of small, luminous birds. The stallholder, a woman with milky eyes, turned her head to follow me. "Lost?" she asked. "Chasing someone." "Best run faster then." The suspect had stopped at a crossroad between stalls. He stood under a sign written in a language I didn't know, watching me. Waiting. The gold in his ear glinted green in the lantern light. I moved toward him, forcing my legs to keep a steady, confident stride, even as my heart hammered against my ribs. The people here didn't scatter. They parted, slowly, like water around a stone, their conversations falling silent as I passed. I felt their eyes on me. On my uniform. On my badge. On my human skin. A man at a stall selling knives caught my eye. He shook his head once. *Turn back,* that gesture said. *You don't belong here.* I didn't turn back. I pushed deeper into the market, feeling the cold seep through my boots, feeling the suspicion prickle across my neck. The detective in me catalogued everything: the bone tokens exchanging hands, the bottles of black liquid, the maps of places that didn't exist on any city chart. The cop in me understood, finally, that I had walked into the place where all those "unexplained" cases started. Where Morris' case ended. The thought made my jaw ache. The suspect turned down a narrower aisle between two book stalls. I followed. He was heading for a section of the market that glowed with a different light. Colder. Bluer. A dead end, I hoped. The aisle opened onto a small square. At its centre, a marble fountain shaped like a screaming face. Water, black and oily, poured from its open mouth. The suspect stood beside it, his back to a wall of carved stone, cornered. Finally. "Nice place," I said. He laughed. Not at me. At something over my shoulder. I turned too late. Three men, large ones, moved in behind me. Their faces were wrong in ways my eyes couldn't quite hold onto. Their leader, a tall figure in a long coat, stepped forward. His voice was like stones grinding together. "The detective cannot leave now. She has seen too much." The suspect's smile returned. "Exactly as planned." My hand went for my radio before I remembered I'd turned it off. The tall figure stepped closer. The market's sounds faded to nothing. In the green dark, something sang a low, hungry note, and I knew this was not the end of the chase. It was the beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.625
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.77% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1054
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"completely"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1054
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"echoed"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"marble"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"footsteps"
2"echoed"
3"gloom"
4"marble"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences124
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords10
totalWords1054
ratio0.009
matches
0"Wrong"
1"This is wrong."
2"Turn back,"
3"You don't belong here."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions9
wordCount994
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.2
worstName"Soho"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Soho"
discoveredNames
Old1
Compton1
Street1
Raven1
Nest1
Soho2
Bank1
Victorian1
persons
0"Nest"
places
0"Old"
1"Compton"
2"Street"
3"Raven"
4"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
79.58% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like jars of preserved"
1"quite hold onto"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1054
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean23.42
std20.06
cv0.857
sampleLengths
021
12
236
352
412
535
657
726
825
92
1031
1159
129
139
1430
152
1653
1730
185
196
206
2132
2213
2348
245
2544
263
272
284
2935
3057
3115
329
3380
3430
355
3642
374
3810
394
4038
4110
427
4345
444
99.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences124
matches
0"been gutted"
1"was gone"
75.78% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs161
matches
0"were weaving"
1"was choosing"
2"was heading"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences134
ratio0.007
matches
0"The rain vanished behind me; in its place, my own footsteps echoed too loud."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount814
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.038083538083538086
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009828009828009828
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean7.87
std5.82
cv0.74
sampleLengths
021
12
26
319
44
57
626
77
813
96
103
119
1212
139
1414
154
161
172
187
1921
202
212
2218
2320
246
252
263
279
2811
292
306
3111
327
337
3410
3519
3613
373
3814
393
406
419
4219
4311
442
452
4610
471
4816
4911
63.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.44029850746268656
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners59
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences99
matches
0"Then he pushed the door"
1"Instead, I followed him through"
2"Even the rain was gone."
3"Just the sound of a"
ratio0.04
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences99
matches
0"My voice cracked against the"
1"My breath came hard."
2"My lungs burned with cold,"
3"His face was ordinary."
4"He could have been any"
5"I kept my voice level,"
6"I should have called it"
7"It smelled of damp stone"
8"I descended a metal staircase"
9"It could not exist under"
10"His smile had gone."
11"He looked at me with"
12"He turned and walked into"
13"I watched his back disappear"
14"I couldn't make out the"
15"My radio crackled at my"
16"I reached up and turned"
17"I stepped over the line."
18"He stood under a sign"
19"I moved toward him, forcing"
ratio0.333
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences99
matches
0"The sole of my boot"
1"My voice cracked against the"
2"The figure ahead didn't falter,"
3"My breath came hard."
4"My lungs burned with cold,"
5"The moment our eyes met,"
6"*This is wrong.* But my"
7"The alley opened onto a"
8"The suspect stood beside a"
9"His face was ordinary."
10"A small gold stud in"
11"He could have been any"
12"A man who had just"
13"I kept my voice level,"
14"A proper, friendly smile that"
15"I should have called it"
16"The substation had been gutted"
17"It smelled of damp stone"
18"The rain vanished behind me;"
19"Nothing but the hum of"
ratio0.687
50.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Now we were weaving through"
ratio0.01
73.17% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Three streets back, I'd spotted him loitering outside The Raven's Nest, standing in the green glow of the neon sign like he wanted to be seen."
1"There was a narrow corridor of exposed brick and flaking paint, lit by a single emergency bulb that flickered."
2"I pushed deeper into the market, feeling the cold seep through my boots, feeling the suspicion prickle across my neck."
3"The detective in me catalogued everything: the bone tokens exchanging hands, the bottles of black liquid, the maps of places that didn't exist on any city chart…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.188
leniency0.375
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.0344%