Run: 2026-09-23-01M36SBX713CPX0FWBBP1QDJFC

Run Details

Duration:
3m 46s
Cost:
$0.062138
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain had been falling since noon, a steady insistence that turned the Soho streets to black glass and made every doorway a brief mercy. Inside The Raven's Nest the light stayed low and amber, pooled beneath the shades, and the air held citrus peel, damp wool, and the clean mineral scent of the old pipes. Maps covered one long wall, their coastlines faded to the color of weak tea, interrupted here and there by black-and-white photographs whose subjects had stopped expecting to be recognized. The green neon of the sign above the entrance leaked only a thin sickly line along the window frame. Aurora Carter sat at the corner of the bar where she could watch both the door and the narrow stairs that climbed to the flat she rented. Her straight black hair, shoulder-length and still damp from the walk, stuck to the collar of her jacket. She turned a glass of water between her palms. The small crescent scar on her left wrist showed pale against the skin when she shifted her grip. Silas Blackwood moved behind the counter with the slight limp that had lived in his left knee since a job he never described. At fifty-eight he still filled the space without raising his voice; the grey that streaked his auburn hair and the neatly trimmed beard only sharpened the quiet authority he carried like an old coat. The silver signet ring on his right hand clicked softly against a bottle as he reached. Hazel eyes flicked toward her, then away. They rarely needed more than that. She paid what she owed, kept the worst of her history folded small, and he let the flat stay hers without questions that would have required answers she did not keep ready. "Slow," she said. "Tuesday." He set the bottle down. "They come or they don't. Either way the glasses get dried." She had finished the last delivery an hour ago, the insulated bag now dripping onto the mat upstairs above the bar. Most nights she climbed straight to the flat, showered the smell of ginger and hot oil out of her hair, and read until the noise from below thinned to nothing. Tonight the rain had made the stairs feel longer than the flight they were. She stayed. Her bright blue eyes followed a single drop negotiating the inside of the window glass, losing its shape, starting again. Then the door opened and the cold came in ahead of the woman. The woman shook rain from a dark wool coat and paused, letting her eyes adjust to the dim. Shorter hair than memory supplied, cut just below the jaw and darkened by the wet to something near Rory's own black. The face had narrowed. Years had drawn a line between the brows that had not been there on the library steps in Cardiff, when they had still believed arguments could be won cleanly. Recognition moved through Rory like a change in air pressure before a storm. Megan Powell. Pre-Law seminars. The one who had shared the terrible coffee and the worse cigarettes and the long, half-serious arguments about whether any of them would survive the futures their parents had already sketched. Megan's gaze traveled the maps, the photographs, the tall man with the signet ring, and caught. She went still in the doorway. Then she crossed the floor, heels careful on the worn boards, and stopped one stool away, close enough that Rory could smell rain and a faint trace of hotel soap. "Aurora." The name came out cracked at the edge, as if it had been carried too far. "Rory. I thought—someone said London, but I didn't think I'd walk into you like this." Rory's fingers tightened on the glass. People called her cool-headed, quick to see the angle others missed. The quickness failed her for a full breath, maybe two. The scar itched. "Megan." "Can I sit?" "Yeah." Silas was already there, cloth over one shoulder, the limp barely visible across the short distance. He did not smile, but the set of his shoulders made room. "Drink?" "Whiskey. Whatever's nearest to honest." Megan draped the coat over the empty stool and sat. Under the coat the blouse was silk the color of old paper, and a thin gold chain rested at the base of her throat. A pale band circled one finger where a ring had lately been; she touched the skin there without seeming to notice. She looked at Rory properly then, taking in the practical jacket, the loosened hair, the way the scar caught what little light there was. "You cut it." "Years ago." Rory touched the ends without meaning to. They felt unfamiliar under her own hand. "You darkened yours." "Box dye in a hotel sink last month. Early midlife crisis. I'm told they start whenever you stop recognizing the person who answers when someone says your name." The joke landed and died between them, too small for the space. Megan accepted the whiskey Silas set down; the ring on his hand flashed once under the lamp and he withdrew to the far end of the bar, near enough that the room still belonged to him, far enough that the conversation could pretend to privacy. He began drying a glass that was already dry. "I qualified," Megan said. "Last spring. Housing disputes, mostly. Some duty work when the rota lets me near a police station. It's not the version we used to draft on napkins outside the library, the one where we tore the whole system down before lunch and rebuilt it better by evening." Rory remembered the napkins, the way Megan's handwriting slanted harder when a judgment angered her, the cold stone steps, the way their breath had fogged and cleared. She remembered her own reluctance even then, the sense that the course was a coat her father had already buttoned to the throat, Irish barrister certainty worn over her Welsh mother's quieter hopes. "I left before finals," she said. "Didn't sit them." "I know. Or I heard versions." Megan turned the glass but did not drink yet. Her voice dropped until it barely cleared the low hum of the refrigerator. "Evan told anyone who asked that you'd had some kind of episode and gone to an aunt in Swansea. I went to the flat anyway. He stood in the doorway in his socks and told me, very politely, to mind my own business. He smiled the whole time. I can still see the exact shape of that smile if I let myself." She looked up, and the years were suddenly visible in the set of her mouth. "I should have called someone. Your mother. The university welfare office. Anyone. I told myself you were clever enough to get out if you needed to, and that the needing wasn't my decision to make for you. Then your number stopped working, and the group chat went quiet about you the way people go quiet about things they would rather not have almost witnessed." Rain ticked against the glass. A photograph of a man in a hat watched from the wall, unhelpful. Rory felt the old instinct rise, the one that calculated the fastest route out of a difficult sentence the way she now calculated bike lanes and ticket times between the Golden Empress kitchen and a third-floor walk-up. She stayed on the stool. The cool-headedness returned, thinner than usual, but present. "It wasn't an episode," she said. "And there isn't an aunt in Swansea. I came here because a friend had a sofa she could spare for a month. The month turned into the flat upstairs, and the flat turned into this." She gestured, small, at the bar, the maps, the life that had assembled itself around the simple need to be somewhere that could not be easily found. "I deliver most days. Evenings I come down if the rooms feel too square. Silas doesn't charge me for the water, which is either kindness or a long game. I haven't decided." Megan's mouth tightened around something she did not say. "Deliveries." The word sat there like a diagnosis she had hoped the tests would rule out. Color rose along her cheekbones. "I'm sorry. That was vile of me. I don't get to rank what you've built against the life I kept imagining for you in the margins of my own. I just—" She drank at last, a short swallow that made her blink hard. "I kept your criminal law notes. The ones with the diagrams in the margins, the little boxes and arrows you drew when the lecturer lost the thread and started reciting his own textbook back to us. I couldn't throw them out. Every time I moved flats they came with me in the same box as the passport and the birth certificate and the letters I never sent. Stupid, isn't it. Carrying paper around like it could still reach you." "Not stupid." The words left Rory before she had finished weighing them. She looked at Megan's hands, the careful nails, the absent ring, the thumb that kept returning to the pale band of skin. "You married." "Fourteen months. He wanted the version of me that billed in six-minute units and came home without the day's arguments still clinging to her clothes. I wanted not to be treated like a problem he had acquired by mistake and couldn't return. We disappointed each other with great efficiency." Megan set the glass down. The line between her brows deepened, and for a moment she looked older than either of them had any right to be. "When your name came up at a conference—someone from the old cohort, half-drunk, trying to remember who had vanished—I felt something crack that I had plastered over so carefully I had forgotten the crack was there. Relief. Fury. This awful greed to know whether you were all right, and this worse fear that you would not want the knowing to come from me. Years, Rory. We're only twenty-five. How did the distance get so heavy that crossing it feels like admitting we needed a bridge in the first place?" Rory watched the crescent on her wrist and thought of the childhood accident that had made it, a greenhouse pane and her mother's voice gone high and thin with fear, blood brighter than she had expected. She thought of later marks that had not left anything anyone could point to and ask about. She thought of the nights she still mapped the exits in unfamiliar rooms before she let herself sleep, and of the uneven tread on the landing above this bar, the sound that had come, slowly, to mean the building was holding and she was allowed to stay inside it. None of those thoughts belonged in the narrow space between the stools. Some regrets kept their weight only while they remained unspoken; to name them fully would have been to hand Megan a version of the past that Rory had survived, in part, by refusing to complete for anyone else. "I don't know how it gets heavy," she said. "You just wake up one morning and the distance is already furnished. Chairs, tables, a view you didn't choose. Crossing back starts to feel like breaking into a house that used to be yours and finding someone else's life in the cupboards." Megan nodded, slow. She reached across the scarred wood, hesitated with her fingers hovering, then laid two of them lightly on the bar beside Rory's hand, not quite touching the scar, not quite withdrawing. The contact was so slight it might have been accidental. It was not. "I looked for you. Not well. Not bravely. Just enough that I could tell myself, later, that I had tried. A few calls. One visit that ended at a closed door and a smile I still dream about when I'm tired. Then the exams came, and the training contract, and the careful life, and it became easier to believe the story Evan handed out because the alternative meant I had left you there with him and called it respect for your choices. I hate that I found the easier version livable. I hate that I lived in it." "I didn't want to be found," Rory said, and the sentence was true and not true in the same breath, the way so many necessary sentences were. She had wanted, on certain nights, for someone to put a shoulder to the door and refuse the smile. She had also wanted no one to see what waited on the other side of it, the particular shape her fear had taken, the calculations she had made and remade until leaving became the only sum that worked. The contradiction had sat in her chest for years, old now, precise as the scar. "You couldn't have fixed it by finding me. I had to walk out under my own power. I did walk out. That part I managed." "And then you didn't look back." No accusation remained in the words, only the tired residue of one that had been carried too long to keep its edge. Megan withdrew her hand. The place where her fingers had rested looked no different from the rest of the wood, yet Rory felt the outline of it. "I don't know what I expected when I ducked in out of the rain. A dry coat. A drink that didn't taste of hotel carpet. Not this. Not you sitting here looking at me as if I'm one of those photographs that's been on the wall so long no one remembers whether the person in it was a friend or a stranger Silas bought for the frame." Rory almost smiled. The expression felt unfamiliar, like a coat borrowed from a previous size. "The photographs are his. He says half of them are junk-shop strangers and the other half would prefer to stay that way. I've chosen to believe him. It's simpler." From the end of the bar Silas glanced over at the sound of his name, hazel eyes steady, incurious on the surface. He did not approach. The signet ring turned once under his thumb against the wood. Outside, the neon continued its thin green note, indifferent to anything happening beneath it. The rain had not slackened. Megan stood. She drew the coat on slowly, buying the seconds the way people did when the next sentence had not yet agreed to be spoken. Water still glittered along the shoulders. "I'm at a hotel two streets over until Thursday. The Thistle, the one with the tired awning. If you want a coffee that isn't actively hostile, or if you want to sit and not talk about any of this, the offer stands. If you don't want either, I won't come looking a second time. I already know how poorly I manage the looking." She placed a card on the bar beside the water glass. The stock was thick, her name printed small, a Bristol number beneath it in type that meant business. "You were always better than the rest of us at seeing the move after the obvious move. I hope that part hasn't been worn away, even if the rest of who we were has been revised past recognition." Rory looked at the card, then at the woman who had once known the exact proportion of milk she took in terrible coffee and the precise shape of the doubts she would not say aloud in seminars. The years had altered Megan's jaw, the pitch of her voice, the defensive set of her shoulders under expensive cloth. They had altered Rory too, in ways no mirror reported cleanly: the routes she walked, the exits she counted, the particular quiet she had learned to keep above a bar whose owner limped and noticed more than he admitted. What remained between them, untouched by the whiskey and the rain, was the unfinished sentence they had both been carrying in separate cities, too heavy to set down in company and too hazardous to read all the way through. "I'll think about it," she said. "You always did think before you moved." Megan's smile arrived, stayed long enough to be real, and left. At the door she paused with one hand on the frame, rain already finding the back of her neck. "For whatever it's worth—I'm glad the number of years isn't higher than it is. And I'm sorry I let the count get this far before I walked through a door and said your name out loud." She did not wait to hear whether an answer would come. The door closed on the green light. The neon trembled in the wet glass and then steadied, as if nothing of consequence had passed beneath it. Rory remained on the stool. The card warmed slowly under her palm, the phone number rising against her skin like a pulse that was not hers. She could feel the shape of everything they had managed not to say pressing up through the wood of the bar: the full account of why she had vanished, the help she had needed and refused in the same motion, the speeches Megan had practiced for a reunion that shame and fear had kept postponing until the words no longer fit either of their mouths. Time did not announce the moment it became weight. It simply arrived, already settled into the furniture, in the space where a person used to know how to stand beside you. Silas limped the length of the counter and set a fresh glass of water where Megan's whiskey had left a ring. He rested his ringed hand on the wood, near the card but not touching it, the silver dull in the low light. His beard was neat, his expression unreadable in the way that meant he had already understood more than he would ask. "Someone from before," he said. It was not quite a question. "Yes." Her voice held steady. Inside her, the old maps on the wall seemed to redraw their coastlines around the things she and Megan had left unnamed, borders shifting to accommodate a regret that would not be spoken cleanly and therefore would not be finished. She lifted the water. It tasted of the rain still falling on the neon sign outside, clean and cold and nowhere near enough to rinse the years back to what they had been before either of them learned how much could be lost by staying silent. She did not turn the card over. Not yet. The bar hummed around them, maps and photographs keeping their own counsel, and the weight stayed exactly where the conversation had set it down.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.543
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3123
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count3
5
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
3"carefully"
4"slowly"
5"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3123
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"calculated"
count2
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"unspoken"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count1
8
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"silk"
2"calculated"
3"weight"
4"unspoken"
5"trembled"
6"pulse"
7"could feel"
8"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences127
matches
0"n with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences127
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen98
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3119
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount2099
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Megan"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Carter1
Blackwood1
Rory18
Cardiff1
Powell1
Megan19
Silas5
Irish1
Welsh1
Rain2
Golden1
Empress1
Color1
Bristol1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Blackwood"
2"Rory"
3"Powell"
4"Megan"
5"Silas"
6"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Raven"
2"Cardiff"
3"Color"
4"Bristol"
globalScore1
windowScore1
99.49% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences99
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite touching the scar, not quite withdrawing"
1"not quite withdrawing"
2"not quite a question"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3119
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences148
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean89.11
std56.95
cv0.639
sampleLengths
0175
1118
23
317
4100
5120
652
732
831
93
101
1129
1287
1319
14145
1569
16169
17168
18152
1936
20165
21152
2251
23145
24124
25122
2644
2756
28162
29135
306
31110
32122
3375
34124
96.97% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences127
matches
0"been carried"
1"was allowed"
2"been carried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs348
matches
0"was holding"
65.64% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences148
ratio0.027
matches
0"At fifty-eight he still filled the space without raising his voice; the grey that streaked his auburn hair and the neatly trimmed beard only sharpened the quiet authority he carried like an old coat."
1"A pale band circled one finger where a ring had lately been; she touched the skin there without seeming to notice."
2"Megan accepted the whiskey Silas set down; the ring on his hand flashed once under the lamp and he withdrew to the far end of the bar, near enough that the room still belonged to him, far enough that the conversation could pretend to privacy."
3"Some regrets kept their weight only while they remained unspoken; to name them fully would have been to hand Megan a version of the past that Rory had survived, in part, by refusing to complete for anyone else."
91.25% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2109
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"long, half-serious arguments"
adverbCount91
adverbRatio0.0431484115694642
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.011853959222380275
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean21.07
std18.73
cv0.889
sampleLengths
024
131
229
319
427
518
69
718
823
934
1016
117
126
1332
143
156
1611
1721
1830
1914
202
2120
2213
2318
2421
254
2629
2713
282
292
3031
3116
326
3330
3417
3515
366
3711
3810
393
401
413
421
4316
4412
451
4615
4724
4821
4924
55.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.36486486486486486
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners54
57.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences115
matches
0"Then the door opened and"
1"Then she crossed the floor,"
ratio0.017
84.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences115
matches
0"Her straight black hair, shoulder-length"
1"She turned a glass of"
2"They rarely needed more than"
3"She paid what she owed,"
4"He set the bottle down"
5"She had finished the last"
6"Her bright blue eyes followed"
7"She went still in the"
8"He did not smile, but"
9"She looked at Rory properly"
10"They felt unfamiliar under her"
11"He began drying a glass"
12"She remembered her own reluctance"
13"Her voice dropped until it"
14"She looked up, and the"
15"She stayed on the stool."
16"She gestured, small, at the"
17"She drank at last, a"
18"She looked at Megan's hands,"
19"She thought of later marks"
ratio0.339
20.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences115
matches
0"Rain had been falling since"
1"Maps covered one long wall,"
2"The green neon of the"
3"Aurora Carter sat at the"
4"Her straight black hair, shoulder-length"
5"She turned a glass of"
6"The small crescent scar on"
7"Silas Blackwood moved behind the"
8"The silver signet ring on"
9"Hazel eyes flicked toward her,"
10"They rarely needed more than"
11"She paid what she owed,"
12"He set the bottle down"
13"She had finished the last"
14"Tonight the rain had made"
15"Her bright blue eyes followed"
16"The woman shook rain from"
17"The face had narrowed."
18"Years had drawn a line"
19"Recognition moved through Rory like"
ratio0.878
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences115
matches(empty)
ratio0
10.20% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Rain had been falling since noon, a steady insistence that turned the Soho streets to black glass and made every doorway a brief mercy."
1"At fifty-eight he still filled the space without raising his voice; the grey that streaked his auburn hair and the neatly trimmed beard only sharpened the quiet…"
2"She paid what she owed, kept the worst of her history folded small, and he let the flat stay hers without questions that would have required answers she did not…"
3"Her bright blue eyes followed a single drop negotiating the inside of the window glass, losing its shape, starting again."
4"She looked at Megan's hands, the careful nails, the absent ring, the thumb that kept returning to the pale band of skin."
5"She thought of the nights she still mapped the exits in unfamiliar rooms before she let herself sleep, and of the uneven tread on the landing above this bar, th…"
6"She reached across the scarred wood, hesitated with her fingers hovering, then laid two of them lightly on the bar beside Rory's hand, not quite touching the sc…"
7"She had also wanted no one to see what waited on the other side of it, the particular shape her fear had taken, the calculations she had made and remade until l…"
8"The stock was thick, her name printed small, a Bristol number beneath it in type that meant business."
9"Rory looked at the card, then at the woman who had once known the exact proportion of milk she took in terrible coffee and the precise shape of the doubts she w…"
10"The card warmed slowly under her palm, the phone number rising against her skin like a pulse that was not hers."
11"His beard was neat, his expression unreadable in the way that meant he had already understood more than he would ask."
12"Inside her, the old maps on the wall seemed to redraw their coastlines around the things she and Megan had left unnamed, borders shifting to accommodate a regre…"
65.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The name came out, as if it had been carried too far"
1"She looked up, and the years were suddenly visible in the set of her mouth"
2"Rory said, and the sentence was true and not true in the same breath, the way so many necessary sentences were"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.174
leniency0.348
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.8376%