Run: 2026-09-23-01M36W1SMQRRG94V9D4GHQQQRW

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Duration:
3m 16s
Cost:
$0.005424
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain had come in off the river around four and never worked up the courage to become anything more than a thin, undecided drizzle, the kind that hung in the air and made the green neon over the door bleed down the pavement in long leaking streaks. Inside, the Raven's Nest smelled of lemon polish and old paper. The maps on the walls had gone soft at the edges with damp over the winters — Vienna, Prague, a Shanghai that predated the war — and the black-and-white photographs between them held a hundred faces that belonged to people who had been young and certain in a century that had finished with them. Rory Carter sat in the corner booth with a book open and unread in front of her. It was nearly midnight. She'd come down from the flat an hour ago because the ceiling up there had been too quiet and the radiator had been clicking in a way that made her think of a lock being tested. Her Golden Empress jacket was folded on the bench beside her, the red-and-gold embroidery dark with rain at the shoulders. Somewhere behind the bar, glass met glass and then wood, met glass and then wood again. Silas worked slowly tonight. He favoured the left leg when he thought no one was watching, which was almost never, and when he leaned his hip against the bar his right hand came up to rest on the towel, the silver signet catching the low light. He had not asked her why she was down here. He never did. That was one of the things she had come to understand about him: he kept his questions filed somewhere retrievable and simply waited for the answers to walk in and introduce themselves. The door opened and a wedge of wet green light laid itself across the floor. The man who came in brought the weather with him. He shook rain from a charcoal overcoat that cost more than Rory's rent, folded a fine umbrella shut with the specific competence of a man who had owned good umbrellas for years, and stood for a moment letting his eyes adjust. Thirties. Close-cropped hair where there had once been a great black shaggy curtain of it. A watch that sat on his wrist like a small quiet argument in favour of the status quo. He didn't see her. He crossed to the bar and said, in a voice that had been polished down since she'd last heard it, "A whisky, please. Whatever's open." Rory's hand stopped on the page. The voice was the same. Underneath the filing and the sanding-down, underneath whatever chambers or boardroom had laid its sediment over it, the vowel in *please* still did the same small Welsh lift it had always done at the end. She knew that lift the way you know the creak of a particular stair in a house you no longer live in. Silas poured. He had a way of doing it — no flourish, no conversation that wasn't offered first — that made people feel briefly and inexplicably observed. The man took the glass, turned, and let his gaze travel the room with the quick perimeter-sweep of a man checking exits in a place he'd never been, and that was when he found her in the corner with the book and the folded jacket and the black hair falling straight to her shoulders. The glass stopped halfway. "Rory?" She closed the book. "Hello, Rhys." He crossed the room in the halting way of a person whose legs had understood the situation before his face had. Up close he was both exactly himself and entirely a stranger: the same long jaw, the same pale grey eyes, but the sharpness in him had changed direction. At Cardiff he had been sharp outwards — against the landlords, the firms, the whole apparatus he said he meant to dismantle from inside and which had plainly dismantled him from outside instead. Now the sharpness had been turned inward and worn smooth, like a stone in a pocket. "God," he said. "God. Sit down — can I —" He gestured at the booth and then seemed to remember that she was already sitting in it. He laughed, and the laugh was the old one, unguarded and half a beat too loud, and for a second the years fell off him like a coat. Then he was thirty-three again in his good wool, sliding in opposite her, both hands flat on the table as if to anchor himself. "You live here," he said. Not a question exactly. "Above it." She nodded at the ceiling. "Second floor. The window with the light on." "I walked past it. I walked past your window and you were — you're in London. All this time." "All this time," she said. He turned the whisky glass on the wood. She watched him catalogue her: the jacket, the tiredness under the eyes, the silver ring of a hair tie on her wrist next to the small crescent scar he had once asked about and she had once, in some careless Cardiff night, explained — the swing set, the broken chain, the ambulance, her father's face. Brendan Carter, who had looked at the injury like a piece of evidence he intended to lose. She had told Rhys things like that back then. He had been the person she told things like that. "You look well," he said, which was the polite lie people used when the truth was too large to lift. "Do I," she said, and let it sit. "You look like yourself," he amended, more quietly. "I didn't know if I'd recognise you. Laila, wasn't it, for a while? That's what Eva said when I finally got anything out of her — that you were going by some other name and she wasn't going to tell me which, and that I should stop writing to your father's chambers because you weren't in Cardiff and had no intention of being." Rory looked at her hands. "That sounds like Eva." "She covered for you," he said. "I went to the flat on City Road. The landlord let me in. It was empty except for a nail where a picture had been and a rent book with two months left on it. I stood there for a while. I want you to know that I stood there for a while." "Rhys." "I thought — and forgive me, I know how this sounds — I thought for about three days that you were dead. That something had happened and nobody wanted to say it to me, because what was I, in the end? A friend from lectures. Not family. Not the person you'd call." He drank. "Then Eva rang my mother, of all people, and said you were fine and you'd gone and it was better not to know where. And my mother passed that on to me over Sunday dinner like the weather." Silas came out from behind the bar. He moved down the room with his particular care, the left knee negotiating each step as though it were a matter to be settled rather than performed, and he set two fresh glasses down without a word — a whisky for Rhys, and for her the water with ice she had not asked for and would drink. The signet ring rested a moment on the bar top between them. Rhys looked up at him, expecting the enquiry that bar owners make — *everything alright here?* — and got instead a slight nod, unhurried, nearly kind, and then Silas was gone back to his glassware. "Who's he?" Rhys asked. "My landlord," she said. "Sort of. My—" She stopped. There was no clean word for what Silas was. "He's here," she said. "You work in a restaurant," Rhys said. He said it carefully, the way you'd set down something fragile belonging to someone else. "Eva told me that much, eventually. The Golden Empress. She said you ride a bicycle." "A moped, mostly. When it's dry." "Rory. You were first in Conveyance and Land Law. You had the offer from Meredith and Pryce. Your father had the wig picked out." "My father had a great many things picked out." "And this is what you — you live over a bar and deliver food." "People do," she said. "It's honest. Yu-Fei is good to me. I know every street between Soho and Camden and I can tell you which flats have dogs and which don't, and some nights that's the entire sum of my usefulness and I sleep well." "You never slept well," he said. "Not once, in three years, did you sleep well." The ice shifted in her glass. Outside, the drizzle thickened against the window and the green light wavered and held. "You married," she said, because it was easier and because the ring had been there since he'd sat down, a plain band of gold, newer and unscratched. "Tell me about that." "Carys. She's a radiographer at the Heath. We've a house in Pontcanna and a dog with a bad hip and we're getting married in June in a church I've been to twice." He paused. "She's kind. She's kind in a way I'd stopped believing in at about twenty-five, when it became apparent that kindness wasn't going to get anyone through the door at the firms, and so I put it somewhere safe and went and got through the door anyway." "You wanted to fight the landlords," Rory said. "You wanted housing law. You wanted to stand up in a room and ruin somebody's afternoon." "I wanted to be righteous," he said. "It turns out that's a young man's profession. I do commercial leases now. I am extremely good at commercial leases." He said it without self-pity, which was worse. "And you. What happened to you?" The question lay on the table between them with all its edges showing. "Which part," she said. "You left in the dark. You left without a word to anyone who loved you, and the one word you did leave was with a woman who swore herself to silence over it. That's not — that's not you. That's not the person who argued with Professor Vaughan until he apologized in front of the seminar. Whatever it was, you could have told me. You could have told me and I would have —" "You would have what?" He stopped. His jaw worked once, and she saw it then, the thing that had never been said across all those Cardiff nights, the thing she had known about and stepped around like furniture in a dark room. She had known. She had always known. And she had let him carry it alone because it was easier than picking it up. "Yes," he said at last, very simply. "I would have." "That's why I couldn't tell you." He looked at her for a long moment. Something came loose behind his eyes and he breathed out and looked away, at the maps, at Prague pinned under its little dulled brass tack. "Evan," he said. She flinched. It was small but he saw it, and he closed his eyes briefly, the way a man does when a thing he suspected turns out to be true and he must now live in the world where it is. "He's still in Cardiff," she said. "That's why the flat was empty and the name was different and Eva swore herself to silence. I'm not going to say more about it than that. I've said what I'm going to say to two people in my life and both of them were standing up and both of them were me." "I'd have gone round there," Rhys said. "I know." "I'd have gone round there and I don't know what I'd have done but I'd have gone." "I know," she said again. "That's what I was afraid of. Not for him. For you. You'd have got yourself in the paper and the chambers would have heard and it would have been your whole life set on fire by my —" She stopped and pressed her thumb into the crescent scar on her left wrist, the old habit, the little white moon under the skin. "I did the arithmetic. I did the arithmetic and the answer was to leave quietly." "You were always doing the arithmetic," he said bitterly. "Even when it was about people." The silence went long. Somewhere behind the bar a bottle found its shelf. Silas did not look over, and she was grateful to him in a way that sat high in her throat. Rhys took out a card — cream stock, embossed, a name and a firm and a telephone number — and set it on the table beside her cold tea. Then he seemed to think better of the gesture and moved it to the bar as he stood, as if leaving it with her directly would ask something of her he had no right to ask. "If you ever want to be found," he said. "I've been found," she said. "Look at me." He looked. Whatever he found, he did not say. He put his coat on and shook out his umbrella at the door and stood a moment with his back to her, framed in the green spill of light, the same height he had been, the same slight stoop at the shoulders he'd had from too many years bent over books. Then he pushed out into the rain and was gone, and the door swung to and the light narrowed to a line and closed. Rory sat until her ice had finished moving. When she went to the bar, the card lay where he'd left it, and Silas was drying a glass he had already dried. He did not look at the card. He looked at her wrist, where her thumb still rested in the crescent. "Some doors," he said, in his low, unhurried way, "you spend your whole life keeping shut, and then one evening the hinge gives, and you find out the room behind it is only a room." "That's very wise and completely useless," she said. "I'm a bar owner," said Silas. "It's most of the job." She almost laughed. She picked up the card and looked at the embossed name a moment — the name of a man who had once wanted to ruin a landlord's afternoon and now signed the leases — and put it in her jacket pocket without folding it. Then she took her book and her cold tea and went up the narrow stairs to the flat with the light still on in the window, and below her the sign buzzed its green into the wet street, keeping its counsel, holding the door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"he amended more [more]"
1"she said again [again]"
2"he said bitterly [bitterly]"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.493
leniency0.985
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.09
89.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2458
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count2
3
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"carefully"
2"very"
3"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
91.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2458
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"wavered"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
highlights
0"wavered"
1"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"was grateful"
77.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"think"
1"know"
2"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen73
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords2478
ratio0.002
matches
0"please"
1"everything alright here?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions41
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount1592
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.5
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rhys"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Vienna1
Prague2
Shanghai1
Carter2
Golden1
Empress1
Rory6
Welsh1
Cardiff3
Rhys7
Silas8
persons
0"Nest"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Welsh"
4"Rhys"
5"Silas"
places
0"Raven"
1"Vienna"
2"Prague"
3"Shanghai"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if leaving it with her directly would ask something of her he had no right to ask"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2478
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences143
matches
0"like that back"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean36.44
std33.53
cv0.92
sampleLengths
0113
193
291
315
484
529
66
762
881
94
101
116
1298
1379
149
1515
1619
175
1899
1920
208
2171
229
2359
241
2592
26111
274
2822
2937
306
3124
329
3314
3445
3515
3620
3731
3880
3924
4041
4113
424
4374
444
4561
4610
476
4833
493
82.93% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences110
matches
0"being tested"
1"was folded"
2"been polished"
3"been turned"
4"was gone"
5"been said"
6"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs278
matches
0"was watching"
1"was drying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences143
ratio0.056
matches
0"The maps on the walls had gone soft at the edges with damp over the winters — Vienna, Prague, a Shanghai that predated the war — and the black-and-white photographs between them held a hundred faces that belonged to people who had been young and certain in a century that had finished with them."
1"He had a way of doing it — no flourish, no conversation that wasn't offered first — that made people feel briefly and inexplicably observed."
2"At Cardiff he had been sharp outwards — against the landlords, the firms, the whole apparatus he said he meant to dismantle from inside and which had plainly dismantled him from outside instead."
3"She watched him catalogue her: the jacket, the tiredness under the eyes, the silver ring of a hair tie on her wrist next to the small crescent scar he had once asked about and she had once, in some careless Cardiff night, explained — the swing set, the broken chain, the ambulance, her father's face."
4"He moved down the room with his particular care, the left knee negotiating each step as though it were a matter to be settled rather than performed, and he set two fresh glasses down without a word — a whisky for Rhys, and for her the water with ice she had not asked for and would drink."
5"Rhys looked up at him, expecting the enquiry that bar owners make — *everything alright here?* — and got instead a slight nod, unhurried, nearly kind, and then Silas was gone back to his glassware."
6"Rhys took out a card — cream stock, embossed, a name and a firm and a telephone number — and set it on the table beside her cold tea."
7"She picked up the card and looked at the embossed name a moment — the name of a man who had once wanted to ruin a landlord's afternoon and now signed the leases — and put it in her jacket pocket without folding it."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1418
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"great black shaggy curtain"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03314527503526093
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.011988716502115656
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean17.33
std16.49
cv0.952
sampleLengths
048
111
254
317
44
536
620
716
84
942
1010
113
1232
1315
1410
1541
161
1714
1818
194
2025
216
225
2335
2422
252
2625
2754
284
291
304
312
3221
3328
3433
3516
363
3724
3828
3924
405
414
427
438
4419
455
468
4755
4817
499
48.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.34965034965034963
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners50
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences82
matches
0"Somewhere behind the bar, glass"
1"Then he was thirty-three again"
2"Somewhere behind the bar a"
3"Then he seemed to think"
4"Then he pushed out into"
5"Then she took her book"
ratio0.073
24.88% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences82
matches
0"It was nearly midnight."
1"She'd come down from the"
2"Her Golden Empress jacket was"
3"He favoured the left leg"
4"He had not asked her"
5"He never did."
6"He shook rain from a"
7"He didn't see her."
8"He crossed to the bar"
9"She knew that lift the"
10"He had a way of"
11"She closed the book."
12"He crossed the room in"
13"He laughed, and the laugh"
14"She nodded at the ceiling"
15"He turned the whisky glass"
16"She watched him catalogue her:"
17"She had told Rhys things"
18"He had been the person"
19"he said, which was the"
ratio0.488
63.66% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences82
matches
0"The rain had come in"
1"The maps on the walls"
2"Rory Carter sat in the"
3"It was nearly midnight."
4"She'd come down from the"
5"Her Golden Empress jacket was"
6"Silas worked slowly tonight."
7"He favoured the left leg"
8"He had not asked her"
9"He never did."
10"That was one of the"
11"The door opened and a"
12"The man who came in"
13"He shook rain from a"
14"A watch that sat on"
15"He didn't see her."
16"He crossed to the bar"
17"Rory's hand stopped on the"
18"The voice was the same."
19"She knew that lift the"
ratio0.793
60.98% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"Now the sharpness had been"
ratio0.012
36.47% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The rain had come in off the river around four and never worked up the courage to become anything more than a thin, undecided drizzle, the kind that hung in the…"
1"The maps on the walls had gone soft at the edges with damp over the winters — Vienna, Prague, a Shanghai that predated the war — and the black-and-white photogr…"
2"He shook rain from a charcoal overcoat that cost more than Rory's rent, folded a fine umbrella shut with the specific competence of a man who had owned good umb…"
3"He had a way of doing it — no flourish, no conversation that wasn't offered first — that made people feel briefly and inexplicably observed."
4"Then he was thirty-three again in his good wool, sliding in opposite her, both hands flat on the table as if to anchor himself."
5"He moved down the room with his particular care, the left knee negotiating each step as though it were a matter to be settled rather than performed, and he set …"
6"Then she took her book and her cold tea and went up the narrow stairs to the flat with the light still on in the window, and below her the sign buzzed its green…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags28
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He crossed (cross)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.418
leniency0.836
rawRatio0.036
effectiveRatio0.03
85.1451%