Run: 2026-09-23-01M36W24MRP0G3TJD2DAPY6ZFN

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Duration:
2m 19s
Cost:
$0.003531
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon above the door had been humming at the wrong pitch all week, a sound like something with a fever, and Rory had stopped noticing it by Tuesday. Tonight, though, coming down the back stairs at half past eleven with her hair still damp and the smell of Cantonese sauce and rain caught in her jacket, she noticed everything. The low lamps. The old maps of places she'd never been — the Levant, the Baltic, a sepia Strait of Malacca curling at its corners. The photographs of strangers in black and white, thirty faces she still couldn't name after five months of sleeping above them. Silas looked up from polishing a glass, hazel eyes tracking her the way they always did, briefly and completely, the silver signet ring flashing as his hand turned. He said nothing. He rarely needed to. He set a glass of water at the end of the bar where she always sat, and went back to his work with the particular choreography of a man who had spent thirty years learning exactly where everyone in a room was standing. Rory had one foot on the stool when the man three seats down said, "God. Rory?" The voice did it before the face did. A Cardiff voice, salted and softened by years of deliberate correction, the vowels sanded down and re-lacquered. She knew it the way you know the handwriting on an envelope that changes your life. She turned. It took her two full seconds, and in those seconds she felt herself do the arithmetic people do — the wrongness first, then the attempt to reconcile, then the slow, sick correction of memory. He was wearing a suit that fit him like a second skeleton, charcoal, probably worth more than she made in three months of riding a moped through Soho in the rain. A watch with a face like a small dark moon. His hair, which had always been a red-brown bird's nest he cut himself with kitchen scissors, was cropped close at the temples and threaded through with a distinguished, unkind grey. He'd lost weight he never had to lose. There was a crease beside his mouth that could have been put there with a chisel. "Daniel," she said. Daniel Pryce grinned, and the grin was the only thing that survived. It cracked the polished surface of him open and there was the boy underneath, the one who'd once talked his way into a lecture he wasn't enrolled in and stayed three hours arguing about tort reform with a professor twice his age. "Look at you," he said. "Standing there like it's nothing. Like the last five years were nothing." "Four," she said. "It's four." "Is it." He turned the tumbler in his hand. Whisky, neat. Macallan, from the look of the bottle Silas kept for the quiet ones with money. "It feels like ten. Or a hundred. Depending on the day." She came the three seats down and sat. Silas, without being asked, moved her water and put down a second glass, and she caught the small almost-nothing of his nod — the one that meant he'd be within earshot and would not be listening. He limped down to the far end of the bar, auburn and grey hair catching the lamp, and began the business of restocking the vermouth as though it required his whole attention. "So what happened to you?" she said. "To me?" Daniel laughed. "Look who's asking. Rory Carter, in a delivery jacket, in Soho. Last I heard you were going to read for the bar. Your father was going to be insufferable about it. Wasn't that the whole plan?" "It was my father's whole plan." "Fair." He drank. "Well. What happened to me is I did exactly what everyone expected, and then I did exactly what everyone expected again, and then one Tuesday I sat in a meeting about indemnity clauses and realised I hadn't spoken an honest sentence in three years." He said it lightly, in the tone men used for things that had nearly killed them. "I took six months off. Traveled. Came back and took a role with a smaller firm. Fewer meetings. Better coffee." He held up the expensive watch. "Also this. The point being I don't entirely recognise myself either, if that's what you're circling." "I wasn't circling." "You were. It's all right. I saw my reflection in the window before you came down and I thought, who's that tired old bastard in the good suit." He smiled again but the smile didn't crack anything this time. "I'm engaged, by the way. To a woman named Priya. She's an architect. She's better than me in every measurable way and I've decided to stop fighting it." "Congratulations," Rory said, and meant it, and felt the word land somewhere behind her ribs. "You?" "No." "No?" "No." Silence. Down the bar, glass met glass in a small bright chime. Somewhere outside a taxi horn held one long furious note and let it go. "That's my fault," Daniel said. The sentence sat between them. He hadn't meant to say it — she could see the moment arrive and pass across his face like weather — and now he was looking into the whisky as though it had written the line for him. "What's your fault?" "Nothing. Forget it." "Daniel." He set the glass down very carefully. "The last time we spoke. You rang me from — from that flat. From his flat. It was half eleven and you were crying so hard I could barely hear you, and you said—" He stopped. Adjusted the cuff of his expensive sleeve. "You said, I don't know what to do. And I said, you should ring me in the morning when you've calmed down." Rory said nothing. "And you never rang in the morning. And I let the whole thing become — I told myself you were all right. I told myself you were Rory, you'd always landed on your feet, you'd once argued a first-class essay out of a woman who had given you a third and you could handle one bad boyfriend. And then a year later Eva rang me — I hadn't spoken to Eva in two years — and told me you'd left, and changed your number, and she wouldn't tell me where you'd gone. She said you didn't want anyone to know." "She was protecting me." "I know she was. That's the part I can't get past. That the person protecting you was a girl you'd known since you were six and I was standing there with a first in jurisprudence and a nice suit and I did nothing." Rory looked at the row of old maps on the wall. The Malacca Strait. Somewhere enormous and green she'd never see. She thought about telling him the truth, which was that in the three months after that phone call she had replayed it so many times that the words had worn smooth, like stones in a pocket, and that she had forgiven him in a single afternoon in April, standing at a bus stop in the rain in Camden, holding twenty pounds of someone's chow fun — that the forgiveness had come and gone in an hour and then come back and stayed. Instead she said, "You would have driven to Cardiff." "I would have driven to Cardiff," he said. "You would have turned up at that door in your dad's car and made a speech and he would have hurt you." "Maybe." "Definitely. He had forty pounds on me and he'd been drinking since four." She said it flatly, the way she said it to the woman at the clinic and to the bloke at the council office and to Silas exactly once, five months ago, on the night she'd moved in upstairs and couldn't get the lock to turn. "You would have made it a rescue. He would have made it a fight. And I would have been standing between two men deciding which of them I belonged to, which was the whole problem in the first place." She picked up her water and drank. The crescent scar on her wrist showed white and small above the cuff. "You couldn't have fixed it, Daniel. Nobody could have fixed it but me, and it took me another fourteen months." "I know all of that up here," he said, and touched two fingers to his temple. "It's a slower commute down to the rest." "That's the best thing anyone's ever said about regret." "Take it. I've got crates of it." Down the bar, Silas had finished with the vermouth. He came back along the polished wood with the easy, faintly uneven gait that never quite hid the old knee, took up his cloth, and began working on a glass that did not need working on. He had the look of a man arranging himself near a window where something interesting might happen. Rory caught his eye and almost smiled. Daniel noticed. "Your landlord?" "My landlord's landlord," Rory said. "He owns the bar. I own the flat above it and about four houseplants and a moped with a cracked mirror." "That's the gap between us, isn't it," he said. "I own a lease in Barbican and a mortgage I'll be paying until I'm sixty and I have not been this—" He searched. "This awake. Since we were twenty-two and I read that terrible poem out loud on the roof of the library and you told me it was terrible and I loved you for it." The name of the thing. Finally. Out loud, at a quarter to midnight, wearing a suit and an engagement ring on the wrong hand for a watch. Rory breathed. "You never said that." "No." "Why?" "Because you were my friend and I liked being your friend and I'd watched what happened to people who tried to be two things at once. Because I was a coward. Because I thought there'd be years." He turned the tumbler again, a quarter turn, a quarter turn back. "And then there weren't. There was a phone call and a gap and a green neon sign in Soho and you've got a scar on your wrist I don't remember and hair that's black as anything and you are — look at you. You got out." "I got out," she said. "You got out," he said again, softly, and the four words carried the whole weight of it: the flat in Cardiff with its door he'd never knocked on, the fourteen months after, the years since, the boy who read poems on library roofs and the man he'd ironed himself into. Silas set down a fresh glass of water at Rory's elbow and a small, unasked-for measure of something amber in front of Daniel. "On the house," he said, in a voice like a door closing gently. "For old friends." He looked at Daniel for a moment longer than courtesy required, and whatever he saw there he kept, and then he moved away down the bar with his limp and his ring and his silence, and left them to it. They looked at each other across the three seats she'd closed and could not unclose. The photographs of dead strangers watched from the walls. Somewhere in the back, behind the bookshelf that was not only a bookshelf, a low bulb burned in a room where Silas kept the conversations he meant to forget. "I should go," Daniel said, at last. "Priya will be up. She reads until I'm home. She says she can't settle." He said this with a tenderness that made Rory's throat ache, the tenderness of a man who had learned, late and at cost, exactly what it was to be missed. "Then go home," Rory said. "She sounds like she's got good sense." "The best." He stood. Money appeared on the bar in a folded note that was more than the drinks and the drinks had been free. "Rory. If I had driven to Cardiff—" "You'd have made a speech." "I'd have made an absolute hash of it. In the car, though. Rehearsing in the car. I had it drafted. Four years I've had it drafted." "What's in it?" He shook his head. "It's ruined now. You're here and you're all right and there's nothing to say except—" He stopped himself again. He was a man made entirely of stopped sentences tonight. "Except that I'm glad I came in for a drink I didn't want in a part of town I had no reason to be in." "Why were you in this part of town?" "I wasn't. I got off at the wrong stop and walked." He shrugged, and for one half-second he was twenty-two again, all wrong hair and wrong certainty and no idea whatsoever what was coming. "Seems to be a theme." He put his coat on. He looked at her a moment longer — the blue eyes, the black hair, the small pale crescent at her wrist — and then he nodded once, the way people nod at graves and at doors, and walked out into the wet green light beneath the sign. Rory sat for a long time after the door had closed. The neon hummed its feverish note. The maps kept their old quiet counsel. Somewhere behind the bookshelf the bulb burned on. Silas came and stood across from her and did not ask. He took the folded note and did not open it and put it under the till, where such things lived. Only when she reached for the water did he say, "The ones who leave a debt never come back," and then, after a pause, "Do they." "No," Rory said. "They don't." She finished the water. She went up the back stairs to the flat with its four houseplants and its cracked mirror, and she stood a long while at the window with the lights off, watching the street where the green glow fell across the wet pavement like a place on a map nobody had named yet, and she did not cry, and she did not sleep, and in the morning she put on the jacket and rode out into the city and delivered other people's dinners to other people's doors, and the thing she had not said to Daniel Pryce rode behind her in the dark all day like a passenger who never got off.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He smiled again [again]"
1"he said again [again]"
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.461
leniency0.921
rawRatio0.057
effectiveRatio0.053
87.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2398
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"lightly"
2"very"
3"carefully"
4"softly"
5"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.49% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2398
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"tenderness"
count2
highlights
0"weight"
1"silence"
2"tenderness"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2411
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1496
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.87
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory13
Tuesday1
Cantonese1
Levant1
Baltic1
Strait2
Malacca2
Cardiff2
Soho1
Daniel8
Pryce2
Whisky1
Silas8
Silence1
Adjusted1
April1
Camden1
Money1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Daniel"
2"Pryce"
3"Silas"
4"Money"
places
0"Strait"
1"Malacca"
2"Cardiff"
3"Soho"
4"Whisky"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2411
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean34.44
std36.24
cv1.052
sampleLengths
0107
178
216
341
42
5129
63
754
817
95
1037
1176
127
1340
146
15105
163
1767
1815
191
201
211
221
2326
245
2543
263
273
281
2972
303
31100
324
3343
34103
359
368
3722
381
39137
4024
419
427
4369
444
4526
4665
4727
486
491
98.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences100
matches
0"was cropped"
1"being asked"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs234
matches
0"was standing"
1"was wearing"
2"was looking"
3"was coming"
21.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences141
ratio0.043
matches
0"The old maps of places she'd never been — the Levant, the Baltic, a sepia Strait of Malacca curling at its corners."
1"It took her two full seconds, and in those seconds she felt herself do the arithmetic people do — the wrongness first, then the attempt to reconcile, then the slow, sick correction of memory."
2"Silas, without being asked, moved her water and put down a second glass, and she caught the small almost-nothing of his nod — the one that meant he'd be within earshot and would not be listening."
3"He hadn't meant to say it — she could see the moment arrive and pass across his face like weather — and now he was looking into the whisky as though it had written the line for him."
4"She thought about telling him the truth, which was that in the three months after that phone call she had replayed it so many times that the words had worn smooth, like stones in a pocket, and that she had forgiven him in a single afternoon in April, standing at a bus stop in the rain in Camden, holding twenty pounds of someone's chow fun — that the forgiveness had come and gone in an hour and then come back and stayed."
5"He looked at her a moment longer — the blue eyes, the black hair, the small pale crescent at her wrist — and then he nodded once, the way people nod at graves and at doors, and walked out into the wet green light beneath the sign."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1493
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.038178164768921635
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.012726054922973878
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean17.1
std18.51
cv1.083
sampleLengths
030
131
23
322
421
528
63
74
843
916
108
1117
1216
132
1434
1531
1610
1730
188
1916
203
2112
2242
235
2412
253
262
279
282
2915
3011
318
3236
3332
347
354
3636
376
383
3960
4026
4116
423
4339
4428
4515
461
471
481
491
55.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3829787234042553
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners54
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences78
matches
0"Somewhere outside a taxi horn"
1"Somewhere enormous and green she'd"
2"Instead she said,"
3"Somewhere in the back, behind"
4"Somewhere behind the bookshelf the"
5"Only when she reached for"
ratio0.077
25.13% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences78
matches
0"He said nothing."
1"He rarely needed to."
2"He set a glass of"
3"She knew it the way"
4"It took her two full"
5"He was wearing a suit"
6"His hair, which had always"
7"He'd lost weight he never"
8"It cracked the polished surface"
9"He turned the tumbler in"
10"She came the three seats"
11"He limped down to the"
12"He said it lightly, in"
13"He held up the expensive"
14"He smiled again but the"
15"He hadn't meant to say"
16"He set the glass down"
17"She thought about telling him"
18"She said it flatly, the"
19"She picked up her water"
ratio0.487
30.51% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences78
matches
0"The green neon above the"
1"Tonight, though, coming down the"
2"The low lamps."
3"The old maps of places"
4"The photographs of strangers in"
5"Silas looked up from polishing"
6"He said nothing."
7"He rarely needed to."
8"He set a glass of"
9"Rory had one foot on"
10"The voice did it before"
11"A Cardiff voice, salted and"
12"She knew it the way"
13"It took her two full"
14"He was wearing a suit"
15"A watch with a face"
16"His hair, which had always"
17"He'd lost weight he never"
18"Daniel Pryce grinned, and the"
19"It cracked the polished surface"
ratio0.859
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
7.72% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"He set a glass of water at the end of the bar where she always sat, and went back to his work with the particular choreography of a man who had spent thirty yea…"
1"She knew it the way you know the handwriting on an envelope that changes your life."
2"His hair, which had always been a red-brown bird's nest he cut himself with kitchen scissors, was cropped close at the temples and threaded through with a disti…"
3"He limped down to the far end of the bar, auburn and grey hair catching the lamp, and began the business of restocking the vermouth as though it required his wh…"
4"She thought about telling him the truth, which was that in the three months after that phone call she had replayed it so many times that the words had worn smoo…"
5"He came back along the polished wood with the easy, faintly uneven gait that never quite hid the old knee, took up his cloth, and began working on a glass that …"
6"Somewhere in the back, behind the bookshelf that was not only a bookshelf, a low bulb burned in a room where Silas kept the conversations he meant to forget."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags35
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He looked, and whatever he saw there he kept, and then he moved away down the bar with his limp and his ring and his silence, and left them to it"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Rory had (have)"
1"Daniel laughed (laugh)"
2"she reached (reach)"
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.303
leniency0.605
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.079
83.3074%