Run: 2026-09-23-01M36W5D4W9HQGQNMX1HK6FRJS

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Duration:
1m 54s
Cost:
$0.000556
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Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect's trainers slapped through a puddle and sent a sheet of black water across my shins. I didn't slow. Ninety metres now, closing, his hood flying loose to reveal a ragged strip of hair dyed the colour of arterial blood. He glanced back over his shoulder and clipped a bin bag with his shoulder, and the burst of steam from a bakery vent swallowed him whole. Camden High Street at half eleven was a smeared watercolour of wet neon and drunk shoulders. I cut left, shouldered past a couple who shouted something at my back, and hit him with a lungful of his own exhaust. He was fast. He knew the alleys. "You've got nowhere left to go!" My voice tore against the rain. He didn't answer. He never did. He ducked beneath a shuttered stall, kicked a crate into my path, and I took the impact on my forearm hard enough to sting. My leather watch caught on the crate's splintered edge and I felt the strap bite. Eighteen years of this. Eighteen years of wet pavement and men who ran like the devil kept his ledger open past midnight. He veered toward the mouth of an alley I knew. Blind end. I'd walked it a hundred times chasing other runners, other nights. Except the far wall had a door that opened for people with a token, and everyone in this part of London knew it. I plunged after him anyway, boots skidding on cobbles slick as fish scales. The alley narrowed, brick pressing close on both sides, graffiti bleeding down the mortar in ribbons of violet and green. Ahead of him, a heavy iron gate stood ajar, and beyond it a stairway dropped into a black that swallowed the light. He slipped through without breaking stride. I reached the gate and stopped. My chest heaved. Somewhere above, a siren wailed and then thought better of it. The stairway smelled of standing water and copper, and from somewhere far below came a murmur, dozens of voices layered over one another like a congregation in a cathedral built of stone and lies. The Veil Market. Full moon tonight, which meant the whole rotten thing had packed up and moved here, into the guts of a dead Tube station. I pressed two fingers to my radio. Static answered me, thick and greasy, and then nothing at all. "Quinn, respond." My own voice, small against the rain. The channel stayed dead. Below, footsteps rang on wet concrete, receding fast. I looked at the gate, at the rust eating its hinges, at the bone token slot set into the post like a pair of eye sockets in a skull. Nothing in it. He'd gone through the open way, and whoever minded the door had let him pass, which meant they were expecting him, which meant I was the last thing they expected. My fingers closed around the handle. The metal wept cold water into my palm. A better detective would have called it in. A better detective would have secured the scene, logged the runner's direction, waited for backup with dry hands and hot coffee. I thought of Morris, of the file nobody would open, of the three years I'd spent turning over a stone that kept sliding out from under my thumb. I went down. The stairs spiralled, each step beaded with moisture, the walls plastered with tiled station signs so old the paint had crazed into a web. MIND THE GAP. A roundel, half scraped away. At the bottom, a tiled corridor opened into the vaulted throat of an abandoned platform, and the sound hit me first, a low rolling hum of trade and haggling, then the light, a patchwork of oil lamps, green neon and hanging bulbs that swung and threw crooked shadows across a hundred stalls. Enchanted goods in glass cases. Vials of alchemical sludge glowing the wrong shade of amber. Information sold from stools by blind men with ledgers balanced on their knees. Nobody looked up when I stepped onto the platform. In the Veil Market you kept your eyes on your own table or you lost them. Across the floor, the red hair bobbed between stalls. He was slowing, weaving toward the far end where the tunnel pinched to black. I pushed through a knot of buyers, muttered apologies that nobody heard, and put a hand flat against a crate of what the sign claimed was bottled midnight. It moved under my palm like something breathing. "You'll pay for that if you break it." The stallholder didn't lift her gaze from her ledger. "My apologies." I caught sight of him again, twenty metres ahead, standing beside a tiled alcove where a bent old man held out an open palm. He slapped something into it. A bone token, passed back the other way, bribery on a scale that made my teeth ache. He saw me then. His eyes, wet and white, found mine through the crowd, and his mouth twisted into something that was not quite a grin. He stepped into the alcove and the tiles swallowed him, a maintenance door clicking shut behind his shoulder with the finality of a coffin lid. I ran. Shoppers scattered, a display of silver charms crashed to the platform floor, and I reached the alcove in four strides. Locked. I threw my shoulder against it once, twice, and the hinge screamed but held. "Bit far from the pavement, detective." I turned. A young man stood with a medical bag in one hand and a cigarette he hadn't lit in the other, olive skin, short curls plastered flat with damp, a Saint Christopher medallion swinging against his collarbone. The scar on his forearm caught the lamplight as he gestured at the door. "Tomás Herrera." My voice came out steadier than I felt. "NHS struck you off eighteen months ago. Since then, no licence, no address, no record of anything at all, and here you are, below Camden, tending to people who shouldn't exist." "Somebody has to. You going to arrest me, or are you going to keep leaning on doors that don't want you?" "That man just went through there." "Man goes where he's owed." He pocketed the cigarette. "You shouldn't be down here, Detective Quinn. Bone token or no bone token, you walk that corridor and they'll take it out of your hide." "Is that a warning?" "It's a diagnosis." Somewhere behind us, the crowd's murmur folded in on itself, and every lamp on the platform guttered at once, as though something enormous had drawn breath. The tiles beneath my boots vibrated, a low grind of metal on metal coming up from the tunnel mouths. Tomás looked toward the black mouth of the westbound tunnel, and for the first time the easy curl left his mouth. "That's not the market closing," he said. The maintenance door's lock clicked. It swung inward, not from the far side, from this side, and the red-haired man stood framed in the gap with my warrant card between his fingers, the one that had been clipped inside my jacket, the one that had been there when I came down the stairs. "Detective Quinn," he said, in a voice like gravel rinsed in salt. "He's been waiting for you. Three years, he says. Three years since your partner came down here and never came back up." Behind me, the platform lights died in a chain, one row at a time, and the market's hum went silent, all at once, the way a room goes quiet when somebody important walks in.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"the last thing"
count1
2
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"the last thing"
2"vibrated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences89
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1264
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount1114
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.18
worstName"Veil"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Veil"
discoveredNames
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Street1
London1
Veil2
Market2
Tube1
Morris1
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Morris"
1"Saint"
2"Christopher"
places
0"High"
1"Street"
2"London"
3"Veil"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a grin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1264
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean31.6
std21.58
cv0.683
sampleLengths
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218
361
446
555
66
754
826
918
1013
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1314
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153
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1823
1936
2017
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2351
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256
2652
2741
2821
296
3034
314
323
3345
3421
357
365
3748
3834
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"been clipped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs181
matches
0"were expecting"
1"was slowing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences89
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1115
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.019730941704035873
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences89
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences89
mean14.2
std10.69
cv0.753
sampleLengths
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326
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103
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1215
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1510
162
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1823
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2020
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3011
319
324
338
3429
353
3630
376
388
398
4021
4128
423
4324
443
455
4652
475
4810
4913
65.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.43820224719101125
totalSentences89
uniqueOpeners39
88.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"Somewhere above, a siren wailed"
1"Somewhere behind us, the crowd's"
ratio0.027
28.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences75
matches
0"I didn't slow."
1"He glanced back over his"
2"I cut left, shouldered past"
3"He was fast."
4"He knew the alleys."
5"My voice tore against the"
6"He didn't answer."
7"He never did."
8"He ducked beneath a shuttered"
9"My leather watch caught on"
10"He veered toward the mouth"
11"I'd walked it a hundred"
12"I plunged after him anyway,"
13"He slipped through without breaking"
14"I reached the gate and"
15"My chest heaved."
16"I pressed two fingers to"
17"My own voice, small against"
18"I looked at the gate,"
19"He'd gone through the open"
ratio0.48
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences75
matches
0"The suspect's trainers slapped through"
1"I didn't slow."
2"He glanced back over his"
3"Camden High Street at half"
4"I cut left, shouldered past"
5"He was fast."
6"He knew the alleys."
7"My voice tore against the"
8"He didn't answer."
9"He never did."
10"He ducked beneath a shuttered"
11"My leather watch caught on"
12"He veered toward the mouth"
13"I'd walked it a hundred"
14"I plunged after him anyway,"
15"The alley narrowed, brick pressing"
16"He slipped through without breaking"
17"I reached the gate and"
18"My chest heaved."
19"The stairway smelled of standing"
ratio0.8
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
6.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Ninety metres now, closing, his hood flying loose to reveal a ragged strip of hair dyed the colour of arterial blood."
1"I cut left, shouldered past a couple who shouted something at my back, and hit him with a lungful of his own exhaust."
2"Ahead of him, a heavy iron gate stood ajar, and beyond it a stairway dropped into a black that swallowed the light."
3"Full moon tonight, which meant the whole rotten thing had packed up and moved here, into the guts of a dead Tube station."
4"He'd gone through the open way, and whoever minded the door had let him pass, which meant they were expecting him, which meant I was the last thing they expecte…"
5"I thought of Morris, of the file nobody would open, of the three years I'd spent turning over a stone that kept sliding out from under my thumb."
6"At the bottom, a tiled corridor opened into the vaulted throat of an abandoned platform, and the sound hit me first, a low rolling hum of trade and haggling, th…"
7"Somewhere behind us, the crowd's murmur folded in on itself, and every lamp on the platform guttered at once, as though something enormous had drawn breath."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.8998%