Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
97
glossingSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"not quite matched to her heart"
1
"not quite agree with itself — a softness, a blur, as if the air had thicker glass set into it and someone was learning how to hold still behind the glass"
"They had grown so old their trunks had split and healed into pillars, bark ridged like masonry, and between two of them the air held a seam she could feel with the scar on her left wrist — the small crescent puckering as if the skin remembered a colder edge."
1
"Beyond them the park ought to have continued — bracken, a path, the long dark of the Isabella Plantation if she had her bearings — but the dark beyond the stones was simply dark, without depth, like a wall painted to look like distance."
2
"The starlight lay on them evenly, except for one patch the size of a standing woman where the light did not quite agree with itself — a softness, a blur, as if the air had thicker glass set into it and someone was learning how to hold still behind the glass."
3
"It had been a mistake to speak; she understood that as soon as the words left her, because the breathing changed, pleased, and matched her exactly, in and out, so that she could no longer find the seam between them."
4
"The sound came from just behind her left shoulder, intimate as a mouth beside an ear, and it used a shape she had never given anyone — a long name, soft at the edges, Malphora, the consonants worn smooth as a stone in a pocket."
5
"Turning around was what it wanted; she could feel the want the way she had felt the seam in the air, a pressure against the scar, against the pendant, against the small of her back where no hand had yet settled."
6
"And in the silence after, closer than the voice, closer than the hand, a third breath drew itself in — new, hungry, and not bothering to match her at all."
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
74
technicalSentenceCount
9
matches
0
"They had grown so old their trunks had split and healed into pillars, bark ridged like masonry, and between two of them the air held a seam she could feel with …"
1
"A place this thick with bloom should have been loud with them, even at night, especially in a pocket of weather that had forgotten the month."
2
"She timed it against her breath and found it slightly faster, as if whatever it was listening to had a quicker pulse than hers."
3
"The two trunks she trusted were three paces closer to the next pair, the seam between them narrower, as if the grove had taken a small polite step inward while …"
4
"The starlight lay on them evenly, except for one patch the size of a standing woman where the light did not quite agree with itself — a softness, a blur, as if …"
5
"She saw it the way you see a word you are not yet willing to read: all at once and then not at all, because she blinked and the edge was flowers again, only the…"
6
"The sound was so ordinary she nearly laughed, a single startled breath that the other breath copied late, badly, like a mimic that had forgotten the trick."
7
"The crescent scar on her own wrist itched under the cuff of her jacket, a sympathetic sting, as if whatever stood outside the ring had put its thumb on the same…"
8
"In that light the clearing showed her what the starlight had smoothed over: every flower within three paces of her feet was turned inward, and every flower beyo…"