Run: 2026-09-23-01M36WVV4AAG1RRX03XY01JVBG

Run Details

Duration:
2m 33s
Cost:
$0.046667
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain had been at it since four, a thin London rain that never quite committed to falling and never quite stopped. Aurora came down the back stairs with her jacket half on, the smell of ginger and five-spice still caught in the collar from the last run for the Golden Empress. Her hair, black and straight and just to her shoulders, was damp at the ends. She had meant only to ask Silas whether the post had come. She had not meant to stay. The Raven's Nest held its usual dim. Old maps browned along the walls, their coastlines gone soft, and between them the black-and-white photographs of people who had once stood very still for a camera and were now only that stillness. The green neon above the street door threw a sickly edge of light across the floorboards whenever someone passed outside. It was early enough that the place belonged mostly to itself. Silas was behind the bar, drying a glass he had already dried. The limp in his left leg announced him before he turned. He set the glass down, and the silver signet on his right hand clicked once against the wood. Grey threaded the auburn of his hair and of the beard he kept neat, and his hazel eyes took her in the way they took in most things that entered: as if he had already decided what they were and was willing, within reason, to be wrong. "Post's on the side," he said. "Nothing with your name on it." "Right." She didn't reach for it. Under the cuff her wrist itched, the small crescent scar waking the way it did in damp weather, a childhood thing from a gate and a summer that had never learned to be quiet. She was about to go back up when she saw the woman at the far end of the counter. The recognition did not arrive all at once. It came as a sequence of small refusals. The coat was wrong. The posture was wrong. The hair, once a careless brown that Eva had cut herself over the bathroom sink in Cathays, was now a precise colour that had been paid for. But the hands were the same. Eva had always held a glass as if she were keeping it from telling on her. Eva looked up. For a moment neither of them did the decent thing and pretended. The years arranged themselves between the pumps and the maps, a distance you could have walked if you had the evening for it. Then Eva's mouth made a shape that was almost her old smile and not quite. "Rory." No one in London called her that except people who had known her before she had decided which parts of herself were portable. Silas's eyebrow moved a fraction. He found something to do at the far end of the bar, which was its own kind of courtesy. "Eva." Her voice came out level. She was good at level. It was one of the things she had practised since Cardiff. "Christ. How long has it been?" "Six years in November." Eva said it too quickly, which meant she had already done the sum and had been sitting with the answer. "You look—" She stopped, and the stop was more honest than whatever word she had been about to spend. "You look like you." "That's a generous reading." Aurora slid onto the stool two down from her, not beside her. Close enough to talk. Far enough that neither of them had to decide what their shoulders meant. "You're in London." "Passing through. A thing at King's. I had an hour and I thought—" Eva turned the glass. Whisky, barely touched. "I didn't know you were here. I knew you were in London. Your mother told mine, years ago, that you'd landed on your feet. She didn't say where the feet were." Aurora glanced at the ceiling, at the flat she rented from the man currently pretending not to listen. "Above a bar in Soho. Very landed." Eva laughed once, short. "You were going to be a barrister." "I was going to be a lot of things." The words came out cleaner than she felt them. Pre-Law, her father's books in the sitting room, the way Brendan Carter had said the profession as if it were a room you could simply enter if you wiped your feet. She had wiped her feet. Then she had stopped entering rooms. "I deliver for a woman named Yu-Fei who shouts at me in two languages and pays me partly in dumplings. The dumplings are better than most closing arguments I've heard." "You always did that," Eva said. "Did what?" "Turn the thing that hurt into a line you could stand on." Eva's eyes had not changed, which was worse than if they had. "I used to think it was brave." "And now?" Eva looked at the maps. A finger of green light slid along the edge of the counter and died. "Now I think it sounds lonely. I might be wrong. I'm often wrong about you. I just do it with confidence." Silas limped past with a bottle and set it down without being asked, a quiet amber between them, and two fresh glasses. He didn't pour. The signet caught the light and let it go. He moved off toward the bookshelf at the back, the one that did not sit quite flush with the wall, and occupied himself with a photograph as if the photograph had asked. Aurora didn't touch the bottle. "You brought me here," she said. "Not to this bar. To London. You told me to get on the train and not look at the platform." "I remember." "You said if I stayed in Cardiff he'd talk me out of leaving before the kettle boiled." She did not say Evan's name. The name had weight, and she was tired of carrying it in her mouth. The scar on her wrist had nothing to do with him, and yet in certain lights people looked at it as if it were evidence of a later story. She kept her cuff down. "You were right about the kettle." "I was frightened," Eva said. "That's not the same as being right. I just needed you on the train so I could stop picturing the other ending." They let that sit. Somewhere out on the street a taxi hissed through standing water. The neon buzzed, a small electric insect trapped in the sign. Aurora watched Eva's hands and tried to find the girl who had stolen time from revision to sit on a wall and invent futures neither of them had kept. The futures had been ridiculous. Chambers. A flat with a balcony. A life in which Aurora out-argued her father at Christmas and Eva was there to witness it, grinning into her sleeve. Jennifer would have made tea and pretended not to take sides. None of it had survived the actual years. "You stopped writing," Aurora said. "You stopped answering." "I answered the first three." "And then you didn't." Eva's thumb worried the base of her glass. Her nails were clean and short and expensive in the way that did not announce itself. "I told myself you needed the space. I told myself I'd done the friend thing and the rest was yours. Very convenient, that. I got to be the person who'd helped without having to find out what the help had cost you." The old quickness rose in her, the sideways reflex that had got her through seminars and through worse rooms than this. She could have made a joke. She could have asked about King's, about the coat, about whatever life had pressed Eva into this precision. Instead she said, "I used to wait for your name on my phone like it was weather. Then I got good at not waiting. I'm not sure which version of me you came in here hoping to find." Eva's face did something complicated and then settled. "I don't know. The one who nicked my mother's lighter and swore she'd give it back. The one who was going to out-argue Brendan at Christmas and then cried in my car because she couldn't. The one I put on a train." She breathed out. "I didn't expect the one who lives above a bar and talks about dumplings as if that's the whole of it." "It isn't the whole of it." "No." Eva looked at her, and for a second the green from the street found Aurora's eyes and made them startling, even to herself, in the dark of the mirror behind the bottles. "That's the trouble. You were always the clever one. You could see the shape of a thing before the rest of us had finished the sentence. And you've used all that cleverness to become someone I can't quite get at. Or I've used mine to become someone who doesn't know how to try without making a speech of it." Aurora thought of her mother's kitchen, Jennifer Ellis before the name Carter had settled on her and after, the chalk dust that never quite left her cuffs, the way she had said be careful as if care were a subject you could revise for. She thought of the platform at Cardiff Central and Eva's hand lifted and already lowering. She thought of the years in which she had been safe enough and had not written to say so, because safety had felt like a debt, and debts made her proud in a way she disliked and could not seem to quit. "I should have told you I was all right," she said. "Were you?" "Not at first." The truth sat between them, plain as the glass. "Later. Enough. I got a job that ends when the bag is delivered. I got a lock that works. I got a man downstairs who doesn't ask questions he isn't owed." She nodded, barely, toward Silas, who had found a reason to be deaf. "I got mornings. That counted for more than I knew how to explain in a message." Eva nodded as if she were agreeing with a paper she hadn't read. "I got married," she said, and then, because the sentence had come out sounding like a defence, "It didn't take. Two years. He was kind. I was somewhere else in every room we shared. I kept thinking I'd call you when it was finished, when I had a version that didn't sound like I'd wasted someone's time. By the time I had the version, the number I had for you was dead." "I changed it." Aurora's mouth tilted, not quite a smile. "Old habit. Numbers. Cities. The story I tell when someone asks what I do." "And what do you tell them?" "That I'm between things." She heard how thin it was and let it be thin. "It's been true for so long it's started to look like an address." Eva reached across the two empty stools and stopped short of her wrist. Her fingers hovered over the place where the cuff hid the scar. She didn't touch. The not-touching was the most familiar thing she had done all evening. "I used to think if I got you out, that was me done," she said quietly. "Get her on the train. Don't let her look back. Then you can go home and be the good friend in the story. I didn't know the next part. Staying in the life you shoved someone into. I left you in a city and called it rescue, and then I got busy being someone who didn't have to check." "You didn't leave me," Aurora said. "I stayed. There's a difference. I chose the staying, even when the choosing was mostly not buying the ticket back." She looked at Eva properly then, at the paid-for hair and the tiredness under it, at the woman who had once cut her own fringe crooked and laughed until she couldn't breathe. The change was not only the coat. It was the way Eva held still, as if stillness were a skill she had acquired at some cost and was afraid of dropping. "You changed." "So did you." "I know." The admission cost her something small and exact. "I keep waiting to feel like the person who got off that train. Some days I can still find her. She thinks too fast and she isn't afraid of a room. Most days she's a story I tell so I can prove I was brave once. Bravery doesn't do the washing up. It doesn't answer messages either, as it turns out." Eva's laugh this time was closer to the old one, and it hurt them both in the same place. She wrapped her hands around her glass and didn't drink. "I've a train at half nine," she said. "Back to a hotel that smells of other people's meetings. I wasn't going to come in. I saw the green sign and I thought of nothing. I swear I thought of nothing. Then I was through the door, and there you were, and I didn't know what to do with my face." "Unexpected," Aurora said. "Entirely." They sat with the bottle unopened between them. Silas, from his end of the bar, watched the street and not them, the quiet authority of a man who had learned which silences were not his to break. His knee would be complaining in this weather. He would not mention it. On the wall a photograph of a vanished street looked past them both, unimpressed by reunions. Aurora could have asked her to stay for another drink. She could have walked her to the station under the shared umbrella of a conversation they might still have salvaged. She could have said the thing under the other things: I am sorry I made your help into a room I locked from the inside. Eva could have said: I am sorry I needed you to be all right so I could remain the person who had saved you. Neither of them said it. The words were there, heavy as wet wool, and they both pretended the evening was too short to unpack them. Six years had taught them how to be almost honest. It had not taught them how to finish. "Write," Eva said at last. It was not quite a plea and not quite an instruction. "Or don't. But if you do, don't wait until you've got a version that sounds finished. I won't know what to do with finished. I barely know what to do with this." "All right." "You won't." "Probably not." Aurora met her eyes. "But I'll know I was asked. That isn't nothing. It's more than I sent you." Eva stood. The coat made her look taller than she was, or perhaps the years had done that work without asking. She left a note under her glass that was more than the whisky cost, a habit of people who no longer knew how to be in rooms without paying for the privilege of leaving them. At the door she paused under the green light, and for a second the neon found the girl who had stood on a platform with her hand half raised, already calculating the cost of lowering it. "Rory," she said. "Yeah." "I'm glad the lock works." Then she was out in the rain, and the door settled, and the Nest took back its dim. Aurora stayed where she was. She touched the cuff over the scar, a small private inventory of what was hers and what was not, and looked at the unopened bottle. Upstairs the radiator would still be knocking. The post on the side would still have no name she needed to answer tonight. She did not go up. She did not pour. She sat in the middle distance between the woman who had stepped off a train and the woman who had learned, carefully, how not to be found, and the thing neither of them had managed to say remained on the stool between them, patient as a coat nobody claimed. Silas came back without hurry. He set a clean glass in front of her, glanced once at the door, and left the choice where it belonged. Outside, the green sign hummed. The rain kept on, thin and unfinished, as if the city, too, had never learned how to say the last of it.
created_at"2026-09-23T10:26:59.856Z" 9/23/2026, 10:26:59 AM
model"x-ai/grok-4.7-20260916"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency895
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time152713
tokens_prompt846
tokens_completion5295
native_tokens_prompt2047
native_tokens_completion9520
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning6212
native_tokens_cached1920
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
num_fetches(null)
web_search_engine(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"completed"
service_tier"default"
usage0.0466672
router(null)
user_agent"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.20.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer(null)
request_id"req-1790159219-j3pGUlmys2pxqY5R6TLE"
session_id(null)
preset_id(null)
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1790159219-3Jk4vRKQX4Z6FkFnA5K9"
upstream_id"bda777a8-b46d-9281-bbd7-b1a49f9179ad"
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"48cfe052-27db-4511-bd21-db8053f20023"
id"bda777a8-b46d-9281-bbd7-b1a49f9179ad"
is_byokfalse
latency257
model_permaslug"x-ai/grok-4.7-20260916"
provider_name"xAI"
status200
total_cost0.0466672
cache_discount0.002304
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"xAI"
response_cache_source_id(null)
data_region"global"
workspace_id"97e315e5-d303-487d-83c1-83180e8a13d4"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She nodded barely [barely]"
1"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.452
leniency0.904
rawRatio0.061
effectiveRatio0.055
90.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2750
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"quickly"
2"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
90.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2750
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"calculating"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"weight"
2"electric"
3"familiar"
4"calculating"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences139
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences139
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seem to"
2"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences179
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen72
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2750
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions35
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount1830
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.42
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
London2
Golden1
Empress1
Silas7
Raven1
Nest2
Eva26
Cathays1
Cardiff2
Aurora15
Close1
Whisky1
Pre-Law1
Brendan1
Carter2
Evan1
Christmas1
King1
Jennifer2
Ellis1
Central1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Eva"
4"Aurora"
5"Whisky"
6"Brendan"
7"Carter"
8"Evan"
9"King"
10"Jennifer"
11"Ellis"
places
0"London"
1"Cathays"
2"Cardiff"
3"Christmas"
globalScore0.79
windowScore0.5
44.74% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"not quite"
1"felt like a debt, and debts made her pr"
2"not quite a smile"
3"not quite a plea and not quite an instruction"
4"not quite an instruction"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2750
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences179
matches
0"let that sit"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean42.97
std36.49
cv0.849
sampleLengths
085
171
288
312
459
573
63
750
81
947
1028
1147
1236
1351
1425
1511
1690
176
182
1931
202
2140
2266
2331
242
2577
2627
27106
285
293
305
3170
3283
3374
346
3592
36101
3711
382
3972
4085
4124
426
4328
4440
4575
4691
473
4871
4989
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences139
matches
0"been paid"
1"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs328
matches
0"were keeping"
1"were agreeing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences179
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1836
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.03649237472766884
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.007625272331154684
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences179
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences179
mean15.36
std13.53
cv0.881
sampleLengths
022
130
215
312
46
57
633
720
811
912
1011
1118
1247
136
146
156
1634
1719
188
198
204
214
2227
236
2416
253
2612
2723
2815
291
3023
315
3219
336
345
3511
366
3724
3819
394
4016
414
4213
433
4417
453
4631
4718
487
494
46.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.33519553072625696
totalSentences179
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences127
matches
0"Then Eva's mouth made a"
1"Then she had stopped entering"
2"Somewhere out on the street"
3"Instead she said,"
4"Then she was out in"
ratio0.039
71.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount47
totalSentences127
matches
0"Her hair, black and straight"
1"She had meant only to"
2"She had not meant to"
3"It was early enough that"
4"He set the glass down,"
5"She didn't reach for it"
6"She was about to go"
7"It came as a sequence"
8"He found something to do"
9"Her voice came out level"
10"She was good at level."
11"It was one of the"
12"She stopped, and the stop"
13"She had wiped her feet."
14"He didn't pour."
15"He moved off toward the"
16"She did not say Evan's"
17"She kept her cuff down."
18"They let that sit."
19"Her nails were clean and"
ratio0.37
30.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount109
totalSentences127
matches
0"The rain had been at"
1"Aurora came down the back"
2"Her hair, black and straight"
3"She had meant only to"
4"She had not meant to"
5"The Raven's Nest held its"
6"The green neon above the"
7"It was early enough that"
8"Silas was behind the bar,"
9"The limp in his left"
10"He set the glass down,"
11"She didn't reach for it"
12"She was about to go"
13"The recognition did not arrive"
14"It came as a sequence"
15"The coat was wrong."
16"The posture was wrong."
17"The hair, once a careless"
18"Eva had always held a"
19"Eva looked up."
ratio0.858
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
ratio0
43.96% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Old maps browned along the walls, their coastlines gone soft, and between them the black-and-white photographs of people who had once stood very still for a cam…"
1"Grey threaded the auburn of his hair and of the beard he kept neat, and his hazel eyes took her in the way they took in most things that entered: as if he had a…"
2"Under the cuff her wrist itched, the small crescent scar waking the way it did in damp weather, a childhood thing from a gate and a summer that had never learne…"
3"He found something to do at the far end of the bar, which was its own kind of courtesy."
4"Pre-Law, her father's books in the sitting room, the way Brendan Carter had said the profession as if it were a room you could simply enter if you wiped your fe…"
5"Her nails were clean and short and expensive in the way that did not announce itself."
6"It was the way Eva held still, as if stillness were a skill she had acquired at some cost and was afraid of dropping."
7"She left a note under her glass that was more than the whisky cost, a habit of people who no longer knew how to be in rooms without paying for the privilege of …"
8"At the door she paused under the green light, and for a second the neon found the girl who had stood on a platform with her hand half raised, already calculatin…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"She stopped, and the stop was more honest than whatever word she had been about to spend"
1"Aurora slid, not beside her"
2"Aurora's mouth tilted, not quite a smile"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.219
leniency0.438
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.027
84.9940%