Run: 2026-10-06-01M48VNDFTJYHSMTTZ7QTENSX9

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Duration:
44.2s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heel of Quinn's boot struck the wet pavement and she skidded, catching herself against a lamppost that rang like a bell. Rain sheeted down in silver threads, turning the street into a funhouse mirror of neon and shadow. Somewhere ahead, a man ran. She'd lost him twice already. Once at the corner of Dean Street, where the crowd swallowed him whole. Again at the mouth of the alley beside the pizza shop, where a fox darted from a dumpster and he vanished into the dark like smoke. Now she had him. Barely. A dark shape cutting through the rain two hundred yards ahead, not running so much as flowing, as if the night itself carried him. Quinn pushed off the lamppost. Her lungs burned. Eighteen years on the force and she still couldn't match a twenty-nine-year-old's stamina. But she had something he didn't. She knew these streets. She knew where they led. The shape turned left onto Greek Street, then doubled back through Berwick Market, weaving between the closing stalls. Quinn followed, keeping to the shadows, her hand resting on the grip of her service weapon. Not drawn. Not yet. But ready. He knew he was being followed. Of course he did. The way he glanced back, that quick, practised movement, military precision in reverse. She'd seen it in suspects before. The ones who'd learned to survive. The rain intensified. Quinn's coat soaked through, heavy with water. Her salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her skull. She didn't care. She'd chased men through worse. He emerged from the market onto a narrow street she didn't recognise, flanked by shuttered shops and the occasional flickering security light. She memorised the route. Old habit. Always know your exits. Then he stopped. Quinn froze behind a skip, her breath coming in sharp bursts. The street stretched empty before her, rain washing the cobblestones clean. No side alleys. No doorways. Just the man, standing beneath a single working streetlamp, his back to her, perfectly still. She should have called for backup. Protocol. But backup was eight minutes away, and he was right there, and something in the way he stood, shoulders squared, hands at his sides, suggested he wanted to be found. Quinn stepped into the light. He turned. Tomás Herrera. She knew his face from the file, from the surveillance photos, from the whispered intelligence that had brought her to this night. Olive skin gone grey in the lamplight. Warm brown eyes that didn't flinch. The scar on his left forearm visible even from here, a pale line against the dark. "You're persistent, Detective." His voice carried, accented, unhurried. "I wondered when you'd tire." "Save it, Herrera." Quinn kept her weapon low, pointed at his chest. "Hands where I can see them." He raised them. Slow. Deliberate. "As you wish." "Turn around. Face the wall." "And if I refuse?" Quinn's finger tightened on the trigger. "Then I add assaulting an officer to your considerable list." A ghost of a smile. "You think I care about your list?" She did. That was the problem. The intelligence suggested he was a medic, nothing more. Off-the-books patchwork for people who couldn't afford hospitals, who needed wounds treated that no emergency room would touch. But intelligence was often wrong. Intelligence had led her to Morris, three years ago, and Morris had died screaming in a warehouse that shouldn't have existed. "Last chance." Herrera turned. Faced the brick wall of a shuttered travel agency. His hands pressed flat against the cold surface, fingers spread. Quinn approached, her boots splashing through puddles. Close enough now to smell him, rain and something else, something metallic underneath. She kept her weapon trained on his spine, her free hand reaching for her cuffs. "What are you doing in Soho at this hour?" she asked. "Your file says you work nights at St. Thomas'." "Former paramedic." He didn't look back. "You read my file thoroughly." "I read everything." She was three feet away now. Close enough to see the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat, the way his shoulders tensed beneath his jacket. "You're not answering my questions." "And you're not asking the right ones." Quinn's hand closed on his shoulder, spinning him around. He didn't resist. Just stood there, rain running down his face, watching her with an expression she couldn't read. "Where were you running from?" "Nowhere." He shrugged, water dripping from his elbows. "I was walking. You were following." "Liar." "Perhaps." The medallion caught the lamplight. "Perhaps I was walking toward something. Someone. You interrupted." Quinn felt it then. The shift in the air, subtle as a held breath. The street behind her, the one she'd come down, suddenly wrong. Too quiet. The rain still fell, but the sound had changed, muffled, distant, as if heard through water. She turned. The shuttered shops were gone. In their place, a descending staircase, rough concrete steps leading down into darkness, flanked by walls covered in symbols she didn't recognise. The travel agency remained, but its door now opened onto the stairwell, the glass reflecting nothing, showing only black. "What the hell," she whispered. Herrera smiled. "The Veil Market. You've heard of it, surely. Every detective in London has." "I don't believe in fairy tales." "Then you believe in nothing." He stepped back, toward the stairs. "Your suspect, the one you've been chasing for three weeks, he's down there. Buying something. Selling something. I don't know which." He paused at the top step, looking down into the dark. "I can take you to him. Or you can arrest me now, take me to your station, and wonder for the rest of your career what you missed." Quinn's mind raced. The Market was legend. Underground commerce in things that shouldn't exist, deals struck in shadows, debts paid in currencies no bank recognised. She'd heard stories. Dismissed them. Every detective heard stories. But Morris had died chasing stories. "Why help me?" she asked. "If you're involved with these people, why bring me to them?" Herrera's warm brown eyes met hers. For a moment, she saw something there, grief perhaps, or its cousin, guilt. "Because I'm tired of patching up corpses, Detective. Because three years ago, a man named Morris died in a place like this, and I was there, and I couldn't save him." He touched the medallion. "Saint Christopher protects travellers. I've been travelling too long." The stairs yawned below. Somewhere down there, a bell chimed, or perhaps it was something else, something that sounded like a bell but wasn't. Quinn made her decision. She stepped past him, onto the top step, and began to descend. Behind her, she heard his footsteps follow, close enough to touch, far enough to run. The darkness swallowed them both.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.061
91.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1121
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
91.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1121
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"raced"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"raced"
1"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences108
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1121
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
76.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount880
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.48
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Street2
Greek1
Berwick1
Market2
Herrera4
Morris3
Close2
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Morris"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
places
0"Dean"
1"Street"
2"Greek"
3"Berwick"
globalScore0.761
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like a bell but wasn't"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1121
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean23.35
std18.02
cv0.772
sampleLengths
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336
440
535
625
732
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942
1037
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1255
1313
1418
158
165
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2221
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2420
2511
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3014
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3215
3343
342
3546
365
3715
386
3971
4034
416
4216
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4424
454
4627
475
98.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences108
matches
0"being followed"
1"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs169
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences129
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.51% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount887
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.04284103720405862
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.004509582863585118
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean8.69
std7.09
cv0.816
sampleLengths
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406
411
4230
435
442
452
4622
477
486
4916
72.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.46511627906976744
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences88
matches
0"Somewhere ahead, a man ran."
1"Once at the corner of"
2"Again at the mouth of"
3"Of course he did."
4"Always know your exits."
5"Then he stopped."
6"Just the man, standing beneath"
7"Just stood there, rain running"
8"Somewhere down there, a bell"
ratio0.102
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences88
matches
0"She'd lost him twice already."
1"Her lungs burned."
2"She knew these streets."
3"She knew where they led."
4"He knew he was being"
5"She'd seen it in suspects"
6"Her salt-and-pepper hair plastered to"
7"She didn't care."
8"She'd chased men through worse."
9"He emerged from the market"
10"She memorised the route."
11"She should have called for"
12"She knew his face from"
13"His voice carried, accented, unhurried"
14"He raised them."
15"His hands pressed flat against"
16"She kept her weapon trained"
17"He didn't look back"
18"She was three feet away"
19"He didn't resist."
ratio0.295
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences88
matches
0"The heel of Quinn's boot"
1"Rain sheeted down in silver"
2"She'd lost him twice already."
3"A dark shape cutting through"
4"Quinn pushed off the lamppost."
5"Her lungs burned."
6"She knew these streets."
7"She knew where they led."
8"The shape turned left onto"
9"Quinn followed, keeping to the"
10"He knew he was being"
11"The way he glanced back,"
12"She'd seen it in suspects"
13"The ones who'd learned to"
14"The rain intensified."
15"Quinn's coat soaked through, heavy"
16"Her salt-and-pepper hair plastered to"
17"She didn't care."
18"She'd chased men through worse."
19"He emerged from the market"
ratio0.716
56.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Now she had him."
ratio0.011
34.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"A dark shape cutting through the rain two hundred yards ahead, not running so much as flowing, as if the night itself carried him."
1"Off-the-books patchwork for people who couldn't afford hospitals, who needed wounds treated that no emergency room would touch."
2"Intelligence had led her to Morris, three years ago, and Morris had died screaming in a warehouse that shouldn't have existed."
3"Just stood there, rain running down his face, watching her with an expression she couldn't read."
4"Underground commerce in things that shouldn't exist, deals struck in shadows, debts paid in currencies no bank recognised."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He shrugged, water dripping from his elbows"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.091
leniency0.182
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.061
93.2554%