Run: 2026-10-13-01M4V1QS5MY3HN0GMV0Q6DE1E4

Run Details

Duration:
38.8s
Cost:
$0.027818
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The transition from Richmond Park to the Grove never came with a fanfare. One moment Rory was stepping over a rotting beech log in the damp London November, the distant hum of the A308 vibrating through the soles of her boots, and the next, the city was simply gone. She stopped just inside the boundary, her hand resting against one of the ancient oak standing stones. Petrified and silvered by centuries of weather that didn’t belong to Earth, the wood felt like bone beneath her palm. Usually, the air here smelled of crushed thyme and eternal summer. Tonight, it smelled of copper and stagnant pond water. Rory pulled her hand back, wiping her palm against the thigh of## her jeans. The Golden Empress insulated delivery bag slung over her shoulder felt absurdly mundane here, sagging with the weight of three containers of Yu-Fei’s salt-and-pepper squid and a special herbal broth meant for the Grove’s resident caretaker. It was a routine drop-off, the kind that paid triple cash in hand and kept the rent paid on her flat above Silas’s bar. Except there was no lantern hanging from the center bough of the clearing. Instead of the oppressive, buzzing warmth of the pocket realm, a thick, motionless chill hung over the grass. The wildflowers that bloomed year-round—foxgloves, bluebells, and pale winter aconites tangled together in defiance of any natural season—were still there, carpeting the clearing in the silver twilight. Not a single petal stirred. It was as if someone had poured clear resin over the entire glade. Rory unzipped her jacket a fraction, slipping two fingers beneath her collar to touch the silver chain at her throat. The Heartstone Pendant, roughly the size of her thumbnail, sat against her collarbone. It was cold. No faint pulse of warmth, which meant no Hel portals were tearing open nearby, though its deep crimson center held its usual faint, sullen glow. Good. Or at least, one specific flavor of bad crossed off the list. She checked her watch. The hands were spinning lazily backward, the second hand stuttering between the four and the three before giving up entirely. Standard for the Grove. If she stayed ten minutes, she might walk out into Tuesday morning or three minutes before she’d even parked her moped. The sooner she dropped the food at the cairn in the center, the better. She took a step into the wildflowers. The grass didn't rustle. Her heavy boots pressed down the stems of the bluebells, crushing them against the dark earth, and the action produced no sound at all. No crunch of stems, no whisper of nylon as her trousers brushed together. Rory froze. She tapped her boot against a flat stone. *Nothing.* Then, three seconds too late, a hollow *clack* echoed from ten feet to her left. Her heart gave a single, hard thump against her ribs. She turned her head slowly, her straight black hair brushing the collar of her jacket. The clearing was empty, ringed by the towering, sentinel shapes of the oak standing stones. Beyond them lay only a wall of grey fog that marked the edge of the pocket dimension. "Isolde?" Rory called out. Her voice didn't carry. It dropped dead the instant it left her lips, flat and muffled, as though she were speaking into a heavy wool coat. Wait. No. From the far side of the clearing, near the jagged twin oaks at the northern boundary, a faint whisper drifted back through the stagnant air. *Isolde?* It was her own voice, delayed and slightly warped, like a tape dragged over a dirty magnet. The cadence was wrong. It hadn't sounded like a question; it had sounded like someone testing the shape of the word on a tongue not built for it. Rory didn't move. Years of dealing with her father’s cross-examinations at the dinner table, followed by two years of walking on eggshells around Evan’s hair-trigger temper, had wired her nervous system for cold assessment rather than panic. Panic got you cornered. Panic made you drop your keys. She rubbed her thumb absently over the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, her bright blue eyes scanning the perimeter. The fog beyond the standing stones was shifting, pressing inward against the boundary markers like pale hands against glass. In the corner of her left eye, one of the standing stones seemed to lean inward. She snapped her gaze toward it. The petrified oak was completely upright, rough and inanimate. *Just a trick of the half-light,* she told herself, though she didn't believe it. While she stared at the northern stone, a shape at the extreme right edge of her vision seemed to elongate, stretching a long, spindly shadow across the foxgloves. She turned her head. Nothing. Just the ancient wood, gray and dead, and the motionless flowers. She needed to leave the bag and go. Screw the tip. Rory walked briskly toward the flat stone cairn at the heart of the clearing, keeping her chin up and her peripheral vision wide. The delayed sound of her own footsteps followed her, three paces behind. *Crunch. Swish. Crunch.* It was maddeningly out of sync, creating the sickening illusion that someone was walking right on her heels, matching her stride for stride in the bruised twilight. She reached the cairn, slipped the strap of the thermal bag over her head, and set it down on the stone. As she straightened, the Heartstone against her chest flared. It wasn't the gentle, pulsing warmth she had felt once near the Docks. It was a sudden, needle-sharp heat, as if someone had pressed the tip of a lit cigarette directly into the hollow of(her) throat. Rory gasped, grabbing the silver chain to yank the crimson stone away from her skin. Through the fabric of her shirt, the gem bled a frantic, arterial red light. *Crack.* The sound came from the boundary behind her. It wasn't delayed. It was the sharp, dry snap of old wood giving way under immense weight. Rory spun around. There were always twelve standing stones ringing the Grove. Brendan Carter had drilled observation skills into his daughter since she was seven years old; she had counted the stones the very first time she’d stumbled through the veil, and she had counted them every time since. Twelve ancient oaks, spaced twenty paces apart. She counted them now, her eyes darting left to right through the gloom. One. Two. Three. Four. Five. Six. Seven. Eight. Nine. Ten. Eleven. Twelve. Thirteen. Between the fourth and fifth markers on the eastern perimeter stood a shape that hadn't been there three minutes ago. It possessed the same mottled, silver-grey texture as the petrified wood, and the same jagged, bark-like silhouette. It stood eight feet tall, slightly hunched at the top, tapering down into the high grass. As Rory stared at it, her breath trapped in her throat, a pale bluebell at the base of the thirteenth stone trembled. The air was still dead, completely devoid of wind, yet the flower swayed violently, brushed aside by something shifting its weight. Then came the sound. It drifted from the opposite side of the clearing—a wet, rhythmic clicking, like two river stones being tapped together underwater. It was a lure, Rory realized with a sudden, icy clarity. A sound thrown across the glade to make her turn her back on the eastern boundary. She didn't turn. She kept her eyes locked on the thirteenth stone, even as the clicking grew louder behind her, accompanied now by a low, raspy inhalation that sounded terribly close to the back of her neck. Every instinct screamed at her to whirl around, to defend her blind spot, to run blindly for the gap in the southern oaks where Richmond Park waited. Instead, Rory took a slow step backward. Then another, angling her body so she could keep both the thirteenth stone and the center of the clearing in her field of view. The moment her boot shifted, the thirteenth stone moved. It didn't walk. It simply occupied a space two feet closer to the cairn than it had a fraction of a second before, happening in the micro-instant it took her eyes to refocus. From this angle, she could see that the grain of the wood near the top wasn't bark at all. It was a tangle of long, matted grey fibers hanging over a hollow dark space, and tucked inside that darkness were two points of dull, wet light, reflecting the crimson glow of the pendant clutched in her fist. It was mimicking the boundary. It was waiting for her to try to pass between the stones so it could close the gap. Rory’s fingers tightened around the hot silver chain. If she ran straight for the southern exit, it would cut her off before she made ten yards. The pocket realm obeyed rules of geometry and attention that favored the things native to it, not a twenty-five-year-old delivery driver from Cardiff. She needed a distraction. Not for its eyes—for whatever passed for its mind. Fae-touched things, Silas had once told her over a pint of flat bitter, were compulsive about transactions. About offerings. With her left hand, never breaking eye contact with the tall, bark-skinned shape, Rory reached back and fumbled with the zipper of the thermal bag on the cairn. The zipper teeth seemed to roar in the unnatural quiet, the sound echoing back from three different directions at once. She pulled out the plastic tub of herbal broth, popped the lid with her thumb, and flung the steaming, pungent liquid hard to her right, directly into the patch of winter aconites twenty feet away. The hot broth hissed as it hit the cold petals, releasing a sudden, violent cloud of star anise, ginger, and iron-rich steam into the dead air. The thirteen stone’s head snapped toward the scent with the dry, horrific *creak* of a splitting trunk. In the same heartbeat, the invisible presence behind her rushed past her right shoulder—a displacement of freezing air that smelled of rot and wet fur, lunging greedily toward the spilled offering. Rory didn't look to see what converged on the flowers. She bolted left. She didn't aim for the southern gap. She aimed straight for the gap between the third and fourth stones on the western side—an exit she had never used, praying to God it still let out somewhere in Richmond Park and not the bottom of the Thames. Her boots pounded the earth, the delayed echoes of her sprint rising into a deafening chorus behind her, as if a dozen people were chasing her through the dark. In the periphery of her vision, the other twelve stones seemed to bend inward, their long shadows reaching across the grass to catch at her heels. Something shrieked behind her—a sound like tearing sheet metal that vibrated right through her teeth—as the things in the glade realized the broth was a trick. The fog rose up to meet her. Rory lowered her shoulder, clutching the burning Heartstone to her chest, and threw herself between the ancient oaks. The thick, stagnant silence broke instantly. Wet bracken slapped against her shins. The cold, damp drizzle of a London November hit her face, carrying the smell of diesel exhaust and rotting autumn leaves. Rory hit the mud hard, skidding on her knees down a slight embankment before coming to a halt against the roots of a very normal, very solid English beech tree. She lay there for a long moment, chests heaving, listening to the distant, blessed roar of a jet descending toward Heathrow. Slowly, she rolled onto her back and looked up the embankment. Between the dark trunks of the park's trees, there was nothing but brambles and mist. The standing stones were gone. Beneath her fingers, the Heartstone Pendant had cooled to the temperature of her skin, its crimson glow fading back into a dull, sleepy ember. Rory let out a shaky breath, wiped the mud from her scarred wrist, and reached into her pocket for her keys. Yu-Fei was going to dock her pay for the thermal bag, and she couldn't find it in herself to care at all.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2038
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"lazily"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"completely"
count2
4
adverb"very"
count3
highlights
0"lazily"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"completely"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2038
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"oppressive"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"standard"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count2
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"sentinel"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"echoing"
count1
15
word"echoes"
count1
16
word"vibrated"
count1
17
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"oppressive"
2"warmth"
3"chill"
4"pulse"
5"standard"
6"whisper"
7"echoed"
8"sentinel"
9"scanning"
10"footsteps"
11"gloom"
12"trembled"
13"rhythmic"
14"echoing"
15"echoes"
16"vibrated"
17"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences150
matches(empty)
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences150
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences150
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords14
totalWords2031
ratio0.007
matches
0"Nothing."
1"clack"
2"Isolde?"
3"Just a trick of the half-light,"
4"Crunch. Swish. Crunch."
5"Crack."
6"creak"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount2030
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
Grove4
Rory18
London2
November2
Earth1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Silas2
Heartstone4
Pendant2
Hel1
Tuesday1
Evan1
Docks1
Carter1
Cardiff1
God1
Thames1
English1
Heathrow1
persons
0"Rory"
1"November"
2"Empress"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Silas"
5"Pendant"
6"Evan"
7"Carter"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
3"London"
4"Earth"
5"Tuesday"
6"Docks"
7"Cardiff"
8"God"
9"Thames"
10"Heathrow"
globalScore1
windowScore1
78.57% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences105
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like bone beneath her palm"
1"It was as if someone had poured clear resin over the entire glade"
2"sounded like a question; it had sounded li"
3"sounded like someone testing the shape of"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2031
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences150
matches
0"see that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean34.42
std23.78
cv0.691
sampleLengths
049
137
220
374
413
563
661
713
863
97
1041
1111
1215
1357
144
1526
162
1726
1845
1947
2021
2135
2215
2358
2411
2565
2621
279
2865
291
3025
313
3253
3313
3412
351
3653
3743
384
3947
4064
4131
429
4390
4423
4549
4632
4783
4826
4948
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences150
matches
0"being tapped"
1"were gone"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs294
matches
0"was stepping"
1"were tearing"
2"were spinning"
3"were speaking"
4"was shifting"
5"was walking"
6"was mimicking"
7"was waiting"
8"were chasing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences150
ratio0.053
matches
0"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round—foxgloves, bluebells, and pale winter aconites tangled together in defiance of any natural season—were still there, carpeting the clearing in the silver twilight."
1"It hadn't sounded like a question; it had sounded like someone testing the shape of the word on a tongue not built for it."
2"Brendan Carter had drilled observation skills into his daughter since she was seven years old; she had counted the stones the very first time she’d stumbled through the veil, and she had counted them every time since."
3"It drifted from the opposite side of the clearing—a wet, rhythmic clicking, like two river stones being tapped together underwater."
4"Not for its eyes—for whatever passed for its mind."
5"In the same heartbeat, the invisible presence behind her rushed past her right shoulder—a displacement of freezing air that smelled of rot and wet fur, lunging greedily toward the spilled offering."
6"She aimed straight for the gap between the third and fourth stones on the western side—an exit she had never used, praying to God it still let out somewhere in Richmond Park and not the bottom of the Thames."
7"Something shrieked behind her—a sound like tearing sheet metal that vibrated right through her teeth—as the things in the glade realized the broth was a trick."
70.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2056
adjectiveStacks5
stackExamples
0"usual faint, sullen glow."
1"small, crescent-shaped scar"
2"sudden, needle-sharp heat,"
3"frantic, arterial red light."
4"tall, bark-skinned shape,"
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.0325875486381323
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.012159533073929961
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences150
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences150
mean13.54
std10.1
cv0.746
sampleLengths
013
136
217
320
411
59
614
736
824
913
1018
1127
125
1313
1420
1513
163
1725
181
1912
204
2120
224
2321
2414
257
264
2724
2813
292
308
311
3215
3310
3415
3515
3617
374
384
3922
401
411
4225
431
4417
454
4624
473
4834
494
57.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3933333333333333
totalSentences150
uniqueOpeners59
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences126
matches
0"Usually, the air here smelled"
1"Instead of the oppressive, buzzing"
2"Then, three seconds too late,"
3"*Just a trick of the"
4"Just the ancient wood, gray"
5"Then came the sound."
6"Instead, Rory took a slow"
7"Then another, angling her body"
8"Slowly, she rolled onto her"
ratio0.071
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences126
matches
0"She stopped just inside the"
1"It was a routine drop-off,"
2"It was as if someone"
3"It was cold."
4"She checked her watch."
5"She took a step into"
6"Her heavy boots pressed down"
7"She tapped her boot against"
8"Her heart gave a single,"
9"She turned her head slowly,"
10"Her voice didn't carry."
11"It dropped dead the instant"
12"It was her own voice,"
13"It hadn't sounded like a"
14"She rubbed her thumb absently"
15"She snapped her gaze toward"
16"She turned her head."
17"She needed to leave the"
18"She reached the cairn, slipped"
19"It wasn't the gentle, pulsing"
ratio0.333
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences126
matches
0"The transition from Richmond Park"
1"She stopped just inside the"
2"Tonight, it smelled of copper"
3"Rory pulled her hand back,"
4"The Golden Empress insulated delivery"
5"It was a routine drop-off,"
6"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round-foxgloves,"
7"It was as if someone"
8"Rory unzipped her jacket a"
9"The Heartstone Pendant, roughly the"
10"It was cold."
11"She checked her watch."
12"The hands were spinning lazily"
13"The sooner she dropped the"
14"She took a step into"
15"The grass didn't rustle."
16"Her heavy boots pressed down"
17"She tapped her boot against"
18"Her heart gave a single,"
19"She turned her head slowly,"
ratio0.683
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences126
matches
0"If she stayed ten minutes,"
1"While she stared at the"
2"If she ran straight for"
ratio0.024
44.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences87
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"It was a routine drop-off, the kind that paid triple cash in hand and kept the rent paid on her flat above Silas’s bar."
1"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round—foxgloves, bluebells, and pale winter aconites tangled together in defiance of any natural season—were still there, carp…"
2"No faint pulse of warmth, which meant no Hel portals were tearing open nearby, though its deep crimson center held its usual faint, sullen glow."
3"It dropped dead the instant it left her lips, flat and muffled, as though she were speaking into a heavy wool coat."
4"Crunch.* It was maddeningly out of sync, creating the sickening illusion that someone was walking right on her heels, matching her stride for stride in the brui…"
5"It was a sudden, needle-sharp heat, as if someone had pressed the tip of a lit cigarette directly into the hollow of(her) throat."
6"She kept her eyes locked on the thirteenth stone, even as the clicking grew louder behind her, accompanied now by a low, raspy inhalation that sounded terribly …"
7"The pocket realm obeyed rules of geometry and attention that favored the things native to it, not a twenty-five-year-old delivery driver from Cardiff."
8"In the same heartbeat, the invisible presence behind her rushed past her right shoulder—a displacement of freezing air that smelled of rot and wet fur, lunging …"
9"Her boots pounded the earth, the delayed echoes of her sprint rising into a deafening chorus behind her, as if a dozen people were chasing her through the dark."
10"Something shrieked behind her—a sound like tearing sheet metal that vibrated right through her teeth—as the things in the glade realized the broth was a trick."
11"The cold, damp drizzle of a London November hit her face, carrying the smell of diesel exhaust and rotting autumn leaves."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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84.7294%