Run: 2026-11-11-01M7566AW19H8735D5DGM3PJWM

Run Details

Duration:
22.4s
Cost:
$0.002885
Provider:
Meta

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The gate to Richmond Park was already open. Rory stood for a moment with one hand on the cold iron, her delivery jacket still smelling faintly of sesame oil and cardboard from the last run for the Golden Empress, and looked down the empty road inside. No lights. No joggers climbing over the fence. No deer moving as pale shapes out in the dark. Only the path, slick with dew, and the low hills beyond it flattened by mist. She should have turned around. It would have been the sensible thing to do, and Rory Carter prided herself on sensible things, especially at night when she was alone. She had fled Cardiff for London to make sensible decisions. She had taken the flat above Silas's bar because the rent was low and the stairs locked. She did not do this sort of thing. But then the pendant moved against her throat, warm as a held coin, and she let go of the gate. It had started three nights before. She had been walking back across the park because the Tube was closed for works and the bus would have taken her past the restaurant again, and the Heartstone, which had sat quiet and deep crimson against her skin since the unknown benefactor left it in her locker at work, had pulsed. Not with light at first. With heat. A faint, steady throb that matched nothing in her body, and when she slowed, it slowed. When she stopped under the trees near the old stone circle, it had gone almost painfully hot through her shirt. She told herself it was a coincidence. She told herself a lot of things. She had a Pre-Law degree she barely used and a mind that liked to solve problems by taking them apart. Counting things helped. Timing things helped. But for three nights she had woken at the same hour with the pendant warm, and for three nights she had walked a little farther into the park before she made herself go home. Tonight she had brought a torch, though she had not switched it on. The pendant did not need it. The wildflowers were the first thing that made her stop properly. They lined both sides of the path where the grass gave out, too many of them and too bright. Primroses and bluebells and foxgloves, all open at once, their heads lifted in the damp air though there was no wind to move them. Their smell reached her then, sweet and green and a little rotten underneath, like apples left too long in a bag. It was summer, she knew it was high summer, but not this. Not all of them together. She remembered Eva once laughing at her for naming flowers on a walk in Cardiff, saying Rory could not help cataloguing the world. She Catalogued now without meaning to. White, yellow, purple. None of them should have been there in that density. None of them should have smelled so strong when the air was so still. Her hair stuck to the back of her neck. It was straight and shoulder-length and black, and it kept coming loose from behind her ears as she walked. Her eyes stung from the cold. She told herself the smell was just the park at night, that everything smelled stronger when she was paying attention. She walked on, because standing still felt worse than walking. The path narrowed where the oaks began. They were old trees, massive, their roots breaking up the earth like knuckles. Between them stood the stones. She had seen them in daylight once, on a delivery that cut through the park to save time, and she had thought they were just fallen and weathered and half swallowed by moss. At night they looked taller. The boundary, she thought. That was what the old leaflets called them. Ancient stones marking where Richmond stopped being Richmond. She kept to the middle of the path and did not touch them. The quiet deepened as she passed the first stone. It was not a normal quiet. In London, quiet had layers. Traffic from the road. A fox somewhere. Her own breathing, too loud. Here the layers peeled away one by one until there was only her shoes on the wet path and the faint tick of her watch, and then, after the second stone, even the tick seemed to stop, though her watch was still moving when she glanced at it. She glanced again because something about the silence was making her ears pressure. 11:47. She had checked when she came through the gate. It had been 11:47 then, too. She checked a third time, holding the phone up so the light washed her face white, and the time had not changed. She pressed the button to wake it properly. 11:47. No signal. No bars. Just the time, held. "Right," she said out loud, and her voice came back to her a fraction too late, flat and close. "Right. That's fine. That's the Grove, isn't it?" She had read what she could find and then stopped reading, because reading felt like admitting she believed it. Time moves differently in the Fae Grove. An hour inside could be minutes outside. Or days. The pocket between Earth and the Fae realm, Isolde's grove, where the standing stones held the edge. She had written it down in her notes app in her usual neat way, as if it were a fact for an essay. Now the phone in her hand felt cold in a way it had not before, and she slipped it into her pocket before the light bothered her eyes again. The pendant was warmer. It pulsed against the hollow of her throat, deep crimson through the fabric of her jacket, a faint glow she could see reflected in the silver chain when she looked down. Thumbnail-sized, no bigger. It should not have been able to give off that much heat. It should not have been able to beat like that, slow and deliberate, as if it were counting. She lifted a hand to it without thinking and found her left wrist bare but tingling, the small crescent-shaped scar from the childhood accident itching under her sleeve. Her scar always itched when she was cold. She was not cold. She tried the cool-headed thing. She tried labelling. She was in Richmond Park at night. She was tired after a double shift. She had been looking for a Hel portal because a stone in her hand told her one was near, and that was already a stupid sentence. Her mind, which usually solved things in clever sideways leaps, offered her nothing useful except the fact that her bright blue eyes were watering in the damp and making the path swim. Something moved between the stones. She would not have sworn to it later. It was at the edge of her vision, to the left, and when her eyes turned toward it there was only oak bark and shadow and the white shape of a primrose. But her body had already reacted before her head caught up. Her shoulders rose. Her breath stopped. For a second her heart tried to climb into her throat to join the pendant there, and she could feel both beats, hers fast and light, the stone's slow and hot. She kept walking because walking was a decision. She needed decisions. The second time it happened, it was on the right. A tallness between the trees, upright in a way that made her think of a person standing very still and watching, but when she blinked it was gone and the path was empty. Deer did that. She knew deer did that. Deer stood in the treeline at night and did not move until you were close. But she could not hear deer. She could not hear anything breathing except herself, and that was the worst part. A silence that complete stopped feeling like silence and started feeling like holding. She stopped to prove it to herself. She stopped dead in the middle of the path, planted her feet, and listened, and behind her, somewhere far enough that it should have meant nothing, a twig snapped. It was a clean sound. Dry wood under weight. Not hers. She did not turn at once. If she turned at once she would look frightened, and she did not want to be frightened, and some childish part of her still believed that not looking frightened would keep her safe. She counted to five, the way she had counted to five when Evan used to follow her home from the library in Cardiff and wait outside her house to talk. She knew what it felt like to be followed. She knew the particular heaviness of knowing someone was behind you and choosing to act as if they were not. This was not that. This was different in a way that took her breath away, because Evan had always wanted to be seen. Whoever this was, if anyone was there at all, did not. She turned. The path behind her was empty. The stones stood in a rough line. The wildflowers glowed a little too white. At the far end, where she had come from, the path bent out of sight, and she could not tell whether she had walked a hundred yards or a mile. She should have marked her route. She should have tied something to a branch. That was the clever thinking, arriving too late. "Hello?" she called. Her voice cracked on the second syllable. She cleared her throat and tried again, quieter, as if volume were the issue. "Hello?" An echo came back from between the oaks, but it was not her voice. It was a single syllable, made of air, patient in a way that made her skin lift. Not a word. A sound that had shaped itself around the shape of her word. She heard it and felt instantly, with a certainty that had nothing to do with logic, that the clearing had listened, and that listening had been the point. She took a step backward and her shoulder hit a stone. The stone was warm. All the stones had to be cold at night. She knew that. She pressed her palm flat against it for balance and the warmth went up her arm to her elbow, and through her sleeve to the scar on her wrist, and she pulled her hand away like she had touched something alive. The pendant throbbed harder. Ahead of her, where the path opened, the ground dipped. The wildflowers thickened there, growing in a perfect ring, bluebells and primroses and foxgloves crowded together in a tangle that had no gaps. In the centre of the ring the air looked different. It shivered without moving, a distortion like heat over tarmac in summer, though the night was cold enough that her breath fogged. She could see the fog. She could see her own breath, small and white, and then she could see another breath, to the side of hers, slow and steady, where no one was standing. That was when she understood she was not alone. It was not a sudden understanding. It arrived the way cold arrives in water, from the edges in. First the wrong sounds. Then the movement she could not quite catch. Then the second breath, there and then not there, and the knowledge settled over her with a quiet finality that made her hands go numb. Something had been walking with her for some time, keeping its distance by exactly the length of her hearing, matching her pace when she walked and stopping when she stopped. The twig had not been a warning. It had been a mistake. It had not wanted her to know. She did the clever thing then, or the thing that felt like cleverness. She walked, but she walked sideways, edging back toward the stones, toward the gate, toward the world where time had a number and her phone would light up. She kept her eyes forward so she would not see if it was in front of her, and she listened sideways, if that was a thing a person could do. Her shoes made no sound on the dew now. Or she made no sound. She could not tell. At the third stone, the path was not where it had been. She knew it because of the carving. There was a mark cut into the bark of the oak beside it, a shallow spiral she had noticed on the way in and thought about photographing for Eva later. It was on her left now, when it should have been on her right. She must have turned around without feeling it. She must have walked in a circle. Circles were easy in dark woods. She told herself that while her pulse hammered in her ears and the pendant burned a hole through her jacket and straight into her skin. She turned again, deliberately, and walked the other way, fast now, not running, because running would make noise and noise would give her away. She counted stones. One. Two. Three. The spiral oak. One. Two. Three. The spiral oak again, closer this time, its roots black and wet. The wildflowers brushed her ankles and left pollen on her jeans, yellow smears she could see in the pendant's glow. She had not seen the glow before. She saw it now, crimson light pulsing out from under her collar, faint and inner, lighting the undersides of leaves as she passed. "Stop," she whispered. Not to it. To herself. "Stop and think, Rory. Think." Out-of-the-box thinking. That was what her tutors had said. That was what Eva said when Rory solved a problem by coming at it from the side nobody else had noticed. So she came at it from the side. If time moved differently here, then her phone was useless and her watch was useless and she could walk for a year and come out tomorrow. If the Grove was a pocket, then the stones were the seam and she needed the seam. If the pendant was warm near a Hel portal, then warm meant close, and close meant she was already almost there, and she had come here for a reason, whatever reason she had managed to talk herself into at the gate. She had not come to be watched. She stepped into the ring of wildflowers. They were taller inside the ring. They came up to her knees, their stems pale and impossibly straight. Their smell burdaftarنيed her, sweet to the point of nausea, and under it was something else, something metallic, like the smell of a coin held in a closed fist. The pendant was so hot now she could feel it through her skin, through the chain against her neck, a second heartbeat that drowned out her own. The air in the centre was thick. It pressed on her eardrums. It made her blue eyes water until the trees blurred into long black smears. She saw it then. Not clearly. She saw the place where the air was thicker, between two stones at the far side of the clearing, where the shimmer was strongest. Something stood there, or the absence of something stood there, a tall shape that her brain refused to finish because finishing it would mean knowing what kind of tallness it was. It did not move. It had not moved the whole time. It was waiting in the patient way of things that have waited a very long time and can wait longer. Her foot came down on her own shadow and her shadow stayed in the ring behind her. She understood that, too, with the same terrible quiet. Her shadow lay long across the wildflowers toward the stones, though there was no light behind her to cast it and the pendant at her throat cast no shadow at all. And in the shadow, not quite in hers, there was another shape, stretched thin and reaching, as if something lay down beside her in the grass and raised a head to look at her. She did not scream. She had spent too long learning not to give people that satisfaction. She took one more step forward, into the centre of the ring, because forward was the only direction that had ever got her out of anything, and the pendant flared so bright she could see her own hands lit red from within, the crescent scar on her left wrist standing out white against the glow. Behind her, in a voice that was almost exactly her own, something said her name. It said it from inside the ring, and from outside it, at the same time, with the half-second delay she had heard before. Not loud. Not frightening in the way a shout would have been frightening. Just clear, and close, and interested. "Rory." She did not turn. She kept her eyes on the tall thickness of air between the stones, and she felt the wildflowers part around her ankles though she had not moved, and she understood, finally, in the cool and intelligent part of her mind that had catalogued every flower and every stone and every impossible minute, that she had not come to find the portal. The portal had come, or the thing that lived by it had, to find the warmth in her hand. And it had been following her the whole way in.
created_at"2026-11-11T11:34:19.271Z" 11/11/2026, 11:34:19 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2922
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2922
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"throb"
count1
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count2
7
word"throbbed"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"throb"
2"silence"
3"could feel"
4"weight"
5"echo"
6"warmth"
7"throbbed"
8"perfect"
9"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences227
matches(empty)
98.80% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences227
filterMatches
0"watch, watch"
1"think"
2"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences231
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0.004
matches
0"Their smell burdaftarنيed her, sweet to the point of nausea, and under it was something else, something metallic, like the smell of a coin held in a closed fist."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2922
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount2904
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.14
worstName"Richmond"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Richmond4
Park2
Golden1
Empress1
Rory4
Carter1
Cardiff3
London2
Silas1
Tube1
Heartstone1
Pre-Law1
Eva3
Catalogued1
Fae2
Grove2
Earth1
Isolde1
Hel2
Evan2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carter"
2"Silas"
3"Eva"
4"Isolde"
5"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
4"Fae"
5"Grove"
6"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
72.36% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences161
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"felt like admitting she believed it"
1"felt like to be followed"
2"not quite catch"
3"felt like cleverness"
4"not quite in hers, there was another shape, stretched thin and reaching, as if something lay down beside her in the grass and raised a head to look at her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2922
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences231
matches
0"off that much"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean53.13
std42.26
cv0.795
sampleLengths
08
171
264
320
4101
593
611
7137
854
910
1096
119
1271
1368
1427
15104
164
17104
1880
195
2088
2111
2299
237
2429
25143
262
2772
283
2921
301
3174
3268
334
3499
359
36104
3789
3812
3997
4098
4113
42129
437
44100
4592
4617
4774
4871
4915
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences227
matches
0"was closed"
1"was tired"
2"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs465
matches
0"was still moving"
1"was making"
2"were counting"
3"were watering"
4"was standing"
5"was waiting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences231
ratio0
matches(empty)
92.95% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2913
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount120
adverbRatio0.0411946446961895
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.006865774116031583
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences231
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences231
mean12.65
std10.97
cv0.867
sampleLengths
08
138
22
36
410
515
65
724
810
917
108
1120
126
1352
145
152
1616
1720
187
197
2020
213
223
2334
2413
256
2611
2719
2824
2921
3012
315
3223
336
343
3510
3614
379
3819
396
4020
4110
427
4313
445
4533
465
474
488
498
25.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats55
diversityRatio0.24890829694323144
totalSentences229
uniqueOpeners57
80.91% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences206
matches
0"Only the path, slick with"
1"Just the time, held."
2"Then the movement she could"
3"Then the second breath, there"
4"Just clear, and close, and"
ratio0.024
4.47% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount111
totalSentences206
matches
0"She should have turned around."
1"It would have been the"
2"She had fled Cardiff for"
3"She had taken the flat"
4"She did not do this"
5"It had started three nights"
6"She had been walking back"
7"She told herself it was"
8"She told herself a lot"
9"She had a Pre-Law degree"
10"They lined both sides of"
11"Their smell reached her then,"
12"It was summer, she knew"
13"She remembered Eva once laughing"
14"She Catalogued now without meaning"
15"Her hair stuck to the"
16"It was straight and shoulder-length"
17"Her eyes stung from the"
18"She told herself the smell"
19"She walked on, because standing"
ratio0.539
69.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount161
totalSentences206
matches
0"The gate to Richmond Park"
1"Rory stood for a moment"
2"She should have turned around."
3"It would have been the"
4"She had fled Cardiff for"
5"She had taken the flat"
6"She did not do this"
7"It had started three nights"
8"She had been walking back"
9"A faint, steady throb that"
10"She told herself it was"
11"She told herself a lot"
12"She had a Pre-Law degree"
13"Tonight she had brought a"
14"The pendant did not need"
15"The wildflowers were the first"
16"They lined both sides of"
17"Their smell reached her then,"
18"It was summer, she knew"
19"She remembered Eva once laughing"
ratio0.782
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences206
matches
0"Now the phone in her"
1"If she turned at once"
2"Whoever this was, if anyone"
3"If time moved differently here,"
4"If the Grove was a"
5"If the pendant was warm"
ratio0.029
52.70% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences103
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She had been walking back across the park because the Tube was closed for works and the bus would have taken her past the restaurant again, and the Heartstone, …"
1"She had written it down in her notes app in her usual neat way, as if it were a fact for an essay."
2"It should not have been able to beat like that, slow and deliberate, as if it were counting."
3"A tallness between the trees, upright in a way that made her think of a person standing very still and watching, but when she blinked it was gone and the path w…"
4"She knew the particular heaviness of knowing someone was behind you and choosing to act as if they were not."
5"It was a single syllable, made of air, patient in a way that made her skin lift."
6"The wildflowers thickened there, growing in a perfect ring, bluebells and primroses and foxgloves crowded together in a tangle that had no gaps."
7"Then the second breath, there and then not there, and the knowledge settled over her with a quiet finality that made her hands go numb."
8"The pendant was so hot now she could feel it through her skin, through the chain against her neck, a second heartbeat that drowned out her own."
9"It was waiting in the patient way of things that have waited a very long time and can wait longer."
10"And in the shadow, not quite in hers, there was another shape, stretched thin and reaching, as if something lay down beside her in the grass and raised a head t…"
11"She took one more step forward, into the centre of the ring, because forward was the only direction that had ever got her out of anything, and the pendant flare…"
12"She kept her eyes on the tall thickness of air between the stones, and she felt the wildflowers part around her ankles though she had not moved, and she underst…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
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leniency0.857
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.286
85.7915%