Run: 2026-11-11-01M75PKKX6733A1H1WY1KD99Y5

Run Details

Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.043592
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain in Soho had a way of turning neon into oil paint, smearing the emerald glow of The Raven’s Nest across the wet tarmac of the narrow street outside. Rory pushed through the heavy timber door, bringing a gust of damp October air and the faint, clinging scent of fried garlic and ginger from Yu-Fei Cheung’s kitchen with her. She shook out her waterproof jacket, droplets pattering against the worn floorboards, and raked her fingers through her straight, shoulder-length black hair. Behind the mahogany counter, Silas didn’t look up from the glass he was polishing, though Rory knew he had clocked her entrance three seconds before her hand touched the brass latch. He had clocked everything since Prague, and probably for thirty years before it. The bar was quiet for a Thursday—just an elderly couple murmuring beneath a framed topographical map of the Balkans, and a trio of thirty-somethings in City tailoring huddled near the bookshelf that concealed the latch to Silas’s private room. "Late order to Wardour Street," Rory said, hooking her thumb toward the rain-slicked window as she approached the bar. "Lift was broken. Six flights." Silas’s hazel eyes lifted, sharp and unhurried above his neatly trimmed, grey-streaked auburn beard. He set the tumbler down; the silver signet ring on his right hand gave its familiar, muted click against the wood. "Character-building," he murmured, shifting his weight off his left leg to ease the perpetual stiffness in his knee. He reached beneath the counter and drew out a clean mug, tilting his head toward the kettle. "Tea, or something with teeth?" "Tea. My hands are still cold." She pulled off her cycling gloves, stuffing them into the deep pockets of her coat, and rubbed at the small, pale crescent scar on her left wrist—an unconscious habit whenever the damp settled into her bones. Upstairs, her flat would be chilly until the ancient radiator clanked to life, smelling faintly of old paper and cedarwood rising through the floorboards from the pub below. She was already calculating how long a hot shower would take when one of the figures near the bookshelf laughed, turned toward the bar to order another round, and froze. Rory felt the stare before she met it. Living in London after Evan had rewired her peripheral vision; she noticed stagnation in a crowd the way an animal noticed a break in the wind. She turned her head slowly, her bright blue eyes narrowing against the amber gloom of the wall sconces. The man standing three paces away wore a charcoal overcoat draped over his arm and a crisp white shirt open at the collar. He had the soft, slightly overworked pallor of someone who spent fourteen hours a day reading case law under fluorescent tubes. It took Rory half a beat to strip away three years of expensive haircuts and courtroom posture to find the boy who used to share her battered copy of *Anson’s Law of Contract* in the Cardiff University library. "Aurora?" Nobody in Soho called her that. Even the syllables felt foreign, like an expensive coat she had left on a train years ago. Rory didn’t flinch. She kept her spine loose, her expression settling into polite, cool neutrality. "Hello, Toby." Toby Vaughn blinked as if checking whether the dim lighting and the monochrome photographs of post-war Berlin lining the walls were playing tricks on him. Slowly, he stepped closer, glancing down at her mud-flecked boots, the faded canvas trousers, the cheap waterproof jacket still beaded with rain, and the insulated red strap of the Golden Empress courier bag resting by her hip. "Christ, it *is* you," he breathed, the faintest trace of the Vale of Glamorgan warming his clipped London vowels. "I thought—we all thought you’d gone to Dublin. Somebody said you’d gone to read at Trinity with your dad’s cousins." "Somebody had an active imagination," Rory said evenly. Behind the bar, Silas moved with his slight, measured limp toward the boiling kettle, seemingly absorbed in steeping peppermint leaves, though Rory knew he was listening to every inflection. "Can I—are you having a drink? Have you got five minutes?" Toby glanced back at his colleagues by the bookshelf; they were engrossed in an argument over their phones, oblivious. "Please. Just five minutes." Rory hesitated. The stairs to her flat were ten feet away behind a staff door. One polite refusal and she could vanish back into the brickwork of Soho, leaving Aurora Carter dead and buried in South Wales where she belonged. Yet looking at Toby’s earnest, bewildered face stirred a strange, clinical curiosity in her—like pressing a bruise to see if the nerve endings underneath had finally gone numb. "Five minutes," she agreed, gesturing toward a tiny corner table wedged beneath an eighteenth-century nautical chart of the Irish Sea. Silas set a steaming mug in front of her as she passed, alongside a fresh measure of single malt for Toby that Toby hadn’t yet asked for. "On the house," Silas said quietly, his gaze sweeping over Toby once—weighing his shoes, his watch, his posture, filing him away in half a second—before retreating to the far end of the bar to give them space. They sat. Up close, time showed itself in smaller increments. Toby had fine lines bracketing his mouth and an ink stain smudged near the cuff of his shirt. He looked successful, tired, and entirely recognizable. Rory wondered what he saw when he looked across the scarred oak table at her. "Pupillage?" she asked, nodding at his suit. "Tenant, actually. Just last month," Toby said, then winced slightly, as if realizing how it sounded. "Chancery Lane. Commercial disputes, mostly. Your father would’ve hated it—all spreadsheets, zero theatre." He paused, turning the heavy whisky glass between his palms. "I saw Brendan in Swansea last spring. At a circuit dinner." Something cold and precise clicked into place behind Rory’s ribs. She wrapped both hands around her mug, letting the ceramic burn her palms. "Did you." "I didn't ask about you," Toby said quickly. "We knew better by then. When you dropped out before Easter term, people talked, obviously. You had the highest marks in our year, Aurora. Professor Davies practically went into mourning. Then Eva cleared out your room in Cathays, and you didn't answer texts, and..." He trailed off, his eyes dropping to the crescent scar peeking out from her damp cuff. "We saw Evan a few weeks after you left. Drinking in the Taf with a split lip and a nasty temper. A few of us started putting pieces together. Far too late, obviously." The silence between them thickened, buffered by the low hum of rain against the front window and the distant clatter of glassware. "It wasn't your puzzle to put together," Rory said. Her voice was remarkably steady. Three years ago, the mere mention of Evan’s name had made her throat close up until the room swam; two years ago, when Eva had met her off the coach at Victoria Station with fifty quid and a spare mattress, it had made her shake with rage. Now, it felt like reading a police report about a stranger. "Wasn't it?" Toby’s laugh was brittle, devoid of humor. "We sat next to you in tutorials four days a week. You stopped wearing short sleeves in October. You stopped coming to the pub on Fridays. You started apologizing whenever someone dropped a book too loudly. And what did I do? Borrowed your tort notes and complained about my moot partner." He looked up, the guilt in his eyes raw and unvarnished, preserved in amber since they were twenty-two. "I’m sorry, Aurora. Truly. We were kids playing at being adults, and we were blind." Rory studied him. In Cardiff, she had thought of Toby as older than her in all the ways that mattered—assured, unbothered, effortlessly slotted into the track her barrister father and schoolteacher mother had laid out for her since birth. Now, sitting in the shadows of The Raven’s Nest, she felt decades older than him. Toby still lived in a world where bad things were anomalies, failures of protocol that could be apologized for over good Scotch. He didn't know what it was to rebuild a person from scrap metal and borrowed time. "I go by Rory now," she said gently. Toby blinked, absorbing the correction like a blow he knew he deserved. "Rory," he repeated, testing the shape of it. "Right. Eva always called you that, didn't she?" "She did." His gaze drifted again to the red insulated bag beside her chair, and she watched him try, and fail, to hide his dismay. To Toby Vaughn of Chancery Lane, Aurora Carter had been destined for silk robes and High Court benches, sharp-tongued and luminous. Seeing her hauling takeaway boxes through Soho puddles looked like tragedy—the wreckage Evan had left behind. And for a fleeting, treacherous second, Rory felt the phantom ache of that lost trajectory. Not the law itself—she had only ever endured Pre-Law to keep peace at her father’s Sunday dinner table—but the ease of that girl. Aurora Carter had believed that intelligence was a shield, that arguments were won on merit, that doors opened simply because you knocked politely. Aurora hadn't known how to spot a tail in a crowded Underground station, or how to read the tension in a man’s shoulders before he threw a punch, or how to talk her way past a locked service entrance in three minutes flat. "You don't need to look like someone died, Toby," Rory said, a faint, wry smile touching the corner of her mouth. "Yu-Fei pays cash on Fridays and feeds me enough roast duck to survive the winter. I have my own flat. Nobody tells me what to wear or when to come home." "Are you happy, though?" The question slipped out of him with sudden, disarming candor. "You were brilliant. You could have been anything." Rory glanced past his shoulder. At the bar, Silas had just intercepted a sleek, grey-haired woman in a trench coat who hadn't ordered a drink—a quiet brush of hands, a folded slip of paper vanishing beneath Silas’s signet-ringed fingers before the woman turned toward the bookshelf at the back. Most patrons never noticed the slight draft when the false shelving swung inward. Rory noticed. More than that, half the time now, she knew what was written on the paper. She had found a strange, thrilling sanctuary in margins Toby didn't even know existed, putting her quick, sideways mind to puzzles no textbook in Cardiff had ever dared print. Yet she couldn't tell him any of that. Between who she had been and who she was becoming lay a chasm no five-minute drink could bridge. "I'm free," Rory answered simply. "It turns out that's harder to come by than a First." At the front of the bar, one of Toby’s colleagues buttoned his raincoat and called out, "Vaughn! Uber’s two minutes away, mate, come on!" Toby flinched, pulled abruptly back to his neat, scheduled world. He stood up, leaving half the whisky untouched, and reached awkwardly into his breast pocket, pulling out an embossed cream business card. He set it beside her mug. The cardstock gleamed starkly white against the dark, ring-stained wood. "My mobile’s on the back," he said softly. "Not for—I don't mean if you need help, though obviously if you ever did... Just coffee. Lunch. Whenever you want. I won't tell anyone back home I saw you. Not your parents, not anyone." "Thank you, Toby," Rory said. She didn't touch the card, and they both knew she wouldn't call. Still, she stood to meet him at eye level, letting him see that she wasn't small, wasn't broken, wasn't hiding. "Congratulations on the tenancy. Really. You earned it." He offered a tight, sad smile, gave a small nod that might have been a bow in another century, and walked back to his friends. When the front door swung open, the green neon sign bled across his tailored shoulders for an instant, turning the rain into emerald sparks before the heavy wood thudded shut behind him. Rory stood by the corner table for a long moment. Finally, she picked up the business card between two fingers, walked back to the bar, and set it down next to the drip tray. Silas limped over, picking up the card to examine the neat black lettering before glancing at her over the rim of his glasses. "Ghost?" "Relic," Rory corrected, taking a long swallow of her cooling peppermint tea. Her wrist throbbed faintly beneath its pale crescent scar, an echo of an old winter, already fading. "Put it in the shredder when you lock up, Si?" Silas studied her face—cool, composed, bright-eyed in the amber gloom—and gave a single, approving nod. The silver signet ring caught the light as he slipped the card beneath the counter, erasing Aurora Carter from the room once more. "Go upstairs and get dry, Rory," he said quietly. "You look half-drowned." She picked up her damp gloves, slung her empty delivery bag over one shoulder, and headed for the stairs, leaving the maps of old, conquered countries behind her in the dark.
created_at"2026-11-11T16:21:11.729Z" 11/11/2026, 4:21:11 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount8
adverbTags
0"Rory said evenly [evenly]"
1"Toby glanced back [back]"
2"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
3"Toby said quickly [quickly]"
4"she said gently [gently]"
5"Rory answered simply [simply]"
6"he said softly [softly]"
7"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.522
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
79.63% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2209
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"truly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
6
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"quickly"
3"truly"
4"gently"
5"softly"
6"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2209
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count2
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"fleeting"
count1
8
word"treacherous"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"sanctuary"
count1
11
word"throbbed"
count1
12
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"calculating"
3"gloom"
4"measured"
5"silence"
6"silk"
7"fleeting"
8"treacherous"
9"tension"
10"sanctuary"
11"throbbed"
12"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences102
matches
0"e with rage"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences102
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen70
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords5
totalWords2195
ratio0.002
matches
0"Anson’s Law of Contract"
1"is"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions105
wordCount1772
uniqueNames41
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Toby"
discoveredNames
Soho4
Raven2
Nest2
October1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Silas10
Rory21
Prague1
Thursday1
Balkans1
City1
London2
Evan3
Law2
Cardiff3
University1
Vaughn2
Berlin1
Golden1
Empress1
Vale1
Glamorgan1
Aurora5
Carter4
South1
Wales1
Toby17
Irish1
Sea1
Eva1
Victoria1
Station1
Scotch1
Chancery1
Lane1
High1
Court1
Pre-Law1
Sunday1
Underground1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Cheung"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Vaughn"
7"Glamorgan"
8"Aurora"
9"Carter"
10"Toby"
11"Sea"
12"Eva"
13"Victoria"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"University"
5"Berlin"
6"South"
7"Wales"
8"Chancery"
9"Lane"
globalScore0.907
windowScore0.667
6.32% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if checking whether the dim lighting and the monochrome photographs of post-war Berlin lining the walls were playing tricks on him"
1"oiling kettle, seemingly absorbed in steepin"
2"as if realizing how it sounded"
3"felt like reading a police report about"
4"looked like tragedy—the wreckage Evan had"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2195
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences123
matches
0"believed that intelligence"
1"see that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean45.73
std29.22
cv0.639
sampleLengths
082
183
224
375
46
594
652
782
81
923
1017
1162
1239
1337
1434
1568
1620
1764
1850
197
2050
2125
22101
2322
2472
2593
2692
278
2828
292
3060
31104
3252
3322
34108
3526
3616
3724
3848
3942
4045
4157
4234
4324
4439
4538
4612
4731
91.50% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences102
matches
0"were engrossed"
1"been destined"
2"were won"
3"was written"
84.26% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs288
matches
0"was polishing"
1"was already calculating"
2"were playing"
3"was listening"
4"wasn't hiding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences123
ratio0.106
matches
0"The bar was quiet for a Thursday—just an elderly couple murmuring beneath a framed topographical map of the Balkans, and a trio of thirty-somethings in City tailoring huddled near the bookshelf that concealed the latch to Silas’s private room."
1"He set the tumbler down; the silver signet ring on his right hand gave its familiar, muted click against the wood."
2"She pulled off her cycling gloves, stuffing them into the deep pockets of her coat, and rubbed at the small, pale crescent scar on her left wrist—an unconscious habit whenever the damp settled into her bones."
3"Living in London after Evan had rewired her peripheral vision; she noticed stagnation in a crowd the way an animal noticed a break in the wind."
4"\"Can I—are you having a drink? Have you got five minutes?\" Toby glanced back at his colleagues by the bookshelf; they were engrossed in an argument over their phones, oblivious."
5"Yet looking at Toby’s earnest, bewildered face stirred a strange, clinical curiosity in her—like pressing a bruise to see if the nerve endings underneath had finally gone numb."
6"\"On the house,\" Silas said quietly, his gaze sweeping over Toby once—weighing his shoes, his watch, his posture, filing him away in half a second—before retreating to the far end of the bar to give them space."
7"Three years ago, the mere mention of Evan’s name had made her throat close up until the room swam; two years ago, when Eva had met her off the coach at Victoria Station with fifty quid and a spare mattress, it had made her shake with rage."
8"In Cardiff, she had thought of Toby as older than her in all the ways that mattered—assured, unbothered, effortlessly slotted into the track her barrister father and schoolteacher mother had laid out for her since birth."
9"Seeing her hauling takeaway boxes through Soho puddles looked like tragedy—the wreckage Evan had left behind."
10"Not the law itself—she had only ever endured Pre-Law to keep peace at her father’s Sunday dinner table—but the ease of that girl."
11"At the bar, Silas had just intercepted a sleek, grey-haired woman in a trench coat who hadn't ordered a drink—a quiet brush of hands, a folded slip of paper vanishing beneath Silas’s signet-ringed fingers before the woman turned toward the bookshelf at the back."
12"Silas studied her face—cool, composed, bright-eyed in the amber gloom—and gave a single, approving nod."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1799
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sleek, grey-haired woman"
adverbCount56
adverbRatio0.0311284046692607
lyAdverbCount29
lyAdverbRatio0.016120066703724293
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean17.85
std12.23
cv0.685
sampleLengths
030
130
222
331
413
539
619
75
814
921
1018
1117
125
136
1436
1528
1630
178
1826
1918
2023
2121
2238
231
246
2517
263
2712
282
2925
3037
3119
3220
338
3429
3530
364
372
3813
3925
4028
4120
4227
4337
442
458
4618
477
4815
497
83.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5203252032520326
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences97
matches
0"Even the syllables felt foreign,"
1"Slowly, he stepped closer, glancing"
2"More than that, half the"
3"Finally, she picked up the"
ratio0.041
83.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences97
matches
0"She shook out her waterproof"
1"He had clocked everything since"
2"He set the tumbler down;"
3"he murmured, shifting his weight"
4"He reached beneath the counter"
5"She pulled off her cycling"
6"She was already calculating how"
7"She turned her head slowly,"
8"He had the soft, slightly"
9"It took Rory half a"
10"She kept her spine loose,"
11"he breathed, the faintest trace"
12"she agreed, gesturing toward a"
13"He looked successful, tired, and"
14"she asked, nodding at his"
15"He paused, turning the heavy"
16"She wrapped both hands around"
17"He trailed off, his eyes"
18"Her voice was remarkably steady."
19"He looked up, the guilt"
ratio0.34
94.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences97
matches
0"The rain in Soho had"
1"Rory pushed through the heavy"
2"She shook out her waterproof"
3"He had clocked everything since"
4"The bar was quiet for"
5"Rory said, hooking her thumb"
6"Silas’s hazel eyes lifted, sharp"
7"He set the tumbler down;"
8"he murmured, shifting his weight"
9"He reached beneath the counter"
10"She pulled off her cycling"
11"She was already calculating how"
12"Rory felt the stare before"
13"She turned her head slowly,"
14"The man standing three paces"
15"He had the soft, slightly"
16"It took Rory half a"
17"Nobody in Soho called her"
18"Rory didn’t flinch."
19"She kept her spine loose,"
ratio0.732
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences97
matches
0"Now, it felt like reading"
1"Now, sitting in the shadows"
2"To Toby Vaughn of Chancery"
ratio0.031
64.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The bar was quiet for a Thursday—just an elderly couple murmuring beneath a framed topographical map of the Balkans, and a trio of thirty-somethings in City tai…"
1"He had the soft, slightly overworked pallor of someone who spent fourteen hours a day reading case law under fluorescent tubes."
2"It took Rory half a beat to strip away three years of expensive haircuts and courtroom posture to find the boy who used to share her battered copy of *Anson’s L…"
3"Toby Vaughn blinked as if checking whether the dim lighting and the monochrome photographs of post-war Berlin lining the walls were playing tricks on him."
4"In Cardiff, she had thought of Toby as older than her in all the ways that mattered—assured, unbothered, effortlessly slotted into the track her barrister fathe…"
5"Toby still lived in a world where bad things were anomalies, failures of protocol that could be apologized for over good Scotch."
6"At the bar, Silas had just intercepted a sleek, grey-haired woman in a trench coat who hadn't ordered a drink—a quiet brush of hands, a folded slip of paper van…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Toby glanced back, oblivious"
41.30% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"he breathed (breathe)"
2"she agreed (agree)"
3"he repeated (repeat)"
4"Rory corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.391
leniency0.783
rawRatio0.278
effectiveRatio0.217
81.9378%