Run: 2026-11-11-01M75PN607EC7AFMHAA893ED07

Run Details

Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.050698
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory stepped between the two northernmost monoliths, and the damp London chill vanished between one breath and the next. Behind her, Richmond Park lay steeped in November drizzle, the distant hum of traffic along the A3 a low, familiar vibration in the soles of her boots. Ahead of her lay Isolde’s grove. Even in the pitch dark past midnight, she knew the exact second she crossed the boundary. The ancient oak standing stones—petrified trunks turned over millennia into jagged grey rock—snapped the city noise off like a severed wire. Warm, heavy air closed around her face, thick with the scent of crushed clover and night-blooming phlox. Rory stopped just inside the circle, letting her bright blue eyes adjust to the gloom. She tucked a curtain of straight, shoulder-length black hair behind her ear and listened. Usually, the Fae Grove hummed. The one other time she had been dragged here, the pocket realm had felt like standing too close to an old television screen—static lifting the fine hairs on her arms, unseen wings whirring in the undergrowth, the air dizzying and bright even under cloud cover. Tonight, the clearing was dead still. Wildflowers brushed the hems of her jeans, blooming out of season as they always did here, pale corollas wide open beneath a moonless sky. Yet not a single stem swayed. There was no breeze, no chirp of crickets, no rustle of field mice threading the roots. The silence pressed against her eardrums with the dense, cottony weight of an underground vault. Rory lifted her left wrist, her thumb brushing the small crescent-shaped scar near the joint as she angled her cheap digital watch toward her face. *00:14.* The colon between the numbers blinked twice, stuttered, and froze solid. She frowned, lowering her arm. Time never behaved itself inside the Grove; Silas had warned her a dozen times that twenty minutes among the standing stones could spit you back into London three minutes later or cost you half a week. If she lost three days, Yu-Fei would replace her at the Golden Empress before she even made it back to her scooter outside the pedestrian gate, and rent on the flat above Silas’ bar wasn't going to pay itself. Still, she had expected time to stretch or slip, not seize up entirely. She reached into the pocket of her waterproof jacket and touched the square of stiff cream paper she’d found wedged into her insulated delivery bag at the end of her shift. No signature. Just four words in cramped black ink: *Isolde’s Grove. Midnight. Heartstone.* Her father—thirty years a Cardiff barrister with little patience for anything that couldn't be entered into discovery—would have called walking into a dark wood on the strength of an anonymous note monumental idiocy. Rory would normally have agreed with him. She hadn't survived a year of Pre-Law, Evan’s suffocating temper, and starting over from scratch in London by walking blindly into traps. She had come thirty minutes late on purpose, approaching from the northeast ridge rather than the bridle path, expecting to spot whoever had left the note waiting impatiently in the center of the clearing. The clearing was empty. Fifty yards across, carpeted in knee-high foxgloves, campion, and pale bindweed, the meadow stretched out like a bowl of dark water. Around its rim, the ancient oak standing stones rose like crooked teeth against a sky devoid of stars. "Alright," Rory said aloud, keeping her voice pitched low and flat. "I'm here." Her words didn't echo. They didn't even carry. The heavy air swallowed the syllables an inch from her lips, leaving the clearing quieter than before. Something shifted to her left. Rory turned her head sharply. Near the western edge of the ring, the tall white heads of queen anne's lace swayed—just a tight, localized shiver, as though a trailing hem had brushed past them. Beyond the blooms stood three of the petrified oak monoliths, spaced ten feet apart. No. Four. Rory kept her breathing shallow and even, refusing to let adrenaline spike her heart rate. She knew the geometry of small spaces, the instinctive inventory you took when entering a room with a man who liked to block doorways. When she had stepped through the northern gap two minutes ago, she had swept the perimeter. Eleven stones in total. Three on the western curve. She stared into the murk. Three jagged silhouettes rose out of the wildflowers, grained like bark and hard as flint. The fourth shape wasn't there anymore. Only empty air between the middle pillar and the southernmost one, and below that gap, the pale flowers slowly righting themselves, stem by stem. A trick of the dark, her rational mind supplied. Fatigue from hauling takeaway orders across Soho in the rain. She took two slow steps deeper into the meadow to get a clearer angle on the western stones. Wet petals dragged softly against her shins—*shhhk, shhhk*. She stopped. *Shhhk.* One extra rustle in the grass. Half a second after her boots had planted in the loam. Not twenty yards away across the clearing, either. Close. Somewhere behind her right shoulder, inside the ring. Rory didn't spin around. Whirling blindly in the dark only ruined your balance and told whatever was watching that you were panicked. Instead, she pivoted smoothly on the ball of her foot, keeping her knees unlocked, bringing her gaze across the northern entrance she had just walked through. Nothing stood between her and the pair of boundary stones. The wildflowers behind her were unbroken—except for a shallow trough flattened into the clover about six feet to her right, running parallel to the two steps she had just taken. As she watched, a crushed dandelion stem at the front of that depression sprung silently back upright, freed of a sudden, heavy weight. Beneath the collar of her thermal shirt, metal warmed against her collarbone. Rory’s fingers went to her throat. Encircling her neck was a thin silver chain, and suspended from it, tucked out of sight against her skin, hung the Heartstone Pendant. Usually, the thumbnail-sized gemstone sat cool and inert, harboring nothing more than a faint inner glow like a dying ember under glass. She didn't know who had left it on her windowsill three months ago, only what Silas had muttered when he’d held a magnifying loupe to it over the bar: *Dymas-cut. Stay away from places where the ground goes thin, Rory. It wakes up near Hel rifts.* Right now, the stone wasn't merely warm. It was pulsing. A slow, rhythmic throb of heat beat against her sternum, completely out of time with her own pulse. Through the dark weave of her shirt and the unzipped collar of her jacket, a dull, deep crimson glow bled upward onto her chin. Rory swallowed against a suddenly dry throat. This was Fae territory. A pocket stitched between Richmond Park and Isolde’s realm. Hel portals tore open in charnel pits, butchered cellars, forgotten plague tunnels beneath East London—never inside living Fae ground. For a rift to bleed into the Grove, the Grove itself would have to be hollowed out first. Scraped clean from the inside, like a shell left on a beach for something else to crawl into. She looked down at the nearest cluster of wildflowers by her boot. In the faint crimson spill from her collar, she saw them clearly for the first time. The petals weren't soft. They were rigid, translucent as pared fingernails, coated in a fine, grey grease that smelled—now that she breathed through her nose right above them—not of clover at all, but of cold tallow and wet iron. The sweet floral scent had only been a thin skin floating at head height. Underneath, the soil was dead. From the center of the meadow came a sound. It was faint, dry, and horribly domestic—the soft click of teeth meeting in an empty room, followed by a long, shuddering inhalation. It sounded exactly like the breath Rory had drawn five seconds ago when the pendant flared. A mimicry, slightly warped, testing the shape of human lungs. At the very edge of her left eye’s vision, one of the eastern standing stones leaned inward. When her gaze snapped toward it, the stone was upright and motionless, fifteen feet of petrified oak. Immediately, in her right periphery, darkness detached itself from the western boundary—long, folded at wrong angles, low to the blossoms—and froze the instant her pupils shifted a fraction back. There wasn't one of them. Or if there was only one, it moved faster than sight in the spaces she wasn't looking. Rory forced her gaze straight down at the tips of her boots. If looking at them pinned them in place, looking everywhere at once was impossible; she only had two eyes, and the circle was three hundred and sixty degrees wide. Worse, the pulsing against her breastbone was accelerating—*thump-thump, thump-thump*—searing through the cotton of her shirt as the air ahead of her grew dense and blisteringly hot. Somewhere in the center of the clearing, twenty yards away, the fabric of the pocket was splitting open. Whoever—whatever—had slipped that note into her bag hadn't wanted to meet her. Or maybe someone had left the note days ago, before the rift opened, and was already gone, leaving only the bait behind. Either way, the Heartstone glowing at her chest was a lantern in pitch dark, and the things ringing the meadow were herding her inward toward the heat. *Think,* Rory told herself, rubbing her thumb once, hard, across the crescent scar on her wrist. Panic was how you died. Patterns were how you got out. It had mimicked her footsteps. Half a beat behind. It had mimicked her breath. Five seconds late. And it only moved in the margins of her vision, using her own panicked scanning to measure when her back was turned. She was twelve feet inside the northern boundary. Straight behind her lay Richmond Park, rain, cold mud, and real time. If she turned and bolted, she would take her eyes off the entire clearing at once, giving whatever waited in the tallow-slick grass twelve full feet to close the gap on her spine. So she wouldn't turn around. And she wouldn't look up. Keeping her chin tucked—which simultaneously muffled the crimson glow leaking from her collar and narrowed her field of view to a three-foot circle of dead flowers around her boots—Rory let out a long, deliberate, ragged sigh, mimicking terror. Three seconds passed. Four. From five feet directly in front of her came the answering sound: a wet, rattling exhale, accompanied by the heavy, invisible parting of stalks. Faint, sour warmth brushed the skin of her forehead. Something tall was bowing down over her, waiting for her head to jerk up so its counterpart behind her could move in from the blind spot. Instead of flinching back, Rory feinted half a step forward with her right boot, grinding her heel loudly into the gravel-flecked dirt. Instantly, to her left and right, the grass hissed as unseen weight lunged inward toward where her momentum should have carried her. Rory never shifted her center of gravity. Pushing off that planted front foot, she drove herself backward in three long, silent, measured strides, eyes locked rigidly on the flattened path she had made coming in, refusing to lift her chin even as tall shadows spilled into the edges of her sight from both sides like ink hitting wet paper. *One stride.* The pendant burned like a branding iron against her skin; a dry clicking erupted inches from her left ear. *Two strides.* Something ice-cold and fibrous grazed the ends of her black hair, snagging two strands before snapping taut. *Three strides.* Her shoulder brushed rough, petrified oak. She threw her weight backward through the gap between the northern monoliths. Cold November rain struck her face like flung gravel. Instantly, the roar of a night bus grinding up Star and Garter Hill flooded her ears, alongside the drip of bare branches and the distant scream of a fox across the dark turf of Richmond Park. Beneath her shirt, the Heartstone dropped from blistering heat to a faint, fading throb. Rory didn't run—running invited a chase—but she backed steadily up the muddy incline for thirty paces before letting her eyes rise to the ring of ancient oak standing stones below. In the drizzle, the clearing beyond the pillars looked tiny, no wider than a suburban garden, choked with sodden autumn bracken and dead nettles. No white flowers bloomed there from the outside. Nothing moved between the dark trunks. Yet right at the threshold, exactly between the two northernmost stones where the rain seemed to hit an invisible pane of glass and slide sideways, two patches of wet mud were pressed four inches deep into the earth, side by side, toeing the line she had just crossed. Rory lifted her dripping wrist. The colon on her watch was blinking steadily again. *03:47.* Three and a half hours gone in four minutes. Keeping her eyes fixed on the gap between the stones until the mist swallowed them whole, Rory zipped her jacket tight over the fading red glow at her throat, turned toward the park gates, and walked fast into the rain.
created_at"2026-11-11T16:22:03.027Z" 11/11/2026, 4:22:03 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.5
84.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2227
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slowly"
2"softly"
3"completely"
4"suddenly"
5"slightly"
6"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.59% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2227
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"weight"
count4
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"throb"
count2
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"searing"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"scanning"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count1
13
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"familiar"
2"gloom"
3"silence"
4"weight"
5"echo"
6"rhythmic"
7"throb"
8"pulse"
9"searing"
10"footsteps"
11"scanning"
12"warmth"
13"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences147
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
98.79% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount1
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0.007
matches
0"Hel portals tore open in charnel pits, butchered cellars, forgotten plague tunnels beneath East London—never inside living Fae ground."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords35
totalWords2207
ratio0.016
matches
0"00:14."
1"Isolde’s Grove. Midnight. Heartstone."
2"shhhk, shhhk"
3"Shhhk."
4"Dymas-cut. Stay away from places where the ground goes thin, Rory. It wakes up near Hel rifts."
5"thump-thump, thump-thump"
6"Think,"
7"One stride."
8"Two strides."
9"Three strides."
10"03:47."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount2197
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London4
Richmond4
Park4
November2
Isolde3
Fae3
Grove5
Silas2
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
Pre-Law1
Evan1
Soho1
One2
Heartstone4
Pendant1
Rory20
Hel2
Right1
East1
Star1
Garter1
Hill1
Three5
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Silas"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Evan"
4"Heartstone"
5"Pendant"
6"Rory"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"November"
4"Fae"
5"Grove"
6"Golden"
7"Cardiff"
8"Soho"
9"East"
10"Garter"
11"Hill"
12"Three"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences113
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like standing too close to an old"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.453
wordCount2207
matches
0"not of clover at all, but of cold tallow"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences148
matches
0"watching that you"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean36.78
std26.11
cv0.71
sampleLengths
019
187
215
364
46
561
637
793
844
996
104
1139
1213
1325
145
1548
162
1764
1850
1919
2026
212
221
2334
2448
2563
2612
2797
2810
2942
3075
3112
3274
339
3422
3526
3663
3722
3885
3961
4027
4139
4253
4310
4438
454
4659
4722
4822
4959
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"been dragged"
1"were panicked"
58.59% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs330
matches
0"was watching"
1"was pulsing"
2"wasn't looking"
3"was splitting"
4"were herding"
5"was bowing"
6"was blinking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences148
ratio0.115
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones—petrified trunks turned over millennia into jagged grey rock—snapped the city noise off like a severed wire."
1"The one other time she had been dragged here, the pocket realm had felt like standing too close to an old television screen—static lifting the fine hairs on her arms, unseen wings whirring in the undergrowth, the air dizzying and bright even under cloud cover."
2"Time never behaved itself inside the Grove; Silas had warned her a dozen times that twenty minutes among the standing stones could spit you back into London three minutes later or cost you half a week."
3"Her father—thirty years a Cardiff barrister with little patience for anything that couldn't be entered into discovery—would have called walking into a dark wood on the strength of an anonymous note monumental idiocy."
4"Near the western edge of the ring, the tall white heads of queen anne's lace swayed—just a tight, localized shiver, as though a trailing hem had brushed past them."
5"Wet petals dragged softly against her shins—*shhhk, shhhk*."
6"The wildflowers behind her were unbroken—except for a shallow trough flattened into the clover about six feet to her right, running parallel to the two steps she had just taken."
7"Hel portals tore open in charnel pits, butchered cellars, forgotten plague tunnels beneath East London—never inside living Fae ground."
8"They were rigid, translucent as pared fingernails, coated in a fine, grey grease that smelled—now that she breathed through her nose right above them—not of clover at all, but of cold tallow and wet iron."
9"It was faint, dry, and horribly domestic—the soft click of teeth meeting in an empty room, followed by a long, shuddering inhalation."
10"Immediately, in her right periphery, darkness detached itself from the western boundary—long, folded at wrong angles, low to the blossoms—and froze the instant her pupils shifted a fraction back."
11"If looking at them pinned them in place, looking everywhere at once was impossible; she only had two eyes, and the circle was three hundred and sixty degrees wide."
12"Worse, the pulsing against her breastbone was accelerating—*thump-thump, thump-thump*—searing through the cotton of her shirt as the air ahead of her grew dense and blisteringly hot."
13"Whoever—whatever—had slipped that note into her bag hadn't wanted to meet her."
14"Keeping her chin tucked—which simultaneously muffled the crimson glow leaking from her collar and narrowed her field of view to a three-foot circle of dead flowers around her boots—Rory let out a long, deliberate, ragged sigh, mimicking terror."
15"*One stride.* The pendant burned like a branding iron against her skin; a dry clicking erupted inches from her left ear."
16"Rory didn't run—running invited a chase—but she backed steadily up the muddy incline for thirty paces before letting her eyes rise to the ring of ancient oak standing stones below."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount369
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.032520325203252036
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0027100271002710027
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean14.91
std10.81
cv0.725
sampleLengths
019
127
26
316
421
517
615
714
85
945
106
1124
126
1316
1415
1525
1612
175
1836
1939
2013
2131
222
239
241
251
2633
277
2822
2934
304
3121
3218
3311
342
354
364
3717
385
395
4029
4114
421
431
4415
4524
4616
474
485
495
86.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.527027027027027
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners78
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount11
totalSentences138
matches
0"Usually, the Fae Grove hummed."
1"Just four words in cramped"
2"Only empty air between the"
3"Somewhere behind her right shoulder,"
4"Instead, she pivoted smoothly on"
5"Usually, the thumbnail-sized gemstone sat"
6"Immediately, in her right periphery,"
7"Somewhere in the center of"
8"Instead of flinching back, Rory"
9"Instantly, to her left and"
10"Instantly, the roar of a"
ratio0.08
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences138
matches
0"She tucked a curtain of"
1"She frowned, lowering her arm."
2"She reached into the pocket"
3"Her father—thirty years a Cardiff"
4"She hadn't survived a year"
5"She had come thirty minutes"
6"Her words didn't echo."
7"They didn't even carry."
8"She knew the geometry of"
9"She stared into the murk."
10"She took two slow steps"
11"She didn't know who had"
12"It wakes up near Hel"
13"It was pulsing."
14"She looked down at the"
15"They were rigid, translucent as"
16"It was faint, dry, and"
17"It sounded exactly like the"
18"It had mimicked her footsteps."
19"It had mimicked her breath."
ratio0.159
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences138
matches
0"Rory stepped between the two"
1"The ancient oak standing stones—petrified"
2"Rory stopped just inside the"
3"She tucked a curtain of"
4"The one other time she"
5"Tonight, the clearing was dead"
6"Wildflowers brushed the hems of"
7"The silence pressed against her"
8"Rory lifted her left wrist,"
9"She frowned, lowering her arm."
10"Time never behaved itself inside"
11"She reached into the pocket"
12"Her father—thirty years a Cardiff"
13"Rory would normally have agreed"
14"She hadn't survived a year"
15"She had come thirty minutes"
16"The clearing was empty."
17"Rory said aloud, keeping her"
18"Her words didn't echo."
19"They didn't even carry."
ratio0.449
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences138
matches
0"Even in the pitch dark"
1"If she lost three days,"
2"If looking at them pinned"
3"Whoever—whatever—had slipped that note into"
4"Either way, the Heartstone glowing"
5"If she turned and bolted,"
ratio0.043
92.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Her father—thirty years a Cardiff barrister with little patience for anything that couldn't be entered into discovery—would have called walking into a dark wood…"
1"Near the western edge of the ring, the tall white heads of queen anne's lace swayed—just a tight, localized shiver, as though a trailing hem had brushed past th…"
2"She knew the geometry of small spaces, the instinctive inventory you took when entering a room with a man who liked to block doorways."
3"Instead, she pivoted smoothly on the ball of her foot, keeping her knees unlocked, bringing her gaze across the northern entrance she had just walked through."
4"They were rigid, translucent as pared fingernails, coated in a fine, grey grease that smelled—now that she breathed through her nose right above them—not of clo…"
5"And it only moved in the margins of her vision, using her own panicked scanning to measure when her back was turned."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.1389%