Run: 2026-11-11-01M75Q93GY7E2DP62EPYTDZYDW

Run Details

Duration:
1m 47s
Cost:
$0.047948
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The mud of Richmond Park sucked at Rory’s boots until she stepped between the two northernmost markers, and then the winter vanished. One stride carried her out of November drizzle and into air so thick and motionless it felt stored in a jar. Rory stopped just inside the perimeter, letting her breathing settle. Behind her, the skeletal canopy of the park dissolved into a smear of gray mist. Ahead lay Isolde’s grove. Even at midnight, the clearing was carpeted in full, riotous color—wild poppies, tall purple foxgloves, and tangled mats of sweet clover blooming in defiance of the season. Normally, the Grove hummed. The few times Rory had crossed into this pocket between Earth and the Fae, the grass had been alive with drowsy bees and a restless, warm breeze that smelled of crushed mint. Tonight, nothing moved. Not a petal twitched. The foxgloves stood stiff and vertical, as if dipped in wax. Rory reached into the pocket of her waterproof jacket—still carrying the faint, salty ghost of soy sauce and ginger from her evening shift at the Golden Empress—and unfolded the slip of heavy cream paper she had found pushed beneath her flat door above Silas’ bar. Two words in cramped black ink: *Midnight. Isolde’s.* It was the exact same stock that had accompanied the Heartstone Pendant six months ago. After months of silence from her mysterious benefactor, she hadn't been able to ignore the summons. She checked her wristwatch. 11:58. The thin white second hand ticked forward to fifty-nine, shuddered, and stuck. She tapped the scratched glass with a fingernail, her thumb brushing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. Time never behaved properly inside the Grove; five minutes among the wildflowers could dump you back into London three days later or thirty seconds before you left. A stalled watch wasn't cause for panic. Still, the silence pressed against her eardrums with an almost physical weight. No distant roar of late traffic from Roehampton Lane. No wind in the leaves. Just the soft, rhythmic thud of her own pulse. She tucked a strand of straight, shoulder-length black hair behind her ear and took three measured steps toward the center of the clearing. Beneath her collar, the Heartstone Pendant shifted against her skin. And warmed. Rory froze. Slowly, she hooked two fingers around the fine silver chain and drew the pendant out over her jumper. The deep crimson stone, no bigger than her thumbnail, always held a faint inner glow, like a coal buried under ash. Now that light had sharpened to the color of fresh arterial blood, pulsing in slow, deliberate beats against her palm. Warmth meant a Hel portal. Somewhere nearby, the membrane separating this Fae-touched pocket from something far darker and colder had been torn open. Her gaze snapped around the boundary of the clearing. Ancient oak standing stones ringed the Grove—great, petrified monoliths where bark and granite had fused over centuries, towering well over her five-foot-six frame. Seven of them marked the circle. She knew there were seven; Brendan Carter’s barrister blood ran thick enough in her veins that Rory cataloged details out of sheer reflex. She started at the pale gap where she had entered and counted clockwise through the gloom. One. Two. Three. Four. Five. Six. Seven. Eight. Rory did not gasp. Years ago, living with Evan in Cardiff had taught her that sudden noise only drew a predator’s focus, and panic dulled the part of the brain that found exits. She kept her breathing shallow through her nose and counted backward. Seven. Six. Five. Four. Three. Two. One. Seven again. The eighth shape—somewhere on the eastern curve, where the white campions grew waist-high—was gone. Or it had never been a stone at all, and had simply stepped behind one when she looked directly at it. She pulled her phone from her trousers, thumbing the power button to wake the screen without turning on the torch. A bright beam would ruin her night vision and paint a target on her chest. In the dim rectangular wash of the lock screen, which read 03:41 before flickering dead to black, she caught the brief reflection of her own bright blue eyes, wide and calm. As the screen died, a sound drifted across the wildflowers. *Clink.* Rory went utterly rigid. It was the small, metallic chime of brass keys shifting against loose change. Three seconds earlier, when she had slid her phone from her pocket, her flat keys had made that exact sound against her delivery tip coins. She waited, counting ten slow beats in her head. Nothing followed. The poppies stayed motionless. The air didn't even carry a scent anymore—no damp earth, no nectar, just a flat, metallic emptiness like the inside of an old meat locker. Testing a hypothesis she prayed was wrong, Rory cleared her throat—a tiny, dry scrape at the back of her palate. Two seconds passed. Three. From the far left of the clearing, twenty yards away from where she’d heard the keys, came a faint, dry *khh-hrm*. It wasn't quite human. It sounded like wind forced through a dry reed pipe to approximate a human throat, pitched slightly too low and cut off too cleanly at the end, as though whatever made it didn't understand why lungs needed air afterward. Rory’s stomach dropped into ice water. Her benefactor hadn't left that note. Or if they had, whatever had slipped through the Hel tear had arrived here first. She began to step backward, placing the heel of her boot down softly before rolling onto the sole, keeping her face turned toward the center of the Grove. In her peripheral vision, the darkness between the third and fourth oak standing stones seemed wrong—thicker than the surrounding gloom, shaped faintly like shoulders hunched too high beside a long, narrow neck. When she flicked her eyes toward it, she saw only the gnarled silhouette of petrified wood. The instant she looked back to the center, the tall shadow detached itself by half an inch, tilting at an angle no spine could manage. *Don't run,* she told herself fiercely. *Running triggers the chase.* Four paces back. Five. She should have hit the northern gap by now. She had only walked three steps into the clearing when she arrived, and she had just taken five straight back. Her shoulder brushed rough, freezing bark. Rory didn't turn around, because turning meant taking her eyes off the clearing, and every nerve ending along her spine screamed that something was waiting for her head to turn. Instead, she reached behind her with her left hand. Solid stone-oak. No gap. Beside her hip, the Heartstone Pendant flared with sudden, vicious heat, hot enough to sting through two layers of cotton. Her mind raced, slotting facts together with cold precision. The pendant warmed near a Hel portal. She had walked backward toward what looked like the northern boundary, and the stone had grown scalding. Which meant the tear wasn't across the clearing. She was backing directly into it. The Grove wasn't a simple circle of dirt in Richmond Park; its geometry bent like folded paper, and the breach was warping the space further, twisting the landmarks until every path led toward the mouth of the rift. Out in the wildflowers, petals began to snap. It wasn't the rustle of stems parting for legs. It was a brittle, dry *crick-crick-crick*, as if the flowers were freezing solid the moment an unseen weight passed over them and shattering beneath its tread. Something was circling from the east. A second set of brittle snaps answered from the west—or worse, the single thing was wide enough, or fast enough, to disturb both sides of the grass within the same breath. Rory slipped the silver chain over her head, wrapping it twice around her fingers so the crimson stone dangled three inches below her fist like a plumb line. Heat radiated off the facet, painting her knuckles in dull red light. Behind her, near the false exit, the stone burned like a stove ring. She pivoted ninety degrees to her right, watching the glow and reading the temperature against her skin. Cooler. Still warm, pulsing fast, *thump-thump-thump*, faster than her own racing heart, so fast the beats blurred into a steady vibration. She angled slightly left—toward a dense, impenetrable-looking wall of thorny bramble choked between two towering oak monoliths where there had never been a path before. The Heartstone cooled to blood-heat. Its frantic pulse slowed to a sluggish throb. *There.* The tear was pulling her senses toward it, disguising the real threshold behind Fae glamour or perceptual rot. The brambles weren't real, or if they were, tearing her coat on thorns was infinitely preferable to staying another ten seconds in this jar of dead air. Ten feet away, the snapping of frozen stems stopped. In the utter silence that followed, Rory heard breathing. Deep, wet, ragged inhales that had nothing to do with mimicry anymore. At the extreme right edge of her vision, towering past six feet, past seven, a pale smudge hung in the dark like an upturned face with nothing carved into it. It didn't step forward. It simply leaned, stretching across the intervening space without moving its base, closing the gap between ten feet and four in a smooth, noiseless glide. The smell hit her then—stagnant river mud and copper pennies. Rory didn't look at it. Fixing her eyes squarely on the black tangle of brambles, she dug her left hand into her jacket pocket, closed her fist around a heavy cluster of pound coins, and hurled them hard toward the scalding dark behind the northern stone. The coins struck bark and pattered into the clover. Air tore past Rory’s cheek with a sound like ripping canvas as the tall shape whipped past her toward the noise, displacing a draft so freezing it burned her ear. Rory bolted the opposite way. She lowered her shoulder, shut her eyes against the swipe of phantom thorns, and threw her full weight between the oak monoliths. Nothing caught her sleeves. For a fraction of a second she fell through absolute, breathless zero, her stomach lurching as time wrenched itself back into gear—and then her knees slammed into icy London slush. Rain pelted the back of her neck. Somewhere far off across the dark expanse of Richmond Park, a red stag bellowed, raw and earthly and loud, and the distant orange glow of city streetlights bled across heavy winter clouds. Rory scrambled six yards away from the standing stones on bruised knees before spinning around in the mud, chest heaving, the silver chain cutting into her palm. Between the ancient oaks lay nothing at all. Only wet brown bracken, dead November leaves, and empty dark trees dripping in the rain. Against her fingers, the Heartstone Pendant had gone entirely cold, its crimson glow dimmed back to a sleepy ember. Shivering violently now that the adrenaline wasebbing into the marrow of her bones, Rory dragged her wet cuff back to look at her watch. The thin white hand was ticking steadily again, sweeping past the twelve. Beside it, the tiny date window had clicked forward two full days. Slowly, Rory got to her feet, shoved the pendant deep beneath her jumper, and began walking fast toward the park gates without once looking back at the trees.
created_at"2026-11-11T16:32:55.853Z" 11/11/2026, 4:32:55 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences0
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1902
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"utterly"
2"slightly"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1902
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"cataloged"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count2
8
word"predator"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count2
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"raced"
count1
12
word"racing"
count1
13
word"throb"
count1
14
word"lurching"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"rhythmic"
3"pulse"
4"measured"
5"warmth"
6"cataloged"
7"gloom"
8"predator"
9"stomach"
10"flicked"
11"raced"
12"racing"
13"throb"
14"lurching"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences144
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences144
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords13
totalWords1890
ratio0.007
matches
0"Midnight. Isolde’s."
1"Clink."
2"khh-hrm"
3"Don't run,"
4"Running triggers the chase."
5"crick-crick-crick"
6"thump-thump-thump"
7"There."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.68% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions82
wordCount1888
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
Rory19
November2
Isolde2
Grove5
Earth1
Fae3
Golden1
Empress1
Two4
Heartstone5
Pendant4
London2
Roehampton1
Lane1
Hel3
Fae-touched1
Brendan1
Carter1
Evan1
Cardiff1
Four3
One3
Seven4
Three4
Five3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
4"Brendan"
5"Carter"
6"Evan"
7"Four"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"London"
4"Roehampton"
5"Lane"
6"Hel"
7"Cardiff"
globalScore0.997
windowScore1
74.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences99
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sounded like wind forced through a dry ree"
1"seemed wrong thicker than the surrounding gloom, shaped faintly like shoulders hunched too high beside a long, narrow neck"
2"looked like the northern boundary, and th"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1890
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences144
matches
0"screamed that something"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean34.36
std24.4
cv0.71
sampleLengths
022
177
236
318
484
570
635
723
812
961
1023
1161
1216
137
141
1544
167
1737
1866
1910
201
2117
2225
2340
2420
254
2621
2743
2827
29101
3010
3133
326
3363
3447
3538
368
3772
3828
3988
4013
4146
429
4380
4410
4546
469
4730
4827
4934
97.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences144
matches
0"was carpeted"
1"been torn"
2"was gone"
36.26% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs285
matches
0"was waiting"
1"was backing"
2"was warping"
3"was circling"
4"was pulling"
5"were, tearing"
6"was ticking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences144
ratio0.097
matches
0"Even at midnight, the clearing was carpeted in full, riotous color—wild poppies, tall purple foxgloves, and tangled mats of sweet clover blooming in defiance of the season."
1"Rory reached into the pocket of her waterproof jacket—still carrying the faint, salty ghost of soy sauce and ginger from her evening shift at the Golden Empress—and unfolded the slip of heavy cream paper she had found pushed beneath her flat door above Silas’ bar."
2"Time never behaved properly inside the Grove; five minutes among the wildflowers could dump you back into London three days later or thirty seconds before you left."
3"Ancient oak standing stones ringed the Grove—great, petrified monoliths where bark and granite had fused over centuries, towering well over her five-foot-six frame."
4"She knew there were seven; Brendan Carter’s barrister blood ran thick enough in her veins that Rory cataloged details out of sheer reflex."
5"The eighth shape—somewhere on the eastern curve, where the white campions grew waist-high—was gone."
6"The air didn't even carry a scent anymore—no damp earth, no nectar, just a flat, metallic emptiness like the inside of an old meat locker."
7"Testing a hypothesis she prayed was wrong, Rory cleared her throat—a tiny, dry scrape at the back of her palate."
8"In her peripheral vision, the darkness between the third and fourth oak standing stones seemed wrong—thicker than the surrounding gloom, shaped faintly like shoulders hunched too high beside a long, narrow neck."
9"The Grove wasn't a simple circle of dirt in Richmond Park; its geometry bent like folded paper, and the breach was warping the space further, twisting the landmarks until every path led toward the mouth of the rift."
10"A second set of brittle snaps answered from the west—or worse, the single thing was wide enough, or fast enough, to disturb both sides of the grass within the same breath."
11"She angled slightly left—toward a dense, impenetrable-looking wall of thorny bramble choked between two towering oak monoliths where there had never been a path before."
12"The smell hit her then—stagnant river mud and copper pennies."
13"For a fraction of a second she fell through absolute, breathless zero, her stomach lurching as time wrenched itself back into gear—and then her knees slammed into icy London slush."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount199
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.02512562814070352
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.005025125628140704
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences144
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences144
mean13.13
std10.51
cv0.801
sampleLengths
022
121
210
315
44
527
64
732
83
94
1011
1145
127
1316
1416
154
161
1712
1819
1927
207
2112
229
235
249
2523
2610
272
282
2918
3021
3120
325
3318
349
3523
366
3723
3816
391
401
411
421
431
441
451
461
474
4829
4911
70.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners65
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences118
matches
0"Normally, the Grove hummed."
1"Just the soft, rhythmic thud"
2"Slowly, she hooked two fingers"
3"Somewhere nearby, the membrane separating"
4"Instead, she reached behind her"
5"Still warm, pulsing fast, *thump-thump-thump*,"
6"Somewhere far off across the"
7"Only wet brown bracken, dead"
8"Slowly, Rory got to her"
ratio0.076
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences118
matches
0"She checked her wristwatch."
1"She tapped the scratched glass"
2"She tucked a strand of"
3"Her gaze snapped around the"
4"She knew there were seven;"
5"She started at the pale"
6"She kept her breathing shallow"
7"She pulled her phone from"
8"It was the small, metallic"
9"She waited, counting ten slow"
10"It wasn't quite human."
11"It sounded like wind forced"
12"Her benefactor hadn't left that"
13"She began to step backward,"
14"She should have hit the"
15"She had only walked three"
16"Her shoulder brushed rough, freezing"
17"Her mind raced, slotting facts"
18"She had walked backward toward"
19"She was backing directly into"
ratio0.237
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences118
matches
0"The mud of Richmond Park"
1"Rory stopped just inside the"
2"The few times Rory had"
3"Tonight, nothing moved."
4"The foxgloves stood stiff and"
5"Rory reached into the pocket"
6"Isolde’s.* It was the exact"
7"She checked her wristwatch."
8"The thin white second hand"
9"She tapped the scratched glass"
10"Time never behaved properly inside"
11"A stalled watch wasn't cause"
12"She tucked a strand of"
13"The deep crimson stone, no"
14"Warmth meant a Hel portal."
15"Her gaze snapped around the"
16"She knew there were seven;"
17"She started at the pale"
18"Rory did not gasp."
19"Years ago, living with Evan"
ratio0.576
84.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"Even at midnight, the clearing"
1"Now that light had sharpened"
ratio0.017
73.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The few times Rory had crossed into this pocket between Earth and the Fae, the grass had been alive with drowsy bees and a restless, warm breeze that smelled of…"
1"Isolde’s.* It was the exact same stock that had accompanied the Heartstone Pendant six months ago."
2"She pulled her phone from her trousers, thumbing the power button to wake the screen without turning on the torch."
3"In the dim rectangular wash of the lock screen, which read 03:41 before flickering dead to black, she caught the brief reflection of her own bright blue eyes, w…"
4"It sounded like wind forced through a dry reed pipe to approximate a human throat, pitched slightly too low and cut off too cleanly at the end, as though whatev…"
5"It was a brittle, dry *crick-crick-crick*, as if the flowers were freezing solid the moment an unseen weight passed over them and shattering beneath its tread."
6"It simply leaned, stretching across the intervening space without moving its base, closing the gap between ten feet and four in a smooth, noiseless glide."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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88.7850%