Run: 2026-11-11-01M75RGV4HGGCRVMBRDXEK6A0J

Run Details

Duration:
1m 38s
Cost:
$0.057208
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
At twenty to midnight, Richmond Park smelled of wet mulch, deer dung, and frost. Rory kept her flashlight pointed directly at her boots, letting the narrow yellow cone pick out tangled tree roots and slick patches of mud while the rest of the woods remained a wall of black. Her waterproof jacket still carried the faint, greasy ghost of sesame oil and ginger from her evening shift for the Golden Empress, a mundane comfort she tucked her chin into whenever the wind cut across the hills. She checked her watch before leaving the deer trail. Eleven forty-two. If she got in and out quickly, she might make it back to her flat above Silas’ bar before one, assuming the Grove was in a generous mood. You never really knew until you came back out. Fifty yards off the path, the bracken thinned, giving way to the first of the ancient oak standing stones. They weren't true stone, though centuries of weather and Fae bleed had petrified the timber until it rang like iron if you rapped a knuckle against it. Seven towering monoliths of grey, fissured wood stood in a loose ring, each wider than Rory’s outstretched arms. From the park side, the space between them looked like an ordinary tangle of winter briars. Rory paused at the threshold, thumbing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—an old habit from her Pre-Law days at Cardiff whenever an argument didn't quite add up. Usually, standing within five feet of the boundary meant hearing the low, sleepy hum of bees that had no business surviving a London November. Usually, warm air spilled through the seam between realms, thick with pollen and wild thyme. Tonight, nothing spilled out at all. She drew the sealed wax packet from her inner pocket. The job was simple: wedge the parcel into the split grain of the northernmost pillar, turn around, and walk home. Silas had vetted the client, the fifty-pound advance was already in her bank account, and Rory didn't stay afloat in London by turning down easy errands because the dark felt unfriendly. She pushed a curtain of straight black hair behind her ear, squared her shoulders, and stepped between two of the petrified oaks. The transition hit her skin like walking into a cellar. The drizzle vanished. Above the clearing, the orange sodium glow of London’s cloud cover was gone, replaced by a starless, slate-grey canopy that offered no moon yet somehow cast a flat, shadowless gloom over the grass. All around her boots, wildflowers were in riotous bloom—bluebells, scarlet poppies, oxeye daisies, and purple foxgloves tangled together out of season. None of them were moving. Rory stood completely still, holding her breath to listen. No wind stirred the petals. No insects buzzed in the grass. No owls called from the surrounding trees. It wasn't the peaceful quiet of a snowed-in street; it was the pressurized, dead silence of a room with the windows bricked up. Even the sound of her own nylon jacket rustling seemed muffled, swallowed half an inch from her body. Keep moving, she told herself. Drop the packet. Leave. She swept her flashlight across the clearing toward the northern marker, fifty paces away. As the beam skimmed the grass, she glanced down at her watch to gauge the drift. The illuminated dial showed eleven forty-two, just as it had outside, except the second hand wasn't sweeping forward. It was twitching rapidly between the three and the four, vibrating like a pinned insect. Beneath her thermal shirt, something pulsed against her sternum. Rory stopped dead, ankle-deep in motionless bluebells. With her free hand, she unzipped her collar and tugged the thin silver chain out into the cold air. The Heartstone Pendant sat in her palm, a deep crimson gem no bigger than her thumbnail. When an unknown benefactor had left it for her months ago, its inner glow had been little more than an ember caught in dark glass. Now, that glow bled red across her pale fingers, and the stone throbbed with a steady, feverish warmth. Rory’s pulse kicked hard against her ribs, though she kept her breathing slow and shallow. She knew precisely one hard fact about the Heartstone: it warmed in the presence of a Hel portal. This was Isolde’s grove. Fae-touched earth. A pocket stitched onto the hem of Richmond Park. Hel rifts did not open in Fae territory any more than saltwater boiled out of a kitchen tap. For the pendant to heat up like this, something had torn through the fabric of the clearing from underneath, and it had done so recently enough that the Grove itself had gone into shock. *Clack.* Rory’s thumb snapped the flashlight off before her conscious mind had finished processing the noise. Darkness rushed in, thick and grainy. Her bright blue eyes watered as she forced them wide, waiting for her night vision to catch up to the faint, flat twilight of the pocket realm. *Clack. Shhhk.* The sound came from behind her—roughly where the center of the clearing should have been, a spot of empty turf she had walked past ten seconds ago. Worse than the proximity was the acoustics. It didn't sound like a boot or a hoof pressing down on damp earth and crushed stems. It sounded like something hard striking wet flagstones, followed by a slow, heavy drag that echoed off tight stone walls. As if a subterranean corridor had been laid directly over the meadow, invisible and occupying the exact same space. Rory didn't turn her head abruptly. Sudden motion drew predators; even Evan’s worst tempers had taught her the value of going utterly unreadable when the air in a room turned lethal. Moving millimeter by millimeter, she tucked the crimson pendant into her closed fist so its faint glow wouldn't paint her throat, then angled her body back toward the southern boundary. Around the perimeter of the clearing, the ancient oak standing stones rose like jagged teeth against the grey sky. Rory counted the silhouettes from left to right to find the gap she had entered through. One. Two. Three. Four. Five. Six. Seven. Eight. Her stomach dropped cleanly away. She counted them again, slower, forcing her analytical brain past the sudden prickle of sweat along her hairline. One, two, three—there. Between the third and fourth pillars on the eastern curve stood another dark vertical shape. It was slightly narrower than the petrified oaks, and rounded softly at the top where splintered wood should have jagged upward. As she stared at it, trying to convince herself it was a trick of perspective, she saw the wildflowers around its base shift. There was still no wind. The poppies weren't swaying; they were folding downward, curling inward and turning black in a slow, spreading ring, silent as burning paper in a photograph. *Clack. Shhhk.* The indoor echo sounded from her left—nowhere near the eighth silhouette. Rory’s eyes flicked involuntarily toward the sound, just for a fraction of a second, searching the knee-high foxgloves ten yards away. Nothing stood there, though a wide swath of blossoms lay flattened into the dirt, pressed down in a neat line pointing straight toward her boots. When she jerked her gaze back to the eastern edge of the clearing, there were only seven standing stones. A breath of air finally moved across the grass. It smelled of copper pennies and wet cellar ash, and it lifted the straight black hair beside Rory’s right ear—from directly behind her shoulder. Panic screamed at her to bolt for the southern pillars. Rory clamped her jaw shut until her molars ached and refused to run. Running blind in a Fae pocket was how people got turned around in the briars until winter became spring; running blind with a Hel rift open nearby meant stepping straight through an unseen seam in the dark and falling somewhere she would never climb out of. Inside her closed fist, the Heartstone pulsed again—hotter now, nearly blistering the skin of her palm. Wait. Think. The stone reacted to proximity. When she had stood near the center of the clearing, it had been merely warm. Now, standing stationary while that wet, dragging echo circled closer, the gem was growing scalding. Either the rift itself was drifting across the grass, or whatever had crawled out of Hel carried the threshold wrapped around it like a coat. Which meant she didn't need to see it to know where it was. She had a compass. A low, clicking inhale vibrated in the air six feet behind her back—so resonant it buzzed in the fillings of her teeth, carrying that impossible, hollow cathedral echo. Rory didn't look back. With her right hand, she brought the heavy metal flashlight down to her hip, clicked the switch on, and bowled it hard underhand across the meadow toward the northern pillar. The beam tumbled wildly through the flowers, strobing bright yellow arcs across scarlet petals and grey petrified bark, kicking long, violent shadows into motion. Simultaneously, the freezing air behind Rory collapsed inward with a soft *thump* of displaced pressure. Halfway across the clearing, just at the ragged edge of the rolling flashlight beam, a vertical smear of absolute, light-drinking black flickered between two patches of daisies—not running across the turf, simply ceasing to be near Rory and existing twenty yards away in the space between one bounce of the torch and the next. Everywhere its shadow touched, the vibrant summer blooms shriveled instantly into slick black slime. Rory was already moving. Heel to toe, silent on the thick grass, she glided backward toward the two southern oak monoliths. Inside her clenched left hand, the Heartstone cooled from searing to hot, then down to a dull, angry throb. Across the clearing, the flashlight rolled to a stop against a tussock of grass, its beam shining uselessly into empty foxgloves. The dragging step echoed once—*shhhk*—loud and sharp, as though whatever stood over the light had just realized the metal tube had no heartbeat. The flashlight bulb popped with a tiny, muffled *tink*, plunging the Grove back into flat grey gloom. Rory’s shoulder blade struck rough, petrified wood. She didn't spare a half-second to look into the clearing to see where the eighth shadow had reappeared. Keeping the cooling crimson stone crushed in her fist, she pivoted on her heel and threw herself backward through the gap between the ancient oaks. Cold rain slapped her face. She stumbled hard on a muddy incline, caught herself with one raw palm against a rotting birch log, and kept scrambling backward through dead, thorny bramble until her boots hit the gravel of the main deer trail. Wind roared overhead, thrashing the bare November canopy of Richmond Park. Far off to the east, a siren wailed down the A3, grounded and gloriously human. Behind the tangle of winter briars, the seven oak shapes were barely visible in the drizzle, dark and inert and wholly ordinary. Nothing stepped out between them. Beneath her palm, the Heartstone faded to a faint, dying warmth against her skin, its inner crimson light dimming back to a quiet ember. Chest heaving, soaking wet, Rory finally let her hand shake as she reached into her jacket pocket and pulled out her phone, thumbing the power button to wash her face in familiar blue light. The parcel for Silas’ client was still wedged safely inside her coat, undelivered. The battery icon blinked red at four percent. Above twenty-seven missed calls from Silas and Yu-Fei, the lock screen read four-nineteen in the morning—three days after she had stepped off the path. Rory stared at the date for threebeats, then tucked the pendant back beneath her shirt, turned toward the park gates, and walked very fast toward the streetlights without looking behind her once.
created_at"2026-11-11T16:54:37.984Z" 11/11/2026, 4:54:37 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences0
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1972
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"precisely"
count1
4
adverb"utterly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"softly"
count1
7
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
2"completely"
3"precisely"
4"utterly"
5"slightly"
6"softly"
7"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1972
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"gloom"
count2
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count2
7
word"unreadable"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"echo"
count3
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"vibrated"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"searing"
count1
14
word"throb"
count1
15
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"silence"
2"pulsed"
3"throbbed"
4"warmth"
5"pulse"
6"echoed"
7"unreadable"
8"stomach"
9"echo"
10"flicked"
11"vibrated"
12"flickered"
13"searing"
14"throb"
15"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords8
totalWords1962
ratio0.004
matches
0"Clack."
1"Clack. Shhhk."
2"Clack. Shhhk."
3"thump"
4"shhhk"
5"tink"
62.50% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Keep moving, she told herself."
98.45% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1940
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
Golden1
Empress1
You1
Fae4
Rory20
Pre-Law1
Cardiff1
London3
November2
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Hel4
Isolde1
Grove2
Evan1
Silas2
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"You"
1"Rory"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
4"Hel"
5"Isolde"
6"Grove"
7"Evan"
8"Silas"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore0.985
windowScore1
45.83% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like an ordinary tangle of winter"
1"quite add up"
2"seemed muffled swallowed half an inch from her body"
3"sounded like something hard striking wet f"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1962
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean39.24
std27.98
cv0.713
sampleLengths
086
148
280
368
46
583
610
757
85
968
109
1163
129
1385
1433
1567
161
1715
1833
192
2090
2161
2219
2316
248
255
2657
2753
282
2911
3065
3133
3269
3316
342
3577
3628
3734
3824
3983
4040
4144
4217
4350
445
4537
4677
4734
4845
4932
99.87% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences130
matches
0"was gone"
1"been laid"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs280
matches
0"was twitching"
1"were folding"
2"weren't swaying"
3"was already moving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences130
ratio0.115
matches
0"Rory paused at the threshold, thumbing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—an old habit from her Pre-Law days at Cardiff whenever an argument didn't quite add up."
1"All around her boots, wildflowers were in riotous bloom—bluebells, scarlet poppies, oxeye daisies, and purple foxgloves tangled together out of season."
2"It wasn't the peaceful quiet of a snowed-in street; it was the pressurized, dead silence of a room with the windows bricked up."
3"The sound came from behind her—roughly where the center of the clearing should have been, a spot of empty turf she had walked past ten seconds ago."
4"Sudden motion drew predators; even Evan’s worst tempers had taught her the value of going utterly unreadable when the air in a room turned lethal."
5"One, two, three—there."
6"The poppies weren't swaying; they were folding downward, curling inward and turning black in a slow, spreading ring, silent as burning paper in a photograph."
7"The indoor echo sounded from her left—nowhere near the eighth silhouette."
8"It smelled of copper pennies and wet cellar ash, and it lifted the straight black hair beside Rory’s right ear—from directly behind her shoulder."
9"Running blind in a Fae pocket was how people got turned around in the briars until winter became spring; running blind with a Hel rift open nearby meant stepping straight through an unseen seam in the dark and falling somewhere she would never climb out of."
10"Inside her closed fist, the Heartstone pulsed again—hotter now, nearly blistering the skin of her palm."
11"A low, clicking inhale vibrated in the air six feet behind her back—so resonant it buzzed in the fillings of her teeth, carrying that impossible, hollow cathedral echo."
12"Halfway across the clearing, just at the ragged edge of the rolling flashlight beam, a vertical smear of absolute, light-drinking black flickered between two patches of daisies—not running across the turf, simply ceasing to be near Rory and existing twenty yards away in the space between one bounce of the torch and the next."
13"The dragging step echoed once—*shhhk*—loud and sharp, as though whatever stood over the light had just realized the metal tube had no heartbeat."
14"Above twenty-seven missed calls from Silas and Yu-Fei, the lock screen read four-nineteen in the morning—three days after she had stepped off the path."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount114
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.03508771929824561
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.017543859649122806
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean15.09
std10.63
cv0.704
sampleLengths
014
135
237
39
42
528
69
719
827
918
1016
1129
1224
1315
146
1510
1620
1731
1822
1910
203
2133
2221
235
249
255
266
277
2823
2918
305
313
321
3314
3416
3518
3615
379
387
3919
4016
4125
4218
4315
4418
454
462
479
4818
4934
83.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.5307692307692308
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners69
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences112
matches
0"Usually, standing within five feet"
1"Usually, warm air spilled through"
2"Even the sound of her"
3"Simultaneously, the freezing air behind"
4"Everywhere its shadow touched, the"
ratio0.045
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences112
matches
0"Her waterproof jacket still carried"
1"She checked her watch before"
2"You never really knew until"
3"They weren't true stone, though"
4"She drew the sealed wax"
5"She pushed a curtain of"
6"It wasn't the peaceful quiet"
7"She swept her flashlight across"
8"It was twitching rapidly between"
9"She knew precisely one hard"
10"Her bright blue eyes watered"
11"It didn't sound like a"
12"It sounded like something hard"
13"Her stomach dropped cleanly away."
14"She counted them again, slower,"
15"It was slightly narrower than"
16"It smelled of copper pennies"
17"She had a compass."
18"She didn't spare a half-second"
19"She stumbled hard on a"
ratio0.179
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences112
matches
0"Rory kept her flashlight pointed"
1"Her waterproof jacket still carried"
2"She checked her watch before"
3"You never really knew until"
4"They weren't true stone, though"
5"Rory paused at the threshold,"
6"Tonight, nothing spilled out at"
7"She drew the sealed wax"
8"The job was simple: wedge"
9"Silas had vetted the client,"
10"She pushed a curtain of"
11"The transition hit her skin"
12"The drizzle vanished."
13"None of them were moving."
14"Rory stood completely still, holding"
15"It wasn't the peaceful quiet"
16"She swept her flashlight across"
17"The illuminated dial showed eleven"
18"It was twitching rapidly between"
19"Rory stopped dead, ankle-deep in"
ratio0.571
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences112
matches
0"If she got in and"
1"Now, that glow bled red"
2"As if a subterranean corridor"
3"Now, standing stationary while that"
4"Either the rift itself was"
ratio0.045
89.29% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Usually, standing within five feet of the boundary meant hearing the low, sleepy hum of bees that had no business surviving a London November."
1"Above the clearing, the orange sodium glow of London’s cloud cover was gone, replaced by a starless, slate-grey canopy that offered no moon yet somehow cast a f…"
2"It sounded like something hard striking wet flagstones, followed by a slow, heavy drag that echoed off tight stone walls."
3"As if a subterranean corridor had been laid directly over the meadow, invisible and occupying the exact same space."
4"The dragging step echoed once—*shhhk*—loud and sharp, as though whatever stood over the light had just realized the metal tube had no heartbeat."
5"Chest heaving, soaking wet, Rory finally let her hand shake as she reached into her jacket pocket and pulled out her phone, thumbing the power button to wash he…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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90.0983%