Run 2026-02-17-01KHMPADVW9WCGRM2VSCWZQDBR

Run Details

Model:: Rocinante 12B
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:: 7.7s
Cost:: $0.000350
Provider:: NextBit

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre.

A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI

Rory's breath misted in the chilly night air as she trudged through the woods, heart pounding. The glow of her phone screen illuminated just enough to see the path ahead, but not nearly enough to ease the creeping sense of wrongness that had dogged her from the moment she stepped into these godforsaken woods.

The directions had been crystal clear – follow the path to the standing stones, turn left, and keep going until you reach a grove with wildflowers that bloom year round. Piece of piss, really. Not even halfway in and already Rory wanted to be anywhere but here. But there was work to be done – Hel portals to close, and Riven to contain. Which meant easing the pendant from around her neck against the chill and pushing onward into the darkness.

A twig snapped behind her and Rory froze, gripping the pendant tight. Whispering a string of ABBA curse words under her breath, she gingerly turned.

Nothing. Just more trees, ninny, have a gander around. Which she did, slow as a snail and about as trusting. Bunch of empty woods is what it was. Yet still the skin prickled on the back of her neck like little ghoul crawling its way up her spine. Keep moving.

Step by careful step away from the path, surrounded by shadow trees and mummer air. More than one small beast scurried out of her way, but still Rory couldn't relax. Couldn't even pretend. Not here, alone and in the near dark, prickling like the skin had gone bad. No bloke in his right sausage roll tramps out here roundabouts midnight for a bloody picnic.

The trees seemed to thicken around her, their root-heavy trunks muscling in until Rory almost felt she could bounce a coin off their stony bark. She couldn't quite place it, but the more she trudged on, the more the trees felt cage-worn and specious. Like leering onlookers watching her bumble wordlessly deeper into their snug fold.

Another few paces and the trees abruptly gave way. Rory nearly stumbled into the open space, one hand flying out to brace herself against the nearest trunk. And there in the middle of it all 

waited the bloody grove and a woman who could have been Rory herself, down to the small scar on her left wrist.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.0000%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	0
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)

74.1602%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)

wordCount

387

totalAiIsmAdverbs

1

found

0

adverb	"really"
count	1

highlights

0

"really"

100.0000%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.0000%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.0000%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)

wordCount	387
totalAiIsms	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.0000%

Cliche density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.0000%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	26
matches	(empty)

100.0000%

Filter word density

Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

0

hedgeCount

1

narrationSentences

26

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.0000%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	26
matches	(empty)

68.0692%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

8

mean

48.38

std

18.78

cv

0.388

sampleLengths

0	54
1	81
2	25
3	50
4	64
5	56
6	35
7	22

100.0000%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤5% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	26
matches	(empty)

100.0000%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	59
matches	(empty)

94.3023%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	387
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	18
adverbRatio	0.046511627906976744
lyAdverbCount	7
lyAdverbRatio	0.01808785529715762

100.0000%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	26
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.0000%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

26

mean

14.88

std

8.65

cv

0.581

sampleLengths

0	16
1	38
2	30
3	4
4	13
5	16
6	18
7	12
8	13
9	1
10	8
11	11
12	8
13	20
14	2
15	15
16	15
17	3
18	15
19	16
20	25
21	19
22	12
23	9
24	18
25	30

96.1538%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	1
diversityRatio	0.8076923076923077
totalSentences	26
uniqueOpeners	21

100.0000%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags	0
fancyCount	0
fancyTags	(empty)

96.0403%

Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPADVW9WCGRM2VSCWZQDBR

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