Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR1MZV9EEPSRG531HAM4HE

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Duration:
18.2s
Cost:
$0.002218
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Glass shattered under protest as Detective Harlow Quinn’s boot slammed against the wet pavement. The suspect — lithe, quick — ducked into an alley slick with rain and refuse, the stench of damp cardboard rising in the humid night air. Quinn’s breath came in hard, measured bursts, her worn leather watch bouncing against the sharp angle of her wrist. The neon green glow of The Raven’s Nest sign flickered faintly above her head, a ghostly beacon swallowed by the downpour, while the suspect’s shadow dissolved into the twisting maze beyond. “Stop.” Quinn’s voice cracked like a whip through the rain, but only the clatter of footsteps answered. Leather-slicked walls pressed close as the chase plunged deeper into the belly of Soho’s underbelly. Quinn’s mind snapped to the missing pieces of her last case — fragments she’d buried in favour of tangible leads. This time, however, the instinct gnawed sharper: supernatural undertones tangled in the suspect’s erratic moves and the whispered warnings from old contacts. The alley narrowed into a ramshackle staircase, iron railings slick with rain trailing down into darkness. The suspect’s silhouette crouched at the threshold, hesitating before disappearing beneath the street. Quinn’s boots struck cold stone, her ears adjusting to the muted echoes that swallowed the city’s nocturnal roar. Every instinct screamed caution—not just the risk she embraced nightly on the force, but something more primal, something unnamed. The underground pulse throbbed faintly — a low hum vibrating off the walls, carrying the scent of smoke, spilled spirits, and something faintly metallic. Quinn’s gaze found the faded graffiti and peeling posters plastered around a rusted gate; this wasn’t just a forgotten service corridor. It was a gateway. She forced herself forward, muscles coiled and senses flaring. The faint scrape of shifted crates and muffled voices mingled with distant, discordant music — a twisted lullaby for the forgotten. Quinn’s hand tightened on her flashlight, the beam slicing through cobwebbed shadows. Footsteps ahead — sharp, erratic. Ahead, a faint shimmer caught her eye—a greenish, claw-marked token lying at the base of a broken pillar. Bone. A token from the Veil Market. She swallowed dry air. This was no coincidence. Quinn bent, fingers closing around the cold trinket. The market wasn’t just any black market — it was a secret realm of the outlawed, a clandestine haven for the supernatural and those desperate enough to deal with them. Her beat cop instincts hollered to turn back, but the cold edge of obsession held firm. Ducking through the narrow opening beneath a barricaded turnstile, Quinn plunged into the relics of a forsaken Tube station buried beneath Camden. Flickering, faded signs warned of danger in multi-lingual scripts; peeling maps pointed nowhere. Crowds ghosted through dim light — stunted figures wrapped in cloaks, some human, others... less so. The place had an atmosphere thick like old bruises; bartering whispered between cracked tiles, the currency measured in bones, blood, secrets. “Easy, Lucy,” Quinn muttered, the name of the suspect burning on her tongue. A stall lined with rusty talismans and jars of blackened salt twisted her path. A woman with a chipped smile and gleaming eyes beckoned, her voice a silken thread. “Looking for wonders? Lost something precious?” Quinn’s head whipped around. “There,” a flicker of movement — Tommy — emerged from the crowd. His olive skin glistened faintly under the sickly market light, Saint Christopher medallion flashing against his collarbone. “Harlow, that’s not a place for you.” Quinn’s grip on her flashlight didn’t waver. “She went down here,” she hissed, stepping forward, muscles tight as knuckles on a trigger. “I have to find her.” Tommy exhaled, hesitation cooling the sharpness in his eyes. “You chasing shadows. This crowd doesn’t take kindly to cops—especially those sniffing too close to their souls.” He shoved a worn leather satchel toward her. “Take this. Just in case.” The satchel hit the damp floor with a soft thud. Whispers curled around them like smoke, torn between caution and curiosity. “I’m not leaving her behind.” Tommy’s voice dropped an octave, fierce and quiet. “You’re on your own down here. No backup. No rules.” Quinn’s heart pounded, but the chase had already cost more than comfort. Ahead, the market’s pulse quickened—loud voices spat in forgotten languages, measured footsteps closed fast, and the scent of iron burned sharp beneath the putrid air. The suspect’s silhouette emerged near the hidden back room of The Raven’s Nest — that sanctuary turned battleground. The secret door through the bookshelf stood ajar, promising confrontation. Quinn crossed the threshold, every nerve straining toward the scent of danger. Behind her, a chorus of footsteps multiplied. “Quinn!” Tommy’s call sliced through the thick air, but the chase was a whisper now—a one-sided race toward the inevitable. A voice rasped from the shadows: “You know what you’re stepping into.” The bookshelf slammed shut. The night folded around her like a shroud.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn’s voice cracked like [like]"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount808
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount808
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"measured"
count3
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"beacon"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count4
5
word"tangible"
count1
6
word"echoes"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"throbbed"
count1
9
word"clandestine"
count1
10
word"gleaming"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"sanctuary"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"race"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"measured"
2"flickered"
3"beacon"
4"footsteps"
5"tangible"
6"echoes"
7"pulse"
8"throbbed"
9"clandestine"
10"gleaming"
11"flicker"
12"quickened"
13"sanctuary"
14"whisper"
15"race"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences55
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences61
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords811
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
55.53% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount741
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn14
Raven2
Nest2
Leather-slicked1
Soho1
Veil1
Market1
Tube1
Camden1
Tommy4
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Tommy"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Veil"
globalScore0.555
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
76.70% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.233
wordCount811
matches
0"not just the risk she embraced nightly on the force, but something more primal, something unnamed"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean24.58
std18.02
cv0.733
sampleLengths
090
117
257
329
437
549
69
738
833
938
1016
1135
1237
1313
1429
156
164
1736
187
1920
2039
2121
225
2318
2412
2525
2628
2712
287
2920
3012
314
328
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs122
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences61
ratio0.262
matches
0"The suspect — lithe, quick — ducked into an alley slick with rain and refuse, the stench of damp cardboard rising in the humid night air."
1"Quinn’s mind snapped to the missing pieces of her last case — fragments she’d buried in favour of tangible leads."
2"Every instinct screamed caution—not just the risk she embraced nightly on the force, but something more primal, something unnamed."
3"The underground pulse throbbed faintly — a low hum vibrating off the walls, carrying the scent of smoke, spilled spirits, and something faintly metallic."
4"Quinn’s gaze found the faded graffiti and peeling posters plastered around a rusted gate; this wasn’t just a forgotten service corridor."
5"The faint scrape of shifted crates and muffled voices mingled with distant, discordant music — a twisted lullaby for the forgotten."
6"Footsteps ahead — sharp, erratic."
7"Ahead, a faint shimmer caught her eye—a greenish, claw-marked token lying at the base of a broken pillar."
8"The market wasn’t just any black market — it was a secret realm of the outlawed, a clandestine haven for the supernatural and those desperate enough to deal with them."
9"Flickering, faded signs warned of danger in multi-lingual scripts; peeling maps pointed nowhere."
10"Crowds ghosted through dim light — stunted figures wrapped in cloaks, some human, others..."
11"The place had an atmosphere thick like old bruises; bartering whispered between cracked tiles, the currency measured in bones, blood, secrets."
12"“There,” a flicker of movement — Tommy — emerged from the crowd."
13"Ahead, the market’s pulse quickened—loud voices spat in forgotten languages, measured footsteps closed fast, and the scent of iron burned sharp beneath the putrid air."
14"The suspect’s silhouette emerged near the hidden back room of The Raven’s Nest — that sanctuary turned battleground."
15"“Quinn!” Tommy’s call sliced through the thick air, but the chase was a whisper now—a one-sided race toward the inevitable."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount737
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"greenish, claw-marked token lying"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.032564450474898234
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.013568521031207599
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences61
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences61
mean13.3
std7.16
cv0.538
sampleLengths
014
126
219
331
417
515
620
722
816
913
1018
1119
1224
1321
144
159
1621
1712
185
1918
201
216
224
234
248
2530
2616
2722
2813
2914
302
3121
3213
3314
3415
356
364
3712
3817
397
407
4115
425
439
4425
455
4610
4711
485
498
72.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.47540983606557374
totalSentences61
uniqueOpeners29
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount7
totalSentences53
matches
0"It was a gateway."
1"She forced herself forward, muscles"
2"She swallowed dry air."
3"Her beat cop instincts hollered"
4"His olive skin glistened faintly"
5"she hissed, stepping forward, muscles"
6"He shoved a worn leather"
ratio0.132
16.60% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences53
matches
0"Glass shattered under protest as"
1"The suspect — lithe, quick"
2"Quinn’s breath came in hard,"
3"The neon green glow of"
4"Quinn’s voice cracked like a"
5"Quinn’s mind snapped to the"
6"This time, however, the instinct"
7"The alley narrowed into a"
8"The suspect’s silhouette crouched at"
9"Quinn’s boots struck cold stone,"
10"Every instinct screamed caution—not just"
11"The underground pulse throbbed faintly"
12"Quinn’s gaze found the faded"
13"It was a gateway."
14"She forced herself forward, muscles"
15"The faint scrape of shifted"
16"Quinn’s hand tightened on her"
17"Footsteps ahead — sharp, erratic."
18"A token from the Veil"
19"She swallowed dry air."
ratio0.887
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Quinn’s boots struck cold stone, her ears adjusting to the muted echoes that swallowed the city’s nocturnal roar."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn muttered, the name of the suspect burning on her tongue"
1"Tommy’s call sliced, but the chase was a whisper now—a one-sided race toward the inevitable"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1"she hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.308
72.4218%