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Run: 2026-03-09-01KKABYYHE6EVTBF6Q80ZNBKJ6
Run Details
Model:
GPT-5.4 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.056770
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
97.69%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
76.91%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
50.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
82.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
59.29%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
77.02%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
26.60%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
53.57%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
56.98%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
89.3350%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
“Stop!”
The man in the waxed
black coat cut across the road without looking.
A taxi braked hard, horn
blaring, and Detective Harlow Quinn vaulted the bonnet with one palm, boots skidding on rain-slick paint before she hit the other side at a run.
Her coat slapped against her
knees.
Water streamed off the shaved
edges of her collar and stung her eyes. Ahead, the suspect shoved through a knot of smokers outside a music venue and vanished into the neon smear of Camden High Street.
Quinn kept him in sight
by the white parcel under his arm. Not a shopping bag, not takeaway.
Paper wrapped tight with black
cord, small enough to conceal, important enough to run for. “Control, this is Quinn. Foot pursuit, male, mid-thirties, dark coat, heading north from Camden Lock. No unit near enough, I know, so spare me the apology.” Static cracked in her earpiece. “Received. Any indication he’s armed?” “He bolted from surveillance. Assume yes.” He glanced back. Sharp face. Hollow cheeks.
He wore panic like a
lit match. Good. Panic made people stupid. Quinn drove harder. Eighteen years in the Met had taught her what mattered in a chase. Don’t
watch
the whole body. Watch the hips. Don’t waste breath on threats. And never trust a desperate man to choose the obvious turn.
He feinted left at a
chip shop, swung right into a lane barely wide enough for a van, and clipped a stack of black rubbish bags. One burst open under his heel.
Beer cans rolled out in
bright silver flashes.
Quinn hurdled them and nearly
lost her footing when grease and rain mixed under her soles.
The alley pinched tight between
shuttered storefronts.
Graffiti crawled over brick like
mould.
Somewhere a generator throbbed behind
corrugated steel.
The suspect slapped a hand
against the wall to swing round a bend. Quinn gained three strides. “Drop it and I’ll call this bad cardio.” He did not answer.
He hit the lane’s end
and shouldered into a gate. Locked. For one lovely second he stalled, tugging at the chain. Quinn lunged.
He twisted at the last
instant and swung the parcel like a club. It cracked against her forearm. Pain flashed hot to cold.
She trapped his wrist, slammed
him into the gate, and heard the air punch out of him. “Name.”
His eyes flicked to her
watch
, then to her face. Not fear now. Calculation. He stamped on her instep. Quinn swore, loosened just enough, and he drove an elbow into her throat. She staggered back.
He tore free, scrambled up
a metal fire escape bolted to the wall, boots clanging on the steps. “Of course,”
she rasped, and went after
him. The stairs shook under both their weights. Rain turned each tread
treacherous
.
He climbed like he had
done it before, one hand on the rail, one arm clamped over the parcel. Quinn used both hands and closed the distance again on the landing.
He kicked a rusted flowerpot
into her face. She ducked. Clay exploded on the rail behind her. Soil and dead roots sprayed her shoulder.
He reached the roofline, hauled
himself over, and vanished. Quinn followed and emerged into a jagged patchwork of flat roofs, satellite dishes, and puddles black as oil. A red neon sign from the street below bled across the wet felt. The city hissed beneath her, traffic and voices muffled by height and rain. There. Twenty yards ahead, the suspect leapt the gap to the next building. “Idiot,” Quinn muttered, then jumped after him.
Her boots thudded on cracked
tar paper. The landing jarred up her spine. She kept moving.
He glanced back again, almost
offended now that she remained behind him. Men like him always
carried that look
. As if persistence were rude. He sprinted past a roof access box and dropped out of sight. Quinn reached the edge and saw him half-slide, half-fall down another fire escape into a service yard. He hit the ground badly, recovered, and barreled through a side door into a market hall. She took the stairs three at a time. Inside, heat slapped her after the cold rain. Fried oil, damp wool, cumin, bleach. Stalls glowed under strip lights. Traders yelled over one another. Tourists huddled beneath dripping umbrellas and shuffled aside too
slowly
. Quinn flashed her warrant card and shoved through. “Police!” That word still moved crowds.
Not all of them, not fast, but enough
. She caught sight of the waxed coat slipping between a butcher’s counter and a stall hung with cheap phone cases. Then gone.
Then there again, reflected in
a cracked mirror behind a barber’s chair. Quinn cut across a display of scarves. The vendor shouted after her in furious Bengali. She did not look back. “Out the back,” a woman at a coffee hatch snapped, pointing with her chin. “Your boyfriend’s in a hurry.” “He always was disappointing.” The woman barked a laugh as Quinn surged on. The back corridor narrowed into service passages lined with dented doors and stacked crates. The smell changed. Less food, more damp concrete and old railway grease. The suspect’s
footsteps
echoed
ahead, then dropped out. Quinn slowed. That alone set her teeth on edge. People in flight made noise. Silence meant a corner, an ambush, or an exit. She drew her torch with her left hand and kept her right near the holster at her hip. Regulations frowned on firearms in a crowded market. Regulations had never chased the things Quinn had scraped off walls. A fresh footprint shone in the grime at the corridor’s bend. Deep heel, hurried turn. Beyond it stood an old tiled passage she had never seen on any public plan of Camden Market. Green-white Victorian tiles curved overhead, cracked and sweating. Somebody had ripped out modern lighting and strung low amber bulbs instead. Their glow left long pools of shadow between them. At the far end, the suspect rapped three times on a steel door. A hatch slid open. Quinn flattened herself behind a stack of beer kegs. She heard only fragments. “Late.” “Had company.” “Token.” A pause.
Then a flat scrape of
metal and the weighty clunk of locks withdrawing. The door opened just wide enough to swallow him. It shut at once. Quinn crossed the corridor in six silent steps and put her ear to the steel. Nothing. She checked the frame. No keypad. No visible hinges. The hatch sat flush now, dark. “Control,” she whispered. “I’ve got an unregistered access point under Camden Market. Possible organised network. Sending location now.” “Received. Hold position. Armed support is twenty minutes out.” Twenty minutes. Quinn stared at the door. Rainwater slid from her cuff to her knuckles. Her
pulse
ticked steady under the worn leather strap on her left wrist. Three years ago, DS Morris had followed a man through a boarded terrace in Limehouse while Quinn secured the perimeter. Three minutes later the radio had coughed once and gone dead. They found Morris six hours after that in a room with no windows and no doors, his face drained white, his service weapon melted into the floorboards as if the metal had softened like wax. No report ever accounted for it. No superior signed off on what Quinn had seen in that house. They called it trauma, smoke, confusion. She had spent three years learning the sound of official lies. The suspect had run from surveillance near Soho, where one of her plain-clothes teams had watched the Raven’s Nest, that dim little bar with the green neon sign and the old maps on the walls. People linked to the clique drifted in and out of that place at strange hours, clean shoes and dirty hands, all of them careful, all of them connected. Tonight the suspect had left the Nest’s orbit carrying a parcel wrapped like an offering and cut straight for Camden. Not drugs. Not cash. Something else. Quinn reached into the pocket of her coat and took out the only useful thing she had lifted in the last forty-eight hours, a small polished token carved from bone. She had found it in the ashtray of an unmarked car outside the Raven’s Nest, tucked under two foreign coins and a spent matchbook. One side bore a scratched crescent. The other showed a keyhole. She held it up to the hatch. At knee height, nearly hidden under a seam of rust, a slot waited. “Well then,” she said. The token slid in with a dry click. For a breath, nothing happened.
Then gears shifted inside the
wall. Not
electric
. Mechanical, old and heavy. The hatch snapped open on blackness, and a bloodless eye stared out at her. Not bloodless. Pale grey. Human enough to disturb, wrong enough to freeze the hand halfway to the holster. “Name.” The voice sounded old enough to remember plague carts. “Detective Inspector Quinn.” “No coppers.” “Good thing I left the hat at home.” The eye did not blink. “Who vouched?” Quinn leaned closer to the hatch. “The man with the parcel. Dark coat, hollow face, manners of a ferret.” “He paid entry.” “I’m paying now.” “Not how this works.” Quinn held up the warrant card.
Then she smiled without warmth
and slid it back into her coat. “No, I expect not.” She drove two fingers through the hatch, hooked the unseen latch, and yanked hard. The hidden sentry cursed. Quinn slammed her shoulder into the door at the same instant. The lock gave with a shriek. The sentry toppled backwards, a thin old man in a station porter’s coat two sizes too large. He clutched at her sleeve with yellow nails. Quinn shoved him aside and stepped through before the door could swing back. Sound hit first. Voices. Hundreds. Bargaining, laughing, arguing. The clatter of glass. The hiss of burners. Somewhere deeper in the station, something large gave a low animal groan that no Underground train had ever made. Then the light. Old platform lamps cast a jaundiced glow over an impossible bazaar spread across abandoned tracks and crumbling platforms. Canvas awnings sagged between iron pillars. Tables displayed rows of stoppered vials in colours no chemist would stock. Chains of charms and animal teeth hung beside antique surgical tools. Inked women in fur collars sold papers covered in moving script. A boy no older than twelve balanced a tray of watches that all showed different times and all ticked too fast. Smoke drifted under the station arch in sweet, rotten ribbons. The old tiled roundel on the wall had long ago lost the station name. Someone had painted a black veil over it. The Veil Market. Quinn stood just inside the threshold, every sense sharpened to a point. People noticed her in stages. A few heads turned, then more. A ripple spread across the nearest stalls. Talk thinned. A man in a butcher’s apron covered a crate with a stained cloth. A woman with silver rings over every finger slipped a tiny pistol from beneath a ledger and set it on the table where Quinn could see it. No one
looked surprised
to see a stranger. They looked annoyed. At the far end of the platform, the suspect in the waxed black coat cut through the crowd towards a shuttered train carriage half swallowed by shadow. He still held the parcel. Beside the carriage stood another figure Quinn recognised at once, olive skin, short curly dark hair, a Saint Christopher medallion bright at his throat even in this sick light. Tomás Herrera. The former paramedic turned ghost physician to half the city’s whispered ailments. Herrera saw Quinn and stopped dead. The suspect thrust the parcel at him. Herrera did not take it. “Detective,” he called across the market, voice carrying clear, his Seville vowels softened by London years. “You’ve come dressed for the wrong party.” “Hand him over, Herrera.” “Which one?” “The runner.” The suspect edged behind Herrera, eyes darting. Herrera glanced at the parcel, then back at Quinn. His left forearm shifted, and the long scar there flashed white under the station lights. “You should leave.” “People keep saying that to me. It never improves their evening.” A laugh crackled from somewhere to her right. The crowd tightened in a slow ring. Herrera’s jaw set. “You don’t know where you are.” “I know enough. Illegal market. Restricted substances. Smuggling route. Pick one and start confessing.” “You hear that?” someone shouted from a stall draped in black lace. “She thinks paperwork lives down here.” The ripple of laughter broke, sharp and mean. Quinn’s hand settled on her holster. Not drawing. Warning. Herrera saw it and spread his own hands. “Don’t.” “Then clear a path.” “You force this, detective, you won’t own the next minute.” The suspect used the distraction. He swung the parcel towards the carriage door, and the door opened from inside on a sliver of red light. Quinn moved. Three men stepped out of the crowd at once, quick as trap springs, and the station lights went out.
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"resp_0eb1a81b6bd20c520169af4ba486c88194b36fbf20486580ec"
is_byok
false
latency
250
model_permaslug
"openai/gpt-5.4-20260305"
provider_name
"OpenAI"
status
200
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"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.14.0; linux; x64))"
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"completions"
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"gen-1773095844-oamoRBGGoaNtilp90xCH"
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"resp_0eb1a81b6bd20c520169af4ba486c88194b36fbf20486580ec"
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0.05677
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(null)
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0
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"OpenAI"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
43
tagDensity
0.163
leniency
0.326
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
97.69%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2165
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slowly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
76.91%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2165
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"throbbed"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
1
2
word
"treacherous"
count
1
3
word
"footsteps"
count
1
4
word
"echoed"
count
1
5
word
"silence"
count
1
6
word
"pulse"
count
1
7
word
"electric"
count
1
8
word
"mechanical"
count
1
9
word
"warmth"
count
1
highlights
0
"throbbed"
1
"flicked"
2
"treacherous"
3
"footsteps"
4
"echoed"
5
"silence"
6
"pulse"
7
"electric"
8
"mechanical"
9
"warmth"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
217
matches
0
"looked surprised"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
217
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"try to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
253
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
36
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2165
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
9
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
50.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
75
wordCount
1954
uniqueNames
25
maxNameDensity
1.69
worstName
"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity
3.5
worstWindowName
"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Detective
1
Harlow
1
Quinn
33
Camden
3
High
1
Street
1
Met
1
Bengali
1
Market
2
Victorian
1
Twenty
2
Morris
2
Limehouse
1
Soho
1
Raven
2
Nest
3
Underground
1
Veil
1
Saint
1
Christopher
1
Herrera
7
Seville
1
London
1
People
3
Three
3
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Victorian"
3
"Morris"
4
"Raven"
5
"Nest"
6
"Saint"
7
"Christopher"
8
"Herrera"
9
"People"
places
0
"Camden"
1
"High"
2
"Street"
3
"Market"
4
"Limehouse"
5
"Soho"
6
"Seville"
7
"London"
globalScore
0.656
windowScore
0.5
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
141
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
2
per1kWords
0.924
wordCount
2165
matches
0
"Not all of them, not fast, but enough"
1
"not fast, but enough"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
253
matches
0
"carried that look"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
134
mean
16.16
std
17.46
cv
1.08
sampleLengths
0
1
1
43
2
42
3
33
4
26
5
5
6
5
7
6
8
14
9
5
10
40
11
56
12
33
13
4
14
8
15
14
16
1
17
12
18
40
19
1
20
14
21
5
22
34
23
8
24
43
25
24
26
9
27
44
28
13
29
7
30
16
31
24
32
12
33
33
34
8
35
42
36
1
37
13
38
34
39
20
40
19
41
4
42
9
43
34
44
2
45
7
46
14
47
37
48
62
49
13
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
217
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
334
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
253
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
82.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1960
adjectiveStacks
3
stackExamples
0
"beside antique surgical tools."
1
"short curly dark hair,"
2
"former paramedic turned ghost"
adverbCount
66
adverbRatio
0.0336734693877551
lyAdverbCount
9
lyAdverbRatio
0.004591836734693878
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
253
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
253
mean
8.56
std
6.56
cv
0.767
sampleLengths
0
1
1
13
2
30
3
6
4
13
5
23
6
12
7
6
8
15
9
26
10
5
11
5
12
6
13
3
14
2
15
2
16
7
17
1
18
4
19
3
20
13
21
5
22
3
23
5
24
11
25
26
26
6
27
8
28
16
29
7
30
6
31
7
32
13
33
4
34
8
35
4
36
10
37
1
38
10
39
2
40
13
41
5
42
5
43
17
44
1
45
10
46
3
47
1
48
5
49
13
59.29%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
15
diversityRatio
0.391304347826087
totalSentences
253
uniqueOpeners
99
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
7
totalSentences
188
matches
0
"Somewhere a generator throbbed behind"
1
"Then there again, reflected in"
2
"Then a flat scrape of"
3
"Then gears shifted inside the"
4
"Then she smiled without warmth"
5
"Somewhere deeper in the station,"
6
"Then the light."
ratio
0.037
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
43
totalSentences
188
matches
0
"Her coat slapped against her"
1
"He glanced back."
2
"He wore panic like a"
3
"He feinted left at a"
4
"He did not answer."
5
"He hit the lane’s end"
6
"He twisted at the last"
7
"It cracked against her forearm."
8
"She trapped his wrist, slammed"
9
"His eyes flicked to her"
10
"He stamped on her instep."
11
"She staggered back."
12
"He tore free, scrambled up"
13
"she rasped, and went after"
14
"He climbed like he had"
15
"He kicked a rusted flowerpot"
16
"He reached the roofline, hauled"
17
"Her boots thudded on cracked"
18
"She kept moving."
19
"He glanced back again, almost"
ratio
0.229
77.02%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
144
totalSentences
188
matches
0
"The man in the waxed"
1
"A taxi braked hard, horn"
2
"Her coat slapped against her"
3
"Water streamed off the shaved"
4
"Quinn kept him in sight"
5
"Paper wrapped tight with black"
6
"Static cracked in her earpiece."
7
"He glanced back."
8
"He wore panic like a"
9
"Panic made people stupid."
10
"Quinn drove harder."
11
"He feinted left at a"
12
"Beer cans rolled out in"
13
"Quinn hurdled them and nearly"
14
"The alley pinched tight between"
15
"Graffiti crawled over brick like"
16
"The suspect slapped a hand"
17
"Quinn gained three strides."
18
"He did not answer."
19
"He hit the lane’s end"
ratio
0.766
26.60%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
188
matches
0
"As if persistence were rude."
ratio
0.005
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
76
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
53.57%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
7
uselessAdditionCount
1
matches
0
"he called, voice carrying clear, his Seville vowels softened by London years"
56.98%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1
"a coffee hatch snapped (snap)"
2
"she whispered (whisper)"
3
"someone shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences
43
tagDensity
0.14
leniency
0.279
rawRatio
0.667
effectiveRatio
0.186
89.3350%